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浙江1月：人与自我（与队友互助完成任务）浙江6月：人与社会（参加社区服务）新高考读后续写语篇类型以记叙文为主，叙议结合为辅。语篇材料通常具有正能量且通俗易懂，故事线索逻辑性较强。新高考主题均选自人与自我、人与社会、人与自然。内容包括个人成长类、逆境脱困类；善举助人类、社会亲情友爱类、人与动物类、趣事回忆类等等。考查要点与应对策略‌高考英语读后续写是一种综合性较强的题型，‌既考查了考生的语言基础知识，‌又考查了其综合运用语言的能力、‌创造力和想象力。‌因此，‌考生需要在备考过程中注重多方面能力的提升和训练。‌高考英语读后续写作为一种新题型，‌其考查特点主要体现在以下几个方面：‌1.综合语言运用能力：‌读后续写要求考生在阅读理解的基础上，‌将所获取的信息进行整合，‌并通过写作表达出来。‌这既考查了考生的阅读理解能力，‌也考查了其语言表达能力，‌包括词汇、‌语法和句式的运用。‌2.创造性与想象力：‌读后续写通常提供一篇不完整的故事，‌要求考生根据已有情节进行合理想象，‌续写故事的高潮或结局。‌这要求考生具备一定的创造性和想象力，‌能够构思出既符合逻辑又新颖有趣的故事情节。‌3.逻辑性与连贯性：‌续写的内容需要与原文情境融洽，‌保持人物性格、‌故事情节的一致性，‌同时上下文之间要衔接自然、‌连贯。‌这要求考生具备较强的逻辑思维能力，‌能够准确把握原文的脉络和走向。‌4.文化意识与价值观：‌读后续写所提供的语篇材料一般是具有正能量且故事性较强的文章，‌主题往往涉及人与自我、‌人与社会、‌人与自然等。‌考生在续写过程中需要体现积极的世界观和价值观取向，‌这有助于培养其文化意识和正确的价值取向。‌5.评分标准与要求：‌读后续写的评分标准通常从内容、‌词汇、‌语法和语篇结构三个方面进行考虑，‌具体包括续写内容的质量、‌完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度；‌所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、‌恰当性和多样性；‌上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性等。‌同时，‌还会关注词数、‌拼写和标点符号等细节问题。‌‌为了做好读后续写题，‌考生需要在平时注重积累语料库，‌增强语篇分析能力，‌加强思维训练和自主创造能力的培养。‌同时，‌还需要多读范文，‌积累有效的语言素材，‌提升语言表达的质量。‌读后续写心理情感描写方式（一）▲如何“哭、笑、流泪、出汗”1.Christine'skissmadehimcrywithjoy.克里斯汀的吻让他高兴得哭了.2.Dantèsuttered/gaveacryofjoyandsurprise;neverhadafirstattemptbeencrownedwithmoreperfectsuccess.唐太斯又惊又喜地大叫了一声,想不到第一次尝试就取得了这样圆满的成功.3.Peoplearoundmethenbegantocryoutinfear/alarm.“Thetrainisonfire!”theycried.我周围的人开始惊恐地喊道:“火车着火了！”4.Whenhisfavoriteduckdied,mysoncriedhiseyesout.当我儿子心爱的鸭子死了时,他十分伤心地哭个不停.5.Ithrewmyselffacedownonthebedandcriedmyselftosleep.我扑倒在床上,一直哭到睡着.6.Shethrewherselfontobedandcriedintoherpillow.她倒在床上,抱着枕头痛哭起来.7.You'dbetterthinktwicebecausetherearealotmanypeopletryingtogetthatjob,andthereisnousetocryoverthespilled/spiltmilk.很多人都想争取这个职位,你还是再考虑一下吧,这世上可没后悔药吃.8.IcouldhaveweptthinkingwhatI'dmissed.想到所失去的东西我真想痛哭一场.9.Iweepforallthewastedmoments.我为一切浪费的时间哭泣.10.Youthisnottimeforustoweepwithgriefforthetediousandlongtermtomakeyouthsunny.青春没有时间让我们为繁琐而长久地悲泣,要让青春充满阳光.11.Sheshutherselfinherbedroomsobbingherheartout.她把自己关在卧室里,哭得死去活来.12.Shesobbedoutthestoryofherson'sviolentdeath.她哭着诉说儿子横死的经过.13.Don'tsniffathiseffort.He'smadegreatprogress.不要对他的努力嗤之以鼻,他已经取得了很大的进步.14.Ibrokethenewstoherandsheburstintotears.我把消息告诉了她,结果她突然大哭了起来.15.Scarcelyhadsheheardthesadstorywhensheburstoutcrying.她一听到这悲伤的消息,就失声痛哭.16.Despitehisdisappointment,hewasabletomanageaweaksmile.尽管他很失望,可还是强颜欢笑.17.Thenewsmadeherheartsink,butshestillmanagedtoforceasmile.听到这个消息,她心里一沉,但还是勉强挤出一点微笑.18.Thoughthecolourhadlefthischeeks,hestillmanagedtoforceasmiletohislips.虽然脸色转成青白,他的嘴唇边还勉强浮出苦笑来.19.WhenIofferedahand,shelookedatmewithincredibility,butthenherfacebrokeintoadelightedsmile.当我伸出手时,她用难以置信的眼神看着我,但随后她的脸上露出了愉快的微笑.20.Thelongclimbmadeussweat.我们攀登了很长距离,已大汗淋漓了.21.Theheatmakesmesweatlikeapig.热得我满头大汗.22.Shestooduptowipethesweatoffherface.她站起来擦擦脸上的汗珠.23.ItwasmyfirstinterviewandIwassweatingbuckets.