2025届高三英语上学期二轮复习基础写作：海报设计修改意见（2023年10月22日英语周测 ）应用文写作课件

2023年10月22日英语周测应用文写作假定你是李华,你的英国朋友David准备参加以“保护野生动物”为主题的海报设计大赛,现就参赛作品初稿征求你的意见。请回复邮件,内容包括:1.提出存在的问题;2.提出修改建议。【2023年6月全国卷(I卷)】假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括：1.说明问题；2.提出建议。注意：1.写作词数应为80个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。审题四问假定你是李华,你的英国朋友David准备参加以“保护野生动物”为主题的海报设计大赛,现就参赛作品初稿征求你的意见。请回复邮件,内容包括:1.提出存在的问题;2.提出修改建议。注意：1.写作词数应为80个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。【2023年6月全国卷(I卷)】假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括：1.说明问题；2.提出建议。注意：1.写作词数应为80个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Q.Howtowritesuchaletterwithremarksandsuggestions?Whatshouldwefocuson?Remark?

Suggestion?

Remarkindicatesthefollowingsuggestions,whilesuggestionsshowthesolutionstoproblems.DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose1.OutlinePara.1Backgroundinformation+purposePara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)Para.3EndingBestwishes写作逐步走DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.1

Backgroundinformation+purposeVocabularyBank见信好查看初稿海报设计大赛给某人提供改良建议

Ihopethisletterfindsyouwell.reviewtheinitial/firstdraftposterdesigncompetitionoffersb.suggestionsforimprovementprovidesuggestionstobetter/improve/perfect/refinetheworkIhopethisletterfindsyouwell.Sodelightedtoreceiveyourfirstdraftfortheposterdesigncompetitionthemedwith“ProtectingWildlife”,I’mwritingto

brief简要介绍

youonthenoticeable明显的problemsandoffersomepracticalsuggestionsforimprovement.Havingreviewedyourinitialdraftfortheposterdesigncompetitionon“ProtectingWildlife”,I’mwritingto

providesuggestions

concerningthepossibleshortcomingstobetterthework.经典句式成模态DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)Possibleproblems1.color2.layout3.title/theme4.picturestoodark/dull单调的color/light浅色的color/brightcolorinchaos混乱/rambling杂乱无章的layout/chaoticlayoutdisorganized杂乱的

failtohighlightthetheme/offthetheme跑题了/notstrikingenoughtoarrest/seize/catchthejudges’attentionfailtohighlightendangeredanimalsfailtodisplaytheriskysituationofwildlife

从问题到方案（1）：套句式练

dazzling耀眼的、使人眼花缭乱的colorDearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)Sentencepatterns建议

Iwonderifyoucould…Itwouldbebetterifyou…

WereIyou,Iwould…Itisadvisable/sensibletodosth.…Itissuggestedthat...

从问题到方案（1）：套句式练

DearDavid,

Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)主句中用插入+过去分词作后置定语+定语从句Thethemeoftheposterpresentedinit,failingtoraise/arousepeople’sawarenessofprotectingwildanimals,shouldbehighlighted,whichisexpectedbythejudge.非谓语动词作状语+主句+定语从句Blanketedwith被覆盖toobrightcolors,theposterofferedamisconceptionofprotectiontothereaders,whichisrecommendedtoadoptsomegreyanddarkcolorstohighlightthesignificanceofanurgentaction.从问题到方案（1）：套句式练

DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)主句+定语从句+状语从句Asforthelayoutoftheposter,whichwasalittlebitchaotic,ifyouputtheminacertainorderorrefertospecificdisplay,theoverallviewwouldbegreatly/significantlyimproved.从问题到方案（1）：套句式练

DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)第1句的目的是什么？有指出作品中的问题吗？visibleresign是什么意思？3,4两句是在针对问题给建议还是单纯提出建议？没有针对性的回复，无效交流！避开文不对题的应答DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)第2点是针对什么问题提的建议？没有针对性的回复，无效交流！避开文不对题的应答DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)妙笔1问题

到衔接到方案DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)

从问题单刀直入方案DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)妙笔3从问题

到委婉建议首先，你的作品传达的信息和主题不太相配。此外，你在创作中采用的技巧和元素也远没有给人留下深刻的印象。为了让你的参赛作品大放异彩,你可以通过在海报中关注野生动物如何遭受苦难以及人类活动对它们的影响来突出主题。此外，可以加入一句口号来让你的想法被理解，并可以添加一个卡通形象使其更醒目。

First,themessageconveyed

throughyourworkdoesn’tquitegowiththetheme.Besides,thetechniquesandtheelementsadoptedinyourcreationarefarfromimpressive.Tomakeyourentryshine/striking,youcan

highlightthethemebyfocusingonhowwildlifeissufferingandwhateffectshumanactivityhasontheminyourposter.Also,aslogancanbeincludedtogetyourideaacrossandacartoonimagecanbeaddedto

makeiteye-catching.从问题到方案（2）：罗列式呈现DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.3EndingBestwishesHopemysuggestionsareofhelptoyourimprovement.Yourrevisedworkishighlyexpected!Hopemysuggestionsworkonyourimprovement,andIholdthefirmbeliefthatyouwouldgetabetterone.充满期待的结尾Stepstocompose3.integrateStepstocompose3.integrateDearDavid,

Ihopethisletterfindsyouwell.Sodelightedtoreceiveyourfirstdraftfortheposterdesigncompetitionthemedwith“ProtectingWildlife”,I’mwritingtobriefyouonthenoticeableproblemsandoffersomesuggestionsforimprovement.

Fabulousasyourworkis,thereisstillsomethingtobeimproved.Thethemeoftheposter,presentedinyourposterfailingtoarousepeople’sawarenessofprotectingwildanimals,shouldbehighlighted.Asforthelayoutoftheposter,itwasalittlebitchaotic.Ifyouputtheminacertainorderorrefertospecificd