Unit1People+of+Achievement同步读后续写高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

Unit1PeopleofAchievement人教版2019选择性必修第一册读后续写读话题写作文高二上Module1LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123技法点拨

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使续写更加形象生动01人物是故事的载体,在续写时要抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点,利用恰当的描述性词语(descriptivewords),如本单元出现的committedandpatient,slightly

odd-lookingbutkindandfunny,remarkable等，让读者在阅读的过程中如见其人，提升续写语篇的可读性。Tip1:外貌神态显形象①对人物全身的描写

thin,slim,slender(苗条的),light,fat,heavy,skinny,bony,stout/wiry(强壮的),muscular(肌肉发达的),strong,stringy(强壮的),plump(丰腴的),ofmediumheight/build(中等身材),hunchbacked(驼背的),bonesthatshowthrough(瘦骨嶙峋),etc.

well-dressed,decently-dressed(穿着体面的),elegantly-dressed(穿着高贵的),suit,inrags(衣衫褴褛的),shabby(破旧的),etc.

elderly,young,old,middle-aged,etc.

Figure：Clothing：Age：Tip1:外貌神态显形象②对人物脸部的描写

pretty,ugly,attractive,charming,good-looking,ordinary/plain-looking,handsome,etc.

flat,hooked(鹰勾的),big,high-bridged(高鼻梁的),thicklips,etc.

rosy(红润的),wearingamoustache/beard/whisker,scarred(伤痕累累的),wrinkled(有皱纹的),freckled(有雀斑的),pimpled(有痘痘的),long,square,thin/round-faced,glow(发光),gostlypale,chalkwhiteetc.

wide-eyed,roundeyes,starring/glitteringeyes(闪烁的眼睛),glaringeyes(愤怒的眼睛),beadyeyes(玉珠般的眼睛）,etc.*thick,shaggy(乱糟糟的),etc.

thick,big,wavy(波浪状的),rippling(颤动的),etc.

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impression:Face:Eyes:Eyebrow:Nose&lips:Beard:Tip1:外貌神态显形象③对人物其他特征的描写Skin/complexion：dark-skinned,sun-burntskin,smooth,rough(粗糙的),soft,silky,wrikled,freckled,etc.Hair:curly,glorious(秀丽的),glossy(有光泽的),wavy,blonde,,etc.Tip1:外貌神态显形象本单元的语法项目是定语从句，在写作中可以把定语从句放在名词的后面，为名词添加更多的修饰信息，从而使句子连贯紧凑，句意更清晰，也能有效显示出作者的语言表达能力。

例：Ithankedhimforhisencouragementandsupport,whichhadhelpedmedevelopthedisciplineandskillsneededtosucceed.我感谢他的鼓励和支持，这帮助我培养了成功所需的自制力和技能。(2023新课标卷)Tip2:利用定语从句提升档次1.我认为丢了这张票的人会寻找它的。

2.Karson上交了他刚刚捡到的金票。

3.那也许就是为什么这位流浪者脸上一直带着微笑的原因。

4.他们不仅需要找到所需材料，还需要得到政府的许可令。

5.这个电话来自应该准备午餐的厨师。

Ithinktheonewholosttheticketwilllookforit.Karsonhandedinthegoldticketthat/whichhehadjustfound.Thatmightbethereasonwhythehomelessmanwasalwayshavingasmileonhisface.Thephonewasfromthecooks,whoweresupposedtopreparethelunch.Theynotonlyneededtofindallthematerialstheyneed,butalsoneededtogetthepermissiontobuildtheshelterfromthelocalgovernment.Tip2:利用定语从句提升档次直接表达，言简意赅Tip3:得体的心理描写1.直接表达，言简意赅意义表达开心、兴奋的happy;delighted;excited;thrilled;overjoyed;gowildwithjoy(欣喜若狂）；amixtureofexcitementandhappiness（既兴奋又开心）难过、悲伤的sad;unhappy;sorrowful;upset;haveabadmood（心情不好）：heartbroken（伤心的）；heart-struck（心痛的，伤心的）:sadnessinsb’seyes（眼中流露出悲伤）恐慌、害怕的terrified;scared;frightened;panicked;fearful;alarmed尴尬的、困惑的embarrassed/puzzled(confused)焦虑、担心、紧张的、惊讶的anxious（焦虑的）；surprised（惊讶的）；shocked（吃惊的）；amazed（惊张、惊讶的奇的）；astonished（十分震惊的）2.借助五官

