高考读后续写救人篇以电梯保险柜被困语篇为例课件

2024届高考续写冲刺—救人篇情节建构2024届高三英语考前讲座2024T8联考读后续写电梯惊魂读后续写语篇演练题目回顾人与社会文本简析原文大义：1.

我放学后坐电梯回公寓，遇到邻居Mrs.Lim也一起坐电梯；2.

本以为是平淡无事的一天，谁知电梯坏了，飞速下降到5楼，Mrs.Lim歇斯底里，情绪失控；3.

忽然Mrs.Lim呼吸困难，我帮忙松开衣服领子，等待救援。遇困等待救援人与社会文本简析原文大义：1.

我放学后坐电梯回公寓，遇到邻居Mrs.Lim也一起坐电梯；2.

本以为是平淡无事的一天，谁知电梯坏了，飞速下降到5楼，Mrs.Lim歇斯底里，情绪失控；3.

忽然Mrs.Lim呼吸困难，我帮忙松开衣服领子，等待救援。遇困等待救援Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.情节构思①【衔接1】我被困后的心情②Mrs.Lim相较之前情况好转？更差了？③

我的应对：尽力冷静下来，并再次安抚Mrs.Lim。

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我的努力：敲电梯门/再次按按钮/喊叫求助⑤【衔接2】有人回应，并报火警；暂无回应，心情再次跌至谷底…Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.情节构思①【衔接3】我的反应：激动地大声回应②firefighters的回应：让我们保持镇定+等待救援③Mrs.Lim的反应：放松下来，打起精神，等待破门④过了一会门终于开了，我们也获救了；感谢救援人员⑤【结尾】呼应原文开头：回想刚刚遭遇的电梯惊魂，珍惜平凡普通的一天。救人篇情节建构语料库环境烘托：Theoverwhelmingtensionintheairof....weighedheavilyonourhearts.Theairgrewstuffy(闷热的），beadsofsweatdrippingdownourfaces.Thewholehousewasblazingandallhecouldhearwasthecracksoftheburningwood.Healmostchokedtodeathinthethickfumes(烟）.惊险的心理感受：Whenherealizedtheseriousness/severityofthesituation,hisbloodrancold./hismindalmostwentblank/hisheartflewintoone’smouth/sbbescared/frightened/terrifiedoutofone’swits吓得魂不附体救援的紧迫感：1.(time来表现）Wewereracingagainsttime.2.(困在困境中的人的时间感）Timeseemedtofreezeandeveryminutefeltlikecenturies.求救ringthealarmbuttonand/ofusethebuilt-intelephoneorintercomdial911drumthedoorandscreamatthetopofone’svoicetoattractattentionIpostedmylocationonlineandexplainedwhatIwasgoingthrough,wishingforanyonetocometomyrescue.救援人员到时情绪转变：Hopeignited,myheartalmostleaptoutofmychest.Oursaviourseventuallyarrived.Thevoicesoftherescuersweresoear-pleasing/soundedlikeanear-catching(动听的）note.救援展开：1.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheyassessedthesituationandlaunchedtheirrescueworkinanorganizedway.2.NorwoodaswellasherfriendspulledSimmonsoutofthecarandlaidherinasafeplace,alittlefarfromthecar.3.Nervousandanxious,NorwoodstruggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaidtoSimmons.(performCPR)4.Hearingthescreams,Henryrantotheriverside,threwoffhisclothesandjumpedintothewaterwithouthesitation.5.Sbcoveredhisnoseandmouthwithadamptowel,dashedintotheburninghouse,searchedforxxandcarriedhimoutofthehouse.6.NorwoodandherfriendslaidSimmonsonherbackandopenedherairway.Afterwhatseemedtobehalfanhour,Simmonsregainedherconsciousness.(cametolife)7.Eventually,theambulancearrivedandrushedSimmonstothehospital.Whensomebodysawme,somebodyimmediatelycameoverandtookmyhand."Staycalm,"somebodysaid,his/hergentlevoicereassuredme.“Followme,andwe’llgetoutofthistogether.”救援结果：Whenwewerereleasedfrom...finally,webreathedasighofrelief/weburstintotearsofgratitude/gaveajumpintheair/aheavyloadwastakenoutofourmind/主题：“我”是被困者：感悟

珍惜生命；沉着冷静；感恩Afterconveyingmysinceregratitudeforwhattheydidforus,Ifeltawarmcurrentrisinginmyheart,knowingtherearesuchselflessguardianangelsaroundus.Itdawnedonmethatweshouldcollectourselvesinthefaceofemergencyandoweourheartygratitudetothosewhocametoourassistance.“我”是施救者：Theboy’snarrowescapewasareminderwhyIchosetoserveinthefiredepartment-toprotectandsavelives,nomatterwhathappened.Thethrillingrescuemissionwouldbeengravedinmyheartforever,whichdisplayedthetruemeaningofbeingafirefighter.Whateverthedangeris,justgoalloutandreachyourhelpinghandreadily.IthoughthadIacceptedtheeasyposition,Iwouldhavebeennothingbutabystander.I’mhappyIdidn’ttaketheeasywayout.Aftertheincident,sbwaspraised/awardedforbraveryandquickaction.Sbwasmodestaboutheractions,butsheknewthatherfirstaidtraining/knowledgehadpreparedherforthatmoment.Itcanmeanthedifferencebetweenlifeanddeath.Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.(环境描写）Theair-conditioninghaddiedout,andtheliftbecamereallystuffy.Weweresweatingbuckets.IheldMrs.Lim’shandsandcomfortedherencouagingly,reassuringherthattherescuewasboundtocome.Everysecondthatpassedwaspainful.“Heeelllppp!!!”（动作描写）Iscreamedatthetopofmylungs,eagertoarrestsomeone’sattention.Awaveofdespairwashedoverme.Inonelasteffort,Itriedbangingonthedoors.Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.范文欣赏Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.Helpwasfinallyhere!Thebravefirefighterscrankedthedoorsopenusingtheirtools.Itfeltlikeahundredpoundweightwasliftedoffme.Iletoutasighofreliefwhenthedoorswerefinallyopenedandallthisdramawasover.ThefirefighterspraisedmeforhelpingMrsLim.Mycheekswereflushed(脸红),andIreturnedtheirpraisewithgratitude.MrsLimthankedmeprofusely(一再感谢)andevengavemeahug.（升华）AsIrecalledtheday’sevents,IwasproudofmyselfforcomfortingMrsLimandkeepingcalmduringanemergency.Ilearntfromthisincidentthatinsteadofbeinghysterical,weshouldkeepcalmandwaitforhelptoarrive.范文欣赏遇险脱困类续写模版IwasshockedtofindthatIwastrappedin

