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阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。OldJimwaswithoutdoubtthebesthairstylistI’deverknown.Hedesignedeveryhaircutsoartisticallythatitwouldbeanunderstatementtosaythemagicscreatedbyhimwere“beautiful”.Buttherewasonestrangethingabouthisshop:therewasnomirrorinit,socustomerswerekeptinsuspenseuntiltheyreachedhome.IenteredOldJim’shairdresser’s,sadanddisappointed,havingjustbeenrejectedaroleintheschoolplay.Iwasordinary-lookingandboring,andthat’swhytheydidn’twantme—Iwasconvinced.“Iwanttobebeautiful,”IsaidtoOldJim,tearsalmostdropping.Afterhavingahaircut,Ithankedhimagainandwalkedoutthroughthedoor,hiswordsremaininginmyhead:“There’smagicinyournewhair.Nowstartyourjourneytobeauty.”SunlightdroppeddownthroughtheoverlappingleavesabovemyheadasIwalkedonthestreet.Ishookmyheadbutdidn’tfeeladifference.Icouldonlyslightlyfeelthatsomethingwasdifferent,likealittlevoicethathadlongbeensuppressedthatdesiredtobeheard.Suddenly,Iheardsomeonecallingouttome.“Susan!Susan”Iturnedaround.ItwasJennifer,themostpopulargirlinthewholeschool.“Itreallyisyou,Susan.Youlookgreattoday!”‘Thanks.”JenniferwaseverythingIwantedtobe.Whatasweetvictorytogetsuchadmirationfromagirllikeher!Wehadaconversationonschoolandpartedatacrossing,wheresheturnedleftandIright.AsIwalked,Icouldseeaboywalkingtowardme.Wewenttothesameschoolbuthadn'ttalkedtoeachothermuch.Ifitweren'tforthenewhair,Iwouldhavelookeddownandpretendednottoseehim.Ihadalwaysbeenshy.Paragraph1:Butatthatpoint,IintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthesightofhome,Istartedtogofaster,desperatetoseemynewhairinthemirrorinmyroom.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意本文讲述了“我”因长相普通且无聊被学校戏剧拒演后,伤心地去OldJim的理发店理发。OldJim的理发店没有镜子,他告诉“我”新发型有魔力,能开启“我”的美丽之旅。“我”走在街上,虽未明显感觉到不同,但听到受欢迎的女孩Jennifer夸赞自己,还与平时没怎么交流过的同校男孩进行了交谈。故事山分析开端:“我”因长相被学校戏剧拒演,心情低落,来到OldJim的理发店,希望变得美丽。发展:OldJim给“我”剪发,说新发型有魔力,“我”走在街上,先后得到Jennifer的夸赞和与同校男孩交谈的机会。高潮:续写第一段中,“我”打算验证OldJim所说的魔力,与男孩交流。结局:续写第二段中,“我”急切回家照镜子,看到新发型后的反应以及对整个事件的感悟。伏笔以及在续写中的回应伏笔:OldJim说新发型有魔力,开启美丽之旅。回应:在续写第一段中,“我”打算验证这个魔力,主动与男孩交流;第二段中,“我”急切回家看发型,期待看到美丽的自己。伏笔:理发店没有镜子,顾客回家才知道发型样子。回应:在第二段中,“我”迫切回家,就是为了通过镜子看到自己的新发型。伏笔:“我”因长相普通被拒演,渴望变美。回应:在第一段中,“我”主动交流,希望新发型带来改变,变得更有魅力;第二段中,看到镜子里的自己,思考美与自信的关系。伏笔:“我”很害羞,平时不怎么和男孩交流。回应:第一段中,“我”决定改变,主动和男孩打招呼,开启对话,体现新发型带来的勇气。伏笔:“我”走在街上,感觉有变化,像被压抑的声音想被听到。回应:第一段中,“我”主动交流,让内心渴望改变的声音得以释放;第二段中,通过镜子看到自己,意识到内心改变才是真正的美。续写要点第一段:“我”打算验证OldJim所说的魔力,于是鼓起勇气,微笑着主动向男孩打招呼,与他自然地展开对话。在交流中,男孩对“我”的新发型和状态表示夸赞,这让“我”更加自信,深刻感受到新发型似乎真的带来了神奇的变化。第二段:看到家后,“我”急切地冲回家,迅速跑到房间照镜子。然而,镜子里的自己似乎没有太大变化,但回想起一路上他人的夸赞和自己的自信表现,“我”意识到真正的美源于内心的自信,而不是外在的发型,从而获得了成长和感悟。情感线起初,“我”因被拒演而伤心失望,极度渴望变美。在OldJim的鼓励下,“我”带着期待走在街上。得到Jennifer的夸赞后,“我”有了一丝喜悦和自信。决定验证魔力与男孩交流时,紧张又期待。男孩的夸赞让“我”更加自信。急切回家照镜子时,从期待到有些许失落,最后通过反思获得成长,明白自信才是美的关键,情绪从低谷逐渐走向积极。故事线“我”因长相被学校戏剧拒演,心情低落。“我”到OldJim的理发店剪发,他说新发型有魔力。“我”走在街上,得到Jennifer的夸赞。“我”打算验证魔力,主动与男孩交流。“我”急切回家照镜子。“我”通过反思明白美与自信的关系。