新高中考试英语读后续写素材与练习-续写微技能与思维点拨

读后续写素材与练专题（1）

续写微技能与思维点拨

续写主要存在四个方面问题：

1）对原文的理解不到位，续写文不对题；

2）与段落开头语的衔接不合理，行文逻辑不清；

3）情节安排不合理或无话可说；

4）语言表达上，词汇低级且出现较多的语法错误，表达不准确。此外，目前的续写教学以讲评

课、分析课居多，真正系统有效的语言输入很少。与概要写作一样，读后续写作为高考英语大作文，

时间紧，任务重，考前一定要有足够的准备与积累。

微技能一动作描写

一、动作描写的原则

要精H

使用精准化动作类词汇对动作进行细致描写，用一系列小动作而不用大动作或者用含义比

较明确的动词而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述,可以使描写更加具体生动。试比较下面两句：

@Thelittleboysaidsorrytohismother.

©Thelittleboyhunghisheadandmumbledanapologytohismother.

分析:①句中“saidsorryt。”不带任何感情色彩，而②句中使用了具体化的表示“说”的动词

mumbled,从而使一个不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。

有过程

记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示，尤其在展示人物个性的动作时,如果我

们靖蜓点水、一笔带过,就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人以深刻的印象，而通过细节描写展现出

动作的过程，表现力便会大增。如：

@Shewenttocatchthebutterfly.

②Shecreptalongthepath,bentoverswiftlyandcuppedherhandsaroundthebutterflygently.

分析:①句在描写主人公捕捉蝴蝶的动作时,没有细节的动作描写，因此显得很平淡。而②句

运用了creep,bend,cup三个连贯的动词生动具体地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙过程,

具有极强的画面感。因此，在续写过程中,在必要的地方恰当使用一连串的动词来表示过程，能为

文章增添不少色彩。

用修辞

除了在动词上做调整，还可以利用恰当的修辞手法来帮助描写动作。比喻、拟人、夸张等修

辞手法都能让动作描写变得更有表现力。

(1)比喻

①Theoldman'sfacewrinkled.

②Theoldman'sfacewaslikeawitheredapple.

⑵拟人

@Mystomachwasachingfornoteatingontime.

②Mystomachwaspunishingmefornoteatingontime.

(3)夸张

©Whensheheardthebadnews,shecried.

©Whensheheardthebadnews,ariveroftearspouredout.

分析:上面每组中的②句分别使用了比喻、拟人、夸张的修辞手法，使得动作的描述更加生

动形象，更加吸引眼球。

二、动作描写的素材

与“看、听、说”相关的词块

©listenimpatiently不耐烦地听

©glareangrilyatsb.对某人怒目而视

③glancearound/roundtheroom扫视房间

©stareat凝视

©takealookat看

©overhearafunnyconversation无意间听到一段好笑的谈话

⑦remark评论说

⑧add补充说

与“跑、跳、行走”等相关的词块

①walkacrossastreet步行穿过马路

©walkarminarm臂挽着臂走

③pacehackandforth来I可踱步

©jumptoone飞feet一跃而起

⑤walkgracefully步态优美地走

©rushoutoftheroom冲出房间

【迁移应用一】

TheGreatGifts

Once,agroupofschoolchildrenwereonanouting.Almostallofthemwereplayingball,exceptMonty,who

wasseenasabitofafool—onlygoodforpokingfunat.Hedidn'tlikefights,orsports.Hewouldn'tevendefend

himselfwhentheystartedhittinghim!Hewassostrange.Butheplayedfootballwiththeothersandkickedthe

ballthatday.Itendedupoverinalittlecave.Whentheywentintogettheball,theyfoundawoodenchest

containinganamazingbook.Thebookwasgivingoffamagicalshine.Thechildrenrantogivethebooktothe

teacher,whowasfascinatedbyit.Theyallagreedtoreaditinclassinthecomingdays.

ThubookwascalledTheGreatGifts,andilrecountedwonderfultalcsaboutgreatiiivuiilors,arlisls,wise

writers,explorers,andtreasurehunters.Witheachstorythechildrenbecamemorewide-eyed,andtheywere

enchantedbyallthosecharacterswithspecialgifts.

