2023年1月浙江英语首考读后续写课件-2024届高三英语二轮复习

23年浙江首考读后续写真题：人鸟情未了读懂故事，确定主题Understandthestoryanddefinethetheme分析性格，助力推理Analyzethetraitsoftheleadingcharacters分析首句，完成推理

Accordingtothegivensentencestoinferthestory积累语言，优化输出Languageaccumulation示例范文，相似拓展

Excellentsampleessay&Similarextension1.梳理故事（5W1H）whowherewhenwhatwhyhowI,myfriends,ahummingbirdamilkinghouse,outsidenearmyfriend’sfarm

WhenIwasinvitedtovisitthefarmforcookout…afewweekslaterAnoiseinthemilkinghousecaughtmyattention,soIenteredit,savingahummingbird.Thebrokenwindowglasswas

thelikelyreasonwhythehummingbirdwashere.Paragraph1:Afewweekslater…

Paragraph2:Iwasjustabouttoleave…story

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly,Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow,AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”

attentive（细心的）benevolent（有爱心的）2.“我”的性格分析

people-person（人缘好的）作用：通过人物性格的分析，暗示了续写第一段首句“Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.”中主人公为什么再次来到农场：因为主人公对蜂鸟的牵挂，他/她想知道蜂鸟的现状。

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly,Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow,AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”astrongsurvivalinstinct

（强烈的求生欲）ataloss（茫然不知所措）Keepthebenefactorinmind（将恩人牢记于心）Shewasreluctanttopartwithhisbenefactor.（对救命恩人恋恋不舍）2.蜂鸟的心理活动分析因为蜂鸟想用自己的方式报答和感谢救命恩人。作用：通过分析蜂鸟的心理活动，暗示故事后续发展的第二段“Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.”蜂鸟为什么会再次出现，她来这儿的目的是什么？她又做了什么，为什么要这样做？Paragraph1:

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Paragraph2:

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.1.WhydidIgotothfarmagain?Mymood?2.WhatdidIdoonthefarm?3.Whatweremyfeelingswhenthehummingbirdwasabsent?1.Whydidthehummingbirdappear?2.Whatdidthehummingbirddo?3.WhatdidIdo?Whatweremyfeelings?4.Whatdoesthestorytellus?3.推断故事情节1.“she”—pronoun—todirectlynarratewhat“I”saw,heard,touchedandthought—personification(rhetoricaldevice修辞手法)2.“thebird,thistinycreature,ahummingbird”—usedifferent/variednamestoavoidrepetition.3.usesomecohesivewords—still;again…toshowhowinteractionofcharactersdevelopsovertime4.usesimplebutdescriptivewordsandexpressionsfromthepassage5.difficultwordslike“cookout”,“theblackberry-linedpath”tellusthesignificanceofknowingtheformationofwords.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand…Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.…thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.lookingatmewithherbrighteyes/Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyesthemilkinghouse/theblackberry-linedpath4.语言积累-原文细节Joyfullyflappingherwings,shecircledaroundmeforawhileandkepthoveringoverme.Shelandedonmycuppedhandandlookintomyeyesasifshowinghergratitude.Description

fromthe1stpersonlimitedpointofviewhearingAnoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention.…thenletoutasqueakingcall…Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”visionShewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.Sheceasedherstruggle…Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,…touchIremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.thinkingPerhaps

shehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?B2U4ReadingforWritingBeautifulIrelandanditsTraditions4.语言积累-原文细节利用五感描写农场的环境（视觉、听觉、嗅觉、味觉、触觉）翻译：1.当我再次来到农场时，农场看上去和我上次来时一样：相同的山、相同的水，相同的风景。WhenIwenttothefarmagain,thefarmlookedthesameasIcamelasttime:thesamemountain,thesamewater,thesamescenery.视觉翻译：2.河岸两边有各种各样的花，鲜花的香味沁人心脾，同时引来了很多蝴蝶，围着他们转来转去。Withavarietyofflowersonbothsidesoftheriver,thefragrantflowersdelightedtheheart,andattractedlotsofbutterflies,lingeringaroundthem.嗅觉4.语言积累-丰富语言Themelodioussongofbirdsmademespellbound.翻译：3.潺潺的流水声让我很放松。利用五感描写农场的环境（视觉、听觉、嗅觉、味觉、触觉）Thegurgling/burblingstreamsoothedme.听觉翻译4：我沉浸在小鸟悦耳的歌声中。听觉翻译：5.古老的风叶像张开的翅膀，迎风转动，不仅与绿草、野花构成了独特的风景，更为这童话般的世界增添了神奇的色彩！Ancientwindmill'sleavesopenedlikethebirds’wings,rotatingagainstthewind.Thewindmill,thegreengrassandthewildflowernotonlyconstitutedtheuniqueview,butalsoaddedmysteriouscolortothefairy-taleworld!视觉4.语言积累-丰富语言没看到蜂鸟时的失望2.Disappointmentoverwhelmedmyheart.7.Notseeingthehummingbird,Ifeltnoend(非常)disappointed.4.Iwasmorethangutted,

tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.5.Icouldn'tresistcryingbitterly,buryingmyfaceinmyhands.6.Myheartsank,justlikeastonefalling

heavilytotheground.3.Myheartwas

drizzling,heartwet.

我的心下着淅淅沥沥的小雨，心里湿漉漉的。

1.Ibrokedownemotionally.4.语言积累-丰富语言看到蜂鸟时的欣喜/开心5.Seeingthehummingbird,myeyestwinkledwithexcitement.8.Thehummingbirdinsight,myeyesdancedwithjoyandsweetness.7.Exhilarationtookpossessionofmeuponseeingthehummingbird.2.shecheeredandjumpedwithjoy.1.Iwasatthetopoftheworld.3.Iwasinhighspiritsasiffloatingontheair.4.Igrinfromeartoearasiftheworldweremyown.6.Iwaslikeadogwithtwotailswhenseeingthehummingbird.4.语言积累-丰富语言1.Therelationshipbetweenhumanandanimalsisgraduallycausingpeople’sattention.人与动物的关系正在逐渐引起人们的注意。2.Itisareminderthatweneedtocareabouttheworldweliveinandthatweshouldlearntorespectlifeandnature.

它提醒我们要关心我们生活的世界，我们应该学会尊重生命和大自然。3.Itistimeforeveryoneofustostarttodowhatwecantoprotecttheanimalsthatarebeneficialtoman.

它是时候对我们每个人开始做我们能

做的事情去保护有益于人类的动物了。4.语言积累-丰富语言升华部分-人与自然和谐相处Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Irushedtothehouselikeanarrowleavingthebowtoseewhetherthehummingbirdwasthere.Disappointmentvisitedmewhennotseeingthehummingbird.Buttomyrelief,thewindowwasfixed.Igavethefarmeracall.Hetoldmeaboutthehummingbird,sayingthehummingbirdhadfliedbackfor101timesasiftowaitforme.Hearingthis,Myheartmelted,tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.Bathedinthewarmsun,breathingthefreshair,Ihadnomoodinenjoyingthebeautifulscenery.Scanningaround,Itriedtolookforthehummingbird'sshadow.Withthetimetickingby,thehummingbirddidn’tstillcomeintomysight.Myheartsank,likeastonefalling

heavilytotheground.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Icheeredwithjoywitheyesdancingwithsweetness.Thehummingbirdhoveredbeforeme,lookingdirectlyintomyeyes.Sheletoutasqueakingcalltheinstantsherecognizedme,jumpedontomyoutstretchedlefthandandkisseditdesparately,whichmademyheartmeltagain.Istretchedoutanotherhand,gentlystrokingherheadasifsheweremyownchild.Thesoftbreezeandtheamber-likesunshinewitnessedthegreatfriendshipbetweenus.Itdawnedonmethatbirdsaretoourhumanwhatfriendsaretous.Therefore,weshouldprotectbirdssoastomakethembecomeourfriendsforever.比喻修辞写出了我希望看到蜂鸟的急切心情无灵表达写出了我没看到蜂鸟的失望

