青桐鸣大联考河南高三上学期11月28日联考试卷 读后续写 邻里间的误解产生矛盾需要真诚沟通去解决（讲义）

青桐鸣大联考河南高三上学期11月28日联考试卷读后续写邻里间的误解产生矛盾需要真诚沟通去解决（讲义）青桐鸣大联考河南2024-2025学年高三上学期11月28日联考试卷

第一节写作

假如你在英国留学，你加入了你们学校的辩论队，本期辩题是“WillEbooksReplacePrintedBooks”，请你以正方立场写一份开场陈词。内容包括：1.你们辩队的论点；2.你们辩队的论据。1.写作词数为80左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的对应位置作答；。

Distinguishedguestsandreferees,deardebaters,

Goodmorning!Onbehalfoftheprosteam,I’dliketostateourstandpoint:

Thankyouverymuch!

第二节(满分25分)

阅读下面短文,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Theverbalconflictwithmynext-doorneighbour,Pat,letmeshocked.Wehadstayedanormalrelationshipasneighbourssincethedaywemovedin,buthisaccusationthatsummermorningwastoomuch,especiallywhenmyfamilyhadtriedourbestnottobotherhim.

Ididn’trememberwhenhestoppedbeingfriendly.Icouldnotunderstandit.HeavoidedeveryconversationwithusandevenwalkedawaywhenIapproached!Onthatparticularmorning,IhadbeengardeningoutwhenIsawPatthrowalargedogywastefromhisgardenontoours!Iwassoupset,andIwalkedrightoverandfaceduptohim.“Whywouldyoudothat”

Foldinghisarmsdefensively,heclaimedthatourdogwastheculprit(犯人).“Isawhimdoit."Patsaid.Thisso-calledneighbourwaslyingtomyface!Itriedtoremaincalm.“Thereisnowayourdogdidthat.”Patdidn’tbackdown.“Keepourdogofmyyard,"hetoldme.MyupsetturnedtoangerandIletloose.“Pat,youarearealpieceofwork!”Istormedinmyfrontdoorandcalledmyhusband,Kevin,atwork.ItoldhimthatPatshouldaccuseourdogofmakingtroubleinhisyard.OurdogwasaChihuahua,toolittletobravehimselfoutofourhouse.Hisadvice:stayawayfromPat.SoIdid.Patreturnedthefavour.IfIsawhimwhilewewerebothoutwalking,he’dcrosstotheoppositesideofthestreet.WhenIdrovepasthishouse,he’dturnhisbacktomycar.

Onemorning,IglancedoutupstairsandfoundPatwasalreadycarefullytendinghisbeautifulgrapes.Ihadamixedfeeling.Ononehand,Icouldn’tbelieveamanwithsomuchcareforaplantshouldbesuchanimpoliteperson;ontheotherhand,Istillcouldn’tunderstandwhyPattreatedusinsuchamanner.

注意:

(1)续写词数应为150左右;

(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:“Baddog!Howdareyoucomeagaintodestroymyyard!"

Paragraph2:IheardthedoorknowcandfounditwasPat,withahandfulofgrapes.

原文分析：红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；下划线标黄单词为需掌握积累单词；从句类会用斜体标注；需积累部分黑体加粗下划线；(定语从句1)(状从)

第二节(满分25分)

阅读下面短文,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Theverbalconflictwithmynext-doorneighbour,Pat,letmeshocked.Wehadstayedanormalrelationshipasneighbourssincethedaywemovedin(状从),buthisaccusationthatsummermorningwastoomuch,especiallywhenmyfamilyhadtriedourbestnottobotherhim(状从).

Ididn’trememberwhenhestoppedbeingfriendly(宾从).Icouldnotunderstandit.HeavoidedeveryconversationwithusandevenwalkedawaywhenIapproached!(状从)Onthatparticularmorning,IhadbeengardeningoutwhenIsawPatthrowalargedogywastefromhisgardenontoours!(状从)Iwassoupset,andIwalkedrightoverandfaceduptohim.“Whywouldyoudothat”

Foldinghisarmsdefensively(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作),heclaimedthatourdogwastheculprit(犯人).“Isawhimdoit."Patsaid.Thisso-calledneighbourwaslyingtomyface!Itriedtoremaincalm.“Thereisnowayourdogdidthat.”Patdidn’tbackdown.“Keepourdogofmyyard,(宾从)"hetoldme.MyupsetturnedtoangerandIletloose.“Pat,youarearealpieceofwork!”Istormedinmyfrontdoorandcalledmyhusband,Kevin,atwork.ItoldhimthatPatshouldaccuseourdogofmakingtroubleinhisyard(宾从).OurdogwasaChihuahua,toolittletobravehimselfoutofourhouse.Hisadvice:stayawayfromPat.SoIdid.Patreturnedthefavour.IfIsawhimwhilewewerebothoutwalking(状从),he’dcrosstotheoppositesideofthestreet.WhenIdrovepasthishouse(状从),he’dturnhisbacktomycar.

