读后续写入门级课件

读后续写写作技巧每多得一分，都能往前进一步Whatwouldyoudoifyouscratchedyourneighbor’scarbyaccident?提取故事的主要信息和情节人物性格分析和续写情节设计修饰润色，丰富情节01020304目录Contents练习和作业01提取故事的主要信息和情节基本步骤和技巧01基本步骤快速阅读文章，找出文章中的六要素（5W1H)——who,when,where,what,why,how。对故事情节进行整理和分析，划出表示人物情感态度的词，方便后续的设计和预判。技巧1.人名、地名都是大写。2.注意一些表示时间或递进关系的词，如thenextday/twodaysago、however/finally等，预示着一个情节的发生或者故事的转折。3.每段的主要故事情节通常在首句或尾句。

WhenthelastcustomerleftKFC,itwasalready10:30pm.Adam,an18-year-oldcollegestudent,draggedhimselfhome.HehadbeenworkingatKFCforoveramonththatsummervacation.

Enteringhisroom,AdamfoundhisyoungerbrotherBillsittingontheedgeofhisbedwithanuneasyexpressiononhisface.

“Sorry,Adam.I..Ididsomethingwrong,”Billjumpedupandsaidnervously.

“Whatisit?”

“Thisafternoon

Isneaked(溜)outforarideonyourmotorcycleandaccidentallyhitourneighborOsmanBrook'scar.IwassoscaredandI..Ihurriedhomeinpanic.

”

“Isthecarseriouslydamaged?”

“Theleftheadlightgotbroken.”

“It'strulyyourfaultandit'sreallydangeroustorideamotorcycleatyourage.Besides,it'sillegal,"Adamraisedhisvoice,obviouslyannoyed.Hearingthis,Billloweredhisheadandbithislipshard.

“Anyway,

it'snousecryingoverspiltmilk.Iwilldealwithittomorrow.Nowyougotobedandhaveagoodsleep.”whenwhatwhyhow

ThenextmorningwhenAdamgotup,Billwasstillsleepingsoundly.Adamwasmoredeterminedaboutwhatheoughttodoasanelderbrother.

Afterbreakfast,

Adamtookoutallthemoneyhehadearned

andwentoutofthehousewithit.Intheyardhesawhismotorcycle,onwhosesidethescratches(划痕)wereclearlyvisible.Adamshookhisheadandsighedslightly.Then

hequickenedhispacetoOsman'shouse.

Whenhearrived,hewaswelcomedbyOsman'swifeMary,whotoldhimthatOsmanhadgonetothegaragetohavehiscarrepaired.

“Ihavesomethingimportanttotellhim.CanIwaituntilhecomesback?”Adamrequestedeagerly.

“Ofcourse.Heshouldbehomesoon,”MaryinvitedAdamin,servedhimacupofcoffeeandbeganchattingwithhim.

Afterhalfanhour,thedooropenedandcame

inOsman.Havingsaidhellotoeachother,OsmanandAdambothsatdownonthesofa.How：Adamdecidedtopayforhisbrother’sfault,sohewenttoOsman’shousetodealwithit.02人物的性格分析和续写情节设计人物性格的分析0101

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OsmanAfterhalfanhour,thedooropenedandincameOsman.Havingsaidhellotoeachother,OsmanandAdambothsatdownonthesofa.polite,kindandfriendly续写情节设计02Adamclearedhisthroatandbegantospeak.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Justthen,therecameaknockatthedoor._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.AdamsaidsorrytoOsman.2.Adamdecidedtopayfortherepaircharge.3.Osmanrefusedit.-------------------------------------------------------------------------------1.OsmanopenedthedoorandfounditwasBill.2.BillsaidsorrytoOsman,andthesetwobrothersinsistedtopayfortherepaircharge.Osmanrefusedagain.3.ThetwobrothersdecidedtohelpOsmandosomeworkinstead.分析续写段落之间的关系sorryandnervoussurprisedmovedhappy03修饰润色，丰富情节主要技巧1.增加情感描写：描述人物的情感2.细化动作描写：①把动作分解成动作链；