someplace.(thehouse,thelift,…)Suddenly,Theoverwhelmingtensionintheairof....weighingheavilyonourhearts,Ifeltanxietyandnervousnessgrowinginsideme,butIknewIhadtostaycalmforbothofus(如果前文出现了次要人物).Therealizationdrovemetopluckupmycourageandtookadeepbreathtoyell/wave/crywithallmystrength.(具体的救援过程）

Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.Hopeignited,myheartalmostleaptoutofmychest.Oursavorseventuallyarrived.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheyassessedthesituationandlaunchedtheirrescueworkinanorganizedway.Whenwewerereleasedfrom...finally,webreathedasighofrelief.Apartfromminoremotionalfatigue/injuries,weweresafeandsound.Afterconveyingmysinceregratitudeforwhattherescuersdidforus,Ifeltawarmcurrentrisinginmyheart,knowingtherearesuchselflessguardianangelsaroundus.2024年名校写作体读后续写-受困保险箱读后续写语篇演练语篇演练：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。IworkedatalocalstationoftheBerlinfiredepartment.Wegotanalert(警报)around8:25pmthatFridayandrushedtothefireengine,wheretheprintoutfromthedispatcher(调度员)saidtherewasanine-year-oldboylockedinasafe.Iaskedmyself:ifitwereasafe,woulditbeairtightIwasawarethatitmightalreadybetoolatebythetimewearrived.Ihadtoplanforabadoutcome.Ontheotherhand,ifwewereintime,howlongwouldittakeustoopenthesafeIknewitwouldbeanincrediblydifficulttask.It’swhatsafesaredesignedfor—nottobeopened.Ittooklessthanfiveminutestoreachtheproperty.WhenIsawawomancryingonthestreet,Iknewthesituationwasserious.Shewastheboy’smotherandsheledusintothebasement.Shetoldustheboywasaliveandwestartedtalkingtohim;hewasverycalm.Weaskedhowithadhappened:duringagameofhideandseekwithhisfive-year-oldbrother,hehadthoughtthesafewouldbeagoodplacetohide.Theboy’sparentshadgotthehousefromhismother’sfather.Theunlockedsafehadbeentherewhentheymovedinandwasinanareatheydidn’tusemuch.Theboy’slittlebrotherhadshutthesafe,then,whenhecouldn’topenitagain.Theonlypersonwhoknewthecombinationwastheboy’slategrandfather.Fromtheoutset,thebiggestprioritywasgettingoxygentotheboy.Wegotoxygenfromthehospital.Theboysaidthathecouldfeelathinstreamofair.Iaskedhisparentsifanyonehadopenedthesafebeforeandtheysaidno.Sowehadtoguessasix-digitcode(密码).Westartedtypingthemin—butwehadtowait10minutesbetweeneachattemptbeforewecouldtryagain.Soquicklywetriedthemall.Noluck.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Wewerefullypreparedatthispointtoopenthesafebyforce,startingwithadrill.

Para2:Then,justaswestartedtomakethefirstcut,myworkmatetypedinthecorrectcode.

该文本（前文）主要内容：我是消防员，接到了一个报警，一个九岁的男孩被困保险箱，家里人没人知道保险箱密码，保险箱空气密闭，孩子的生命危在旦夕。从一开始，最优先考虑的就是给男孩输氧。我们从医院拿了氧气，男孩说他能感觉到一股稀薄的气流。我问他父母以前有没有人打开过保险箱，他们说没有。所以我们不得不猜测一个六位数的代码(密码)。我们开始输入，但每次输入之间要等10分钟才能再次输入。我们很快就把它们都试了一遍。运气不好，没打开。段首句1我们完全准备好了用武力打开保险箱，首先是用钻头。Wewerefullypreparedatthispointtoopenthesafebyforce,startingwithadrill.段首句2然后，就在我们开始第一次切割时，我的同事输入了正确的密码。Then,justaswestartedtomakethefirstcut,myworkmatetypedinthecorrectcode.Para1:Wewerefullypreparedatthispointtoopenthesafebyforce,startingwithadrill.Theoverwhelmingtensionintheairofthebasementweighedheavilyonourhearts.Additionally,theboy'sweakbreathfromthesafebroughtourheartsintoourmouths,whichurgedUStoactquickly."Staybackandyou'llbealright."Icalmedthehelplessboyinacalmingvoice.Sweatsstreamingdownmycheeks,lexaminedthesafecarefully,pointedthedrilltoitsfrontdoorandturnedonthedrill.