词汇意义词汇意义one'seyestwinkledwithexcitement激动得两眼放光one’sheartleapedwithjoy

心高兴得怦怦直跳One’seyeswiden/broadeninsurprise惊讶地睁大了眼睛tearsofhappinessflowingdown留下幸福的泪水wearacomfortingsmile带着安慰的微笑withhiseyesburningwithanger他的眼中怒火Droop/duck/lowerdownone’sheadwithembarrassment/shame尴尬/羞愧地低下了头withone’seyebrows

knittedtightly眉头紧锁Tip3:得体的心理描写3.动词助力词汇意义词汇意义one’svoicetrembledwithnervousness声音因紧张而颤抖起来one'sconfidencesoared信心飙升one'sheartwasthumpingwithexcitement激动得心怦怦跳feelbloodrush/rushingtoone'sface

感到脸阵阵发烫stormoutoftheroom冲出房间drownmyfearsandlosses淹没了我的恐惧和失落Tip3:得体的心理描写佳

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跟着课文学佳句02细节描写1.对公众来说，袁是一个看起来略显瘦削，但意志很坚强的人。Tothepublic,Yuanwasapersonwholookedslightlythinbutstrong-minded.3.任正非的卓越视野将华为变成享誉全球的技术巨头。RenZhengfeiisremarkablevisionwhohaschangedHuaweiintoaworld-renownedtechnologicalpowerhouse.2.她的头发很长，很浓密，如一股黑色的激流向上抛溅,又像瀑布似的悬垂于半空。Shehadlongandthickhair,whichshotupinablackrapidstream,asthoughawaterfallhadsuspendedmid-air.原：Apartfromhisremarkableachievements,whatdoesthepassagetellusaboutEinstein'slife?原：Tothepublic,hewasseenasaslightlyodd-lookingbutkindandfunnyman.原：Hehadathickmoustacheandlongwhitehair,whichsometimesstoodonendasthoughhehadjustreceivedanelectricshock.细节描写4.他们开车把儿子送到离城里好几个小时车程的大学，他不久以后将要在那儿生活和学习。(2020年1月浙江卷)

Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.6.她愉快地笑着和我打招呼，让我感觉很好。Shegreetedmewithacheerfulsmile,whichmademefeelgood.5.（那家）有一个卧病在床的男人，他的妻子和他们的小男孩，他的妻子要照顾他而无法出去工作。(2020年新高考全国I卷)Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,andtheirlittleboywhotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork.原：Thismedicine,whichwascalledartemisinin,soonbecameastandardtreatmentformalaria..原：lnthebeginning,TuYouyouwenttoHainan,wheremalariawasmorecommon,tostudymalariapatients.原：AlbertEinstein,whoisperhapsthegreatestscientistinmodernphysics,isoftenconsideredoneofthesmartestmenwhoeverlived.03写

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WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Para2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文为“生活与成长”类读后续写；以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者上中学的时候，社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作者不喜欢写作，于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下，作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然很累，但是没有放弃，坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时，作者感到写作让他很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

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容whenwhenIwasinmiddleschoolwhereatschool;intheclassroom;attheteacher’sofficewhomysocialstudiesteacherandIwhatMyteacherencouragedmetoenterawritingcontest;WhenIfinallyfinishedmyessay,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwritinghow?

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.MystorywouldcomestraightfromtheTextinterpretation（人物性格分析--Me）1.作者开始的时候因为英语写作不好，比较自卑.2.在受到老师鼓励的时候，敢于尝试。thehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.原文分析3.善于思考。4.意志坚强，勤奋努力。5.苦中作乐.6.

