读后续写-个人成长感悟心理变化类对于失明的恐惧？四针眼部注射？我选择硬刚为了那份心中的光明-2025-2026届高中英语作文复习讲义

天一大联考高二【标注版题目】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Ifirststartedwearingglassesatagefive.Theywerethick,black-framed,and

manyfriendssaidthatIlookedlikeRalphie,aboyinthemovieAChristmasStory,

alwayswearingthick口lasses曜&分词受珏做件应动作＞.Sadl|,theywereright.Overtheyears,

mynearsightednessworsened，无灵士语句，,andmylensesbecameheavier.Anobvious

depressionformedonthebridgeofmynosefromtheweight.1oftenjoked

thatifthesunshonejustright,1couldstartforestfires.

Inmytwenties,Igotmyfirstpairofthinnerlenses.Wearingthem动名词1语—LL环।felt

likewearingnothingatall.Later,polarizedsunglassesmadetheworld'scolorsclearer

thaneverbeforethoughIhadfinallyseenlifefullyuntilmyfalhcrwunlblind.

Diagnosedwithmaculaedegeneration应击分许做比分定加.heignoredtreatment

adviceandsoonlostmostofhisvision.Onceactive,nowhecouldonlysitinhis

chair.

Aneyeexamshowedasmallspotofdegenerationinmyeyesaswell.Atfirst,it

seemedminor,butthenextyearitaffectedbotheyes.Thencameacataract

operation钙例装句fwhichhelped,butmyvisionproblemswerefarfromover依山.Just

beforeretiiement,Iwasdiagnosedwithmyastheniagravis,adiseasethatweakens

musclesincludingthosecontrollingtheeyes.|tyeyelidsbecametootiredtostay

open,andunclearvisionstruckseveraltimesaday.Thefinalwarningcameata

neuro-ophthalmologist'soffice.Coveringmyleft1readthe

chart-butalargeblackshadowblockedmostofmyvision1灵士语Overnight,I

becamelegallyblindinthateye.Myfearbfinjections（注射）wasgreaterthanthe

fearofblindness,yettheonlywaytosavemysightwasthrougheyeinjections伏笔与

Botheyesneededtreatment,andIwouldfacefourinjectionsintotaj.My

heartracedasIimaginedtheprocess.Ifeltamixoffear,determination,andho.

knowings儿在分外维语做伴M动作）thattheseinjectionsweremyonlychancetokeepseeingthe

worldIloved.

注意:1.续写词数应为150左右2请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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天一大联考高二

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Ifirststartedwearingglassesatagefive.Theywerethick,black-framed,and

manyfriendssaidthatIlookedlikeRalphie,aboyinthemovieAChristmasStory,

alwayswearingthickglasses.Sadly,theywereright.Overtheyears,my

nearsightednessworsened,andmylensesbecameheavier.Anobviousdepression

formedonthebridgeofmynosefromtheweight.1oftenjokedthatifthesunshone

justright,Icouldstartforestfires.

Inmytwenties,Igotmyfirstpairofthinnerlenses.Wearingthemfeltlike

wearingnothingatall.Later,polarizedsunglassesmadetheworld'scolorsclearer

thaneverbeforethoughIhadfinallyseenlifefullyuntilmyfatherwentblind.

Diagnosedwithmaculardegeneration,heignoredtrealmenladviceandsoonlostmost

ofhisvision.Onceactive,nowhecouldonlysitinhischair.

Aneyeexamshowedasmallspotofdegenerationinmyeyesaswell.Atfirst,it

seemedminor,butthenextyearitaffectedbotheyes.Thencameacataractoperation,

whichhelped,butmyvisionproblemswerefarfromover.,Juslbeforeretirement,I

wasdiagnosedwithmyastheniagravis,adiseasethatweakensmusclesincluding

thosecontrollingtheeyes.Myeyelidsbecametootiredtostayopen,andunclear

visionstruckseveraltimesaday.Thefinalwarningcameatancuro-ophthalmologist's

office.Coveringmylefteye,Ireadthechart-butalargebiackshadowblockedmost

ofmyvision.Overnight.Ibecamelegallyblindinthateye.Mytearbfinjections（注

4寸）wasgreaterthanthefearofblindness,yettheonlywaytosavemysightwas

througheyeinjections.

