打破规则还是遵守规则讲义-高考英语读后续写

Breaktheruleornot?阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Oneday,inthemiddleoftheyear,weallfiledintotheclassroomasusual.MrWilliamsfollowedus,enteringtheroomlast,stealthilysidesteppingandholdingsomethingbehindhisback.“Ihaveasurpriseforyou,”hesaid,dramaticallyrevealingaplasticbagwithatropicalfishinit.Hehelditupanddemonstratedthatthefishwouldbeourclasspet.Afterputtingthefishinthetank,heaskedustonameitandfeediteveryday.Therewasonlyonerule—notnegotiable.Wecouldnot,underanycircumstance,touchthefishwithourhands.MrWilliamswarnedusthatifhecaughtanystudentwiththehandsinthetankorifourfingersdirectlycameclosetothosetechnicolorscales,wewouldbesuspendedfromschoolfortwodays,noquestionsasked.Thisironrulewasthusformedinourclass.Dayafterdaywe’detoclassandfeedthefish.TherewasagirlstudentnamedAmyinourclass,whowasenchantedbythisbeautifulfishinparticular.Sheoftenpicturedwhatthefishcoulddoifitwereswimmingfreeinthelake.Evensometimesshepressedherfaceuptotheglasswatchingthisrainbowinmotionswimbackandforth.Overtime,shesettledonanameforit:Confucius.AboutaweekintoConfucius’sdesirablefamilyresidence,wetookturnsconductingitsdailyfeedingwithcaution.Thefamiliarbellringing,MrWilliamscasuallysteppedontotheplatformforclass.Theintenseeyeshadtofixonhim,afraidtoneglectthekeypointsoftheexam.Suddenlyaterrifyingsoundinterruptedourattentivegaze,likeatsunamiing.Unexpectedly,Confuciusjumpedfromthetanktotheground.MaybeitlistenedtoMrWilliamscheering.Confuciusflippedandgasped,strugglingdesperatelyontheground.FinallyAmygotupfromherseat._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Relieved,weturnedoureyestoMrWilliams.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解读】本文属于主题语境中人与社会；人与自我。Williams老师给学生带来一条热带鱼，养在教室里的金鱼缸里。学生们可以给它取名，可以喂养它，唯一的要求是绝对不能用手直接触碰它的身体，不然会被停学。有一个叫艾米的女生特别喜爱这条鱼，还给它取名“孔子”。意外的事情发生了，在同学们认真上课的时候，“孔子”从鱼缸里跳了出来到了地上，拼命挣扎，奄奄一息。【建议主题】规则意识。在不违背原则的情况下，灵活处理规则。【关键词】theawarenessofrules;applyrulesflexibly【情节构建】续写第一段参考情节：①Amy的反应；②教室里课堂混乱的场面及同学们的反应；③Amy在规则制度下的挣扎；④Amy想出了一个不违规的方法，救助奄奄一息的“孔子”的过程。(如：戴手套或用工具把鱼放到鱼缸里，手就没有直接触碰鱼)。如写到Amy直接用手救鱼也可。续写第二段参考情节：①Williams老师准备惩罚违规的Amy；②“孔子”得救后同学们的反应；③Amy为自己辩护。④Williams老师继续上课，引出主题：在不违背原则的情况下，灵活处理规则是一项聪明之举。如第一段写到Amy直接用手救，这一段可写在危急时刻，对应规则灵活处理也可。【写作问题】情节问题：续写第一段未对Amy在规则制度下挣扎的描写，而是直接写救起了鱼，弱化了本文强调的规则意识；续写第二段未提及规则意识或者未强调在不违背原则的情况下，灵活处理规则，而是只对救起了鱼之后感到松了一口气或者只是抒发传递善良与爱心的情感。语言问题：①直接引语过多；②语言贫乏，尤其是Amy去救助奄奄一息的“孔子”这一过程的细节描写不够。【精彩表达】“救鱼”场景描写Amyeasedherwaytothetank,crouchedandreachedherhand,buthesitatedasifaninvisiblethreadwaspullingher,whenthefearofironrulecrawledonherheart.Tooursurprise,AmyputonapairofglovesmadeofspecialofmaterialsandchargedtowardsConfucius,onthevergeoflosingbreath.Wewatchedherbenddown,carefullystrokeoutthedustonitstechnicolorscalesandputitintothetank.WitnessingourbelovedConfuciusflippingontheground,suffocatedandhopeless,Amyfeltheartsplitandwaseagertosaveit,buttheironrulelingeredinhermind—notouch.Timewastickingaway.Amycuppeditwithbothhandsmeticulouslyandlifteditsosoftlyandswiftlytothetank.AlltheeyesweregluedonAmy,afraidofherbreakingtherule.Butshesteppedinfrontofthestrugglingfish,caughttheslipperybodyandtookitintothetank,herradiantfaceglowingwithfort.