读后续写之人与动物-人鸟情 讲义-高考英语写作专项复习

读后续写之人与动物一一人鸟情讲义

读后续写

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

In2013,myhusbandRobintookanewjobinGhana.WerelocatedfromLondon,

whereIworkedasaphotographer,tothecapital,Accra.Robinworked,butmyvisa

didn'tpermitmeto,andIwaslefthomesickandhadnopurpose.

Withfewpeoplearound,Iturnedtonature.Iphotographedhorsesand

consideredtheoutdoorstheplacewhereIfeltmostalive.

InSeptember,afteronebadthunderstorm,whenrestingintheyard,Ifounda

bird,barelyamonthold,ontheground.Hewasabandonedbyhisflock（群）,Hiseyes

wereshut.Hewastooyoungtosurvivealone.Iplacedhiminacardboardboxand

stayedupallnight,researchinghowtocarehim.SoIturnedtosomebird'sexperts.

Expertsmeticulouslyexaminethelittlebird,carefullyobservingitsplumage（翅

膀），beak（鸟嘴），andeyesforanysignsofillnessorinjury.Theygentlyhandlethe

creature,checkingitswingsformobilityandassessingitsoverallhealth.Witha

wealthofknowledgeandexperience,thesespecialistsarededicatedto

ensuringthewell-beingofourfine-featheredfriends.Aftertheexamination,an

expertsaidthatitwouldtake12weekstopreparehimforthewild.

Forthenext84days,thetinybirdlivedonme.Hewouldflyalongsideme.As

helearnedtofly,he'dmakeshortflightsfrommyhand,tomyshoulder,and

thensettledonmyhair.InevernamedhimbecauseIhadtoremindmyselfthathe

neededtoreturntothewild.Inreturnforputtinghislifebackoncourse,

herewardedmebygivingmeapurpose.

Threemonthslater,hewasstrongenoughtoflyfartherfromme.Itwastime

forhimtogo.

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式作答。

Para.l

Thenonacleardaywhenhisflockreturned,RobinandItookhimout.

Para.2

Onemorningayearlater,whileIwaspreparingbreakfast,therewas

asuddensoundofbirdschirpingintheyard.

一、梳理文本大意

Iwasa,whomovedfromLondontoAccra,thecapitalofGhana,due

tomyhusband'sjobtransfer（调动）.But,Icouldn'tworkandfelt.Aftera

severethunderstorm,Ifoundanddecidedtoit.Withtheguidanceof

birdexperts,Ithelittlebird.Overthecourseof12weeks,thebird

graduallyrecovereditshealthandwaseventuallyreadytothewild.Sowe

hadtotakeitoutandhelpeditreunite（团聚］withitsflock.

【参考答案】photographerhomesickabirdsave/rescue

tookcareofreturnedto

二、思续写情节一一写下可能发生的情节

Para.lThenonacleardaywhenhisflockreturned,RobinandItookhimout.

情节1:人鸟不舍（动作、情绪、语言）

情节2：望鸟飞走

情节3:生活回归正常

Para.2Onemorningayearlater,whileIwaspreparingbreakfast,therewas

asuddensoundofbirdschirpingintheyard.

情节1:到院子探究竟（动作、情绪…）

情节2：看到小鸟回归（动作、情绪•….）

情节3：人鸟互动（动作、情绪、语言）

三、巧用伏笔，协同原文再构思

协同原文构思情节

para.2Iplacedhimina根据此句，续写

cardboardboxandstayedupall第一段可描述：

night...

我把他放在手心

（place….inmypalm）,

温柔地看着他（softly

lookintohiseyes

para.6Itwastimeforhim根据此句，续写

togo.第一段可描述：

然而，我提醒自

己，是时候让他回归

自然了（returntothe

wild]

para.3Theygentlyhandle根据此句，续写

thecreature,checkingitswings第一段可描述：

formobilityandassessingits

overallhealth.

我轻轻地把举起

手,示意(signal)他飞

向鸟群

para.5Hewouldfly根据此句，续写

alongsideme.及续写首第一段可描述：

句：...whenhisflockreturned....

