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2024年1月昆明市高三统测读后续写ItwasasunnydaythisApril,andIwasflyingwithmyboyofftoCarnavoninmylight

aircraft

toseea

solareclipse

(日食).Lookingoutofthewindow,Iwasdeeplyabsorbedinthepicturesquescenerybelow.Myson

Jacob,15,whowasenthusiasticaboutflying,wasinhighspirits.After25yearsintheminingindustry,I’dquitmyjobtopursuea

career

in

flying.GettingmymercialpilotlicenseinSeptember2022,Ibelievedthiswasmycalling.

Jacobwasapassionateflyer,whoalwaysenjoyedtheflightswithme.“Whatdoesthisbuttondo?”“Howdoesitwork?”“Whatisthefunction?”Thereweresomanyquestionshe’daskcuriously.Iwonderifhe’llbeapilotsomeday.Watchingtheeclipsethroughoursolargoggles(太阳镜),webothwereinamazement.Afterabiteoflunch,Ididallmychecksandrefueledtheplanebeforeflyingusback.Flyingbackintotheair,IheadedtowardsJandakotAirport,whichwasrightnearourhouse.MorethanhalfwayI,Ispottedsomesmokeintheair.RealizingwewereflyingoverLancelinwherethere’dbeensomenearbybushfires,Ididn’tthinktherewasanythingtopanicabout.Travellingsouth,wetookinthelovelycoastline.“Thisisbeautiful!”Jacobexclaimed.Ataround5p.m.,justaboutfiveminutestoourdestination,theenginesuddenlydecreasedrapidly.Glancingoveratmyboy,Ithought,“Thisisbad.”AsItriedtobringtheenginebacktolife,itworkedonlyforamillisecond(毫秒),andthendiedagain.“Okaymate,we’vehadan

enginefailure,”IsaidcalmlytoJacob.Theplanewas

dropping

andwewentfrom1800feetto1500injust20seconds.Lookingforward,IcouldseeJandakotAirportabout15kilometresahead.“Wearen’tgoingtomakeit,”Itoldmyself.Weonlyhadanother60secondsbeforemakingthedecision.LookingdownatLeightonBeachnorthofFremantlebelow,Isaw

crowds

ofpeopleonthe

beach.Paragraph1:

Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:

Onthebeach,Ihuggedmyboy,thrilled.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________注：考卷中并没有任何下划线词汇。我们刻意标出这些词汇是想展现续写和原文概念的互动。还不太明白这样做的道理的朋友请回顾：\t"s://mp.weixin.qq/_blank"《为什么高考英语浙江卷读后续写值得我们重点关注？》No.1阅读文本故事梗概作者“我”在2022年取得了商用飞行执照（mercialpilotlicense）。四月里的一天，“我”带着对飞行充满热情的15岁儿子Jacob，驾驶轻型飞机前往Carnavon观看日食。返程途中，发动机突发故障，引擎失效，飞机急剧下降。面对紧急情况，“我”只能冷静应对。生死关头，“我”看到了也许能够供飞机迫降的一片海滩…No.2续写难点分析原文中主要人物只有“我”和“我”的儿子Jacob两人。原文中人物少，人物关系清楚是比较有利于续写的。续写时，考生可以轻松描绘和扩展主要角色的个性和关系，而不必担心平衡太多的人物互动。本次写作的难点在于描述“我”在紧急状况下操控飞机迫降的动作和语言。写作过程涉及一定的飞机驾驶术语和词汇。这对于那些几乎没看过和飞行以及空难相关英文影视剧作或者阅读过此类英文资料的考生来讲不是一件容易的事。这到底该怎么办？别着急！办法总比困难多！我们想给大家一些建议：聚焦情感描写将重点放在人物的情感反应上，而不是技术细节。描述“我”如何感受，以及“我”如何与儿子沟通，可以帮助读者感同身受。描写视觉听觉使用动作和感官描述来传达紧张和紧迫感，而不是依赖术语。例如，描述飞机下降时的视觉变化、引擎声音的变化等。通过上述方法，即使是对飞行不熟悉的考生也可能够创造出一个合理的紧急迫降场景。重要的是传达出场景的紧迫感、人物的反应以及最终的安全着陆。写作示范Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves.

