读后续写 过度热心帮朋友干涉他人事务 讲义-大联考高三上学期期末检测英语试卷

读后续写过度热心帮朋友，干涉他人事务讲义-大联考高三上学期期末检测英语试卷2024-2025学年（上）高三年级期末检测

第二节(满分25分)

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Beinghelpfulisaverygoodquality,butsometimesbeingoverlyenthusiasticcanalsocausetroubletoothers.

Itwasthenightbeforethesummerbreak,anditwasrainingcatsanddogs,butIwasn’tbotheredbecauseJustin,Wendy,Crystal,KevinandIweretextingeachotherabouttheupcomingtriptoNiagaraFalls.Everybodywassoengagedinbrainstormingideasaboutwhattobringalong.Suddenly,Justincameupwithabrilliantidea.Hesuggestedthatweshouldassignrolestoeachofussothatwecouldminimizeeveryone’sworkload.Iwasassignedthebabysitter’srolebecauseIwasthemostcarefulpersonamongus.

Whenthesunwasrightaboveourheads,wedepartedforourdestination.Onourway,Iservedasthebabysitter.Icollectedhundredsofjunkfoodwrapsandguidedusintoeverysinglereststationwhenneeded.AsWendyandIwereliningupforthewashroom,Inoticedhowalittlegirlalwaysgotpushedoutoftheline,soIletherstandinfrontofme.Whenweallgotbacktothecar,Wendypraisedmeasakindandresponsiblemember,whichmademefeelveryproudofmyself.Iwashappy.Ontheway,IsawCrystalholdingsomethingthatlookedlikeasunhat.JustinaskedCrystalwhatitwas,butbecauseIwastooexcited,Ididn’tcatchCrystal’sanswerclearly.Itseemedthatshementionedhermother.

Whenwearrivedatourhotel,itwasalreadysixintheevening.Sincenoonewashungry,wedecidedtorestandgetreadyfornextday’sadventure.However,I,asanexception,wastooexcited,thinkingaboutspendingthenextfewdays.Icouldn’tclosemyeyes.IdecidedtogotoCrystal’sroomsinceshewasplayingsomemusicthere.Crystalwasweaving(编织)thethingthatIsawinthecar.AsIwaswatchingherweave,timepassedbylikeanarrow,andCrystalunintentionallyfellasleepbeforeshefinishedhersunhat.

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea.

Paragraph2:InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning.

第二节(满分25分)

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Beinghelpfulisaverygoodquality,butsometimesbeingoverlyenthusiastic(非谓语动词短语做主语)canalsocausetroubletoothers.

Itwasthenightbeforethesummerbreak,anditwasrainingcatsanddogs,butIwasn’tbotheredbecauseJustin,Wendy,Crystal,KevinandIweretextingeachotherabouttheupcomingtriptoNiagaraFalls.Everybodywassoengagedinbrainstormingideasaboutwhattobringalong(宾从).Suddenly,Justincameupwithabrilliantidea.Hesuggestedthatweshouldassignrolestoeachofus(宾从)sothatwecouldminimizeeveryone’sworkload(目的状从).Iwasassignedthebabysitter’srolebecauseIwasthemostcarefulpersonamongus(状从).

Whenthesunwasrightaboveourheads,wedepartedforourdestination.Onourway,Iservedasthebabysitter.Icollectedhundredsofjunkfoodwrapsandguidedusintoeverysinglereststationwhenneeded(状从省略形式).AsWendyandIwereliningupforthewashroom(状从),Inoticedhowalittlegirlalwaysgotpushedoutoftheline(宾从),soIletherstandinfrontofme.Whenweallgotbacktothecar(状从),Wendypraisedmeasakindandresponsiblemember,whichmademefeelveryproudofmyself(定从).Iwashappy.Ontheway,IsawCrystalholdingsomethingthatlookedlikeasunhat(定从).JustinaskedCrystalwhatitwas(宾从),butbecauseIwastooexcited(状从),Ididn’tcatchCrystal’sanswerclearly.Itseemedthatshementionedhermother(宾从).

