高三12月检测训练《读后续写》解析讲义

高三12月检测训练《读后续写》解析讲义一、前文衔接核心要求（一）人物行为逻辑一致性核心人物1：前文设定为书店忠实爱好者，携带承载回忆的物品参与沟通，续写需围绕“以情感传递书店价值”展开，契合温和且坚定的人物特质，避免强硬对抗。核心人物2：前文为“侧重商业利益”的代表，转变需自然过渡，通过核心人物1的讲述及老物件的情感共鸣，使其认知书店的人文价值，进而提出“书店+咖啡馆”的双赢方案。长者角色：从“陷入挫败”到“重燃希望”，其反应需呼应最终融合方案，凸显对书店的不舍与欣慰。（二）冲突化解的合理性矛盾核心为“商业开发”与“人文情怀”的对立，续写不可简单让某一方妥协，需设计“融合共生”的结局——既满足商业盈利需求，又保留书店的精神内核，符合现实逻辑，同时升华“新旧共生”的主题。（三）前文伏笔的呼应核心人物1携带的书签、收据、照片及某本经典书籍，均为关键伏笔，续写中需让这些物品成为传递情感、打动对方的直接载体，避免道具闲置。二、原文本重点语块分类（一）环境描写类（营造氛围）aquietislandinthenoisystreamofthemoderncity（闹市里的宁静孤岛）weatheredbutproud（饱经风霜却傲然挺立）ashelterforbooklovers（书迷的避风港）warm,invitinglight（温暖诱人的灯光）thesmellofoldpaper（旧纸张的气息）（二）情感态度类（体现人物心境）aphysicalblow（沉重打击）worrywaswrittenallovereveryone’sfaces（人人面露愁容）feltdefeated（感到挫败）hisheartpoundinginhischest（心跳如鼓）（三）人物身份与动机类representingalargedevelopmententity（代表一家大型开发主体）profitableupgrade（盈利性改造）itwasjustbusiness（这不过是笔生意）（四）细节道具类（推动情节）abookmarkfromone’stenthbirthday（十岁生日的书签）areceiptfromthefirstbookboughtwithone’sownmoney（用零花钱买第一本书的收据）aworncopyofaclassicnovel（一本破旧的经典小说）三、参考范文范文一Paragraph1Hecouldn’tletthishappen—notwithouttryingtomakehisvoiceheard.Takingadeepbreathtosteadyhistremblinghands,hesteppedforwardandplacedallthetreasuresfromhisbackpackonthetableonebyone.Hepickedupthefadedphotographandpointedatthegrinningboyinit,tellingtheotherpartythatthiswasthesummerhe’dstruggledwithlonelinessandtheelderhadlenthimbooksforfree.Thenheheldupthetatteredclassicnovel,sayingithadbeenhispanionthroughcountlessrainyafternoonsintheshop’scozycorner.Ashespoke,moreregularsgatheredatthedoor,sharingtheirownstoriesofhowthebookstorehadfortedtheminhardtimes.Theotherparty’scoldexpressionsoftenedgradually.Shedidn’tinterrupt,hereyesfixedonthewelllovedbookinhishand.Paragraph2Adecisionwasmadetobineabookstoreandacaféinoneproject,andtheconstructionbegan.Theworkerstookgreatcaretopreservetheoriginalwoodensignandthevintagebookshelves,whileaddingasmallcaféareawithsoftsofasandwarmfairylights.Whenthenewshopreopened,theairwasfilledwiththeperfectmixofoldpaperandfreshlygroundcoffee.Theelderstayedontomanagethebooksection,andthecorefigurevolunteeredtohostweeklyreadingsessionsforkids.Theprojectrepresentativeoftendroppedbyafterwork,sittinginthecornerwithalatteandaclassicnovel.Theonceendangeredbookstorewasnolongerjustaquietisland—itbecameavibrantspotwheretraditionandmodernitycoexistedharmoniously,winningtheheartsofbotholdandnewvisitors.范文二Paragraph1Hecouldn’tletthishappen—notwithouttryingtomakehisvoiceheard.Takingadeepbreath,hesteppedforwardandlaidouttheitemsfromhisbackpackonthetable:thefrayedbookmark,thefadedreceipt,andthephotoofhimandtheelderlaughingoverapileofbooks.Hethenhelduptheclassicnovel,hisvoicetremblingbutfirmashetoldtheprojectrepresentativehowthisbookstorehadshapedhischildhood,howitwasahavenforkidswholovedreading,andhowitmeantmoretotheneighborhoodthanjustabuilding.Headdedthatmanyregulars,youngandold,regardeditasasecondhome.Therepresentativelistenedquietly,herexpressionsofteningashespoke,nolongerlookinglikeacoldbusinessorientedpersonbutsomeonewhowastrulyhearinghiswords.Paragraph2Adecisionwasmadetobineabookstoreandacaféinoneproject,andtheconstructionbegan.Theworkerscarefullypreservedthewoodensignandthecozyreadingcorners,whileaddingwarmlightingandfortabletablesforthecaféarea.Whenitreopenedmonthslater,theshopsmelledofbotholdpaperandfreshlybrewedcoffee.Theelderbeamedbehindthecounter,andthecorefigurehelpedorganizeanewsummerreadingprogramforkids.Theprojectrepresentativeevenvisitedsometimes,sittinginacornerwithabookandacupoflatte.Thebookstorewasnolongerjustanislandofquiet—itbecameaplacewheretheoldandnewblendedperfectly,abelovedspotthatwouldstayintheneighborhoodforyearstoe.