Botheyesneededtreatment,andIwouldfacefourinjectionsintotal.Myheart

racedasIimaginedtheprocess.Ifeltamixoffear,determination,andhope,knowing

thattheseinjectionsweremyonlychancetokeepseeingtheworldIloved.

注意:1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:1madeupmymindfinally.

Paragraph2:Ibegantonoticesmallimprovementsinmyvision.

一、文章类型归类

本篇属于——/个人成长感悟类/心理变化类（视力退化T恐惧T勇

气一希望）带“疾病情境+内心转折+励志成长二

特点：

情绪层次清晰：恐惧一挣扎—勇气一希望

情节连续性强：视力变差一医生诊断一做出决定—治疗效果

更强调内心活动、心理描写、情绪递进

结尾要体现主题：“面劝赵慎，勇敢前进;珍视光明”

续写总体布局

段落任务情感主线一正节主线

写“决定接受注

P1:Imadeupmymind恐惧一克服做决定一去医

射”的心理历程与

finally.一勇气院一注射过程

行动

紧张一放松视力改善一生

P2:Ibegantonoticesmall写治疗后带来的

一希望一活回归一领悟

improvements...变化与反思

感恩主题

2,续写构思核心策略

①承接原文情绪

原文末尾是：

tlfcargreaterthanfearofblindness”

“myheartraced''

T强烈焦虑情渚，需要顺着写“内心挣扎一鼓起勇气

②承接原文动作与情节

原文给出明确动作导向：

“onlywaytosavemysightwasthroughinjections”

一第一段必须写：接受注射。

③设计冲突与突破

注射过程是关键冲突点，可写：

注射前----f•发抖、心跳加速

注射时医生安抚

注射后疼痛但松了一口气

④点题：光明价值/对父亲的对比

原文讲父亲因拒绝治疗而失明—暗示主题：“我不能像父亲一样，我要抓住希

望。”

续写时可呼应：

想起父亲

感悟：勇敢面对治疗才是对光明的尊重

故事山结构

阶段原文对应续写对应

Opening情境铺垫从小戴眼镜、视力下降—

RisingAction上升父亲失明一自己检查出病情变严

注射前的恐惧、犹豫

冲突重

“overnight…legallyblind,,—>必须真正接受注射（疼痛/

Climax高潮

接受注射紧张）

FallingAction冲突

视力出现微小改善

缓解

对生命、光明的感悟；

Resolution结局

珍惜视力

与续写衔接最强的原文句

原文句作用

续写第一段的情感

“myfearofinjectionswasgreaterthanthefearof

blindness"起点

“myheartracedasIimaginedtheprocess”第一段要承接的心

原文句作用

理恐慌

“onlywaytosavemysightwasthroughinjections”第一段必须写注射

第二段改善后的对

“Iwasdiagnosedwithmyastheniagravis...eyelidstoo

tiredtostayopcn^^比

第二段主题升华回

“fatherwentblind...ignoredtreatment”

扣

心情描写句

“myfearofinjections...M—>强烈恐惧

“myheartraced"—>紧张

“amixoffbar,determination,andhope”一发杂情绪

动作描写句

“coveringmylefteye”

“readthechart”

“sitinhischair”（父亲）

动作体现身体无力、视力下降一第二段叮反衬改善。

关键转折点

父亲失明（暗示“不能重蹈覆辙”）

自己视力迅速恶化

“onlyway...injections”（必须行动）

一续写第一段必须完成这一步c

伏笔

伏笔用法

小时候一直戴厚眼镜长期视力脆弱，为后文病情恶化埋伏笔

父亲失明对比：拒绝治疗的后果

伏笔用法

“spotofdegeneration”病情逐渐力口重

wmyeyelidsbecametootired"隐喻“我正在失去元明‘‘

冲突点

外部冲突：眼疾导致视力快速恶化

内部冲突：巨大恐惧vs保住光明的愿望

关键冲突：必须注射VS害怕注射

隐含线索

父亲的经历=警示：治疗的重要性

自己不断恶化=不能再拖延

^determinationandhopc”=续写主题方向

解决方案

战胜恐惧一接受注射

视力改善一看见生活细节

情感升华—感悟光明、勇气、生命价值

分析

内容分析原文反映句

角度

人物叙述者从小视力差，后期疾病导致“Ifirststartedwearingglassesatage

刻画快速恶化；父亲作为对照人物“myfatherwentblind.”

