Unit2Naturaldisasters写作之读后续写课件高中英语译林版

Unit2Naturaldisasters译林版2020必修第三册读后续写：与自然灾害相关读话题写作文高一下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。12技法点拨

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如何进行情感描写01（1）副词开头突出“所做”动作副词放在句首可以强调主语的动作，使动作具有一定的感情色彩或语气‌。‌例1：Carefully,hesteppedoverallthebrokenglass.他小心翼翼地踩过了所有的碎玻璃。例2：Joyfully,heskippedupthestreet.他高兴地沿街蹦蹦跳跳。【说明】句中的“carefully”和“joyfully”把后面的“step踩”和“skip跳”两个动作描写得更加具体和生动。1.如何描写所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思、所感(2)形容词短语开头说明主语“所思所感”形容词（短语）直接放到句首，用逗号与主句（句子）隔开，可起强调作用，烘托出主人公的心理活动、情绪变化、状态等。例3：Curioustoknowwhatwasinside,hetiptoedintothedarkcave.他好奇地想知道里面是什么，踮着脚尖走进了黑暗的洞穴。【说明】句中的“Curioustoknowwhatwasinside”是形容词短语，说明主语走进黑暗洞穴的原因。例4：Unabletosayaword,hewasrootedtothespot.一句话也说不出来，他就愣在了原地。【说明】句中的“unabletosayaword”也是一个形容词短语，是“rootedtothespot”的伴随动作，说明主语的状态。1.如何描写所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思、所感(3)非谓语开头体现人物的“所感”例5：Lookingaroundhimcautiously,heslippedintotheroomandsoftlyclosedthedoor.他小心翼翼地环顾四周，溜进了房间，轻轻地关上门。【说明】这里的“Lookingaroundhimcautiously”意思是：小心翼翼地环顾四周，是一个非谓语动词短语。例6：Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.简感到失望，不得不再待一夜。【说明】本句中的开头，用了doing的形式，即feelingdisappointed感到失望。1.如何描写所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思、所感(4)对话或独白开头增强“所说”情境效果例7：“Let’sseewhogetstherefirst!”Rachelshouted,asshepedaledfastandzoomedpastJenny.“让我们看看谁先到那里去！”瑞秋一边叫着，一边飞快地蹬着车从珍妮身边冲过去。例8："Getintothecar."PaulshoutedatMac.“上车！”保罗对麦克喊道。1.如何描写所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思、所感(5)情景描写加强“所见所闻”情节例9：Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.我们开车穿过了几个州，沿途看到了很多好风景。例10：Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeepvalleys,holdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.我望着车窗外，蜿蜒的河流，高耸的山脉，阳光明媚的海滩和深邃的山谷，完全吸引了我的注意力。【说明】这两句中用“视觉+环境描写”的写作手法，成功地抓住了读者的注意力！1.如何描写所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思、所感(6)动作描写增强“所作”画面感例11：Furrystartedwagginghistailandrunningaroundincircleswhenhesawhismastertakingaleashoutfromthedrawer.Furrywasallreadyforhiseveningwalk.当他看到主人从抽屉里拿出一条皮带时，Furry开始摇尾巴，绕着圈子跑来跑去。Furry已经准备好晚上的散步了。【说明】一连串有关Furry的动作链，像放电影一样，印刻在读者的大脑中。为后面情节发展做好了铺垫。例12：Dadexchangedaglancewithme.WhynotcamptosatisfyMom?爸爸和我相互看了一眼。为什么不通过露营来满足妈妈？【说明】此句运用“动作描写+问句衔接”的方式，激发了读者的阅读兴趣。1.如何描写所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思、所感2.自然灾害类读后续写常见描写佳句灾害来袭情景1.Thedirtandsandstungmyskinlikeathousandbees.泥土和沙子像上千只蜜蜂一样刺痛着我的皮肤。（沙暴）2.Wind-blownflamehadleapedfromthetopofonetreetoanother.被风吹着的火焰从一棵树的树顶跳到另一棵树上。（山火）3.Wavesabouttwelvemetershighcamerushingin,drowningeverything.大约12米高的海浪涌了过来，淹没了一切。（海啸）4.Icouldhearwhatsoundedlikeamillioncaralarmsringingfromtheground.我能听到地面上好像有100万辆汽车的警报器在响。（地震）5.Shelookedatthebackdoor.Waterwasflowinginunderneath.Sheturnedaroundandsawdirtywaterfountainingoutofthedrainandfillingthesink.她看了看后门，水正从下面流进来。转过身来，她看到肮脏的水从排水管中涌出，填满了水槽。（洪水）6.Theavalanchegatheredspeedandsize,grabbingrocksandtreesandanythingelseinitspathasitrusheddownthemountain,tearingthehotelfromitsfoundation.雪崩的速度越来越快，规模也越来越大，卷着岩石、树木和其他东西，冲下山去，将酒店连根拔起。（雪崩）2.自然灾害类读后续写常见描写佳句应对灾害措施1.Coldandhungry,sheregrettedshehadmadenopreparationsfortheterribleweather!她又冷又饿，后悔没有为这可怕的天气做准备！2.Insteadofcomingdowntheroof,thetwosisterscheeredeachotherupandtookturnstoshoutloudlytotryandattracttheirparents’attention.两姐妹没有从房顶上下来，而是互相鼓励，轮流大声喊叫，试图引起父母的注意。3.Realizingthattheyweretrappedbythefloodandthatitwasimpossibleforhertodriveout,shepulledJamesontoherback,headingfortheroof.