读后续写个人成长类之Sally的生日讲义-高考英语作文复习专项

读后续写原题目呈现：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Sally'sbirthdaywasapproaching,buttheexcitementthatusuallyfilledherheartwasreplacedwithdisappointmentandstress.Turningelevenwasabigdeal,andshehadalwayscelebratedherbirthdaywithagrandpartysurroundedbyherfriends.However,thisyearwasdifferent.Theburdenofexcessivehomeworkandherparents’strugglingbusinessweighedheavilyonher,forcingSallytomakethedifficultdecisionofnothavingabirthdayparty,eventhoughitwasaneventsheenjoyeddearlyeveryyear.Oneday,duringthebreak,herbestfriend,Jane,withacuriouslookinhereyes,approached.“Areyougoingtohaveabirthdaypartythisyear?"Janeasked,sensingSally'ssadness.'No,"Sallysighedandrepliedsadly.“There'sjusttoomuchgoingonandmyparentsaregoingthroughfinancialdifficulties.”Sallysmiledweakly,tryingtoconcealherimmensedisappointmentandstress,butJanesawthroughherpretense(假装)easily.Janenoddedthoughtfullyanddidnotsayanything.Afterthebreak,Sallysawhertalkingtooneoftheirclassmates,Sarah,secretively.Curious,Sallywentovertothem,butassoonasJanesawher,shequicklywalkedaway.SallywasstartledbyJane'sstrangeactionsandturnedtowardsSarah.“Whatdidshesay?”Sallyasked.However,Sarahsimplyshruggedandwalkedaway,leavingSallystandingthere,feelingleftoutandanxious.“Whatishappening?”Sallywonderedanxiously.“Aretheykeepingsomethingfromme?”AsSally'sbirthdaydrewnearer,Janewasoftenfoundchattingsoftlywithherotherclassmates.WheneverSallywentovertothem,theywouldjustwalkawayortellherthattheyweretalkingaboutasecretwhichSallywasnotallowedtoknow,“Janehasneverkeptsecretsfrommebefore,”Sallythought.Herheartsank.Evenherotherfriendsweredistancingthemselvesfromher!Sheswungbetweenconfusionandsadnesswitheachpassingmoment,desperatelytryingtofigureoutwhatwashappening.Whywereherfriendsdistancingthemselvesfromher?Andwhatweretheyhiding?P1：OnthedayofSally'sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroom

intotaldarkness.P2：TearssprangfromSally'seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiant(喜气洋洋的)smile.阅读原文好像没有说明具体到校的时间，所以，对于P1处的“教室一片漆黑”，有点没太理解了（是冬天来上早读？）。不过，这个应该对后面的续写没有太大影响。关于下水文的红色部分，评分标准中说是要把“举办生日party的原因”写在第二个段落内，最初是写在了第一个段内，而且感觉写在这里，也没啥毛病。不过，非要按照评分标准来的话，貌似直接把红色部分平移到第二个段的段首也可以。续写第一段：OnthedayofSally'sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.P1末端给出了环境描写（外界刺激），衔接部分可以添加角色对此的反应。“Whatisgoingon?Wherearemyteacherandtheclassmates?”

murmuredSally,standingfrozeninthedoorway.(不可能一直愣在教室外)，所以可以继续衔接角色的进一步动作:走进教室，想要开灯。Withcautioussteps,shemadeherwayintotheclassroom,reachingouttoflickonthelightswitches.打开灯以后，角色可以看到或者听到….WhatgreetedSallywasacolorfullyadornedclassroomandachorusof“happybirthday,Sally”fromherclassmates.添加细节：教室的模样，同学们的表现Balloonsfloatedaround,confettiscatteredacrossthefloor,andthedeskswerepushedtothesidestomakespace,andabirthdaycakewasplacedonthedeskinthecenter.(教室)Herclassmates,includingJane,Sarah,andothers,stoodinfrontofthestage,eyestwinklingwithexcitement.（同学们）为了增加融洽度，我们在这里说明同学们为Sally

举办生日party

的原因。Janesteppedforward,holdingabeautifullywrappedpresent."Surprise!"sheexclaimed,"weknow

you'vebeenfeelingdownaboutnothavingabirthdayparty,sowedecidedtothrowyouonerighthereatschool."续写第二段：TearssprangfromSally'seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiant(喜气洋洋的)smile.首句是主角的情绪描写，衔接部分可以继续增加描写内容，也可以是主角的下一个动作（情绪—动作）Withtremblinghands,Sallyuntiedtheribbons,liftedthelidofthebox,anddiscoverednumeroushandmadecards,smallgifts,andheartfeltmessagesfromeachofherclassmates.

（有点刻意添加的动作链）(看到礼物后的表现)"Thankyou,Jane,"Sallywhispered,hervoicechoked,asshepulledherfriendintoatighthug."Andthankyou,everyone."(升华部分)Asthedarknessoftheclassroomwasreplacedbythewarmglowoffriendship,Sallyclosedhereyesandblewoutthecandlesonherbirthdaycake,silentlymakingawishtoholdontothesepreciousmomentsandtoalwaysrememberthewarmthoftheloveandkindnessthatsurroundedher.下水文1OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Captured

by

infinite

curiosityandconfusion（利用非谓结构将情绪描写与行为动作描写结合到一句话）,shegentlyopenedthedoorand

attemptedto

reachthelightswitch.However,beforeshetouchedtheswitch,thedarknessandsilencewerebrokenbyraysofflashlightandcheersfromherclassmateswhowerejusthidinginthecornersofclassroom.“Happybirthdaytoyou!Sally.”“Wishyoua

memorable

birthday!”Theywereclapping,singingand

approaching

toherwithcandlesandpresentsinhands.

Whatfurtheramazedher（疑问词引导的名从）wasthat

theclassroomwas

elaborately

decoratedandabigcakeof

multiple

layerswasonhertable.Atthismoment,allconfusionandsadnesswere

erased

.TearssprangfromSally'seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.Overwhelmedwithjoyandgratitude,shehuggedeachofherclassmatestightly.Foramoment,theclassroomechoedwitharippleoflaughterandthesoundofsoftmusic.Thedisappointmentandstressthathadweighedonherforweeksmeltedaway.Surroundedbythewarmthoffriendship,Sallyrealizedthatitwasamomentshewouldcherishforever.However,wordsfailedherasheturnedandmurmuredherthankstoJane.Janesteppedforwardandhandedheranicegift,lookingatherwithatwinkleinhereyes.Sally'sheartoverflowedwithgratitudeandsheknewthatnomatterwhatdifficultieslayahead,shewouldalwayshaveherfriendsbyherside.下水文2OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Confusedaboutwhethertherewasapowerfailureorsomethingelse,shefeltherwaytowardsthelightswitch.Butbeforeshecouldreachtheswitch,achorusofsweet“Happybirthday!”

enteredherearsfromeverycorneroftheclassroom.Andoutofnowhereappearedallherclassmates,whogatheredaroundherandmadeSallythecentreandstar.ThelightswereturnedonandSallycouldhardlybelievehereyes.Decoratedwithfloatingballoonsandstreamers,theclassroomnowwasaabirthdayparty.Ontheteacher’sdesksatanelegantbirthdaycakeandonstudents’

deskswerewellpreparedbirthdaygiftsforSally.Immediately,Sallycametounderstandallthestrangebehaviorsherfriendsandclassmateshadpreviouslyconducted.Tearssprangfrom