TheyfinallyreachedthelastpageofChebook,whichspokeabouttheoriginofthosegreatfigures.The

teacherread/'There'saplaceinheavencalledthefountainofhearts,where,priortobirth,eachheartisassigned

itsspecialgifts.Theyusealittlebitofeverythingtomakenormalpeople.But,nowandagain,somethinggoes

wrong,andsomeheartsendupmuchemptierthannormal.Inthosecases,theheartstillupwithalastgiftwhich

makesthepersoncxceptional.Thcycanlackmanyotherqualities;inmanywaystheywillbedifferentfrom

everyoneelse,andtheymaywellbeseenasstrangechildren.However,whentheirspecialgiftisdiscovered,their

achievementswillbecomepartofbookslikethisone.”

ParagraphI:

Whentheteacherclosedthebook,therewasalongsilenceintheclassroom.

Paragraph2:

分析:①句中，把“微笑”比喻成“像钻石一样闪闪发光而②句中，把"悲伤''比喻成“漂浮在悲伤的海洋里”,

展示了用修辞来体现细节描写的丰富。

二、心理描写的素材

I.与“喜悦和满意”相关的词块

abright/shiningsmile灿烂的微笑sob啜泣

amixtureofexcitementandhappiness既兴奋又becloudedwithgrief阴沉的悲伤

开心beinlowspirils情绪低落

burstintolaughter/burstoutlaughing突然大笑fallintodespair陷入绝望

起来feeldepiessed/discouraged感到沮丧/泄气

bewildwithjoy/delighl欣喜若狂haveaworriedlook愁眉苦脸

bejoyfulaboui/at/over对...很高兴3.与“生气和怨怒”相关的词块

beinhighspirits情绪高涨beveryangryat对...很生气

bepleasedbeyonddescription快乐难以言表feelangry/annoyed感到恼怒/生气

lightup喜逐颜开beseizedbyanger充满愤怒

becontent/satisfiedwith对...满意befumingwithrage大发雷霆

bedelightedal对...很高兴tremblewithanger愤怒得颤抖

withpleasure非常乐意alookofburninganger愤怒的一眼

2.与“悲伤和烦恼”相关的词块glareatsb.怒视

besadathcarl心里悲伤flarcup勃然大怒

bedowninspirits情绪低落beinarage一怒之下

anoceanofsadness悲伤的海洋bemadat对...生气

burstintotears/burstoutcrying大哭起来

【迁移应用二】

Oneday,mybrotherandIwerealoneinourapartment.Thereasonwasthatmyparentshadbothgonefora

ballpartyandhadleftmeinchargeofeverything.!wasdoingmyhomeworkwhilemyyoungerbrotherwas

watchingTV.Allofasudden,thedoorbellrang.Ding-dong!Ding-dong!Myyoungerbrotherhadrushedtothedoor

beforeIdecidedtoanswerthedoor.Weboththoughtthatourparentshadcomehome.Asaresult,heunlockedthe

doorandopenedit.

Outsideofthehousestoodamanwhoworeablackraincoatandblackrubberboots.Helookednodifferent

fromotherpeopleandhesaidthathewasasalesmanandaskedpolitelyifourmotherorfatherwasalhomesohe

couldtalkwiththem.

Withoutanythinking,mybrothersaid,"No."Heaskedifwewouldliketobuysomecomicbooks,whichhe

wasselling.Iquicklyexplainedtohimthatwewerenotsupposedtobuyanythingwithoutourparents'

permission.However,itseemedthathewasnotwillingtofollowmyadviceandhehadanintcn:iontoenterour

house.

Then,Irealizedsomethingterriblewouldhappen.AsIwasabouttoclosethedoonheforcedhiswayintoour

house.Hetookoutaknifeandforcedmetotieupmybrother'shandswithsomeropewhichhetookoutfromhis

pocket.ItieduphishandsbutItiedinaspecialwaysomybrothercoulduntiehimselfasweoftendid.Theman

thentiedmyhandsupandlockedbothofusinthekitchen.