当她意识到他们已经被洪水困住了，自己也不可能开车出去时，她把James拉到背上，朝着屋顶走去。4.Suddenly,Samifelthimselfthrownontothetopofatree.Hegrabbedholdofit.Lookingaround,hesawthateverythinghadbeendestroyed.Inthedistance,hesawhisgrandpahangingonanothertree.突然，Sami觉得自己被抛到了一棵树的树顶上。他抓住了它。环顾四周，他发现一切都被毁掉了。在远处，他看到他的爷爷正挂在另一棵树上。2.自然灾害类读后续写常见描写佳句劫后余生描述1.Itwasnotuntilthethirdmorningthattherescuersfinallyarrived.直到第三天早上，救援人员终于赶到了。2.Hewasalmostnumbwhenheheardthewonderfulsoundofsomeonecallinghisname.他几乎麻木了，这时他听到一个美妙的声音，有人在喊他的名字。3.Whatwesawweakenedourheart.Wedecidedtohelpthevictimsafteranarrowescape.我们看到的一切令我们心酸。死里逃生后，我们决定帮助那些受难者。4.NowordscandescribemyexcitementwhenIrealizedIwassomehowstillalive.Myparentshuggedmetightlyintheirarmsastearsofjoyrandownourcheekslikeriversthatwouldn’tstopflowing.当我意识到我还活着时，我的兴奋之情难以言表。父母紧紧把我抱在怀里，喜悦的泪水顺着我们的脸颊流下来，像滔滔不绝的河流。写作实践：

自然灾害相关读后续写02阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

WhenIworkedasanurse,Iwasondaydutywhilemyworkmateswereonnightduty.Ononeshift,Isensedsomethingstrangejustbeforegoingoffdutyat11a.m.Iputdownthetray(托盘)onthetableandsuddenlyitfelloffthetable.Atfirst,Ididn’tcareasIthoughtIhadaccidentallyknockeditover,butthenIfeltthewholebuildingshakingandheardpatientswerescreamingandrunningmadly.Atthatmoment,Irealizedthatanearthquakewashappening.Myfirstthoughtwastorescuemypatientandprotectmyself.Iquicklycaughtholdofanearbypatient,whowasterriblyfrightened,andpushedherunderabed.Andthen,Igotunderanotherbedmyself.Assoonastheearthquakestopped,Idecidedtotryandgetthepatientsafelyoutside.Icarriedheroutandhelpedherdowntothegrassland,whereseveralotherpeoplehadgathered.AsIwasafraidthatmyotherworkmateswereindanger,Iwentbackinsidethebuildingagain.WhenImetLucy,ourheadnurse,Ifoundherpatientcouldn’twalk.Wemadeaseatforthepatientbylinkingourhandsandarms,andcarriedheroutsidetogether.Wewentbackthroughthebuildingtocheckifanyonewasleftbehindinoursickroom.Justthen,wesawthatamandoctorwascallingforvolunteerstogodowntoothersickroomswithhimtohelpmorepatientsandmedicalworkers.Sowefollowedhimtogether.Thedoctorwentaheadofusandfoundoneofthenursespartiallycoveredwithbrokenstones,luckilystillalive.Suddenly,theaftershockstruckandthedoctororderedustoleave.Thebravedoctorintendedtostayaloneandriskhisownlifetosavethenurse.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Butnoonewaswillingtoleave.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Mynexttaskwastosettleandcareforthesickontheground.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文讲述了一名护士在上班时碰到了地震，想方设法把尽可能多的人救出病房和医院大楼。在同事的齐心协力下，他们救出了在地震中受伤的病人，为他们治疗并搭建了帐篷。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenIwasondaydutywhereInhospitalwhoI,patientandworkmatesWhatAnearthquakewashappening;Iandworkmateswenttorescuemypatients.WhySomeworkmatesandpatientswereindanger.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①根据第一段段首句“Butnoonewaswillingtoleave.（但没有人愿意离开。）”可知，第一段可描写“我”和同事救助被困护士的经过。结合前面所学技巧，第二句可以用副词“immediately”开头，以显示出动作的紧迫性；根据第一段内容和第二段段首句，段尾我们可以采用一组动作链来进行动作描写，以更好的衔接第二段。思路点拨②根据第二段段首句“Mynexttaskwastosettleandcareforthesickontheground.（我的下一个任务是安置和照顾地面上的病人。）”可知，第二段可描写“我”安置并照顾病人，结尾可表达劫后余生的感慨。结合前面所学技巧，接下来我们可以用动词-ing形式短语来体现人物的心理变化，如“feelingrelieved”。2.续写线索：和同事开始救援——救出被困护士——安置和照顾病人——感慨劫后余生——期待震后重建思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点2322第三步：巧用话题词汇、句式完成句子1.___________________________________________(我们立即采取迅速行动开始救援).(immediately开头突出“所做”动作)2.________________________________(我们轻轻地把积木一块一块地移走)togentlyliftherout.3.