Whenwearrivedatourhotel(状从),itwasalreadysixintheevening.Sincenoonewashungry,wedecidedtorestandgetreadyfornextday’sadventure.However,I,asanexception,wastooexcited,thinkingaboutspendingthenextfewdays(非谓语动词做伴随动作).Icouldn’tclosemyeyes.IdecidedtogotoCrystal’sroomsinceshewasplayingsomemusicthere(状从).Crystalwasweaving(编织)thethingthatIsawinthecar(定从).AsIwaswatchingherweave(状从),timepassedbylikeanarrow,andCrystalunintentionallyfellasleepbeforeshefinishedhersunhat.

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea.

Paragraph2:InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning.

1.读后续写的分析

分类及思路构思

分析角度内容原文反应句

读后续写类型该篇文章属于“行动转折型"读后续写。通过文章的开头，我们看到主人公的过度热情和对任务的过分投入，而续写部分应表现主人公如何在行为中做出自我反思与调整。“IdecidedtogotoCrystal’sroomsinceshewasplayingsomemusicthere.”

思路构思主人公对自己所做的事情过于兴奋，续写需要通过事件的转折来凸显情感的变化和人物的成长。首先，需说明主人公在看到Crystal睡着后产生的想法，并行动化这个思路；然后，续写应该表达主人公因过度热情导致的误解及相应的反思。“SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea."

布局与框架1.引入事件：描述主人公看到Crystal睡着后的反应及决定行动的过程；

2.事件发展：突出主人公的过度热心与行为引发的后果；

3.反思与情感转折：主人公从自己过于热心的行为中感受到的反思，情感从自豪转为内疚。“InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning.”

承接原文事项续写要承接原文中主人公为人负责、过于兴奋、并带有一些幼稚行为的特点。续写时要保持人物性格的一致性，同时注意叙事节奏上的自然过渡。“Iwashappy.Ontheway,IsawCrystalholdingsomethingthatlookedlikeasunhat."

整体注意事项1.语言风格需与原文一致；

2.留意人物内心的变化过程，确保故事的情感波动自然流畅；

3.注意叙述逻辑，事件发展应顺畅而不突兀。“Iwasassignedthebabysitter’srolebecauseIwasthemostcarefulpersonamongus.”

巧妙设计内容在续写过程中，通过设置主人公因过度热心而导致的不良后果来展示其成长与转变。可以加入与Crystal的互动，突出误会及随后的情感转折。“Inoticedhowalittlegirlalwaysgotpushedoutoftheline,soIletherstandinfrontofme."

续写的StoryMountain模式

引入（Introduction）:主人公在看到Crystal睡着后产生的想法，决定帮助她完成未完成的事情（“SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea.”）。

发展（RisingAction）:主人公的行动推进，继续展现过度热情的行为，可能会导致意外情况发生（例如，未能完成Crystal的作品，导致主人公错失机会）。

高潮（Climax）:主人公意识到自己的行为过于冲动，产生了后悔情绪。情感转折点来临，主人公反思自己的行为。

结局（FallingAction&Resolution）:主人公在第二天早晨被Crystal吵醒，意识到自己可能过度干预了别人事务，情感逐渐平复，最终得到教训。

2.分析角度及内容表格

分析角度内容原文反应句

人物刻画通过主人公过度热心的行为来刻画其责任感与幼稚，特别是在自己与Crystal的互动中表现出来。"Iwasassignedthebabysitter’srolebecauseIwasthemostcarefulpersonamongus."

情感层次初时主人公因为过度热情获得认同，但随后由于误会产生反思，情感由兴奋转为内疚。“Iwashappy.Ontheway,IsawCrystalholdingsomethingthatlookedlikeasunhat."

关键情节点主人公决定去Crystal的房间，看到她睡着并未完成工作，这一情节推动故事进入转折。“IdecidedtogotoCrystal’sroomsinceshewasplayingsomemusicthere.”