对赢得比赛没有信心，但并不在乎。Textinterpretation（人物性格分析--Me）

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.MystorywouldcomestraightfromtheTextinterpretation（人物性格分析--socialstudiesteacher）1.欣赏学生，善于通过不同的方式让学生展示自己的才能。2.善于鼓励学生，给学生以信心。thehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.原文分析3.对学生要求严格，一丝不苟。Textinterpretation（人物性格分析--socialstudiesteacher）relativeemotionswiththedevelopmentofthestorylineWhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Self-abasedIgottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.SelfdoubtedBut,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.persistentWhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.Enjoyableandselfbreakthrough22第二步：构建情节What’sthegenreofthepassage?Narration（记叙文）Argumentation（议论文）Exposition（说明文）Readforthegenre

Readfortheclimaxofthestory

Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.1、突破自我局限得到突破2、没有退缩、坚持不懈Theme?我作为一个来自巴西，英语为第二语言的孩子，英语写作特别困难，但在老师的鼓励之下，通过自己的努力获得了写作的乐趣。弘扬正能量：只要坚持不懈的努力，即使是自己不擅长的领域也会有所收获。老师的欣赏和鼓励会对学生产生积极的影响。Paragraph1：

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews._______________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：

______________________________________________________________________WritingideasPrediction----在老师办公室里我们会有怎样的对话？老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋。我感谢老师的鼓励，让我对写作有了态度上的转变。根据第二段段首句theawardpresentation,而且我要去参加颁奖仪式，可推断出消息是我的作品获奖了。Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.News是什么？情节设计Para1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.1.揭示news是什么？1.见面时的动作描写2.我的心情：难以置信WritingideasWritingideasPara2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.2.老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋3.我感谢老师，让自己写作有了态度转变。明白只要坚持不懈的努力，即使是自己不擅长的领域也会有所收获。所给材料倒数第二句“WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.”暗含了“我”不但找到了写作的信心,还找到了乐趣，因此，在第二段最后应该结合老师的鼓励，让主人公的写作水平和天赋得到进一步的提升和发挥。【微技能】首句提示既是前读文本的延续，更是后续文本的伏笔所在，因此要结合原文品首句，做到“心中有数”。根据主旨意图，结合要素，遵循"困境（或冲突）——解决困境（或冲突）”的思路，确保材料中出现的困境（或冲突）在续写中解决。1.两段首句定第一段，第二段首句定第一段尾句根据第一段首句“Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews（几周以后,我都快忘了比赛的时候,消息来了）.”和第二段首句“Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation（颁奖仪式后我去了老师办公室）.”可知，第一段可描写这个消息是获奖消息，以及“我”获奖后的情感变化（惊讶、惊喜）和感触。第一段的第二句可以用代词“it”指代首句提示中的“thenews”。再结合第二段首句提示语可以推断，首段最后一句应为作者想到了老师的付出和鼓励。思路点拨2.第二段首句定第二段

根据第二段首句内容可知，第二段可描写“我”对老师表达深深的感激之情，以及老师对“我”的再次鼓励和“我”的感悟，此外，第二段第二句可用“he”指代提示语中的“theteacher”。主题升华:Butforyourencouragementandguidance,Icouldn'thavemadesuchanachievement.（老师鼓励的重要性）It'syourperseveranceandhardworkthathelpedyougetthisfar.（坚持和努力的重要性)思路点拨

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwonthefirstplace.Hearingthenews,Istoodthere,frozen.Icouldn'tbelievemyears.HadIheardright?Myclassmatesgavemealookofdisbeliefatfirst,andthencheeredandclappedhappily.WhenIcametomysenses,tearsofexcitementcametomyeyes.Attheawardpresentation,Iacceptedtheawardcertificate,extremelynervousandexcited.Atthatmoment,Icouldn’thelpthinkingofmyteacher.

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.WhenIpresentedtheawardcertificatetomyteacher,hiseyesglisteningwithtears,hereachedouthishandsandhuggedmetightly.Iexpressedmysincerestgratitudetotheteacherandattributedthissmallachievementtohim.Lookingintomyeyes,hesaid,“I'msoproudofyou.It'syourownhardworkthatpaidoff.Believeinyourselfandyoucanwritebetterandbetter.”Inoddeddeterminedly.ThatwaswhenIfellinlovewithwriting.佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,myfamilymovedtoSeattle,wheremyparentsstartedtheirnewbusiness--asmallgrocerystoredownstairsmyhouse.

Asagirlofshyandreservednature,Ihadtotakeafreshstarttofitintothe

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citylife.

Onesunnyday,myschoolannouncedanexcitingevent,

atalentshowforthelocalfoodbank.

StudentswereencouragedtoshowcasetheiruniquetalentsinfrontofthepublicinthecityhallonNationalDay.

Abuzz