高三英语读后续写观摩课

版本1：Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Hewaitedformeandsmiledwarmly.Heheldathickbookinhishand.Hestoodupslowly.Hepattedmyshouldergently.HesaidhebelievedIcouldsucceed.IworkedhardatwhatIdid.Ifeltverygratefulandmoved.Itoldhimhonestly.Iwassothankfulforhisguidance.Withouthisencouragement,Iwouldneverhavedaredtotrywriting.Iwouldneverhavetastedthesweetsuccess.Hegavemethebook.Itwasaboutfamouswritersandtheirinspiringstories.Hehopeditwouldhelpmewritebetter.HehopedIwouldkeeplovingwritingwithallmyheart.Iheldthebooktightly.Iknewthispreciousexperiencewouldguidemeinmywritingjourney.Step1:Lead-in版本1：Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Hewaitedformeandsmiledwarmly.Heheldathickbookinhishand.Hestoodupslowly.Hepattedmyshouldergently.HesaidhebelievedIcouldsucceed.IworkedhardatwhatIdid.Ifeltverygratefulandmoved.Itoldhimhonestly.Iwassothankfulforhisguidance.Withouthisencouragement,Iwouldneverhavedaredtotrywriting.Iwouldneverhavetastedthesweetsuccess.Hegavemethebook.Itwasaboutfamouswritersandtheirinspiringstories.Hehopeditwouldhelpmewritebetter.HehopedIwouldkeeplovingwritingwithallmyheart.Iheldthebooktightly.Iknewthispreciousexperiencewouldguidemeinmywritingjourney.版本2：

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.AssoonasIwalkedin【时间状语从句】,Ifoundthathewaswaitingformewithawarmsmileonhisfaceandathickbookinhishand【宾语从句】.Atthesightofme,hestoodupandpattedmyshouldergently,sayingthathehadalwaysbelievedIcouldshineaslongasIputmyheartintowhatIdid【非谓语作伴随状语】.Gratefulandmoved【形容词作状语】,Itoldhimsincerelythatifitwerenotforhisencouragement,Iwouldneverhavedaredtotrywritingandwouldneverhavetastedthesweetnessofsuccess【虚拟语气】.Then,hehandedmethebook,whichwasaboutfamouswritersandtheirstories【非限制性定语从句】,andtoldmethathehopeditwouldhelpmeimprovemywritingskillsandkeepmypassionforwritingalive【宾语从句】.Iheldthebooktightly,knowingthatthispreciousexperiencewouldbealightguidingmetokeepgoinginmywritingjourney【非谓语作伴随状语】.Q:Whichonedoyouthinkisbetter?Inwhataspectsdoesitoutperform胜过theotherone?“十句五定定结构，他山之石升表达”读后续写的思与写LearningobjectivesBytheendoftheclass,studentswillbeableto:1.GrasptheTen-SentenceFive-DefinitionMethod十句五定法forcontinuouswriting读后续写,andbuildalogicalplot情节structurethroughtypicalexamquestions.2.Learntoimitate模仿andapplyclassiclonganddifficultsentencepatternsfromrealGaokaopapers试卷,enrichsentencetypesandimprovewritingexpressionthroughexercises.3.FinishthecontinuouswritingofJourneytotheWest西游记withreasonableplot,vividdetailsandclearthemethroughgroupdiscussionandpractice.版本1：Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Hewaitedformeandsmiledwarmly.Heheldathickbookinhishand.Hestoodupslowly.Hepattedmyshouldergently.HesaidhebelievedIcouldsucceed.IworkedhardatwhatIdid.Ifeltverygratefulandmoved.Itoldhimhonestly.Iwassothankfulforhisguidance.Withouthisencouragement,Iwouldneverhavedaredtotrywriting.Iwouldneverhavetastedthesweetsuccess.Hegavemethebook.Itwasaboutfamouswritersandtheirinspiringstories.Hehopeditwouldhelpmewritebetter.HehopedIwouldkeeplovingwritingwithallmyheart.Iheldthebooktightly.Iknewthispreciousexperiencewouldguidemeinmywritingjourney.Step2十句五定法十句五定法是一套专为高考英语读后续写设计的结构化写作方法论，核心是用固定数量