Onemorning,IglancedoutupstairsandfoundPatwasalreadycarefullytendinghisbeautifulgrapes(宾从).Ihadamixedfeeling.Ononehand,Icouldn’tbelieveamanwithsomuchcareforaplantshouldbesuchanimpoliteperson(宾从);ontheotherhand,Istillcouldn’tunderstandwhyPattreatedusinsuchamanner(宾从).

注意:

(1)续写词数应为150左右;

(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:“Baddog!Howdareyoucomeagaintodestroymyyard!"

Paragraph2:IheardthedoorknowcandfounditwasPat,withahandfulofgrapes.

一、读后续写类型及分析

1.文章类型：

本篇文章属于人际矛盾与和解类，故事以主人公与邻居Pat的矛盾为核心，逐步推进到和解的转折。这类续写需要从矛盾的升级到转机的描写，再到最终的情感升华，体现人性的善意与理解。

2.构思思路：

布局：

开篇（矛盾深化）：展现矛盾进一步升级的场景，情绪描写重点刻画主人公的复杂心理和对矛盾的无奈。

中间（转机出现）：通过某件事件引发矛盾的转折点，比如主人公误解解除或某一行为打破僵局。

结尾（和解）：展现和解场景，呼应主题，表达善意和包容。

框架提炼与实施：

从矛盾深化场景切入，具体描述情节冲突。

运用心理、环境、动作描写，引导矛盾的缓解。

合理设计对话推动情节发展，最终通过和解升华主题。

注意事项：

注意承接原文情节和情绪基调，衔接语言风格一致性。

巧妙设计细节和情节，使转折自然，避免生硬。

二、故事山模式分析

1.故事山分析：

导入：与邻居矛盾加深（“Baddog!”场景引发矛盾升级）。

发展：主人公复杂心理与对邻居行为的不解。

高潮：门敲声与Pat带来葡萄出现，引发意料之外的转机。

结尾：两人冰释前嫌，表达善意。

2.衔接点：

情绪描写：

"Iwassoupset,andIwalkedrightoverandfaceduptohim."

"Ihadamixedfeeling."

动作描写：

"Patreturnedthefavour.IfIsawhimwhilewewerebothoutwalking,he’dcrosstotheoppositesideofthestreet."

"Patwasalreadycarefullytendinghisbeautifulgrapes."

关键转折点：

"IheardthedoorknockandfounditwasPat,withahandfulofgrapes."

三、推荐描写例句

1.动作描写：

Heslammedthedoorshut,hismovementsquickandsharp.

Shehesitatedforamomentbeforeextendingherhandinatruce.

Thedogbarked,jumpingatthefenceasiftryingtodefenditsterritory.

2.心理描写：

Herheartracedasshereplayedhiswordsinhermind,tryingtomakesenseofthem.

Amixofguiltandfrustrationwashedoverhim,leavinghimrestless.

Shecouldn’tshakeoffthelingeringfeelingofunease.

3.环境描写：

Themorningairwascrisp,carryingthefaintscentofbloomingflowers.

Shadowsdancedonthewallasthesundippedlowerinthesky.

Asoftbreezerustledthegrapeleaves,whisperingsecretsofthegarden.

四、语法现象及搭配现象

1.高中语法现象：

被动语态："Patwasalreadycarefullytendinghisbeautifulgrapes."

宾语从句："ItoldhimthatPatshouldaccuseourdogofmakingtroubleinhisyard."

状语从句："WhenIdrovepasthishouse,he’dturnhisbacktomycar."

2.地道搭配：

常见短语：faceupto

stayawayfromtendto

词汇积累：

accuse(v.)指责

近义词：blame

反义词：defend

例句：Heaccusedmeoflying,whichIstronglydenied.

五、范文设计的思路分析

范文1：突出转折描写

亮点词汇短语：

"AnideastruckmeasInoticedhishesitation."

"Awaveofreliefwashedoverme."

亮点语法：

定语从句："Thegrapes,whichhadbeenhispride,werenowsharedwithus."

范文2：突出情绪变化

亮点词汇短语：

"MyangerfadedasIsawthesincerityinhiseyes."