巧妙结尾Werubbedourchinsthoughtfully,withaninsightintotheruleandflexibility.Thereinthetank,Confuciuswasdancinginthewater,withitstechnicolorscales,singingforitslittlehero’ssympatheticandflexiblemind.(26班李雨函)【优秀范文1】FinallyAmygotupfromherseat.Thebrightgirl,onthevergeoftears,flewtoConfuciuslikeagustofwind.“No!”Weletoutadeafeningroarinchaos,withanoisydiscussionhangingovertheclassroom.“Therule!”MrWilliams’swarningechoedinAmy'smindrepeatedly.“Undernocircumstancesareyoutotouchthefish.”Hesitantly,shetookastepback.Confuciuslayontheground,withitsmouthgaspingforairanditstailgraduallystoppingswinging.Weallsatfrozeninplace,andjustwatched,atalosswhattodoinpanic.AtthiscriticalmomentAmyhadanidea.Sheputtheplasticbagoverherhandswiftly,pickedConfuciusuplikealivegrenadeandputitbackintothetank.Thankfully,thelovelycreaturecametolifeinthewater.Itswammerrily,asiftoexpressitsgratitudetothesweetangelAmy.Relieved,weturnedoureyestoMrWilliams.Unfortunately,MrWilliams,withaseverelookonhisface,toldAmytopackherbagsandsuspendedherfromschoolfortwodays.“Areyouserious?”Wewereallbabbling,wearingawoebegoneexpression.ButMrWilliamsdidnotshowtheslightestinclinationtochange.Weflockedtothetank,andpressedourfacesuptotheglasstowatchConfucius,wallowinginourguilt.Justthen,Amyraisedherheroichandhigh,stillwrappedintheplasticbag.“Look!”Aconfidentsmilespreadacrossherlips.Shedidn’ttouchthefishdirectlywithherfingers.Thatwasnotagainsttherule.MrWilliamsnoddedinagreementandwentbacktolecturing.DelightedandproudofAmy,weallcasteyesnowandthenonAmy,whoinvitedustowitnesshowsmartitwastoapplyrulesflexiblywithoutviolatingprinciples．【优秀范文2】FinallyAmygotupfromherseat.Staringatthedistressedrainbow,sheshiveredbadlyandalmostdissolvedintoheartbrokentears.Innotime,shesprintedtoherbelovedfishasfastasacricketandreachedouttoholdit.Suddenly,herhandsfrozeinair,whichremindedallofusoftheironrule.Inourgazefullofanxietyandconcern,Amyquicklyfishedoutacleantowelfromherpocketandgentlymadeitwetwiththewaterinthetank.ThenshedelicatelywrappedConfuciuswiththetowel,whichseemedtoeffectivelyalleviateitsstruggleandsootheit.Withexceedinglycare,Amyplacedtherainbowontoawritingboard,movedittothetankandfinallyrescuedthecharmingcreaturebacktothewater.ThepanickedfishslidintoitsresidenceanddancedfreelyasifitwereexpressingitsgratitudetoAmy,whowatchedwithherfacepressedontotheglass.Relieved,weturnedoureyestoMr.Williams.Toourgreatsurprise,hewasradiantwithasmile