语言特色文章中使用了直白的叙述风格，容易理解。情感词汇如“proud,"“happy”明确表达主人公的内心世界。“Wendypraisedmeasakindandresponsiblemember,whichmademefeelveryproudofmyself."

关键词分析关键词如“babysitter,”“excited,"“responsible”反映了人物的性格和情感状态。“Iwastooexcitedthinkingaboutspendingthenextfewdays."

心理描写通过反复的内心独白和对自己行为的反思，突出了人物的成长过程。"Iwashappy."

动作描写描述了主人公收集垃圾、引导休息站等动作，显示其积极而负责的一面。“Icollectedhundredsofjunkfoodwrapsandguidedusintoeverysinglereststationwhenneeded.”

环境描写环境通过描述旅行、饭店等设置烘托了情感的变化。“Whenwearrivedatourhotel,itwasalreadysixintheevening."

隐含主题过度热心可能会带来麻烦，反映了在关心他人的同时也要顾及他人的感受。“Beinghelpfulisaverygoodquality,butsometimesbeingoverlyenthusiasticcanalsocausetroubletoothers.”

情感转折从兴奋与自豪转向内疚和反思。主人公从过度的热心行为中逐渐意识到自己过于干涉他人的事务。“InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning."

空间转换从车内到旅馆，再到Crystal的房间，空间的转换加强了故事的节奏感。“IdecidedtogotoCrystal’sroomsinceshewasplayingsomemusicthere.”

时间过渡时间从傍晚的休息时刻过渡到第二天早晨，推动了情节发展。“SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea."

3.情境下动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句

动作描写(8个)

Shemovedswiftlyacrosstheroom,herfootstepsbarelyaudible.

Hegrabbedthekeysanddashedoutofthedoorwithoutasecondthought.

Icautiouslypickedupthefragilevase,makingsurenottodropit.

Thecarscreechedtoahaltasweapproachedtheintersection.

Shegentlyplacedtheletteronthedesk,herhandstrembling.

Ihurriedlypackedmythings,eagertoleavebeforeanyonearrived.

Heturnedtheknobandpushedthedooropen,revealingadarkroominside.

Shewalkedovertothewindow,gazingoutintotherainynight.

心理描写(8个)

AsenseofuneasewashedovermeasIsteppedintotheunfamiliarroom.

Icouldn’thelpbutfeelasurgeofpridewhenIsawthefinishedproject.

DoubtcreptintomymindasIwonderedifIhadmadetherightdecision.

AwaveofregrethitmewhenIrealizedwhatIhadjustsaid.

IwasfilledwithexcitementasIthoughtabouttheupcomingtrip.

FeargrippedmyheartwhenIheardthestrangenoisefromtheotherroom.

TherealizationthatIhadbeenwrongstruckmelikeaboltoflightning.

AsenseofcalmwashedovermeasIsatdowntoreflectonmyday.

环境描写(8个)

Theroomwasdimlylit,withshadowsdancingonthewalls.

Thewindhowledthroughthetrees,makingtheleavesrustleinthenightair.

Thebustlingstreetwasfilledwiththesoundofhonkingcarsandchatteringpedestrians.

Theskywasadeepshadeofblue,fadingintoasoftpinkasthesunset.

Thesmelloffreshcoffeefilledtheairasweenteredthecafé.

ThecoldairstungmyfaceasIsteppedoutsideintothebriskmorning.

Thesoftglowofthestreetlampsilluminatedtheemptysidewalk.

Thewavescrashedagainsttheshore,thesoundechoinginthequietnight.

4.高中语法现象分析

常见的地道搭配现象与语法

语法现象常见搭配生词短语词义词性近义词反义词例句

动词短语"takepartin""takeover"参加动词短语joinleave“Shetookpartinthecompetition.”

连词搭配"aswellas""notonly…butalso"以及连词alongwithbutnot“Shelikestennisaswellasswimming."

形容词搭配"verycareful""extremelyexcited"小心，兴奋形容词cautiousreckless“Iwasverycarefulwhenhandlingtheglass.”

