2024届高考专题复习2023年高考二卷读后续写writing contes课件

评分标准壹真题分析贰参考范文叁目录书面表达：续写2023新高考真题续写评分参考【评分原则】1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。3.词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。4.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面进行考虑：①与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；②内容的丰富性；③应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；④上下文的连贯性。5.

拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。6.如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。续写评分参考【各档次的给分范围和要求】第五档：（21—25分）1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。2.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档：（16—20分）1.与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。2.所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。3.比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。续写评分参考【各档次的给分范围和要求】第三档：（11—15分）1.与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。2.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。3.应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档：（6—10分）1.与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。2.语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。3.较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。续写评分参考【各档次的给分范围和要求】第一档：（1—5分）1.与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。2.语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。3.缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。不得分：（0分）白卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。写作第二节（满分25分）

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（银匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.故事概要:一名以英语作为第二语言的古巴移民的孩子，在老师的鼓励下参加作文竞赛，写作过程中他不断克服困难，最终享受到写作的快乐并获奖。

在老师的帮助下克服困难，实现个人成长。

故事的主题:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’soffice

after

theawardpresentation.消息的内容“我”收到消息后的反应、情绪等参加颁奖典礼“我”跟老师的互动总结这次比赛对“我”的影响升华主题语料积累：1.表达“吃惊”：

besurprised\amazed\astonished\shockedby对…感到吃惊

toone’ssurprise\amazement\astonishment\shock令某人吃惊的是

in\withsurprise\amazement\astonishment\shock吃惊地

beyondone’sexpectations\imagination出乎…的意料得知了比赛的结果:The

moment

I

saw

my

name

in

the

winner’s

list,

my

heart

leaped

with

joy.

当我看到自己的名字在获奖名单上时，我的心跳跃起。

A

wave

of

disbelief

washed

over

me,

followed

by

an

overwhelming

sense

of

accomplishment.

我首先感到难以置信，随后是一种压倒一切的成就感。

My

eyes

widened

in

surprise,

I

could

hardly

believe

the

words

printed

in

front

of

me.

我的眼睛惊讶地睁大，我几乎不敢相信眼前印刷的字词。获奖时的场景:

As

I

stepped

onto

the

stage,

the

applause

from

the

audience

filled

my

ears.

当我走上舞台，观众的掌声充满了我的耳朵。

Holding

the

award,

I

felt

a

rush

of

pride

and

gratitude.

握着奖杯，我感到一阵骄傲和感激。

The

bright

lights

shone

on

me,

the

cheering

crowd

below

was

a

blur,

but

the

joy

I

felt

was

crystal

clear.

亮光照耀在我身上，下面的欢呼人群模糊不清，但我感到的快乐却清晰明了。来到老师办公室时的场景

I

walked

into

my

teacher’s

office,

the

sense

of

victory

still

lingering

in

my

heart.

我走进老师的办公室，胜利的感觉仍然萦绕在我的心中。

The

look

of

pride

on

my

teacher’s

face

was

the

best

reward.

老师脸上的骄傲表情是最好的奖赏。

Sharing

this

moment

of

success

with

my

teacher,

I

felt

a

deep

sense

of

gratitude

for

her

unwavering

support.

与老师分享这个成功的时刻，我对她坚定不移的支持感到深深的感激。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Incredibly,Iwonthefirstprize.Themanonthephonetoldmetoattendtheawardpresentationthenextday.However,Iwastooastonishedtoutteraword.Atnight,Ikepttossingandturninginbed,allmyheartfilledwithsuspicion.Whatifthemancalledthewrongnumber?DidIreallyhearhimclearly?Asdawnfinallybroke,Iwassoonup,headingfortheawardpresentationwithtwobigdarkcirclesundermyeyes.WhenIwaspresentedwiththeprizeandcongratulated,agenuinefeelingofhappinesssweptoverme.Itwasatthatmomentthatmydoubtsaboutmywritingskillsvanishedintothinair.例文讲解

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Ihandedhimmyprize,sayingthanksinasoftbutconfidentvoice.Overjoyedandthrilled,hegavemeabighug.“Itoldyou,youcanmakeit.Iamsoproudofyou.”Asalways,hehadgreatfaithinme.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavewontheprize.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavefoundmypassionforwriting.Andwithoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavebeenmotivatedtobeawriter.例文讲解AsIlefthisoffice,Ilookedupatthesky.Theskywasbluewiththesuncastingagoldenlightovertheteachingbuildings.Whatagreatday!Ifeltmyheartfullofhope.NeverwouldIforgetthisexperienceandmyteacher.Paragraph

1:

A

few

weeks

later,

when

I

almost

forgot

the

contest,

there

came

the

news.

I

was

told

that

I

won

the

first

prize

in

the

writing

contest!

I

couldn’t

believe

my

ears

because

I

knew

for

sure

that

I

didn’t

have

any

advantages

writing

in

English,

my

second

language.

Therefore,

my

heart

was

filled

with

a

mix

of

excitement

and

disbelief.

I

thought

I

didn’t

care

about

winning,

but

realizing

that

all

my

hard

work

and

perseverance

paid

off

gave

me

a

surge

of

confidence.

Then

I

was

invited

to

the

award

presentation

of

the

writing

contest,

which

was

a

great

momen