Unit3FamilyMattersWriting课件-高一英语外研版

B1U3FamilymattersPeriod6WritingWriting

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memoryfamilymattersWhatfamilymemorieshaveyougot?warmingupHaveyoueverfeltthattherearealotofthingsinlifethatyoujustbottledupwithinyourself?Wanttokeepyourdailymemoriessafesomewherebutnotsurewhattodo?Alwayswantedtotalktosomeoneorasecretcompanionaboutyourlifebutyouaretooshytodoso?

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journalisaplacewhereyoucanbehonestwithyourselfandputdownyourthoughtsandthingsthathappenedaroundyou.Whenandwhere,whodidwhatforwhatpurpose?Readthejournalentryandanswerthequestions.ReadforthemainideaTenyearsago,theauthorcookedthescrambledeggs（炒鸡蛋）

inthekitchenathomeforhermothertocelebrateherbirthday!timelinesbasicelementswhowhenwherewhatwhyTimeTenseReadfortheelementsWorkingroups,discussthequestions.motheranddaughteratthemother’sbirthdaytenyearsagoTheauthorwantedtosurprisehermotherwithhome-madescrambledeggsonhermother’sbirthday.Unluckily,theeggswereburnt,buttheyendeduplaughingaboutitandeatingthemallanyway.athomeBecauseitshowsthelovebetweentheauthorandhermother.Readfortheplot.Para1:Thebigdayeventuallycame,andIrushedintothekitchenearlyineagernesstosurprisemymother.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Everythingwentsmoothly(平稳地).

Unexpectedly,Ididn’trealizemymumhadgazedatmeleaningagainst(斜靠在)thedoor.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Continuationwriting1.衔接句1：冲去厨房接下来做什么？——动作描写2.心情如何？——情绪描写3.衔接句2：如何体现进展顺利？——成品(样子，香味，形状等描写)1.衔接句3：接下来母亲会做什么或说什么？——动作+语言2.show,nottell——能用动作描写就减少语言描写(语言描写要加上情感支撑)3.衔接句4：圆满结局+主题升华Familylovemakeslifehappy,andweshouldtreasureitandshowgratitudetoourfamilymembers.Howtomakeyourdescriptionvivid（生动的）?Actiondescription动作描写openthefridge打开冰箱fetchthefood取食物turnonthestove扭开炉灶pour…into…把…倒入…addthescallionto..把葱花加到…stirtheeggs搅打鸡蛋scenttheair使空气弥漫香味动作链pan平底锅salt盐apron围裙plate盘子dish碟子bowl碗cupboard碗橱参考名词Howtomakeyourdescriptionvivid（生动的）?Emotionaldescription情绪描写Joywelledupinsideher.她心中涌起喜悦。Shegavemeawarmhugwithasmileofhappinessonherface.她给我一个温暖的拥抱，脸上洋溢着幸福的笑容。Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom.笑声在房间里萦绕。Shelaughedwithdelightasthebirthdaygiftwascarriedin.她看到生日礼物拿进来时开心的笑。Shesaiditwasthebestbreakfastshehadeverhad.她说这是她吃过的最好的早餐

Thebigdayeventuallycame,andIrushedintothekitchenearlyineagernesstosurprisemymother.

Ifirstopenedthefridgeandfetchedtwoeggsandsomescallion.Next,Ibroketheeggsinabowlandcutupthescallion.AndthenImixedthemwithsomeoilandsaltandstirredthemtogetherhard.Afterwards,Iturnedonthe

stoveandputthepanonit.Whenthepangothot,Ipouredsomeoilintoit,andwhentheoilboiledIputthemixtureintoitandscrambledtheeggs.Afterawhile,itscentedthemorningair.

Lookingatthescrambledeggsinthepan,myheartwasfilledwithjoyandpride.

衔接句1：冲去厨房接下来做什么？衔接句2：如何体现一切进展顺利？——成品(样子，香味，形状等描写)

Everythingwentsmoothly.

Unexpectedly,Ididn’trealizemymumhadgazedatmeleaningagainstthedoor.

“Whatareyoudoinghere,

mydear?“sheaskedsoftly.Iputthescrambledeggsonaplate,showedittoherandsaid,“Happybirthday,mydearmother!Hopeyouwillenjoythebreakfastmadeoflove!Thistime,

thescrambledeggsarenotburnt!”.Hearingmywords,shegavemeawarmhugwithasmileofhappinessonherface.

Iwokefatherupandwesangabirthdaysongformymotherwhilehavingbreakfast.Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom

andshesaiditwasthebestbreakfastshehadeverhad.Familylovemakeslifehappy,andweshouldtreasureitandshowgratitudetoourfamilymembers.衔接句4：Happyending欢声笑语。升华句：家人的爱，珍惜感恩。动作公式1：动作，动作and动作动作公式2：V-ing...,主语+谓语注意问题：1.想好四个衔接句。第一句:动作描写——接下来要做的事第二句:成品描述(可以是样子，香气，形状等)第三句:母亲动作或者语言描写升华句:开心场景或提升主题2.减少对话描写。能用动作就不要用对话。show,nottell3.不要增加分段。4.每段比重平均分配。5.注意把握时间。原则上30分钟包括读-思-写的过程。6.有意识地注意书写。7.时态：谓语动词+ed；注意不规则动词的变形。8.对话之后要配上情感或动作。

wasinthememory?

didthefamilymemoryhappen?

didthefamilymemorytakeplace?

happened?(Whatdidyouseeanddo?)

isitspecialormemorable?How

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writeaspecialmemory?Part1.byintroducingthereasonofwritingPart2.introdution(when,who,what,where）firstmajoreventsecondpartofthestorythirdpartofthestoryPart3.bydescribingspecialtyofthememoryversion2.ElementsofafamilymemoryWhoWhenWhereWhatWhyWriteastoryWhyisitspecialormemorable?ClimaxBeginningBuild-upEndingWhatbroughtbacktheauthor’smemory?BydescribingspecialtyofthememoryWhenandwhereandwhathappened?BydescribingthesenceWhathappenedthen?Howwasthemattersolved?ByintroducingthereasonofwritingBypresenting

themoralFrameofajournalentry(thethingwecansee)Para._____Para._____Para._____123Para._____4Readfortheplot.

WeaveafamilymemoryaccordingtopicturesayellowshirtOntheladder,Iwasill.Mumcarriedmeupstairs,buttheshirttore.Mumhangeditinhercloset.Loveisindeedamagicalpower.短篇故事首段常用句式:Iwasdoing...whenIfoundanoldphoto.Thelovelymemorycamefloodingback.Howtimeflies!Icouldn'twaittosharethemwithyou.短篇故事中段常用句式:Itwasaspecialday...yearsago.Ithappened...yearsago.Idecidedto...Iwasaboutto...when...WhenI...,myeyeswatered.短篇故事尾段常用句式:Loveisindeedamagicalingredient.IhopeIwillmake/do...for...Usefulexpressions

Thereisaredshirtinmycloset.Thisisnotanordinaryshirt.EverytimeIseeit,Ican’thelpthinkingofthatunforgettablethinginmylife.

WhenIwasnineyearsold,onenight,Isuddenlycaughtahighfever,andmyfatherwasoutonabusinesstrip.Inahurry,mymothertookmetoseethedoctor.Afterthetreatment,itwasmorethan2o’clockinthemorningthenextday.WhenIgothome,theelevatorstoppedandmymotherdeci