②增加修饰动作的描写（怎么样的动）3.增加对话4.必要时可以适当回忆1.增加情感描写情感描写主要是用来描述人物的情感主要句式：主语+felt/was/were+(程度副词）+表示情绪的形容词（sad，happy...)如：Billfeltverysorry.练习：翻译1.Osman感到非常的感动。Osmanwasvery/deeplymoved.2.这两兄弟非常的惊讶和开心。Thetwobrotherswereverysurprisedandhappy.①把动作分解为动作链。如：apology→AadambowedlowandsaidsorrytoOsman。练习：扩句和翻译1.亚当赔钱。动作分解：把钱从口袋中拿出来→递给Osman→说：“这是我所有的钱了，希望能够赔偿你的损失。”翻译：Adamtookoutthemoneyfromhispocketandthengavehimthemoney,said：“Thisisallmymoney,Ihopeitcanpayforyourloss.”2.Osman开门发现是Bill。动作分解：走过去→打开门→发现是Bill站在门外→感到惊讶→请进来Osmanwenttoopenthedoor,onlytofindthatBillwasstandingoutside.Hefeltverysurprisedandlethimin.2.细化动作描写:②增加修饰动作的描写（怎么样的动），如增加副词。如：said→sincerelysaid

万能句式：主语+副词+单个动词/主语+动词短语+副词

练习：翻译和扩句1.Osman摆了摆手（怎么摆的手），拒绝拿这个钱。（增加副词）

Osmanwavedhishandgentlely,andrefusedtotakethemoney.3.增加对话注意事项！禁止废话连篇.避免对故事情节和人物刻画没有帮助的对话。不可过于强调对话的方式。比如每个said都加一个副词，适当的留白可以给读者想象的空间。如果想要增加词汇量，可用动作描写来替代。如：“Comein”,Osmansmiled.对话对象十分明确的情况下，无需频繁添加用来引出对话的单词。如在Billl来Osman家之前，房间里只有Adam和Osman,完全没必要一直用Adam/Osmansaid来引出对话。同上，可加入一些动作描写使语言更生动自然。对话不可过多，不能超过非对话的一半。4.必要时可以适当增加一些情节回顾比如在续写Adam上门道歉这一情节中，Adam要承认自己弟弟犯下的错误，那么就需要对弟弟所做的事情做一个简单的回顾。所以，情节回顾是需要的时候才回顾，并且要尽量简短，如果对故事情节和人物塑造没有帮助，就不要进行回顾。主要技巧1.增加情感描写：描述人物的情绪2.细化动作描写：①把动作分解成动作链；

②增加修饰动作的描写（怎么样的动）3.增加对话4.必要时可以适当增加一些情节回顾1.AdamsaidsorrytoOsman.2.Adamdecidedtopayfortherepaircharge.3.Osmanrefusedit.Adamclearedhisthroatandbegantospeak.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________练习主要技巧1.增加情感描写2.细化动作描写3.增加对话4.必要时可以适当增加一些情节回顾Adamclearedhisthroatandbegantospeak.

“Mr.Brook,I’mheretomakeanapology.YesterdayafternoonmybrotherBilldamagedyourcarandranawayinpanic.Weareawfullysorryforthat.”“Oh,Isee.Butit’snobigdeal,”Osmansmiled.ThenAdamdrewoutthemoney

fromhispocketandsaidtoOsman

withsincerity,“ThisisallthemoneyIhave.Iwonderifitcanpayforyourloss.”However,Osmaninsistedthatitwasonlyminordamageand

refusededtotakeit.Justthen,therecameaknockatthedoor._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Let’shaveatry!1.增加情感描写2.细化动作描写3.增加对话4.必要时可以适当增加一些情节回顾1.OsmanopenedthedoorandfounditwasBill.2.BillsaidsorrytoOsman,andthesetwobrothersinsistedtopayfortherepaircharge.Osmanre