2027届新高考英语热点复习读后续写提升课

2027届新高考英语热点复习读后续写提升课

话题：乡村振兴

learningobejectives：1.

correcterrorsintheinitialdraftofthecontinuation.2.Masterthehigh-scoringsentencepatternsfromtheNationalCollegeEntranceExaminationandadvancedthematicvocabularytopolishlanguage

.3.completetheentireprocessofself-assessment,peerassessment,andpresentation.4.understandtheresponsibilitiesofthepreservationofintangibleculturalheritageandsupportingruralrevitalization.Iftheyrepresentyourcontinuationwriting,whatscoreswouldyougiveeachofthem?AI赋能自评Whattypesoferrorshaveyoufoundinthedrafts?每组确定1名汇报代表和记录员。教师评价

亮点

1.

情节合理，主题不跑偏，呼应前文奶奶“哭诉非遗即将失传”的情绪伏笔，完成了“焦虑→希望重燃”的人物闭环。2.

有主动升级句式的意识：尝试使用要求的升级规则，有高分作文的进阶意识。3.

人物视角基本统一。教师评价

存在问题情节单薄，第一段仅完成“告知消息”，没有写后续行动（如挑选参展作品、整理编织故事、规划传承方案）。2.第二段的“意外惊喜”设计为“村长延长志愿时长”，不符合主角“高考结束即将入学大学”的基础人设，逻辑不成立；3.叙事人称混乱，结尾突然从第三人称

she

切换为第一称

I4

语言口语化，叙事和对话直白，没有动作、神态、环境的细节描写。句式丰富度不足：少部分同学仅用到2种指定升级句型。针对性修改建议第一段：结尾落地行动，写和奶奶们一起挑选参展作品、为非遗馆数字展厅拍摄双语讲解视频，让更多人读懂编织背后的民俗故事让情节有明确推进。第二段：“意外惊喜”符合人设的内容：比如村里的留守儿童集体报名要学麦秆编织、秦奶奶和奶奶们给你准备了亲手编织的升学礼物、非遗馆邀请你担任青年推广大使全程保持第三人称

she的统一视角；LanguageUpgradingDiscussion小组完成step3改写(8分钟)每组2个句型，上台给大家讲清楚这个句型的改写逻辑。G1句型1,2G2句型3,4G3句型5,6G4句型7,8G5句型9,10

ving做伴随状语

宋柏萱Thevillagerschattedeagerlywitheachother,wipingawaytearsornoddingrepeatedly.Whatisspecialaboutthesentence?

Whatimpressyoumost?

with复合结构做状语Twoweekslater，withourcreations

submittedtothemuseum，wereceivedresoundingencouragementandpraise.Withgreatconcentrationandcare,grandmaswereweavingtheworkstobedisplayed.刘奇芳

张琪

ving+独立主格表情绪+语言描写Afterhearingmywords,asparkleofjoylightinguphereyes，grandmaqin

saidwithanexcitedvoice，"Maythisuniquecraftbepasseddownforever!"Amongthecrowd,GrandmaChin,whoseeyesfixedonNatalie,smiledwarmlyather.

定语从句做插入语

比喻句

张子怡Severaldayslater,alargenumberoforderspouredinlikeatide.

独立主格

杨晶如Whenthevillagersheardthenews,theirfaceslitupwithbrightsmiles,awaveofjoywashingovertheroom.

定语从句做插入语王雨珊Ourcrafts,whichwethoughtwouldbeforgotten,isfinallybeingseenbytheworld.Grandmachin,whohadoncetaughtnataliethebasicsofweaving,wipedhereyeswiththecornerofherapron.Notonly...,but...also倒装相馨茹NotonlydidIgainaprofoundunderstandingofthe

responsibilitiesandcommitmentsofteenagersand,butIalsoappreciatedthecontemporarysignificanceoftechnologyinempoweringtheruralrevitalization.thepowerof+正能量n齐家盛TherewasnodoubtthattheexperiencewasmemorableandallowedNatalietoprofoundlyknowthepowerofpersistenceandinheritance薛雨彤Somovedwasthegrandmathatshestoodrootedtothespot,wipingawaytearswithtissue.Profoundlytouchedbythesceneofthesegrandmas,whogenerallybefondofstrawweawing,shecontinuouslyannouncedthattheywouldsetsomeworkshopstotreatthosepeoplewhowereinterestedinlearningthestrawweaving.郭耀荣Wespentthefollowingdaysmeticulouslyselectingthefinestpieces,documentingtheculturalstoriesbehindeachbasket.whowouldliketoshareyourgainsfromthislesson?Atrulytouchingstrawweavingworkisneverjustaboutexquisitecraftsmanship,butmoreabouttheICHculture,theperseveranceandwarmthofthecraftsmenitcarries.一件真正动人的麦秆作品，从来不止于精巧的工艺，更在于它承载的非遗文化、手艺人的坚守与温度；Similarly,atrulyfull-markcompositionisneverjustaboutgorgeoussentencepatterns,butmoreaboutcorevaluesbehindit.一篇真正的满分作文，也从来不止于华丽的句型，更在于它背后的价值内核。Gaokaoisnevertheendofourlearning,butuseyouryouthpowertoempowerruralrevitalization,inheritChineseexcellenttraditionalculture,andtrulyengraveculturalconfidenceandpatriotisminyourheartandputitintoaction.高考从来不是我们学习的终点，而是我们用自己的青春力量，赋能乡村振兴，传承中华优秀传统文化，真正把文化自信、家国情怀刻在心里、落在行动上。Homework:

Thankyou!

Usewhatyoulearnedtopolishyourwriting.续写十句成文

写前关键词提纲法

句子功能英语关键词句1衔接提示句Thatnight,Igatheredalltheweavinggrandmasinthevillagecommitteeoffice,myeyessparklingwithexcitement.句2说清“要做啥+遇啥坎”wantedtosharethegoodnews,worriedtheywouldn’tbelieve句3细化困难+补心理/动作showedthevideodata,andtranslatedthecommentsexcitedly.句4初步行动（行动开端）acceptedtheinvitation,sortedstoriesovernight.句5过渡到第二段finishedallpreparations,volunteerservicewascomingtoanend.句6衔接提示句Thetwo-monthvolunteerservicewascomingtoanendwhenanunexpectedsurprisearrived.句7实施方法（方法展开）Designersande-commerceteamscametocooperate句8加点小波折+他人反应Thegrandmasworriedfirst,butkidsvolunteeredtolearnweaving,andtheysmiled.句9事情解决，交代结局signedtheagreement,aweavingclassopened句10点睛升华主题youthcanpowerruralrevitalizationandkeepculturalheritagealive.v-ing作状语，适合同一主语两个连续的动作，能强化动作连贯性，避免简单句堆砌；独立主格结构，适合两个不同主语的画面联动；倒装句、强调句、比喻句，适合突出人物品质、渲染情绪、升华主旨，放在段落的开头或结尾，能立刻抓住阅卷老师的眼球。乡村振兴

升华模版（应用文和续写通用）NotonlydidIgainaprofoundunderstandin