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读后续写：全神贯注高二英语期中考试Thefootballseasonwasalmostover.Sallyhadbeenplayingfootballallsummer.Shereallyenjoyedrunningaroundwiththeotherplayersinherbrightorangeuniform,chasingtheblackandwhiteballacrossthegrassyfield.Asmuchasshetried,though,Sallystillhadnotscoredonesinglegoal.Beforeeachgame,theyhadapracticesession.ThecoachshowedSallyandherteamhowtopasstheballtoeachotherandtakeshotsatthegoal.Sallywasprettygoodatpassingtheball,butevenduringpractices,shecouldn'tkicktheballpastthegoalkeeper.Shewonderedifsheshouldquitfootballandjoinadifferentclub."Don'tgiveup,"saidthecoach.Butitwashalf-time,andSallywasfeelingfrustrated（沮丧）.Shewastrying!Everytimeshegotachancetokicktheball,itwouldgointhewrongdirectionoraplayerfromtheotherteamwouldtakecontrolofit.Shesippedathercolaandpouted（撅嘴）.Thebreakwasoverandtherefereeblewhiswhistletostartthegameagain.Thetwoteamswalkedbackontothefield,bothdeterminedtowin.Sallybent,tieduphershoelaceandheardhermotherwhisperinherear."Stayfocused.Keepyoureyesontheball.Lookforanopportunitytogettheball.Youcandoit."Sallystoodupandtookadeepbreath.Evenifshedidn'tgetonegoalallsummer,sheknewthatshehadtriedherbest.Thatwassomethingtobeproudof.Soshesmiledathermotherandheadedtoherposition.Thewhistleblew,andthegamecontinued.Thescorewastied（打成平局）withonegoaleach.Thegreenteamwasprettygood,butSally'sorangeteamwasfast.Thegirls'ponytailsbouncedastheyran,withmanyfeetkickingfrantically（拼命地）attheballwhenitcamenearthem.ItwasaratherboringgameandSally'sheartwasnolongerinit.Paragraph1:Sallystarteddaydreamingaboutjoiningotherschoolclubs.__________________________Paragraph2:Recallinghermother'swords,Sallywaswokenfromherdaydream._____________________评分标准读后续写·如何评？第五档(很好)(21～25分)(1)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接非常合理，文章内容新颖、丰富、合理，非常有逻辑性，续写完整；(2)所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，语言错误很少，且完全不影响意义表达；(3)自然有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构非常清晰，前后呼应，意义非常连贯。阅卷老师在阅卷时，主要考虑以下内容：1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2.内容的丰富性；3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4.上下文的连贯性。

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Sallystarteddaydreamingaboutjoiningotherschoolclubs.…………衔接句1：过渡句1：衔接句2：

Recallinghermother’swords,Sallywaswokenfromherdaydream.

…衔接句2：过渡句3：主题句：Whataboutotherclubs?Whichclub?Howdidsherecallhermother’swords?(sawhermother/heardhermother’scheeeingvoice)Whatwouldshedo?Howwasthegamegoing?(Shescoredagoal)ThethemeHowwouldshefeel?Whatdidshedointhatclub?

FocusedonthegameStayfocused!absent-minded10分第二档(6～10分)(1)与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接，内容和逻辑上有一些问题，续写不够完整；(2)语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误影响了意义的表达；(3)较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性，全文结构不够清晰，意义欠连贯。16分第四档(好)(16～20分)(1)与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整；(2)所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，表达比较流畅，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达；(3)比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。Languagekeyword2第五档(很好)(21～25分)(1)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接非常合理，文章内容新颖、丰富、合理，非常有逻辑性，续写完整；(2)所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，语言错误很少，且完全不影响意义表达；(3)自然有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构非常清晰，前后呼应，意义非常连贯。Whataboutotherclubs?

Whichclub?Whatdidshedointhatclub?Hermindwaswandering,“IfIhadjoinedthedancingclub,

Iwouldbedancing

onthesplendidstageinsteadofrunningonthegrassyfield---”

Hermind________,“_________thedancingclub,

I________

onthesplendidstage________runningonthegrassyfield.”她心不在焉地想“如果我加入的是舞蹈社团，此刻我就会是在华丽的舞台上跳舞，而不是在这草地上奔跑了---”Howwouldshefeel?

Shejustran

absentmindedlyaroundthefootballfield,

nothavingthepassionto

winthegame.

Shejustran

__________aroundthefootballfield,

_______(非谓语动词）thepassionto

winthegame.她只是心不在焉地在足球场上乱跑，已经完全没有赢得比赛的激情了。absent-mindedHowdidsherecallhermother’swords?

Whilestilllostinherowndaydream,sheheardafamiliarvoiceShouting，

“Stayfocused.Youcandoit.”________herowndaydream,sheheardafamiliarvoice________，

“Stayfocused.Youcandoit.”就在她还沉醉在自己的白日梦的时候，她听到一个熟悉的声音在大叫，“注意力集中，你定能成功！”sawhermother/heardhermother’scheeeingvoiceWhatwouldshedo?Itwasatthatmoment

that

herteammatepassedtheballtoher.

_______atthatmoment______herteammatepassedtheballtoher.就在那一刻，她的队友把球传给了她。(强调结构）FocusedonthegameWhatwouldshedo?Withouthesitation,shetooktheball,passedtheopponent,andrushedtowardsthenetofthegreenteam.

__________,shetooktheball,_______theopponent,and__________thenetofthegreenteam.毫不犹豫，她接过足球，超过对手，直奔绿队球门。三连动Howwasthegamegoing?

Focusedontheball,shekickeditashardasshecould,whicharousedthounderouscheers.__________theb