Ihadtoactquicklytosteerclearoftheswimmersandexecuteanemergency

landing

ontheshore."Braceforimpact!"Imanded,as

Jacob

nodded,hishandsgrippingthesidesofhisseat.The

aircraft'swheelsskimmedthewater'sedge,sendingupasprayofwaterandfoam.Withafinalandcarefulmaneuver,Imanagedtolandtheaircraftonthesandyshore.Thesandhelpedtoslowusdown,andsoonwestopped,safeandsound.Wequicklyunbuckledourseatbelts,andIpushedthecockpitdooropen,lettinginthefreshseaair.（96words）Onthebeach,Ihuggedmyboy,thrilled.

Ourarmswrappedtightlyaroundeachother,andwehadmadeit.Againstallodds,weweresafe.The

crowd

thathadgatheredburstintocheersandapplause,theirearlierpanicreplacedbyrelief.AwidegrinbrokeacrossJacob'susuallyposedface.Hiseyessaiditall—hehadbeenterrified,buthistrustinme,inus,hadbeenunwavering.Asthesunbegantodipbelowthehorizon,castingagoldenglowoverthe

beach,itwasasifitwasgivingusagentlenodofapprovalforthecouragewehadshown.（97words）写作细节分析Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves.

Ihadtoactquicklytosteerclearoftheswimmersandexecuteanemergency

landing

ontheshore.（合理动作描写：迫降要避开海上的游泳者）"Braceforimpact!"（迫降常用术语：准备迎接冲击）Imanded,as

Jacob

nodded,hishandsgrippingthesidesofhisseat.The

aircraft'swheelsskimmedthewater'sedge,sendingupasprayofseaandfoam.（必要的飞机降落在水面的细节描写）Withafinalandcarefulmaneuver,Imanagedtolandtheaircraftonthesandyshore.Thesandhelpedtoslowusdown,andsoonwestopped,safeandsound.（阅卷人喜闻乐见的结局：最后成功落在沙滩上）Wequicklyunbuckledourseatbelts,andIpushedthecockpitdooropen,lettinginthefreshseaair.（打开舱门和第二段首句“在沙滩上拥抱”合理衔接）

Onthebeach,Ihuggedmyboy,thrilled.

Ourarmswrappedtightlyaroundeachother,andwehadmadeit.Againstallodds,weweresafe.The

crowd

thathadgatheredburstintocheersandapplause,theirearlierpanicreplacedbyaweandrelief.（海滩上的群众的自然反应）AwidegrinbrokeacrossJacob'susuallyposedface.Hiseyessaiditall—hehadbeenterrified,buthistrustinme,inus,hadbeenunwavering.（突出父子（母子）信任）Asthesunbegantodipbelowthehorizon,castingagoldenglowoverthe

beach,itwasasifitwasgivingusagentlenodofapprovalforthecouragewehadshown.（适度提炼主题：临危不乱的勇气值得赞扬）（99words）词汇和表达积累steerclearof

避开execute

v.执行emergencylanding

紧急降落maneuvern./v.操纵unbuckle

v.解开安全带cockpit

n.驾驶舱againstallodds

尽管困难重重grin

n./v.露齿笑breakacross掠过(表情)posedface

镇定的脸庞默写版：Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves._______________________我不得不迅速采取行动，避开游泳者，并在岸边紧急降落。"Braceforimpact!"Imanded,as

Jacob

nodded,hishandsgrippingthesidesofhisseat.The

aircraft'swheelsskimmedthewater'sedge,sendingupasprayofwaterandfoam._______________________________经过最后一次谨慎的机动，我设法将飞机降落在沙质海岸上.Thesandhelpedtoslowusdown,andsoonw