那是我第一次面试,我紧张得大汗淋漓.24.Bytheendofthematch,thesweatwaspouringoffhim.到比赛结束时,他已经大汗淋漓.25.Youcanreallyworkupasweatdoinghousework.做家务真的会让人大汗淋漓.▲因意外而目瞪口呆/呆若木鸡vi./vt.vi./vt.1.Ifrozewithterrorasthedoorslowlyopened.门慢慢开启时我吓呆了.2.Katherinewasfrozeninhorror.凯瑟琳被吓呆了.3.Oneboy,agedabout11,looksfrozenwithfright.一个大约11岁的男孩吓得一动不动.4.Shestaredathim,frozenwith/inshock.她惊呆了,直瞪着他.5.Theyallstoodtherestaring,asiffrozentothespot.他们都站在那儿发愣,就像被冻在那里似的.stiffenvi.1.Adastiffenedatthesoundofhisvoice.埃达听到他的声音吓得人都僵住了.2.Shestiffenedwithfear.她吓呆了.3.Shestoodtherestiffeningwithfear.她吓得站在那里僵住了.4.InoticedhimstiffenwhenImentionedmoney.当我提到钱时,我注意到他变得不自然.rootvt.1.Fear/Embarrassmentrootedhimtothespot.Hewasrootedtothespotbyfear/embarrassment.他吓得／尴尬地呆若木鸡.2.Wejuststoppedthere,(asif)rootedtothespot.我们一下子就停在了那里,呆若木鸡.3.Shewasrootedtoherchair.她呆坐在椅子上一动不动.4.Withgreatsorrowandregret,Ijustsatthererootedinmychair,prayingtoGodformyunforgivableguilt.又伤心又后悔,我瘫倒在椅子上,为了我不可饶恕的罪行向上帝祈祷.5.Istillremembertheshockthatrootedmeflatagainstthewall.我仍然记得当时我惊呆了,靠在墙上,一动不动.frighten/scarethelifeoutofsb.v.1.Fairgroundridesareintendedtofrightenthelifeoutofyou.露天游乐场的飞车就是想把你吓丢了魂儿.2.Hegavealoudshoutandscaredthelifeoutofthethief.他一声断喝,吓坏了小偷.sb'sjawdropped/fell/sagged1.MyjawdroppedwhenIsawhowmuchthemealhadcost.看到那顿饭要花这么多钱,我大吃一惊.2.Tominsistedonpayingforthemeal,buthisjawdroppedwhenhesawthebill.汤姆坚持要付这顿饭钱,可拿到帐单一看,竟张着大嘴惊呆了.3.Thisactuallymademyjawdrop.IwouldhavethoughtteenagerswouldbethedominatingagedemographiconasocialsitelikeFacebook.这个真有点让人大跌眼镜了,我原以为在脸书这样的社交网站里,青少年应该是主流群体.4.Thescenemademyjawdrop.那情景使我目瞪口呆.▲表达“情感态度”1.Hewasnotaskedtoleavehewentvoluntarily.(自愿地)2.Wehavereluctantlyagreedtolethimgo.(不情愿地)3.Heturnedleftautomaticallywithoutthinking.(不假思索地)4.Afterawhilewenaturallystartedtalkingaboutthechildren.(自然而然地)5.Shehadunknowinglybrokentherules.(无意中)6.Sheunthinkinglyblamedusforwhatwehaddone.(轻率地;不假思索)7.Hedriftedaimlesslyfromonejobtoanother.(漫无目的地)8.Sheopenedthebookrandomlyandstartedreading.(随意地)9.“Whatdidhesayaboutme?”sheaskedascasuallyasshecould.(不在乎地)10.Iaccidentallybrokeaglass.(非故意地)11.Theycoincidentallywrotesimilarletterstotheclub.(巧合地)12.Hedroppedinonmequiteunexpectedly.(出乎预料地)13.Shelookedcautiouslyaroundandthenwalkedawayfromthehouse.(小心谨慎地)14.Theword“remend"wasusedadvisedly.(深思熟虑地)15.Hegazedreflectivelyathispanion.(若有所思地)16.Weeyedeachotherthoughtfully.(若有所思地;体贴地)17.Shehasbeendeliberatelyignoringhimallday.(故意地)18.Consciouslyorunconsciously,youmadeachoice.(无意地)19.Hesatdown,purposelyavoidinghergaze.(有意地)20.Shewouldneverintentionallyhurtanyone.(故意地)21.Therefore,Imadeplansandgoalsforstudents,coachingdesignedly.(故意地;有计划地)22.Wecamespeciallytoseeyou,(特意地)23.Teachersunreservedlypassedtheirknowledgeontothestudents.(毫无保留地)24.Iwilllovemychildrenunconditionally.(无条件地)25.Onlythosewhoworkselflesslyareabletogaintime.(无私地)26.Wesincerelyhopethatyouwillsoonberestoredtohealth.