+固定功能搭建逻辑清晰的情节框架，快速解决“写什么、怎么写”的考场痛点。核心定义十句：匹配两个段落共150词左右篇幅，按“每句12–18词”估算，两段续写共约10句（允许

10–14句浮动）。五定：在

10句中锁定5个固定位置的“关键句”，明确其功能，确保情节不跑偏、结构完整。Para1.XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXPara2.XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

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句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:句9：句10:1衔接第一段首句2衔接下一段首句3衔接第二段首句4正向结局5主题升华6Step2:Whichsentencecanbewrittenaccordingtothegivensentence?7句1，5，6，9，10定句2，3，4，7，8补补充细节（情绪、动作、心理、细节、环境、对话）三衔一结定归途，情动心细绘宏图。环境对话铺陈足，落笔生花主题殊。Step2十句五定法三衔一结一归途，情动心细绘宏图。环境对话铺陈足，落笔生花主题殊。Para1.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest竞赛,therecamethenews.Para2.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation颁奖典礼.

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衔接第二段首句句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:衔接下一段首句句9：正向结局句10:主题升华12356以2023年新课标1卷为例74whatnews（我赢了）what

happenedintheawardpresentation(领奖+台下鼓掌庆祝）whatdid

theteacherdothen（等我）受到鼓舞，我继续坚持写作坚持不懈；一切皆有可能情绪得知消息，我的反应（震惊/激动）心理（努力获得回报）动作怀着激动的心情，我去参加了颁奖典礼情绪+动作我开心地展示奖牌/表示感谢情绪+动作老师欣慰地表扬和鼓励故事梗概：中学时，来自巴西的我英语写作困难，不愿参加写作比赛。社会课老师欣赏我的故事，鼓励我参赛，我便反复修改作文，渐渐爱上写作。Para1.Irealizeditwasmewhowasatfault错误.Para2.Withthebiscuits饼干mywifehadmade,Iarrivedatmybrother’sdoor.

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句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:句9：（正向结局）句10:（主题升华）123562025年全国一卷74衔接第一段首句衔接下一段首句衔接第二段首句故事梗概：男主举办家庭聚会，为护年幼孩子要求哥哥将好动的狗狗关在屋外。雨天逼得哥哥只得带狗离开，兄弟俩不欢而散。两月后男主得知哥哥近况，内心愧疚。Para1.Inaclassdiscussion,Iwasinvitedtoexplain解释themeaningofmyname.Para2.Manyofmyclassmatesgotinterestedandcameuptomeafterclass.

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句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:句9：（正向结局）句10:（主题升华）123562025年全国二卷74衔接第一段首句衔接下一段首句衔接第二段首句故事梗概：作为国际学生，作者因中文名“Qiuyu”的发音难以被爱尔兰人准确读出，在自我介绍时屡屡受挫。一次课堂上，教授反复尝试仍读不对名字，让作者陷入两难；最终他选择终止纠正，虽避免了过度解释的不适，却也因不再主动说明姓名发音，错失了分享文化身份的机会。Para1.WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevin

wenttotalktothem.Para2.KevinandMr.Greentookthewatch手表theyhadfoundtothepolicestation.

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句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:句9：（正向结局）句10:（主题升华）123562025年浙江一月卷74衔接第一段首句衔接下一段首句衔接第二段首句故事梗概：12岁的凯文独自在家时，发现有人闯入邻居格林家。他虽惊慌但果断报警并只身阻止嫌疑人，男人见是男孩便放松警惕，称那是自家旧居，还想掀起地板取父亲留下的手表。警察赶到后嫌疑人逃跑被捕。事后凯文心生疑虑，怀疑那人或许是房主而非窃贼，内心陷入不安。Para1.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest竞赛,therecamethenews.Para2.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation颁奖典礼.