"Herapologywasheartfelt,hertoneunwavering."

亮点语法：

倒装："NeverhadIfeltsogratefulforasimplegesture."

范文3：突出对话推动

亮点词汇短语：

"‘Let’sstartover,’hesaid,breakingthesilence."

"Withanod,Iextendedmyhand,andheshookitfirmly."

亮点语法：

分词结构："Hopingforthebest,Idecidedtoknockonhisdoor."

PossibleAnswer1

Paragraph1:

“Baddog!Howdareyoucomeagaintodestroymyyard!"Pat’sangryvoicestartledmeasIrusheddownstairstothegarden(状从).Tomysurprise,ourlittleChihuahuawasnowhereinsight.Instead,astraydogwashappilydigginginPat’syard.IcalledouttoPat,pointingatthestray(非谓语动词做伴随动作).“That’snotmydog!”Iexclaimed.Patfroze,hisfaceflushedwithembarrassment.(独立主格)Realizinghismistake(非谓语动词做伴随动作或原因状语),hemutteredaquietapologybeforequicklyshooingthestrayaway.Thetensionbetweenusfeltunbearable,butIchosetoremainsilent,watchinghimretreatintohishouse(非谓语动词做伴随动作).

Paragraph2:

IheardthedoorknockandfounditwasPat,withahandfulofgrapes.“Theseareforyou,"hesaidhesitantly.“I’msorryforwhatIsaidearlier(宾从).Ishouldn’thaveblamedyouwithoutproof(虚拟语气).”Hiswordscaughtmeoffguard.Ismiledandacceptedthegrapes,saying,“Let’sforgetaboutit.We’reneighbors,afterall."Fromthatdayon,ourrelationshipgraduallyimproved.Patstartedwavingatmeduringhiswalks,andIfoundmyselflookingforwardtoseeinghimtendinghisgarden.

PossibleAnswer2

Paragraph1:

“Baddog!Howdareyoucomeagaintodestroymyyard!”Pat’svoicerangoutangrilyasIlookedoutofthewindow(状从).Curious(adj.作状语),Isteppedoutsideandsawastraydogleapingoverthefenceintoourgarden.Patturnedtowardme,hisfaceredwithfrustration(独立主格).“Thismustbeyourdogagain!"heshouted.“Pat,lookathimcarefully,”Isaidfirmly.“OurChihuahuacouldn’tpossiblyjumpthathigh."Hisgazefollowedthedog,realizationdawningonhisface(独立主格).Hefrownedbutsaidnothing,retreatingintohishouse(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作).

Paragraph2:

IheardthedoorknockandfounditwasPat,withahandfulofgrapes.Patstoodthereawkwardly,holdingasmallbasketoffreshlypickedgrapes(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作).“Ioweyouanapology,”hesaid,hisvoicesofterthanI’deverheardit(独立主格).“I’vebeenunfairtoyou."Ismiled,takingthebasket(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作).“Let’smoveon,”Ireplied.Fromthatmoment,thingschanged.Patbegangreetingmewithanodandevenofferedgardeningtips.Ilearnedthatkindnessandunderstandingcouldbridgethedeepestdivides.

PossibleAnswer3

Paragraph1:

“Baddog!Howdareyoucomeagaintodestroymyyard!"Pat’sshoutcutthroughthequietmorningairasIsteppedouttoseewhatwasgoingon(状从+宾从).Icaughtsightofalargestraydogdashingthroughhisgarden,tramplingthegrapevines(非谓语动词做伴随动作).MyheartsankasIrealizedthismisunderstandingwouldonlyworsenouralreadytenserelationship(状从).Takingadeepbreath(非谓语动词做伴随动作),Iapproachedhim.“Pat,that’snotmydog,”Isaid,gesturingtowardthestray(非谓语动词做伴随动作).Helookedatthedog,thenatme,hisexpressionshiftingfromangertoconfusion(独立主格).Withoutaword,heturnedbacktohisgarden.

Paragraph2:

IheardthedoorknockandfounditwasPat,withahandfulofgrapes.Openingthedoor,(非谓语动词做伴随动作)IsawPatholdingaclusterofgrapes.“Imisjudgedyou,"hesaidsimply,handingmethefruit(非谓语动词做伴随动作).Icouldseethesincerityinhiseyes,andmyannoyancemeltedaway.“Thankyou,”Isaidwarmly.Fromthenon,westartedexchangingsmallgreetings,andouroncecoldrelationshipbegantothaw.Pat’sgardenflourishedasdidournewfoundfriendship,provingthatevenbittermisunderstandingscouldbearsweetfruit.(非谓语动词+宾从)

亮点分析

1.情绪描写：

范文1:"Hisfaceflushedwithembarrassment."