副词搭配"quitesure""soexcited"确定，兴奋副词absolutelyuncertain“Iwasquitesureaboutmydecision."

PossibleVersions

Paragraph1:SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea.Icouldn’tletherhardworkgotowaste,soIquietlypickeduptheunfinishedsunhatandstartedweavingitmyself.AsIworked(状从),Ifeltasurgeofpride,thinkingthatIwasbeinghelpful(宾从).However,myexcitementsoonturnedintoanxietywhenIrealizedIhadnoidea(状从)howtofinishthedelicatedesign(同位从).Itriedmybest,butthemoreIworked,themorefrustratedIbecame.Thesunhatdidn'tlookanythinglikethebeautifulpieceCrystalhadbeenweaving(定从).MyhandstrembledasIthoughtaboutwhatshemightsaywhenshewokeup(状从+宾从).WouldshebeupsetWouldsheevennoticeDespitetheseworries,Icontinued,hopingthatmyeffortwouldsomehowmakeupfortheinterruption(宾从).

Paragraph2:InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning."Whatdidyoudotomysunhat"sheasked,hervoicegroggy(adj.柔弱无力，摇摇晃晃).IfeltawaveofembarrassmentfloodovermeasIrealizedmyattempttohelphadgonehorriblywrong(状从)."Itriedtofinishitforyou,"Imumbled.Crystalsmiled,thoughitwasclearthatthehatlookedfarfromperfect(状从)."Well,Iappreciateyoureffort,butnexttime,pleasejustletmedoit."Inodded,feelingashamedbutalsorelievedthatshewasn'tangry(宾从).Theexperiencetaughtmeavaluablelessonaboutpatienceandtheimportanceofnotoversteppingboundaries.Ilearnedthatsometimes,thebestwaytohelpisbysteppingbackandlettingothersdowhattheydobest(宾从).

语法加分点分析:

倒装句:

“Suddenlycameupwithanidea”–强调了突如其来的灵感。

同义词/替换:“cameupwith"→“thoughtof”,“suddenly"→“allofasudden”

复杂句：

“Icouldn’tletherhardworkgotowaste,soIquietlypickeduptheunfinishedsunhat..."

搭配:“gotowaste”–浪费；“pickedup"–捡起；“unfinished”–未完成的；

替换词:“let"→“allow”,“quietly"→“softly”

条件句：

“Wouldshebeupset"–假设语气，表现担忧。

同义词:“upset”→“disappointed,"“angry”

情感描写：

词汇:"anxiety,""pride,""frustrated,""embarrassment,""ashamed,"“relieved"

例句:“Ifeltasurgeofpride”(通过“surge"来强调情感的强烈变化)

动作描写：

词汇:"trembled,""triedmybest,""continued,""pickedup,""finished"

例句:“Myhandstrembled”(表现动作的细节，通过“trembled"突出情感的内心冲突)

Version2：

Paragraph1:SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea.Insteadofjustwaitingaroundforthemorning,Idecidedtomakethemostofthequiettime.Iwalkedovertoherside,carefullyavoidingmakinganynoise(非谓语动词做伴随动作),andpickedupthehalf-finishedsunhat.AsIbegantoweave(状从),Ifeltasenseofpurpose.Foramoment,everythingseemedtoslowdown.Iwasn’tsurewhetherCrystalwouldappreciatemygesture(宾从),butthemoreIworked,themoreconfidentIbecame.EachtimeIplacedtheyarn(n.纱线),Iimaginedhowproudshewouldbe(宾从)whenshesawthefinishedproduct(状从).Myhandsmovedfaster,fueledbytheexcitementofsurprisingherwithsomethingmeaningful(非谓语动词做原因状语).ButasIreachedthefinalstages(状从),IrealizedthatIhadnoideahowtocompleteitproperly(宾从+宾从).Despitemybestefforts,thehatstilllookedincomplete.