__________________________________________(她身上多处受伤，血流不止).4._________________(毫不拖延地),wewheeledhertothetreatmentroomand______________________________(以最快的速度治疗了她的伤口).完成句子Immediately,wetookquickactiontobegintherescueWegentlyremovedtheblocksonebyoneShewasbleedingfromseveralinjuriesinherbodyWithoutdelaytreatedherwoundsasquicklyaspossible5.Iwasrelievedthatthepatientsandthedoctorsandnurses___________________________(已经安全逃离了大楼).6.Ithenhelpedrescueworkerssetuptentsandcreatearescuecenter______________________________(让病人恢复了正常的治疗).完成句子hadsafelyescapedfromthebuildingtohelpthepatientsrecovertheirnormaltreatmentButnoonewaswillingtoleave.Immediately,wetookquickactiontobegintherescue(副词开头；衔接句).Weencouragedhertokeepcalmandbuildupconfidence.Atthesametime,wegentlyremovedtheblocksonebyonetogentlyliftedherout(动词不定式做目的状语).Shewasbleedingfromseveralinjuriesinherbody.Duringourrescue,therewereseveralsmallearthquakesoccurringandthebuildingshookviolently(动词-ing形式短语作后置定语).Withoutdelay,wewheeledhertothetreatmentroomandtreatedherwoundsasquicklyaspossible(动作链).Thenwetookherdownstairstosafety（衔接句）.Mynexttaskwastosettleandcareforthesickontheground.Feelingrelieved,Isawthepatients,thedoctorsandnurseswhohadsafelyescapedfromthebuilding(动词-ing形式短语体现人物的心理变化；衔接句）.Ithenhelpedrescueworkerssetuptentsandcreatearescuecentertohelpthepatientsrecovertheirnormaltreatment.Lookingatallthepeoplesurvivingtheearthquakewithourhelp,Ifelttherebirthoflife.Itwasourteamworkthatmadeadifference.Iheldthefirmbeliefthatsomedayinthefuturemyworkplacewouldcamebacktolifeandtookonanewlook,wherewewouldcontinueworkingtogethertosavemorepatients（劫后余生感受）.佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Ten-year-oldSamilovedtovisithisgrandfather’shouse.Thehousewasnearthebeautifulbluesea.Attheseasidestoodthickandtallpalmtreeswithgreencoconutshangingfromthem.Whenthecoconutsfelldown,Samiwouldbreakthemopenanddrinkthecoconutwater.ItwasalwaysgreatfuntospendtheholidaysatGrandpa’splace.Thiswintervacation,Samiwassurprisedwhenhecametohisgrandfather’svillage.Therewerehardlyanytreesleft.Hesawhousesbuiltnearthesea.Peoplehadcutdownmanypalmtreesandtherewashardlyanygreeneryleft.Grandpa’shousewasdifferent.Heneverallowedhistreestobecut.Hehuggedeachpalmtreeinhiscourtyard.Healsonamedthetwobigtreesnearthefrontdoor—onewasPetu,andtheotherBetu.Theyweretallandgreenandgavethesweetest,juiciestcoconuts.Onenight,Samiwasawakenedbyastrangesound.Hecouldnotsleep.Hetossedandturned(辗转反侧)inbed.Suddenly,thegroundshookasiftheearthwassplitting.HesatupstraightandthenrantoGrandpa.Heclungto(抓紧)hisgrandpatightly.Grandpacriedout,“It’sanearthquake!”Theyranoutsidethehouse.Suddenly,therewasaloudsound;theearthwasnotsplittingbuttheseawasroaring.Peoplewereshouting,screamingandcrying,“Theseaisrising!”Thevillagersstartedrunningawayfromthebeach.Samiwatchedwithfear.Thewaveswererisinghigherandhigher.Samithought,“Howbigthewavesare!”Hewentintothehouseagainandsawwatercominginfromallsides.Hewasscared.Samirememberedhismothertellinghimlongago,“Youmustalwaysgetoutofthehouseifthefloodscometoonear.”HeranoutsidethehousewithGrandpa.Butthewatercamesurging(汹涌)in.Wavesabouttwelvemetershighcamerushingin,drowningeverything.Waterwasallaroundandeverywhere.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:GrandpaheldSami’shandtightlybutahugewaveseparatedthem.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:NowtheywereupinPetu.____________________________________________________