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衔接第二段首句句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:衔接下一段首句句9：正向结局句10:主题升华12356以2023年新课标1卷为例74whatnews（我赢了）what

happenedintheawardpresentation(领奖+台下鼓掌庆祝）whatdid

theteacherdothen（等我）受到鼓舞，我继续坚持写作坚持不懈；一切皆有可能情绪得知消息，我的反应（震惊/激动）心理（努力获得回报）动作怀着激动的心情，我去参加了颁奖典礼情绪+动作我开心地展示奖牌/表示感谢情绪+动作老师欣慰地表扬和鼓励故事梗概：中学时，来自巴西的我英语写作困难，不愿参加写作比赛。社会课老师欣赏我的故事，鼓励我参赛，我便反复修改作文，渐渐爱上写作。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.AsmyheadteacherannouncedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,IwassoastonishedthatIwasfrozeninmyseatforafewseconds.Shockedanddelighted,Icouldn’tbelievethatmyeffortshadfinallypaidoff.Withmyheartbeatingwildly,Istoodupandheadedstraightfortheawardpresentation.WhenIsteppedontothestagetoreceivethemedal,alltheteachersandstudentsclappedloudly,andIsawmysocialstudiesteachersittinginthefrontrow,smilingproudlyatme.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.WhenIpushedthedooropen,Ifoundhewaswaitingforme.Iheldthemedaltightly,walkeduptohimandsaidsincerely,“Thankyou,sir.It’syouwho/thatmademerealizeIcandowellinwriting.Iwouldhavestrugglewithdifficultiestomakeitwithoutyouguidance”Hepattedmyshouldergently,hiseyesfilledwithsatisfaction,andsaid,“Itoldyouyouhadagoodshot.NobodyknewyoureffortthanIdid”Encouragedbyhiswords,Imadeupmymindtokeepwriting,knowingthataslongasIapplymyself,nothingisimpossible.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.AsmyheadteacherannouncedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,IwassoastonishedthatIwasfrozeninmyseatforafewseconds.Shockedanddelighted,Icouldn’tbelievethatmyeffortshadfinallypaidoff.Withmyheartbeatingwildly,Istoodupandheadedstraightfortheawardpresentation.WhenIsteppedontothestagetoreceivethemedal,alltheteachersandstudentsclappedloudly,andIsawmysocialstudiesteachersittinginthefrontrow,smilingproudlyatme.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

WhenIpushedthedooropen,Ifoundhewaswaitingforme.Iheldthemedaltightly,walkeduptohimandsaidsincerely,“Thankyou,sir.It’syouwho/thatmademerealizeIcandowellinwriting.Iwouldhavestrugglewithdifficultiestomakeitwithoutyouguidance”Hepattedmyshouldergently,hiseyesfilledwithsatisfaction,andsaid,“Itoldyouyouhadagoodshot.NobodyknewyoureffortthanIdid”Encouragedbyhiswords,Imadeupmymindtokeepwriting,knowingthataslongasIapplymyself,nothingisimpossible.以2023年新课标1卷为例我的班主任宣布我在写作比赛中得了第一名。我不敢相信我的努力终于有了回报。我如此震惊以至于呆坐在座位上好几秒。心剧烈地跳动着，我站起来，然后径直走向颁奖典礼。当我走上讲台领取奖章时，所有老师和同学都热烈地鼓掌了。当我推开门，我发现他正在等我。我紧紧攥着奖章，走到他面前，诚恳地说道。要是没有你的指导，我恐怕会在困境中挣扎，难以成功。没有人比我更懂你的付出。受他一番话的鼓舞，我下定决心坚持写作。版本1：Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Hewaitedformeandsmiledwarmly.Heheldathickbookinhishand.Hestoodupslowly.Hepattedmyshouldergently.HesaidhebelievedIcouldsucceed.IworkedhardatwhatIdid.Ifeltverygratefulandmoved.Itoldhimhonestly.Iwassothankfulforhisguidance.Withouthisencouragement,Iwouldneverhavedaredtotrywriting.Iwouldneverhavetastedthesweetsuccess.Hegavemethebook.Itwasaboutfamouswritersandtheirinspiringstories.Hehopeditwouldhelpmewritebetter.HehopedIwouldkeeplovingwritingwithallmyheart.Iheldthebooktightly.Iknewthispreciousexperiencewouldguidemeinmywritingjourney.Step3他山之石，可以攻玉他山之石，可以攻玉本义指别的山上的石头，能够用来雕琢玉器。在读后续写的备考中，我们可以借助高考复习中积累的真题中的长难句句型和结构等“他山之石”，迁移运用到读后续写中，以优化表达，提升写作水平，达到“可以攻玉”的目的。一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石1：宾语从句：

