2025届高三英语一轮复习读后续写模拟题+football

读后续写EnglishContinuationWriting模拟题football主讲人：考情分析能基本读懂故事，对原文本分析不够具体到位。写作情节偏离，逻辑混乱，衔接不恰当，句式简单，描写生硬。教学目标通过故事要素分析，引导学生深度解析文本，帮助学生理顺情节发展，抓住人物核心性格，确保学生续写情节符合逻辑。通过主述位推进帮助学生搭建文章逻辑结构，解决学生无话可写的问题。通过提供语料，作文互批表，明确批改润色要求，反复练习，指导学生写出更自然合理衔接得当的作文。文本分析part1Whichonedoyouprefer?Why?Mariawaspracticingwithhersoccermatesinatinyschoolyard.TheywereallfromRiverEdgeRockers,asoccerteamoftheircommunity.Suddenly,theballflewintoadeepholeattheedgeoftheyard.Itwasthethirdtimethattheyhadlosttheirballthismonth.WithouttheballMariahadtowavegoodbyetohermatesandwenthome,depressed.“Ifonlytherewerearegulationsoccerfield!”shethought.

01Thatevening,seeingherlowspirits,herfatherasked,“Whatwasthematter,dear?”“Iwasjustthinkingaboutplayinginabrandnewsoccerfield!”

Mariaanswered.Herfathersmiledandsaid,“Tomorrow,aTownCouncilmeetingistobeheldtodiscussabouttheuseofthatvacant(空着的)lotnexttothepetstore,HomeforPets.Whynottakethisopportunitytoconvincethemweneedabetterfield?”020304Thenextday,withthecompanyofherfather,Mariaandherteammateswenttothemeetinghall.OntheirarrivaltheysawCouncilwomanJillandsomecitizensalreadythere.Theytooktheirseats.AfterJillannouncedthestartofthediscussion,Mariastoodupandspokefirst.“Uptillnowthereisnosoccerfieldinourcommunity,whichcertainlyaffectsourphysicalhealth.Ourteamcurrentlyhavetopracticeinatinyschoolyard,andonlywhenit’snotalreadybooked.”05Mrs.

Lorries,ownerofthepetstore,commented,“Icouldn’tagreemore.Kidsdoneedsuchafield.”TheRockersapplaudedexcitedlyandtheothercitizensallagreeditwouldbeawayout.“Asoccerfieldwouldbeagooduseforthatlotwithovergrownweedsandsomelargerocks,buttobuildsuchonewouldneedasmallsumofmoneyandmaybeyouevenneedtodoalltheworkonyourown.”

CouncilwomanJillsmiled,“Canyoumanageit?”0607Thinkingforawhile,Marianoddedwithadeterminedlookonherface,“TheRockerscandoit!Wewillturnitintoasoccerfield.”Theteammatesallcheered.08thatnightfootballfieldMariaherteammatesfatherJillMrs.LorriesMariaandherteammateswantanewfootballfield.故事要素WhenWhereWhat Who WhythenextmorningthemeetinghallRereadthestoryandfigureouttheplot.Mariawantedanewfootballfield.(Maria)depressedMaria’sdadsuggestedanideatoMaria.(Maria)unknownMariaandotherpeoplediscussedtheuseofthevacantlot.(Maria)excited;determined续写部分续写部分本文情节线setting环境risingaction发展fallingaction结局climax高潮人物时间地点Maria想要有一个新的足球场，她爸爸提议可以考虑宠物店旁边的空地。Maria提议把宠物店旁边的空地建为新足球场。Maria和她的队友需要自己筹集资金并准备足球场。本文情节线setting环境risingaction发展fallingaction结局climax高潮人物时间地点Maria想要有一个新的足球场，她爸爸提议可以考虑宠物店旁边的空地。Maria提议把宠物店空地建为新足球场。Maria和她的队友需要自己筹集资金并准备足球场。resolution解决ending尾声续写部分续写部分depressedexciteddeterminedMariaAfterJillannouncedthestartofthediscussion,Mariastoodupandspokefirst.confidentMariaThinkingforawhile,Marianoddedwithadeterminedlookonherface,“TheRockerscandoit!Wewillturnitintoasoccerfield.”determinedMaria’sdadThatevening,seeingherlowspirits,herfatherasked,