情感自嘲一担忧一害怕一绝望一决心一“myfear...greater...4<amixoffear,

层次希望determination,andhope.”

关键

父亲失明T自己病情加重一法

情节"Overnight,Ibecamelegallyblind：

律意义失明—必须注射

点

语言自嘲+情感递进+医学描述真实感“Icouldstartforestfires.”

分析

内容分析原文反映句

角度

特色

关键

nearsightedness,degeneration,文中多次反复出现degeneration->

词分

injections,determination,hope主题线索

析

心理对注射的恐惧、对失明的恐惧、对

“Myheartraced...

描写光明的渴望

动作遮住左眼、读视力表、父亲只能坐“Coveringmylefteye,Ireadthe

描写着chart.^^

环境医院检查、在椅子上、医生办公室

“ataneuro-ophthalmologisfsoffice”

描写（严肃压抑）

隐含珍视光明；勇敢面对恐惧；不要重

父亲线索强烈暗示

主题及上一代的错误

情感自嘲—轻松一焦虑—恐惧一

多处情绪词变化

转折勇气

空间

家一医院一医生办公室“ataneuro-ophthalmologist^office”

转换

时间overtheyears,later,atfirst,thenext

大量时间状语推进疾病恶化

过渡year,justbeforeretirement,overnight

二、动作/心理/环境描写

①动作描写

MyhandstrembleduncontrollablyasIsignedtheconsentform.

我的手在签同意书时不受控制地颤抖。

1clenchedtheedgeofthechair,tryingtosteadymybreathing.

我抓紧椅子边缘，努力让呼吸平稳下来。

Thedoctorgentlyliftedmyeyelidandpositionedtheneedle.

医生轻轻抬起我的眼皮，把针头对准位置。

Isqueezedmyeyesshut,bracingmyselfforthesting.

我紧闭双眼，为刺痛做好准备。

Colddropsslidacrossmycheekasthenursecleanedaroundmyeye.

当护士清洁眼周时，冰凉的药水滑过我的脸颊。

Myfingersdugintomypalms,leavingcrescent-shapedmarks.

我的手指紧扣手心，留下弯月状的痕迹。

Iforcedmyselftositstill,thougheveryinstincttoldmetopullback.

我强迫自己坐稳，尽管本能都让我想缩回去。

ThelightsaboveblurredasIfixedmygazeontheceiling.

我盯着天花板，头顶的灯光变得模糊。

1releasedaslowbreaththemomenttheprocedurewasover.

手术结束时，我缓缓吐出一口气。

Iblinkedseveraltimes,tryingtoadjusttothefaintbrightness.

我眨了几下眼，努力适应微弱的亮光。

心理描写

Awaveofdreadwashedovermethemomenttheneedlecameintoview.

当针头出现的一瞬间，一股恐惧感向我袭来。

Mymindscreamedforescape,yetmybodystayedrootedtothechair.

我心里在疯狂逃离，但身体却钉在椅子上。

Ikeptremindingmyselfthatcouragewasnottheabsenceoffearbut

actingdespiteit.

我不断提醒自己，勇气不是没有恐惧，而是尽管害怕仍愿意行动。

Forasecond,1almostbackedout,butthememoryofmyfather's

helplessnesspulledmeback.

有一刻我差点放弃，但对父亲无助的记忆把我拉了回来。

Mythoughtstangledbetweenpanicanddetermination.

我的思绪在恐慌与决心之间纠缠。

Eachheartbeatfeltlikeadrumwarningmeofwhatwascoming.

每一次心跳都像是一面预警的鼓。

Aquietvoiceinsidewhisperedthatthiswasmylastchance.

内心有个微弱的声音低语：这是我最后的机会。

Thefearoflosingsightforeverweighedheavierthanthemomentarypain.

失去视力的恐惧比片刻的疼痛更沉重。

Hopeflickeredattheedgeofmyanxiety,faintbutundeniable.

希望在焦虑的边缘闪烁，微弱却真实。

RelieffloodedthroughmewhenIrealizedIhadmadeitthrough.

当我意识到自己挺过去时，一股轻松感涌上心头。

环境描写

Thesterilesmellofdisinfectantfilledthesmallexaminationroom.