主语+谓语+that+宾语从句（2023年新课标1卷阅读理解D）Thegroupsreported

thatthey“sharedarguments......”这些小组报告说，他们“分享了论点......可以攻玉：我的班主任宣布announce我在写作比赛中writingcontest得了第一名。________________________________________________________________可以攻玉：我不敢相信我的努力effort终于有了回报payoff。________________________________________________________________MyheadteacherannouncedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest.Icouldn’tbelievethatmyeffortshadfinallypaidoff.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石2：with的复合结构：with+宾语+doing/done,主语+谓语1+and+谓语2（2023年新课标1卷阅读理解A）With2,500bikesstoredinourshops,wemakesure

thereisalwaysabikeforyouand

offerthenewestbicycles.我们五家店备有2500辆自行车，确保随时有车供您选用，并提供最新款的车型。可以攻玉：心剧烈地跳动beat着，我站起来，然后径直headstraightfor走向颁奖典礼。________________________________________________________________Withmyheartbeatingwildly,Istoodupandheadedstraightfortheawardpresentation.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石3：时间状语从句：When......,主语+谓语+（宾语）（2023年新课标1卷阅读理解B）WhenJohnToddwasachild,helovedtoexplorethewoods......当约翰・托德是个孩子的时候，他喜欢去探索森林。可以攻玉：当我走上steponto讲台领取奖章medal时，所有老师和同学都热烈地鼓掌clap了。________________________________________________________________可以攻玉：当我推开门pushthedooropen，我发现他正在等我。________________________________________________________________WhenIsteppedontothestagetoreceivethemedal,alltheteachersandstudentsclappedloudly.WhenIpushedthedooropen,Ifoundhewaswaitingforme.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石4：so......that......如此以至于（2023年新课标1卷读后续写）Writing

wassodifficultandpainfulforme

thatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperbyactingoutaplay.写作对我来说既艰难又痛苦，以至于老师允许我以话剧的方式来展示我的论文。可以攻玉：我如此震惊以至于呆坐在座位上befrozenintheseat好几秒。________________________________________________________________IwassoastonishedthatIwasfrozenintheseatforafewseconds.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石5：主语+谓语1,谓语2

and谓语3（2023年新课标1卷读后续写）......hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid......他读了一遍，哈哈大笑起来，然后说……可以攻玉：我紧紧攥着hold......tightly奖章，走到他面前，诚恳地sincerely说道。________________________________________________________________Iheldthemedaltightly,walkeduptohimandsaidsincerely.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石6：虚拟语气（2023年新课标1卷完型）ShewouldhavestruggledwithextremepaintomakeitwithoutBailey’shelp.要是没有贝利的帮助，她恐怕早已在极度的痛苦中挣扎，根本撑不过去。可以攻玉：要是没有你的指导guidance，我恐怕会在困境中挣扎，难以成功。________________________________________________________________Iwouldhavestrugglewithdifficultiestomakeitwithoutyouguidance.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石7：否定词+比较级=最高级（2023年新课标1卷读后续写）Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.没有人比他笑得更欢了。可以攻玉：没有人比我更懂你的付出effort。________________________________________________________________NobodyknewyoureffortbetterthanIdid.一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。他山之石8：doing/done......,主语+谓语+（宾语）（2023年新课标1卷读后续写）Encouragedbyhiswords,I