“Whatwasthematter,dear?”carefulMaria’sdadThenextday,withthecompanyofherfather,Mariaandherteammateswenttothemeetinghall.careful篇章概括者SummarizerMaria想要一个新的足球场，她爸爸建议她可以在镇议会上提议。在会上，Maria提出了想法，得到了同意。第二天，队员商量如何筹钱...Mariawantedanewfootballfield.HisfathersuggestedthatsheshouldproposetheideaintheTownCouncilmeeting.Inthemeeting,Mariaputforwardheridea,whichwasagreed.Thefollowingday,theteammatesdiscussedhowtoraisemoney...写作构架part2平行性延续性三种叙述模式交叉性模拟题足球场Paragraph2Aweeklater,theteamgatheredatthelot,carryingtoolspurchasedwiththeirearnings.Paragraph1Thefollowingday,theteamgot

togethertoshareideasforraisingmoney.01Manyideasweresuggested.02Oneideawasagreed.03Theteammatesmadeeffortsandgotthemoney.Paragraph1Thefollowingday,theteamgottogethertoshareideasforraisingmoney.PlotDesignParagraph1Thefollowingday,theteamgottogethertoshareideasforraisingmoney.

Alotofideasweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.AnideasuddenlycametoMaria’smind,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesagreeditwasagreatidea.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.Thefollowingdayswitnessedtheireffortsandtheygotalotofmoney.交叉叙述0102030405Alotofideasweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.AnideasuddenlycametoMaria’smind,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesagreeditwasagreatidea.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.Thefollowingwitnessedtheireffortsandtheygotalotofmoney.交叉叙述0102030405Alotofideasweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.AnideasuddenlycametoMaria’smind,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesagreeditwasagreatidea.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.Thefollowingwitnessedtheireffortsandtheygotalotofmoney.交叉叙述0102030405Alotofideasweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.AnideasuddenlycametoMaria’smind,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesagreeditwasagreatidea.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.Thefollowingwitnessedtheireffortsandtheygotalotofmoney.交叉叙述0102030405Alotofideasweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.AnideasuddenlycametoMaria’smind,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesagreeditwasagreatidea.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.Thefollowingwitnessedtheireffortsandtheygotalotofmoney.交叉叙述0102030405Alotofideasweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.AnideasuddenlycametoMaria’smind,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesagreeditwasagreatidea.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.Thefollowingwitnessedtheireffortsandtheygotalotofmoney.模拟题足球场Paragraph2Aweeklater,theteamgatheredatthelot,carryingtoolspurchasedwiththeirearnings.Paragraph1Thefollowingday,theteamgottogethertoshareideasforraisingmoney.01Theteamworkedtogetherinthevacantlot.02Anewsoccerfieldappeared.03Paragraph2Aweeklater,theteamgatheredatthelot,carryingtoolspurchasedwiththeirearnings.PlotDesignParagraph2Aweeklater,theteamgatheredatthelot,carryingtoolspurchasedwiththeirearnings.

Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates.Theyremovedthelargerocksbywheelbarrow.Theythenbegantoflattentheroughsurface.Withalayerofturfaswellasthenets,asoccerfieldwasreadytoappearonthestage.“Wemadeit!”theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.平行叙述0102030405Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates.Theyremovedthelargerocksbywheelbarrow.Theythenbegantoflattentheroughsurface.Withalayerofturfaswellasthenets,asoccerfieldwasreadytoappearonthestage.“Wemadeit!”theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.平行叙述0102030405Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates.Theyremovedthelargerocksbywheelbarrow.Theythenbegantoflattentheroughsurface.Withalayerofturfaswellasthenets,asoccerfieldwasreadytoappearonthestage.“Wemadeit!”theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.平行叙述0102030405Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates.Theyremovedthelargerocksbywheelbarrow.Theythenbegantoflattentheroughsurface.Withalayerofturfaswellasthenets,asoccerfieldwasreadytoappearonthestage.“Wemadeit!”theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.润色批改part3词汇润色Suddenly,theballflewintoadeepholeattheedgeoftheyard.TheRockersapplaudedexcitedly.Thefollowingdayswitnessedtheireffortsfeeding,washingandwalkingdogs.一般动词细节动词词汇润色Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates,pluckingouttheweeds,scoopingupdebrisanddepositingitinarentedtruck.Afterremovingthelargerocksbywheelbarrow,theyheldasmallspadeandbegantoflattentheroughsurface.一般动词细节动词词汇润色TheRockersapplaudedexcitedly.CouncilwomanJillsmiled.Marianoddedwith

adeterminedlookonherface.“Wemadeit!”

theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.情绪状态身体表征词汇润色“Iwasjustthinkingaboutplayinginabrandnew

soccerfield!”Mariaanswered.Marianoddedwithadetermined

lookonherface.Holdinga

smallspade,...缺少形容丰富形容词汇润色TheRockersapplaudedexcitedly.Ourteam

currently

haveto...theywerehandsomely

rewarded副词单一状语多样状语词汇润色Withouttheball

Mariahadtowavegoodbyetohermates.Thenextday,withthecompanyofherfather,Mariaandherteammateswenttothemeetinghall.Marianoddedwithadeterminedlookonherface.theyexclaimed

withlaughter...介词短语单一状语多样状语词汇润色Thatevening,seeingherlowspirits,herfatherasked,...Thinkingforawhile,Marianoddedwithadeterminedlookonherface,...非谓语动词单一状语多样状语词汇润色Seeingthefieldcoveredwithdirt,rubble,andweeds,Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates,pluckingouttheweeds,scoopingupdebrisanddepositingitinarentedtruck.非谓语动词单一状语多样状语词汇润色Afterremovingthelargerocksbywheelbarrow,theyheldasmallspadeandbegantoflattentheroughsurface.非谓语动词单一状语多样状语Paragraph1Thefollowingday,theteamgottogethertoshareideasforraisingmoney.Performances,carwashandevenjewelrysaleweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.【1】SuddenlyanideapoppedintoMaria’smind.【2】Shethrilled,herarmsflapping,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”【3】Allherteammatesnoddedtheirconsentasitmeantfund-raisingbyattendingtocutedogs.Thingsturnedoutastheyhadexpected.【4】Thefollowingdayswitnessedseveralsmallfiguresfeeding,washingandwalkingdogs,forwhichtheywerehandsomelyrewarded.细节动作popin描写突然又了一个想法Paragraph1SuddenlyanideapoppedintoMaria’smind.01细节动作herarmsflapping写出Maria动作身体表征shrill,herarmsflapping描写了Maria激动的心情多样状语herarmsflapping为独立主格作状语Shethrilled,herarmsflapping,“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”02Paragraph1细节动作nod描写队员的动作身体表征nodtheirconsent描写大家都一致赞同Allherteammatesnoddedtheirconsentasitmeantfund-raisingbyattendingtocutedogs.03Paragraph1细节动作feeding,washing,walkingdogs描写了队员为筹钱做的事多样状语handsomely副词作状语Thefollowingdayswitnessedseveralsmallfiguresfeeding,washingandwalkingdogs,forwhichtheywerehandsomelyrewarded.04Paragraph1Paragraph2Aweeklater,theteamgatheredatthelot,carryingtoolspurchasedwiththeirearnings.【1】Seeingthefieldcoveredwithdirt,rubble,andweeds,Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates,pluckingouttheweeds,scoopingupdebrisanddepositingitinarentedtruck.【2】Afterremovingthelargerocksbywheelbarrow,theyheldasmallspadeandbegantoflattentheroughsurface.【3】Withalayerofturfrolledoutaswellasthenetssetup,asoccerfieldwasreadytopresentitself.【4】“Wemadeit!”theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.细节动作kick,pluck,scoop,deposit描写了Maria清理操场的动作身体表征kick,pluck,scoop,deposit描写了Maria清理操场的认真多样状语plucking,scooping,depositing现在分词做状语Paragraph2Seeingthefieldcoveredwithdirt,rubble,andweeds,Mariakickedintoactionwithherteammates,pluckingouttheweeds,scoopingupdebrisanddepositingitinarentedtruck.01Paragraph2Afterremovingthelargerocksbywheelbarrow,theyheldasmallspadeandbegantoflattentheroughsurface.02细节动作remove,hold,flatten描写了大家的动作身体表征remove,hold,flatten描写了大家清理操场的认真多样状语removingalargerocks现在分词作状语Paragraph2Withalayerofturfrolledoutaswellasthenetssetup,asoccerfieldwasreadytopresentitself.03细节动作rollout,setup描写了草皮被铺、网被拉起来的细节动作多样状语with结构作状语Paragraph2“Wemadeit!”theyexclaimedwithlaughterlingeringaroundthesoccerfield.04身体特征exclaim描写了队员的激动多样状语with结构作状语Performances,carwashandevenjewelrysaleweresuggestedbutnoneseemedpractical.SuddenlyanideapoppedintoMaria’smind.0102复合句简单句Paragraph1Shethrilled,herarmsflapping,

“MaybewecanconvinceMrs.Lorriestoofferussomejobsinthepetshop.”Allherteammatesnoddedtheirconsentasitmea