官方范文Hecouldn’tletthishappen—notwithouttryingtomakehisvoiceheard.Astheprojectrepresentativeflippedthroughthecontract,hegrippedtheclassicnovel,steppingforwardwithcourage.“MayIshowyousomething?”Helaidoutabookmarkandfadedphotos—tangiblethreadsoftheneighborhood’smemories.“Thisstoreisn’tjustwoodandshelves:hereIlearnedtodream,somelocalsreadtokidsweekly,andtheelderfoundmyfirstpoetrybook.”Hiseyesglistenedaschildrenglancedfromthecorner,clutchingbooks.“It’salivinglegacy,notjustprofit.”Therepresentative’spenfroze,hergazesofteningandhesitationflickeringacrossherface.Adecisionwasmadetobineabookstoreandacaféinoneproject,andtheconstructionbegan.Workershandledthestorewithutmostcare,craftingacozycafébarbathedinwarmlight.Thecorefigurevolunteereddiligently,sortingbooksandhanginglightsthatcastgentleglowsonpages.Whenthedoorsreopened,joyfilledtheair:kidsstretchedoncushionsreading,andelderschattedoverthebar.Theeldersmiledbythedoorasthestorebreathednewlife—nolongerjustabooklovers’shelter,butavibrantharbourwherememoriesenduredandnewstoriesunfolded.四、评分标准（一）评分原则本题总分25分，按以下5个档次给分。评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。评分时，应重点关注：与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；内容的丰富性和创新性；应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；上下文的连贯性。词数少于130或多于170的，从总分中减去2分。拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。如书写较差，以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。（二）各档次给分范围和要求档次分数区间具体要求第五档21—25分1.与所给短文融洽度高，与各段落开头语衔接自然合理；<br>2.内容充实，细节丰富且有创新性；<br>3.熟练运用语句间连接成分，续写短文结构严谨，表达流畅自然。第四档16—20分1.与所给短文融洽度较高，与段落开头语衔接较为合理；<br>2.内容比较丰富，有一定细节；<br>3.较好地运用语句间连接成分，续写短文结构紧凑，表达较为流畅。第三档11—15分1.与所给短文关系较为密切，与段落开头语有一定衔接；<br>2.写出若干相关内容，有基础细节；<br>3.应用简单的语句间连接成分，全文内容基本连贯，表达基本合理。第二档6—10分1.与所给短文有一定关联，与段落开头语衔接不够自然；<br>2.写出部分相关内容，细节不足；<br>3.较少使用语句间连接成分，全文内容连贯性不足，表达不够合理。第一档1—5分1.与段落开头语衔接较差，与所给短文关联性弱；<br>2.内容单薄，几乎无有效信息；<br>3.全文内容不连贯，表达逻辑混乱。不得分0分白卷；内容过少无法判断；所写内容与所提供内容无关。五、实用句式结构（一）比喻修辞句式（提升文采）原句：Thebookstorewasaquietislandinthenoisystreamofthemoderncitywasa[具象名词]inthe[抽象/对立场景]of...例句：Theoldlibrarywasabrightbeaconinthedulldarknessofthesmalltown.（二）情感冲击表达句式原句：Thenewsfeltlikeaphysicalblowtohim...仿写结构：Thenewsfeltlikea[具象打击名词]tosb.,who...例句：Thefailureofthepetitionfeltlikeasharpstabtoher,whohadpreparedforitformonths.（三）动作+心理描写结合句式（塑造人物）原句：Hewatchedfromthesidelines,hisheartpoundinginhischest.仿写结构：Sb.[动作],his/her[身体部位][状态]with[情绪].例句：Shestoodtherewaitingfortheresult,herhandstremblingwithanxiety.（四）让步转折句式（表达对立与融合）续写衍生句：Thecoverwasfaded,thepagesyellowed,butthespinestillheldstrong.仿写结构：[描述A的缺陷],[描述B的缺陷],but[核心优势依然存在].例句：Thehousewassmall,thewallswerecracked,butthewarmthinsideneverfaded.（五）“感官融合”描写句式（营造氛围）续写衍生句：Theairwasfilledwiththeperfectmixofoldpaperandfreshlygroundcoffee.仿写结构：Theairwasfilledwiththemixof[感官1]and[感官2],evoking...例句：Thegardenwasfilledwiththemixofsweetflowerfragranceandsoftbirdsongs,evokingasenseofpeace.六、情节设计优化句式（一）细节描写+情感烘托句式Thetatteredcopyoftheclassicnovel,fadedanddogeared,hadlongbeenawitnesstohisquietgrowthandsweetchildhoodmemories.（那本破旧卷边、封面褪色的经典小说，长久以来都是他默默成长与甜蜜童年回忆的见证者。）Theprojectrepresentativelistenedsilently,withhereyesfixedontheyellowedreceipt,asifshecouldseethelittleboywho’dsavedpocketmoneyforhisfirstbook.（项目负责人静静听着，目光紧锁着那张泛黄的收据，仿佛真的能看见那个攒零花钱买下人生第一本书的小男孩。）（二）冲突转折+态度转变句式Whattheprojectrepresentativehadseenasaprofitablebusinessdealsoonturnedouttobeaspiritualhavencherishedbythewholeneighborhood.（项目负责人原本以为只是一笔盈利的生意，后来却发现，这里是整个街区都视若珍宝的精神港湾。）Gonewerethedayswhenthebookstorewasthreatenedwithclosure;instead,itbeca