高考英语读后续写人与自然类：失控的雄鹿+讲义

题目Alexis

Vaughan,17,satquietlyinthepassengerseatofherdad's

car.ShestaredoutthewindowatthePreston,Idaho,cornfields.Alexis,ahighschoolstudent,lethereyeslazilyscanthelandscapeforwildlife.Still,shewasterrifiedwhenadeercameintoviewabout200yardsinfrontofthem,justafewfeetoffthe

road."Dad,there'sadeer,there!"Alexissaid,rollingdownthewindowforabetterlook.Itwasathree-point

buck(雄鹿)---amaledeerwithsharp,three-prongedantlers(角)oneachsideofitshead．Asthecarmovedcloser,Alexissawthatthebuck'sheadwasbenttowardthe

ground．Thensheheardascream.Afewsecondslater,shesawanarmflyupnearthebuck'shead．Alexisrealizedthebuckwasattackingawoman.

Sue

Panter,a44-year-oldmother,hadbeenoutforhermorningrun.Thebuckhadcomeoutfromthetallcornandbeganfollowingher.HavinglivedinruralIdahoforyears,Sueknewthatmostbucksgotfrightenedbyhumans.Butthisbuckedgedcloser,evenwhenshethrewatitwithahandfulofgravels(石子).Suewenttopickupalogtouseforself-defense,andthebuckcharged．Itliftedherwithitsantlersandthrewherintotheair.Suecouldfeelthehornspunctured(刺穿)her

leg

andbloodfloweddownherleg．Withinseconds,thebuckhadpushedherofftheroadandintothecornfield.WhenAlexisandherfatherpulledup,thebuckwasrollingSuelikearagdoll．Alexislookedintothewoman's

terrified

eyes,andbeforeherfatherhadevenstoppedthecar,the104poundteenagerjumpedquicklyoutofthecaranddowntheslopetowardthebuck.Shewaskickingandhittingittogetitsattention.Then

Michael,herfather,whohadfollowedhisdaughter,wrestledthebuckawayfromthewomenbyholdingtheantlers.Paragraph1:AlexishelpedSueuptheslope.Paragraph2:Thensheheardherfatheryell.破题文章主要讲的是一对父女（Alexis和Micheal）开车到野外的时候，看到一头雄鹿正在攻击一名妇女（Sue），然后下车营救的故事。原文结尾，父亲（Micheal）把雄鹿支开了。续写的第一段，Alexis扶着Sue到了一个斜坡上，然后继续写。我们先来一起构思一下情节。情节构思的方法有很多，我这里想用罗伯特·麦基的《故事》中讲的方法来构思。他在《故事》中是这样写的：你已经决定某一个特定的事件必须在你的故事中发生，一个将要进展和转折的情景。如何写出一个富有见地的情感场景？你问：“如果我是这个人物，我会怎么做？”采用斯坦尼斯拉夫斯基的“魔术般的如果”，你会去扮演这个角色。当一个场景对我们来说具有情感上的意义时，我们便可以相信，它对观众来说也同样具有意义。罗伯特·麦基《故事》非常简单，但是非常有效。不要问“我的人物会怎么做？”而是问“我是这个人物，我要怎么做”。我们可以想一下，如果我是Sue，“我”此时最想要得到的是什么？很明显，“我”受伤了，“我”被雄鹿刺杀了大腿，“我”要马上得到救治，这是“我”最想要的东西。如果我是Alexis，“我”看到有人受伤，“我”第一个想到肯定也是帮忙救治，所以“我”会回到车上，拿出绷带帮Sue包扎。同时，“我”会想着父亲的安危。这就是第一段。然而，“我”听到了父亲的喊叫声，这个喊叫声当然不是父亲战胜雄鹿后胜利的大叫，而是不敌雄鹿的叫声。那“我”要做的就是如何帮助父亲解围。这里也是这篇文章构思的难点。很多人会写“拿枪”，毕竟美国嘛。“拿枪”并不是不可以，只是我们有更好的东西。在这个场景当中，有一样东西体型比鹿大，而且还能发出奇怪声响，并且还是一个关键词，那就是“车”，所以“我”可以回到车上，狂按喇叭和大灯，然后慢慢把车开过去，把鹿吓跑。下水作文Alexis

helped

Sue

uptheslope.Behindthemwasascarlettrail.Suewashurtprettybad.Shewascompletelynumband

terrified,hereyesfilledwithfearandpain.Alexisrushedbacktothe

car

andbrouhgtoutthe

first-aidkit.Shehelpedsuestopbleedingbyusingbandagesfirst.Inthemeantime,she

couldn’thelpgivingquickglancesinherfather’sdirection.Michealwasstill

tanglingwith

thebuck.Theyweresafe

forthetimebeing.Thensheheardherfatheryell.Sheturnedaround.Whatshesawshockedandterrifiedher----herfatherwaspresseddowntothe

ground

withpuncturedabdomen.Theanimal,however,didn'tseemtostop.

Itrighteditself,preparingforanothercharge.Alexisdashedtothecarandstartedengine.She

blewthehorn

and

flashedtheheadlights

withallhermight.Luckily,it

gotthebuck'sattention.Withthecardrewnearer,it

sprintedintothewoods.

Alexisgotoutthecarto

seetoher

father.

Micheal

andSuewasbroughttotheemergencyroomafterwards.Whatanarrowescape!词句积累1.

Behindthemwasascarlet

trail：他们后面有一天鲜红的血迹。【用了倒装。scarlet：鲜红的。漫威绯红女巫就是这个词：ScarletWitch】2.

first-aidkit:急救包3.

couldn't

helpgivingquickglancesinherfather'sdirection：忍不住往父亲的方向瞥4.

tanglewith：与……纠缠5.

Itrighteditself：让自己站稳，扶正【熟词生义，right[v.]:toputsomethingbackinto