小小的诊室里弥漫着消毒水的无菌气味。

Brightwhitelightshungoverhead,coldandunforgiving.

头顶悬着明亮的白灯，冰冷而无情。

Machinesbeepedsteadilyinthecorner,markingthesilencebetweenus.

角落里的机器发出规律的滴声，填补着我们之间的沉默。

Theroomseemedtooquiet,asifholdingitsbreathforwhatwastocome.

房间安静得过分，仿佛也在为即将发生的事屏住呼吸。

Afaintchilllingeredintheair,addingtomyuneasiness.

空气里残留着一丝凉意，加深了我的不安。

Themetalinstrumentsonthetrayreflectedaharshglintunderthelights.

托盘上的金属器械在灯光下反射出刺眼的光。

Thechairfeltharderthanusual,offeringlittlecomfort.

椅子比平常更硬，几乎不给人任何安慰。

Theblindswerehalf-drawn,castingnarrowstripesofshadowonthe

floor.

百叶窗半拉着，在地板上投下狭长的阴彩。

Icouldhearmuffledfootstepsoutside,fadinginandoutofthesilence.

外面隐约传来胆步声，在寂静中时隐时现。

Theroomsmelledfaintlyofalcoholandsomethingmetallic.

房间里略带酒精和金属的味道。

常见单词的高级替换词

A.表“害怕/恐惧”

常用词高级替换

afraidterrified/petrified/unsettled/alarmed/horrified

B.表“紧张/担忧”

常用词高级替换

nervousonedge/tense/jittery/uneasy/agitated

C.表“改善/变好”

常用词高级替换

improvesharpen/brighten/recover/stabilize/pickup

D.表“痛/不适”

常用词高级替换

painsting/discomfort/soreness/sharpness/pressure

E.表“决定/下定决心”

常用词商级替换

decideresolveto/committo/makeupone'smind/optto/determineto

固定搭配

workupthecouragetodo

鼓起勇气做某事

=summonthecouragetodo

befloodedwith(emotion)

被某情绪淹没

e.g.floodedwithtear/relief

clingtohope

紧抓希望不放

pushthroughthefear

突破恐惧

beonthebrinkof...

濒临、接近某种不利情况

steadyone'sbreath/heartbeat

调整呼吸/心跳

holdone'sbreath

屏住呼吸（形容紧张）

awave/rush/surgeof

一阵（情绪的上升）

keepone为eyesfixedon...

目光锁定某物（手术场景常用）

takeonthechallenge

迎接挑战（治疗主题常用）

词汇深度解析

1.tremble

词性：v.词意：发抖，颤抖

近义词：shake,quiver,shudder

反义词：steady,compose

例句：

Hishandstrembledasthedoctorpreparedtheneedle.

Icouldfeelmyvoicetremblewithfear.

2.dread

词性：n./v.

词意：恐惧，极度害怕

近义词：fear,terror,anxiety

反义四:confidence,calm

例句:

Asenseofdreadsettledinmychest.

Idreadedthemomenttheinjectionbegan.

3.determination

词性：n.词意：决心，坚定

近义词：resolve,firmness,persistence

反义词：hesitation,doubt

例句:

Determinationslowlyreplacedmyfear.

Hefacedthetreatmentwithquietdetermination.

4.blurry

词性：adj.

词意：模糊的

近义词：unclear,fuzzy,indistinct

反义词：sharp,clear

例句:

Myvisionturnedblurryagainthatmorning.

Iblinkeduntiltheshapesstoppedlookingblurry.

5.reassure

词性：v.词意：安抚，使安心

近义词：comfort,encourage,soothe

反义词：alarm,upset

例句:

Thedoctorreassuredmethatthepainwouldbebrief.

Herwordsreassuredmemorethansherealized.

三、PossibleVersions(4)

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windowIstillhadtoprotectmysight.WithImyfhlher'sdecliningfigureflashing

acrossmymind,Ifollowedthenurseintothetreatmentroom.Thesharpscentof

disinfectantwrappedaroundme心灵主语句，环埴买口西、tighteningm、chest，鼻在分口一语做站主轨

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remaininginjectionswithlesstremblinginmyhandsandmoredeterminationin

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inalongwhile,Ifeltthattheworldwasslowlycomingbackintofocus.