SoonJiewentupstairstosearchthebedroomforsomethingvaluable.Imanagedtoteachmybrothertountie

therop3onhishands.Hethenuntiedmc.lrushedtothetelephonetocallthepolice,butthelinewasdead.

ParagraphI:

Thedoorswerealllockedfromtheoutsideandwhat'sworse,!didnothavethekeys.

Paragraph2:

Justatthesametimeourparentscamebackhome.

范文欣赏

Thedoorswerealllockedfromtheoutsideandwhat'sworse,Ididnothavethekeys.Butluckily,theman

forgottolockthekitchenwindow.BothmybrotherandImanagedtogetoutofthehousethroughthewindow

withjoyandwerantothenearbypolicestation,nervouslybuthappily,whereweaskedthemforhelp.Thepolice

bravelyarrivedatourhouseassoonaspossible.Andasaresult,themanwascaught,whichmadeusveryhappy.

Justatthesametimeourparentscamebackhome.Thepoliceaskedmyfamilytogotothepolicestation.lt

wasattherethepolicetoldusthatthemanwasawantedrobberpretendingtosellcomicbooksandtheyhadbeen

lookingforhimforalongtime.Thepolicepraisedmybrotherandmeforourbraveness.Backhome,Itoldmy

parentsthewholestoryabouttherobberywithamixtureofexcitementandhappiness.Theywerethankfulthatwe

werenothurtbuttheyscoldedmefornotstoppingmybrotherfromopeningthedoortostrangers.Ilearneda

lessononsafetyandresponsibility.

做技能三修辞描写

ExamplesofMetaphor

Example1

Allreligions,arts,andsciencesarcbranchesofthesametree.(AlbertEinstein)

Clearly,Einsteinwasn'ttalkingaboutaliteraltreeRuthe'sshowingacloserelationshipbetweendifferent

topicsbysuggestingthatthey'reallpartofthesamelivingthing.Healsobasicallyraisesaninterestingquestion

-ifart.religion,andscienceareallbranches,whatshouldwecallthetree'strunk?

很明显，爱因斯坦说的不是字面意义上的树。但他通过暗示不同的主题都是同一生物的一部分，展示

了它们之间的密切关系。他还提出了一个有趣的问题——如果艺术、宗教和科学都是分支的话，我们该怎

么称呼树的树干呢？

Example2

Thatfootballplayerisreallyputtingtheteamonhisbackthisevening!

Footballcommentatorsusethisphraseallthetimewhenanentireteamappearstobedependingonits

runningback.Theimageofasinglemanrunninghardwithawholefootballteamonhisbackisanexpressionof

hardworkanddedication.

当整个球队似乎都依赖于它的跑动时，足球评论员总是使用这个短语。一个人背着整个足球队拼命奔

跑的形象是努力工作和献身精神的表现。

Example3

Shewasarockstaratourlastbusinesspresentation.

Thisisprobablynotreferringtoaliteralrockstarfallingfromspaceortheothercommonmetaphor:a

musicianperformingatarockconcert.Instead,itsimplymeansthepersondeliveredagreatperformanceatthe

meetingandstoodoutlikearockstaronthestage.

这可能不是指字面意义上的摇滚明星从天而降，也不是其他常见的比喻:音乐家在摇滚音乐会上表演。

相反，它只是意味着这个人在会议上表现出色，像舞台上的摇滚明星一样引人注目

微技能四外部冲突

1）角色之间的冲突（人物观点差异，竞争需要等）

JQ：（201711浙江高考）On（hefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.After

drivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-looking

backyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.开车找旅馆一徒劳无功一母亲建

议搭帐篷在他人后院David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一）

2）角色与环境之间的冲突

如：（201706浙江高考）ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhimhesawinstantlythatit

wasn'tadogatall,butawolf:quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac'sheartjumped,hefiredthesprayatthe

wolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminute

later,Thenit,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellback

Mac骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人-角色与狼-环境大战）

3）时间依赖的发展：决策变得紧急

如：（201706浙江高考）Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Getintothecar."PaulshoutedatMa