范文2:"Hisgazefollowedthedog,realizationdawningonhisface."

范文3:"MyheartsankasIrealizedthismisunderstandingwouldonlyworsenouralreadytenserelationship."

2.动作描写：

范文1:"Watchinghimretreatintohishouse."

范文2:"Patstoodthereawkwardly,holdingasmallbasketoffreshlypickedgrapes."

范文3:"Takingadeepbreath,Iapproachedhim."

3.环境烘托：

范文1:"Thetensionbetweenusfeltunbearable."

范文3:"Pat’sshoutcutthroughthequietmorningair."

续写与原文衔接分析

可衔接续写的地方

动作描写:Pat投掷垃圾、主人公与Pat面对面争执的场景。

心理变化:主人公的愤怒、不解以及对Pat性格的矛盾情感。

情感层次:从矛盾升级到缓和的过程。

原文关键句子与续写衔接示例

分析角度内容分析原文反映句

人物刻画主人公：有正义感但容易被情绪控制；Pat：表面冷漠但心底善良。“Patdidn’tbackdown."

“Istormedinmyfrontdoorandcalledmyhusband.”

情感层次怒气→不解→复杂情绪→意外转折→释怀与和解。“Iwassoupset,andIwalkedrightoverandfaceduptohim."

“Ihadamixedfeeling.”

关键情节点争执时双方情绪激烈；观察Pat照料葡萄时的复杂感受；Pat送葡萄上门时的意外转折。“MyupsetturnedtoangerandIletloose."

“IglancedoutupstairsandfoundPatwasalreadycarefullytendinghisbeautifulgrapes.”

语言特色使用对话和细节动作增强场景的紧张感；心理描写推动情节发展；暗示性结尾表现主题和转折。“Keepyourdogoffmyyard."

“Pat,youarearealpieceofwork!”

关键词分析accuse,culprit,upset,anger,mixedfeeling,careforplants,tendgrapes,handfulofgrapes。同上。

心理描写主人公从愤怒到复杂情绪再到释怀。“Icouldn’tbelieveamanwithsomuchcareforaplantshouldbesuchanimpoliteperson."

动作描写Pat投掷垃圾、指责，主人公争执、观察对方细节。“IsawPatthrowalargedoggywastefromhisgardenontoours!”

环境描写葡萄园象征Pat的细腻与善意，表现冲突与和解的外部环境。“Patwasalreadycarefullytendinghisbeautifulgrapes."

隐含主题人与人之间的矛盾常源于误解，交流是化解矛盾的关键。整篇文章隐含主旨：从矛盾到和解。

情感专责以“复杂情感”为中心，逐步过渡到释怀与和解。“Ihadamixedfeeling."

空间转换从院子到室内再到葡萄园，空间变化体现情节推进。“Istormedinmyfrontdoor…”

“IglancedoutupstairsandfoundPat…"

时间过渡从冲突发生到后来Pat送葡萄，时间跨度表现情感的自然过渡。“Onthatparticularmorning…”

“Onemorning,Iglancedout…”

一、情绪描写语料

以下是范文中以及适合续写中的情绪描写语料：

情绪亮点词汇/短语高级替换/同义表达示例句

生气upset,furiousoutraged,enraged"Iwasfurious,myhandsclenchingintofistsasItriedtokeepcalm."

尴尬embarrassed,awkwardillatease,self-conscious"Helookedself-conscious,avoidingeyecontactashehandedmethegrapes."

感动touched,movedheartfelt,emotional"Herkindwordsleftmedeeplytouched,asmiletuggingatthecornersofmylips."

二、动作描写语料

以下为续写中可能使用的动作描写，能丰富场景并推动情节发展：

动作类型亮点表达升级/同义表达示例句

矛盾动作shoutedangrily,stormedofflashedout,stompedaway"Patlashedout,hisvoicetremblingwithfrustration."

和解动作extendedhishand,noddedsoftlyofferedahandshake,bowedslightly"Withaslightbow,heofferedthegrapes,signalingatruce."

犹豫动作paused,hesitatedlingered,faltered"Shelingeredatthedoor,unsurewhethertoknockorwalkaway."

三、环境描写语料

为增强场景感，环境描写至关重要。以下为适合场景的环境语料：

场景亮点词汇/短语升级/替换词示例句

清晨的安静calmmorning,crispairtranquildawn,freshbreeze"ThetranquildawnwasinterruptedbyPat'sloudvoiceec