agreedtogiveitatry.受他一番话的鼓舞，我同意试一试。可以攻玉：受他一番话的鼓舞，我下定决心makeupone’smindto坚持写作。________________________________________________________________Encouragedbyhiswords,Imadeupmymindtokeepwriting.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.AsmyheadteacherannouncedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,IwassoastonishedthatIwasfrozeninmyseatforafewseconds.Shockedanddelighted,Icouldn’tbelievethatmyeffortshadfinallypaidoff.Withmyheartbeatingwildly,Istoodupandheadedstraightfortheawardpresentation.WhenIsteppedontothestagetoreceivethemedal,alltheteachersandstudentsclappedloudly,andIsawmysocialstudiesteachersittinginthefrontrow,smilingproudlyatme.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.WhenIpushedthedooropen,Ifoundhewaswaitingforme.Iheldthemedaltightly,walkeduptohimandsaidsincerely,“Thankyou,sir.It’syouwho/thatmademerealizeIcandowellinwriting.Iwouldhavestrugglewithdifficultiestomakeitwithoutyouguidance”Hepattedmyshouldergently,hiseyesfilledwithsatisfaction,andsaid,“Itoldyouyouhadagoodshot.NobodyknewyoureffortthanIdid”Encouragedbyhiswords,Imadeupmymindtokeepwriting,knowingthataslongasIapplymyself,nothingisimpossible.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.AsmyheadteacherannouncedthatIhadwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,IwassoastonishedthatIwasfrozeninmyseatforafewseconds.Shockedanddelighted,Icouldn’tbelievethatmyeffortshadfinallypaidoff.Withmyheartbeatingwildly,Istoodupandheadedstraightfortheawardpresentation.WhenIsteppedontothestagetoreceivethemedal,alltheteachersandstudentsclappedloudly,andIsawmysocialstudiesteachersittinginthefrontrow,smilingproudlyatme.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