(衷心地)27.Hiswifestuckfaithfullytohimthroughthickandthin.(忠实地)28.OnedaywhenIwaslisteningdevotedly,thesoundsuddenlystopped.(一心一意地;忠诚地)29.Wesatwaitingimpatientlyforthemovietostart.(焦急地)30.Thegirlcastdownhereyesmodestlywhenshewaspraised.(谦虚地)31.Heshookhisheadtiredly.(厌倦地)32.Thinkingpositivelyisonewayofdealingwithstress.(乐观地)33.Thechildrenwereplayingnoisilyupstairs.(吵闹地;嘈杂地)34.Shewasrushingaroundmadlytryingtoputoutthefire.(发狂地;无法控制地)35.“Ididn'tmeantoupsetyou,”hesaidmildly.(温和地)36.Shespokekindlytothem.(体贴地;友好地)37.Atthisthebossbecamereallyfuriousandscoldedhimseverely.(严厉地)38.Hestoodupsoundlesslyandspeechlesslyandglidedacrossthehallway.(无声无语地)39.Theplaywaswarmlyreceivedbythecritics.(热烈地)40.Thehelplessprincethencamebacktohiscountryresentfully.(悻悻地;充满愤恨地)41.Hehasalwaystreatedmeveryfairly.(公平地)42.Katespokerealisticallyaboutthetaskahead.(切合实际地)43.Iamreallyandtrulyinlovethistime.(确确实实地)44.Hepushedherroughlyoutoftheway.(粗暴地)45.Sheclosedthedoorsoftlybehindher.(轻轻地;柔和地)一、技巧总结1.落实“细微处”描写在描写人物心理活动时,一定要突出细节,所有的感情都体现在“细微处”,所以尽量不用笼统的词,如smile,cry等,而用相关的细节性词汇或词组,如:①Lilysmiledhappily.②Lilyworeashiningsmileonherface.分析:①句中“smiled”是一个笼统的描述微笑的词汇,而②句中使用了woreashiningsmile,用词组的形式更加突出细节,展示了细微和精致的“微笑”。2.体现“多样性”结构在进行人物心理描写时,尽量避免平铺直叙,可以多采用如非谓语动词的形式,作为谓语动作的伴随状态,从而使得描写到位,并体现语法结构的多样性。如:①Hereyeswerefilledwithtears,andsheofferedhersincerethankstotheman.②Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedhersincerethankstotheman.分析:①句在描写心理活动“哭泣”时,用到了Hereyeswerefilledwithtears。而②句则把这句改成了独立主格结构,运用了Tearsfillinghereyes,更能显示出描写的细致,同时也体现了句式的多样化,展示了高超的语言运用能力。3.展示“丰富化”修辞除了选择细致的心理描写词汇和多样化的句式表达外,提升语言层次的另外一种方式是多使用修辞方法,如:①Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.②IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.分析:①句中,把“微笑”比喻成“像钻石一样闪闪发光”;而②句中,把“悲伤”比喻成“漂浮在悲伤的海洋里”,展示了用修辞来体现细节描写的丰富。二、写作示例▲用表“高兴”的表达补全下面各句①得知孩子们的主意，Mrs.Meredith非常高兴，她笑得很灿烂。(用形容词＋面部表情)Learningthechildren'sidea,Mrs.Meredithwasso.②孩子们开始高兴地准备爆米花。(用副词)③他们带着一篮子爆米花兴高采烈地前往伯纳德家告诉他这个好计划。(用副词)④听到他们的话，伯纳德高兴地几乎跳了起来，热泪盈眶。(用形容词＋身体语言＋面部表情)Hearingwhattheysaid,Bernardwas.(简单句)→Hearingwhattheysaid,Bernardwas.(with复合结构)⑤看到那篮子爆米花他的父母也欣喜若狂。(用固定短语)Atthesightofthebasketofpopcorn,.⑥使他非常高兴的是，爆米花很好吃，很快就卖光了。(介词短语),thepopcornwassotastythatitsoonsoldout.2.将以上各句衔接成短文并背诵成文，注意使用合适的过渡衔接词汇____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、短文填空Myfirstdayatseniorhigh1.____________________________1.________________________(picture)itoverandoveragaininmymind.Irushedtotheschoolinmy2.____________________________(eager)toknowaboutit.ThecampuswasstillquietwhenIarrived,soIdecided3.____________________________(explore)abit.Iwaslookingatthephotosonthenoticeboard4.____________________________Iheardavoicebehindme.5.____________________________(turn)around,Isawawhitehairedman.WhenmyEnglishteachersteppedintotheclassroom,Iwas6.____________________________(surprise)toseethesamemanIhadmetearlier.Heaskedustointroduce7.____________________________(we)totheclassonebyone.Whenintroducingmyself,Ibreathed8.____________________________(deep),withbutterfliesinmystomach.AfterIfinishedtheintroduction,everyonestartedlaughingbecauseIsharedthesamename9.____________________________myteacher.