夸张修辞表达了蜂鸟无数次回来寻找救命恩人，同时也表达了蜂鸟回报恩人的决心。

被蜂鸟的行为所感动

景物反衬法：景物虽好，却没心情欣赏，写出了

主人公没看到蜂鸟的失望。

虽心有不甘，可终究还是失望了。此句既写出了

主人公的失望，又呼应了下文的给出句：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

看到蜂鸟时的欣喜

原文词汇产出,尤其是“lookingdirectlyintomyeyes”，在原文中被三次提到。

与续写第一段相呼应

这是人与鸟儿和谐相处的温馨瞬间，微风与阳光见证了这一切。此句既渲染了主题，又为升华主题做了铺垫。

升华主题，突出人与自然和谐的重要性5.优秀范文

契诃夫法则，呼应原文：Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsabout

thehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow

In2000,whenIwasaroundsevenyearsold,allmyfamilywerecomingbackfromaT-ballgame,whichwasourusualweekendadventure,butunlikeeveryotherweekend,asurprisewaswaitingforusinourdriveway—twoadultgeeseandasmallgoose.Obviouslystartledbyourreturn,theadultsflewawayinpanic,withtheirbaby,tooyoungtofly,leftinplace,tinyanddelicate.Hourspassedoneafteranother,andnighteventuallyfell.However,withitalsocameadeepchillandafearofwatchfulanimals.Itwasapparentthatthegoslingneededprotection,warmth,andfoodtomakeittothemorning,sowehadtohelpit,andwebroughthimontoourbackyard.5.相似拓展Weallprettymuchsleptwithoneeyeopentillmorningcame.Andthenanothermorning.Andstillanother.Eachmorning,wewouldtrytodrivethegooseawaytohisparents,whokeptcomingbacktoouryard.Hewouldn’tgotothem,though,andneitherwouldtheycomecloseenoughtoclaimhim.Wekeptthisupforfivedays,butnoluck.Realizingtheyounggoosehadclearlydecidedwewerehisfamilybythen,wehadtogivehimaname,callingthelittleguyPeeper,becausehewouldoftenfollowusaroundtheyardmakingapeeping(唧唧叫)noise,nonstop.Besides,wedecidedthatPeeperwasaboy.Idon’tknowwhy;itjustfeltright.

Ayearpassedandwesettledintoaroutine.Peepersleptonourbackyardeachnightand,intypicalgoosefashion,useditasalatrine(公共厕所).Mydadwouldsprayoffallthegoosedroppingsdaily.PartofthisceremonyincludedDadthrowingPeeperupintotheairsohecouldflapitswingsandflewaloop(圈)aroundthehouse,andthencamebackagainoncetheporchwasclean.Daysturnedintoweeks,andweeksturnedintomonths.Beforeweknewit,thelittlethinghadgrownintoabigbirdwithtwopowerfulwings.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Itcameasatotalsurprisetomewhen,in2019,anadultgoosemadehiswaybacktomyfamilyhome.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________细节描写“ItmustbeYOU!”SothrilledwasIthatIcouldn’thelpexclaiming.“肯定是你！”我是如此激动，情不自禁地大喊。[激动情绪/倒装句]2.NeverinmywildestdreamdidIimaginetheadorablecreaturecouldcomeback20yearslater.我做梦都不敢想这只可爱的生物20年后会再回来。[倒装句]3.Iwatchedherflyinggracefullyhighintheskyandsmiledwithrelief.我看着她优雅地在空中飞翔，欣慰地笑了笑.4.liveinharmonywith.和……和谐共处[结尾感悟]5.Itwasatrulyheart-warmingmomentandonethatwouldnevervanish.这是一个真正温暖且永恒的时刻。[结尾感叹]6.Thedayswithhimisauniquegiftthatneedstobeapprec