A.地道搭配（可积累）

makeupone^mindtodo下定决心

tugatone飞heart牵动心绪

stepbacksignaling...后退示意...

subtleimprovements细微的提升

returnfortheremaininginjections返回接受剩余注射

washedoverme情绪涌上心头

comebackintofocus重新变得清晰

B.情绪描写亮点词汇

feartuggedatme

chesttightened

faintsenseofrelief

encouragedbytheprogress

gratitudewashedoverme

C.动作描写亮点词汇

breathquickened

musclesstiffened

forcedmyselftostare

handstrembled

steppedback

returnedwithdelermination

D.高级替换词（部分示例）

简单词高级替换

afraiduneasy/unsettled/alarmed

painfulunbearable/stinging/sharp

improvesharpen/brighten/recover

saddiscouraged/troubled

thinkreflect/recall/picture

E.可积累语料（含例句）

1.tugatone'sheart

释义：触动心弦

例句：

Thememoryofmyfathertuggedatmyheart.

Hiswordstuggedatherheartmorethanheknew.

2.subtle

释义：微弱的，细微的

例句：

Inoticedasubtlechangeinthebrightness.

Herexpressionshowedasubtlemixoffearandhope.

3.inthefaceof面对（困难）

例句：

Hestayedcalminthefaceofdanger.

1chosetopushforwardinthefaceofmyfear.

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pound.Butasthedoctorcalmly101dmeitwasover,Irealizedthatthefear

beforehandhadbeenfarworsethanthepainitself,Rivingmetheconfidenceto

facethenextstepsi现去分药灶语做伴改动作＞.

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Ibeganto〃。&esmallimprovementsi，ivision.Atfirst,thechangeswere

barelynoticeable-iustasoftbrighteningwhenIlookedatihelampandasmaller

shadowdriftingacross2〃ylefteye"分叫件随动作，.Buteachday,thoseimprovements

grewsteadier之灵走活4n.Ercouraeed过*分例心土语朴语、1approachedtheremaininginjections

wilhasteadiermindset,nolongerhauntedbythesameover』helmingpanic过1*词做主

珞朴语，.Althoughthestingremained,Ihadlearnedtofocusonthepurposebehindit

ratherthanthediscomfortitself.Aweeklater,whilereadingasmallcardthenurse

handedme,Irealizedthelettersappearedclearerthanbefore.Thediscoveryfilled

mewithaquiettriumph无灵主珏加that1hadnotfeltinyears.Wilheveryregained

detailoftheworld,Ifelthoperootin。itselfdeeperwithinme现点分词做石（丸加，stronger

thantheshadewdudi少上语仆语，thathadoncethreatenedtotakeover.

A.地道搭配

sendachilldownone'sspine

remainstill

beforehand（事前）

barelynoticeable

hauntedbyfear

focusonthepurpose

fillsb.withtriumph

rootitselfdeeper

B.情绪亮点

overwhelmingpanic

quiettriumph

hoperootingdeeper

fearfarworsethanthepain

C.动作亮点

steadiedmybreathing

clenchedmyfists

flinchedinstinctively

liftedmyeyelid

approachedwithasteadiermindset

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/madeUDmindfinal".Thoughmyhandsstilltrembled,acalm

determinationsettledin（无臭立语eionceIrealizedthatescapingnowwouldonlytrade

temporarycomfortforlifelongregret.Withslowsleps,Imovedtowardthe

examinationchair,tryingnottopicturethesharpneedlB现在分词妓珏做件.动作，Iknewwas

waiting.Thedoctor'sgentleinstructionssteadiedmeslightly无关上话句”yetthe

moment〃评eyelidwaslifted、asurgeofpanicalmostpushedmeback无灵主沿句

Remindingmyselfofmyfather'sstnizqle比在分何奴折件或动作上Itightenedmygripon

thechairandkeptstill.Wheniheneedleentered,aburningstingflashedthrough

myeye,andIinstinctivelyheldmybreath.Theprocedurelastedonlyseconds,butit

feltmuchlonger.Asthedoctorofferedareassuringnod,Iexhaledshakily,

surprisedby，过去分％做朴学，howmanageablethepainactuallywas.Afragilesenseof

hopesettledinitsplace.

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