WhenIpushedthedooropen,Ifoundhewaswaitingforme.Iheldthemedaltightly,walkeduptohimandsaidsincerely,“Thankyou,sir.It’syouwho/thatmademerealizeIcandowellinwriting.Iwouldhavestrugglewithdifficultiestomakeitwithoutyouguidance”Hepattedmyshouldergently,hiseyesfilledwithsatisfaction,andsaid,“Itoldyouyouhadagoodshot.NobodyknewyoureffortthanIdid”Encouragedbyhiswords,Imadeupmymindtokeepwriting,knowingthataslongasIapplymyself,nothingisimpossible.以2023年新课标1卷为例我的班主任宣布我在写作比赛中得了第一名。我不敢相信我的努力终于有了回报。我如此震惊以至于呆坐在座位上好几秒。心剧烈地跳动着，我站起来，然后径直走向颁奖典礼。当我走上讲台领取奖章时，所有老师和同学都热烈地鼓掌了。当我推开门，我发现他正在等我。我紧紧攥着奖章，走到他面前，诚恳地说道。要是没有你的指导，我恐怕会在困境中挣扎，难以成功。没有人比我更懂你的付出。受他一番话的鼓舞，我下定决心坚持写作。实践时刻Step4IamSunWukong,themostpowerfulmonkeyintheworld.WhenIwasprotectingmymaster（师傅）TangMonkfromdangeronthelongjourneytotheWestforBuddhistscriptures（佛经）,westeppedintoagloomy（阴暗的）anddangerousmountain.Anevilandtrickydemon（恶魔）calledWhiteBoneSpiritlivedhere.ShehadlongheardthateatingTangMonk’sflesh（肉）couldmakeanyoneliveforever,soshehadbeenwaitingsecretlyforalongtimetocatchhim.First,sheturnedherselfintoakindyoungladycarryingdeliciousfood,tryingtoinvitemymastertoeat.Withmygoldenfieryeyes（火眼金睛）,Isawthroughherevildisguise（伪装）rightaway.Iliftedmygoldencudgel（金箍棒）andkilledherfalsebody.Sheleftafalsecorpse（尸体）andfledwithherlastbreath.MymasterknewnothingaboutdemonsandbelievedIhadkilledaninnocent（无辜的）person.HewassoangrythathereadtheTightFilletSpell（紧箍咒）nonstop.MyheadhurtsobadlythatIcouldhardlystand.Soonthedemonreturnedasaweakoldwomanlookingforherdaughter.Again,Ikilledherfalsebody.Mymastergotevenangrier.Beforelong,thedemonchangedintoawhite-hairedoldmanlookingforhiswifeanddaughter.Ihadnochoicebuttokillthefalsebodyforthethirdtime.Thistime,mymastercompletelylosthispatience.Hewroteadismissalletter（贬书）anddrovemeawayforever,sayingheneverwantedtoseemeagain.Myheartwasfilledwithsadnessandanger.Ikneltdown（跪下）andsaidgoodbyetohimwithtears.ThenIflewbacktoFlowerandFruitMountain（花果山）asfastasIcould.Backhome,allthemonkeysjumpedaroundmeexcitedly.Theycheered,danced,andpreparedfreshfruitsandsweetdrinksforme.Foramoment,Ienjoyedthewarmandfreelifewithmyfamily.Butdeepinmyheart,Istillcaredaboutmymasterdeeply.Ikeptworryingthathewouldmeetmoredemonsorgetintoserioustroublewithoutmyprotection.Itriedtokeepmyselfbusyeveryday,hopingtoforgetthepainandthejourneytotheWest.Paragraph1：Afewdayslater,whenIalmostforgotthejourneytotheWest,Isuddenlyheardavoicecalling“BigBrother”.Paragraph2：WhenIreturnedtomymaster,Isawhimturnedintoatigerandlockedinacage.（三打白骨精·八戒召回悟空版）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Para1.Afewdayslater,whenIalmostforgotthejourneytotheWest,Isuddenlyheardavoicecalling“BigBrother大师兄”.Para2.WhenIreturnedtomymaster,Isawhimturnedintoatigerandlocked锁在inacage笼子.

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句2、3、4:句7、8：句5:句9：正向结局句10:主题升华12356自编模拟题74衔接第一段首句衔接下一段首句衔接第二段首句误会消除、师徒和好不计前嫌、师徒情深故事梗概：孙悟空保护唐僧取经时，识破白骨精三次伪装并打死其假身，唐僧误认其杀无辜，写下贬书将他赶走，孙悟空虽回花果山仍牵挂师傅。心头一震、认出八戒告别猴子猴孙、离开花果山师傅无助可怜、心疼愤怒八戒报信、师父遇险；内心挣扎、旧怨未消；担忧师父、放下委屈降服妖怪、解救师父；师父悔悟、真诚道歉[图片][图片]他山之石1：宾语从句：

主语+谓语+that+宾语从句他山之石2：with的复合结构：with+宾语+doing/done,主语+谓语1+and+谓语2他山之石3：时间状语从句：When......,主语+谓语+（宾语）他山之石4：so......that......如此以至于他山之石5：主语+谓语1,谓语2

and谓语3他山之石6：虚拟语气他山之石7：否定词+比较级=最高级他山之石8：doing/done......,主语+谓语+（宾语）关键词：Bajie(八戒)、master(师傅)、crueldemon(凶狠的妖怪)、anxious(焦虑的；担忧的)、setoff(出发)、standaround(围站着