Paragraph2:InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning.“Whathappenedtomyhat”sheasked,lookingconfused(非谓语动词做伴随动作).Istammered,“Itriedtohelpfinishitforyou."Shelookedatthehat,andherexpressionsoftened.“It’snotwhatIexpected(表从),butIcantellyoureallytried.Thanksfortheeffort.”Ifeltamixtureofguiltandpride.Eventhoughtheresultwasn’tperfect(状从),Iknewthatmyintentionhadbeentohelp(宾从).Crystal,withherusualkindness,assuredmethatshewasn’tupset(宾从).“Nexttime,though,justaskifyou’reunsure(宾从),"shesaidwithagentlesmile.Inodded,appreciatingherunderstandingandrealizingthatthetruevalueofhelpingliesinknowingwhentoaskforguidance(非谓语动词做伴随动作+宾从).

语法加分点分析:

非谓语动词短语：

“Insteadofjustwaitingaroundforthemorning”–使用非谓语动词短语表示对比，突出行动。

同义词:“waitingaround"→“lingering”

定语从句：

“Ipickedupthehalf-finishedsunhat,whichwaslyingonthefloor."

同义词/替换:“whichwaslying”→“thatwasleft"

强调句式：

“Itwasmyintentiontohelp.”–用强调句表达情感并突出了行动的动机。

同义词:“Itwasmyintention"→“Itrulywanted”

情感描写：

词汇:"guilt,""pride,""confidence,""softer"

例句:“Ifeltamixtureofguiltandpride."(通过“mixture”来呈现情感的复杂性)

动作描写：

词汇:"carefullyavoiding,""walkedover,""movedfaster,""stammered,""nodded"

例句:“Icarefullyavoidedmakinganynoise"(细致描写动作，强调小心谨慎)

Version3：

Paragraph1:SeeingCrystalfallquicklyintoherdream,Isuddenlycameupwithanidea.Itwasclearthatshehadworkedsohardonthesunhat(主语从句),andIdidn’twanthereffortstobewasted.Quietly,Ipickedupthehalf-finishedprojectandbegantoweave.AsIdidso(状从),Ifeltarushofexcitement.Iwantedtosurpriseher,butatthesametime,Ifeltabitnervous.WasIdoingitrightWoulditlookasgoodastheoriginalMyhandsmovedquickly,butIkeptsecond-guessingeverystitchImade(定从).ThemoreItriedtorush,themorefrustratedIbecame.Despitemydetermination,thehatwasfarfromwhatIhadimagined(宾从).Still,Icouldn’tgiveup.Iworkedharder,determinedtofinishit(adj做补语)beforeshewokeup(状从).

Paragraph2:InsteadofreceivingCrystal’sappreciation,Iwasawakenedbyashakethenextmorning.“Whydidyoutrytofinishit”sheaskedwithapuzzledlook.Ifeltmycheeksflushwithembarrassment.“IthoughtIcouldhelp(宾从),"Imumbled.Crystalglancedatthehat,andthenatme.“Iappreciateyoureffort,butnexttime,justletmedoit,”shesaidkindly.Thoughherwordsweregentle(状从),Ifeltasenseofregret.Ihadmeanttobehelpful,butintheend,Ilearnedthatsometimes,thebestwaytohelpisbynotinterfering.IpromisedmyselfthatIwouldaskforguidance(宾从)whenneeded(状从省略),insteadofjumpingintosomethingIdidn’tfullyunderstand(定从).

语法加分点分析:

虚拟语气：

“Woulditlookasgoodastheoriginal"–使用虚拟语气表达对未来不确定的担忧。

同义词:“lookasgood”→“turnoutasgood"

过去分词做状语：

“Determinedtofinishitbeforeshewokeup”–过去分词做状语表示目的。

同义词:“determined"→“committed”

反身代词加强语气：

“Ifeltmyselfgrowingmorefrustrated"–强调情绪的逐渐加剧。

同义词:“felt”→“sensed,"“growing”→“becoming"

情感描写：

词汇:"excitement,""nervous,""regret,""embarrassment"

例句:“Ifelt