主旨升华句Truebeautydoesn'tlieinaperfectappearancebutintheconfidencethatradiatesfromwithin.AsIlookedinthemirror,Irealizedthatitwasn'tthehaircutthatmademebeautiful,butthenew-foundcourageandself-belief.Thisexperiencetaughtmethatbeautyisnotjustskin-deep;it'stheresultofembracingoneselfandshowingkindnessandconfidencetotheworld.Themagicofthehaircutwasn'tinitsphysicalappearance,butinthewayitempoweredmetobreakfreefrommyshynessanddiscovermytrueself.Itwasajourneyofself-discoverythatmademeunderstandthatrealbeautycomesfromapositiveattitudeandthecouragetobewhoweare.写作示范一Paragraph1:Butatthatpoint,IintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic.Summoningupallmycourage,Iputonabigsmileandsaidhellototheboy.Helookedabitsurprisedatfirst,butthenreturnedmygreetingwarmly.Westartedchattingaboutourclassesandtheupcomingschoolevents.Tomydelight,hepraisedmynewlook,sayingthatIseemedmoreenergeticandcharming.Hiswordsmademyheartflutterwithexcitement.Ifoundmyselftalkingmorefreelythaneverbefore,andtheshynessthatusuallyheldmebackseemedtohavevanishedcompletely.Thissimpleconversationmademefeellikeawholenewperson,andIbegantobelievethattherereallywassomemagicinmynewhair.Paragraph2:Atthesightofhome,Istartedtogofaster,desperatetoseemynewhairinthemirrorinmyroom.AssoonasIrushedthroughthedoor,Idashedstraighttomyroomandstoodinfrontofthemirror.Tomysurprise,Ididn'tseeacompletelytransformedface.Myfeatureswerestillthesame,buttherewassomethingdifferent.IrecalledthekindwordsfromJenniferandtheboy,andrealizedthattherealmagicwasn'tinthehaircutitself,butintheconfidenceithadgivenme.Truebeauty,Iunderstood,camefromwithin.ItwasthecouragetobemyselfandthebeliefthatIwasworthy,andthatwasthemostpreciousmagicofall.写作示范二Paragraph1:Butatthatpoint,IintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic.Takingadeepbreath,Iwalkeduptotheboyandsaid,“Hi,it'saniceday,isn'tit?”Helookedup,asmilespreadingacrosshisface,andreplied,“Yes,itis.Yournewhairstylesuitsyouverywell.Youlookreallygreattoday.”Hiscomplimentmademeblushwithpleasure.Wetalkedaboutourhobbiesandsharedsomefunnystories.Iwasamazedathoweasilythewordsflowedfrommymouth.Ihadalwaysbeensoshyaroundboys,butnow,withthisnew-foundconfidence,Iwasabletohaveawonderfulconversation.ItseemedthatOldJim'smagicwasindeedworking.Paragraph2:Atthesightofhome,Istartedtogofaster,desperatetoseemynewhairinthemirrorinmyroom.Finally,Istoodinfrontofthemirror,myheartpoundingwithanticipation.Istaredatmyreflection,searchingforthemagicthathadmadesuchadifferenceinmyday.Atfirstglance,Ididn'tnoticeanydramaticchange.ButasIthoughtbackontheday,onthefriendlyinteractionsandthenew-foundcourage,Irealizedthattherealtransformationwasinsideme.Thehaircutwasjustacatalyst.Itwasmynew-foundconfidencethathadmademebeautiful,andIknewthatthisnewmewouldshinebrightly,nomatterwhat.【答案】Paragraph1:ButatthatpointIintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic.Iwavedattheboywithbutterfliesinmystomach.Hearingmygreeting,hewavedback,aslightlysurprisedsmilecrossinghislips.Wecontinuedourconversationonourseparateways.Itallhappenedsonaturally,withoutanyoftheawkwardnessthatusuallyaccompani
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