出乎意料的是，

他围绕着我飞行(flew

/circledaroundme),

不愿离开(unwilling

toleave)

para.4....carefullyobservin根据此句，续写

gitsplumage（翅膀）,beak（鸟第一段可描述：

嘴），

我们向他挥手

(wavedhandto)。他

最终加入鸟群，

飞向高空(soared

我们望

intothesky)0

着(carefully

watched)他消失

在视野里

para.2whenrestinginthe根据这两句，续

yard,Ifoundabird,barelya写第二段可描述：

monthold,ontheground.

Hiseyeswereshut.Hewas

出于好奇(outof

tooyoungtosurvivealone.

curiosity),我走到院

里。当到院里时，我

发现了他。眼睛闪烁

喜悦的光芒(eyes

sparkledwithjoy),仿

佛在向我打招呼

(sendinghis

greetings

tome)o

para.6Threemonthslater,根据此句，续写

hewasstrongenoughtofly第二段可描述：

他比之前还要强

壮，充满活力(funof

energy)

para.6..he'dmakeshort根据此句，续写

flightsfrommyhand,tomy第二段可描述：

shoulder,andthensettledonmy

他能够飞得更远

hair.

(makelonger

flights),时而在树枝

上跳跃(jumpedon

thebranch),时而落

在我的肩膀上(settle

onmyshoulder)o

四、下笔成文一一翻译下列句子

.衔接第一段

1.我们看着对方。但我知道是时候(itwastimeforsb.todo….)让他离开了。他

在我身边飞了一会，然后加入(join)。

2.我感到很伤心，但也很欣慰(relieved),因为他可以回到(returnto)自然了。

3.我们看着他飞向天空，消失在视野里。4.从那天起，我们都开始了自己的新

生活。

•衔接第二段

1.我很好奇。我走出去，然后发现了他。

2.他向我飞来，停在我手上，开心地叫着(chirp)。

3.我触摸他的羽毛(feathers),感受他的温暖(warmth)。我们陪伴(accompany)

彼此。

4.这是一次奇妙的经历。我会永远记住它。/它提醒着我我们之间的联系。

【参考表达】

第一段：1.Welookedateachother.ButIknewitwastimeforhimtoleave.He

flewbesidemeforawhileandthenjoinedthebirdflock.2.1feltsadbutrelieved

becausehecouldreturnedtonature.3,Wewatchedhimflyingupintotheskyand

disappearingoutofsight.4.Fromthatdayon,webeganournewlife,第二段：

1.Iwascurious.Iwentoutandfoundhim.

2.Heflewtome,stoppedonmyhand,andchirpedhappily.

3.Itouchedhisfeathers,andfelthiswarmth.Weaccompanieseachother.

4.Thiswasawonderfulexperience.Iwouldrememberit./Itremindedmeof

ourconnections.

五、范文

Thenonacleardaywhenhisflockreturned,RobinandItookhimouttothe

sameyardwhereIfoundhim.Westoodthere,ourheartsheavywiththebittersweet

moment.Iheldthebirdgentlyinmyhands,feelingthewarmthofhistinybody

againstmyskin.Withadeepbreath,Iraisedmyarm,andwithasoftpush,hetook

flight.Hecircledaroundusonce,twice,hiswingsstrongandconfident,before

joininghisflockinthevastsky.Wewatcheduntiltheydisappearedoverthehorizon,

amixofjoyandsadnessinoureyes.

Onemorningayearlater,whileIwaspreparingbreakfast,therewasasudden

soundofbirdschirpingintheyard.Isetdownthetoastandrushedouttoseea

sightthattookmybreathaway.Theskywasfilledwithbirds—mylittlefriendhad

returned,notalonebutwithaflockthatdancedandswirledinthemorninglight,

remindingmeofthecycleoflifeandthebeautyoffreedom.ThebirdIcaredfor

oncenowflieswithitsfamily,showingtheloveandcareitreceivedarenowpartof

nature,andthisisareminderthateveryactofkindnessleavesalastingimpacton

theworld.

六、补充语料

跳：jump/dance/hop/skip/bounce（蹦跳）