MrMenggaveussomeadviceandencouragedustokeepcalmandmake10.____________________________mostofourtimeatseniorhigh.Iguessthiswasagoodbeginningofmynewschoollife.二、读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇Linda,ahighschoolgirl,wasfeelingdepressedaftershehadfailedhermidtermexams.Shedidn’tanswerherteachers’questionsactivelyinclasslikesheusedto.Instead,shebegantolowerherheadandgotabsentmindedeasily.Herfriendsandclassmateswereworriedabouther,butshedidn’tfeelliketalkingaboutitwiththem.MrsGreen,herEnglishteacher,noticedherchangesanddecidedtodosomethingbeforeitgotworse.Oneday,MrsGreenenteredtheclassroomandaskedherstudentstoprepareforasurprisetest.Theywaitedanxiouslyattheirdesksforthetesttobegin.MrsGreenhandedoutthequestionpapers,withthetextfacingdownasusual.Aftershehandedthemallout,sheaskedherstudentstoturnthepageandbegin.Toeveryone’ssurprise,therewerenoquestions,justablackdot(点)inthecenterofthepage.MrsGreen,seeingtheexpressiononeveryone’sface,toldthemthefollowing:“Iwantyoutowritewhatyouseethere.”Thestudents,confused,gotstartedonthetask.Attheendoftheclass,MrsGreencollectedalltheanswerpapersandstartedreadingthemaloudinfrontofallthestudents.JustasMrsGreenhadexpected,withnoexception,allofthemdescribedtheblackdot,tryingtoexplainitspositioninthemiddleofthesheet,etc.MrsGreenthenpickedoutLinda’spaperandadded,“Linda,Ilikeyouridea.Wouldyoupleasefollowmetotheofficeandtalkaboutit?”“Er...Yes,madam!”Lindawaspuzzledbecauseshethoughtherideawasnobetterthananyoneelse’s.Likeothers,shealsodescribedtheblackdotonlyandignoredthewhitepartofthepaper.注意:续写词数应为150个左右。Feelingnervous,LindawentintoMrsGreen’soffice.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“MrsGreenisright.Ishouldfocusmoreonthewhitepartofthepaper!”Lindagotrefreshed.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【写作示例】Step1提取信息故事发展线索:Linda期中考试没有考好,心情低落→MrsGreen想帮助她→一天,MrsGreen让学生进行一次特别的测试,试卷上只有一个黑点→学生都描述那个黑点,包括Linda在内→MrsGreen说她喜欢Linda的想法→Linda感到困惑Step2合理推测根据续写第一段首句设问:(1)WhatwouldMrsGreensaytoLindaintheoffice?(2)HowwouldLindareact?根据续写第二段首句设问:(1)WhatwouldbeLinda’sreflection?(2)WhatwouldLindadecidetodoafterthetalk?推测:MrsGreen会告诉Linda不要注意那个黑点,要注意范围更大的纸上的白区。这个黑点就像是一次失败,不要让失败使我们忽视生活中其他更多的美好的事情。Linda听了老师的话以后会做出改变——变得乐观、豁达。最后根据续写第二段的首句进行主旨升华。Step3衔接成篇________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

(2023·新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplaywhereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswereing.Mystorywouldestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobe