外研版英语 写作周周练 第二部分　第6周　读后续写主题练 家庭生活

大一轮复习第6周读后续写主题练家庭生活写作周周练

第二部分家庭生活类的读后续写语篇的主题语境一般为“人与自我”。该主题一般围绕主人公与家人之间发生的日常生活事件展开，通常可分为两大类：第一类是相亲相爱的锦上添花常见话题有：纪念重要日子(如举办惊喜生日派对、送生日礼物、母亲节、父亲节等)、父母教孩子学习新技能或孩子为长辈解决困难。这一类主题的整体基调是快乐的、积极的、充满爱的。最后加上收获、开心、感恩等。第二类是解决小误会/小矛盾的握手言和此类故事模型通常为：第一步：冲突构造(误会、犯错等)有了冲突才能体会亲情的弥足珍贵。冲突原因大致有：疏于陪伴、理念不合(代沟)、误会等。第二步：冲突化解(解释、道歉、弥补、回忆等)第三步：亲情升华(诚实、珍惜等)该主题下的语篇蕴含浓厚的育人价值，即培养学生的家庭责任感，引导中学生思考与亲人之间的关系，进而领悟到要珍惜平淡、温暖的亲情，意识到家庭和睦，家人间的关爱、尊重和有效沟通的重要性。此类语篇的结尾宜在以上方面进行主题升华。1.冲突构造(误会、犯错等)Hefoldedhisfistangrily，whilehisyoungerbrotherwavedhishandsexcitedly.他生气地握紧拳头，而他弟弟却激动地挥着手。Ideeplyregretnotbeingmoreunderstandingandconsiderateofyourfeelings.我很后悔没有更多地理解和体谅你的感受。高分句式ThemomentIthoughtaboutwhatIhaddonetohim，regretandguiltoverwhelmedmelikeendlesstides.一想到我对他所做的一切，遗憾和内疚像无休止的潮水一样向我涌来。WatchingShirley’ssmilefadingaway，Peterfrowned.看着雪莉的微笑渐渐消失，彼得皱起了眉头。Heshookhisheadsadly，tearsrollingdownhischeeks.他难过地摇摇头，潸然泪下。Amandafeltasgrayastheskyoutsidewhenshelookedacrossthetableatherthree-year-oldsister.当阿曼达看着桌子对面三岁的妹妹时，她感觉她的心情像外面的天空一样灰暗。2.冲突化解(解释、道歉、弥补、回忆等)“I’msosorry，”hesaid，gentlypettingJackson’shead.“对不起，”他说道，轻轻地抚摸着杰克逊的头。Heputdownhishand，glancedcautiouslyatCarterandloweredhishead.他放下手，小心翼翼地看了卡特一眼，然后低下了头。Soashameddidshefeelthatshewasclosetotears/shewasonthevergeoftears.她羞愧得快哭了。Seeinghisfamilysittingtogetherandstayingtogetherharmoniously，Carterfeltasurgeofhappiness.看到家人围坐在一起其乐融融的场景，卡特感觉幸福满满。Withcheerfulsingingfillingtheroom，thetwosisterslostthemselvesintheenchantingmelody.欢快的歌声弥漫整个房间，两姐妹完全沉浸在动人的旋律之中。Tearsofjoywelledupintheireyesasthebrotherandsisterhuggedtightlytogether.喜极而泣的泪水在兄妹俩的眼眶中打转，他们紧紧相拥在一起。3.亲情升华(诚实、珍惜等)Fromthenon，myfather’swordshavealwayssoundedinmyearsfromtimetotime，guidingthewayofmylife.从那时起，父亲的话时不时在我耳边响起，指引着我人生的方向。ItwasHenry’skindnessthatmademefeelthewarmthfromourfamily.Iwilltreasureitwithallmyheart.正是亨利的善良让我感受到了来自家庭的温暖。我会永远将这份情谊珍藏于心。OnlyatthatmomentdidIrealizewhymyfatherletmehavethemoney—itwashisexpectationformyfuture，hisencouragementandquietlove.AndthatwassomethingImightneversurpass.那一刻，我才明白父亲为什么让我收下这笔钱——那是他对我未来的期待，是他的鼓励，更是他默默的爱。而这份爱或许是我永远无法企及的。Itwasourfamily’slaughterwhilewewereplayingboardgamesonthelivingroomfloorthatbecamemysweetestmemoryduringmyfirsttimeawayfromhome.正是全家人围坐在客厅地板上玩桌游时的欢声笑语成了我第一次离家在外时最甜蜜的回忆。Asurgeofhappinessandwarmthrunningthroughher，Momkissedthetwosistersgently.一股幸福与温暖流遍全身，妈妈轻轻地吻了吻两姐妹。Theearlymorningsunlightstreamingin，thewholefamilywasbathedinhappinessandlove.清晨的阳光照进来，全家人沉浸在幸福和爱中。1.父母总是在背后默默支持我的梦想，为我铺平前行的道路。(现在分词作状语)Parentsalwayssilentlysupportedmydreams，______________________________________.2.爸爸凝视着那张纸，嘴角不自觉地扬起一抹愉悦的微笑。(独立主格)Dadfixedhiseyesonthepaper，_________________________________________.对点练习

根据汉语提示补全句子pavingthewayformyjourneyforwardajoyfulsmileliftingthecornerofhismouth3.这最终成了一段难以忘怀的经历，永远铭刻在他的记忆中。(定语从句)Thisturnedouttobeanunforgettableexperience，____________________________________________.4.这一刻，见证着这个家庭中新诞生的深厚情谊，注定永生难忘。(现在分词作定语)It’samemorablemoment___________________________________________________.5.就在那一天，他才意识到儿子需要的仅仅是陪伴。(强调句)____________________herealizedthatwhathissonneededwasnothingbutcompany.whichwouldneverfadeawayfromhismemorywitnessinganewandmeaningfulbondinthisfamilyItwasonthatdaythat(2025·全国一)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。MywifeandIwantedtoshareournewhomewithfamilyandfriendsbyhostingasmallgatheringintheearlysummer.Shehadpreparedlotsofsnacks，whilemyjobwastohavethebackyardinorder.Therewasplentyofspaceforthekidstorunandplay.TherewasjustonethingIhadn’tcountedon：MybrotherchosetobringhisdogToby，典例展示a50-poundballoffire.Thoughfriendly，hecouldeasilyknockovermyniece’ssmallboysandmysix-month-oldgranddaughter.So，whenmybrothershowedup，IaskedhimtowatchTobyandkeephimoutside.Myplanwasworkingoutjustfine.Tobywasusinguphisenergybyrunningbackandforthinthebackyardandgivingthekidsplentyofroom.Unexpectedly，aftersupper，theweatherchanged.Itstartedtorainandeveryonewentindoors.Itwasanawkwardmoment.Ididn’twantTobytoberunningaroundinthehouse，andmybrotherwasn’thappywithdrivinghomewithawetdog.Eventually，mybrotherdecidedtoleaveratherthanforcetheissue.Afewdayspassed，andIhadn’theardanythingfrommybrother.Itextedhimandexpressedwishesforhimtocomeoutagain.Hisreplycameasasurprise—ashock，actually：“Notachance.”Clearly，hewasunhappyoverthewaywehadparted.Afterall，Ihadlefthimlittlechoice.Well，he’llgetoverit，Ireasoned.Twomonthspassed.MywifesuggestedIgetintouchwithmybrother，butIresisted，thinkingheshouldcallfirst.However，myconscience(良心)keptbotheringme.Itriedtoputmyselfinmybrother’sshoes.Hewasfacinghealthissuesandhiswifeofthirty-fiveyearshadpassedawayafewmonthsearlier.Tobywashisconstantcompanion，theonewhokepthimgoing.注意：续写词数应为150个左右。Irealizeditwasmewhowasatfault.

Withthebiscuitsmywifehadmade，Iarrivedatmybrother’sdoor.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第一步厘清文本六要素典例展示写作指导WhoI，mywife，mybrother，mybrother’sdogTobyWhenearlysummer(whenthegatheringwasheld)，afewdaysafterthegathering，twomonthsafterthegatheringWheremynewhome(includingtheindoorareaofthehouseandthebackyard)，mybrother’shomeWhatMybrotherleftunhappilywithhisdog，andwedriftedapart.Why(1)Iwouldn’tletTobyenterthehouse.(2)Iignoredmybrother’sdifficultsituationandToby’simportancetomybrother.HowIrealizedIwaswrongandplannedtovisitmybrothertoapologize.第二步了解文本故事概要MywifeandIplannedasmallearly-summer1.___________(gather)atournewhometoshareitwithfamilyandfriends.Shepreparedlotsofsnacks，whileIfocusedon2.________(tidy)upthebackyard.YettherewasonethingIdidn’texpect：mybrotherbroughthis50-pounddogToby.ThoughTobywasfriendly，hewasso3._________(energy)thathemighteasilyknockoveryoungkids.Sowhenmybrotherarrived，IaskedhimtokeepTobyoutsideandkeepaneye4.____him.Aftersupper，theweathersuddenlyturnedbad—itstartedraining，andeveryonehadtogoindoors.gatheringtidyingenergeticonThisputusinanawkwardsituation.Ididn’twantTobytoberunningaroundinthehouse,5.____mybrotherhatedtheideaofdrivinghomewithawetdog.Intheend，hechosetoleaveinsteadofarguing.Afewdays6._____(late)，Itextedmybrother7._______(invite)himoveragain，buthisreplyshockedme：“Notachance.”Hewasclearlyupsetabouthowwe8.___________(part)，butIthoughthe’dgetoverit.Two9.________(month)passed；mywifeadvisedmetocontacthim，butlatertoinvitehadpartedmonthsbutIrefused，waitingforhimtocallfirst.However，myconsciencekepttroublingme.10._______Iputmyselfinhisshoes，Irealizedhewasdealingwithhealthproblemsandhadlosthiswifeof35yearsafewmonthsbefore—Tobywashisonlyconstantcompanion.When第三步把握文本双线和主题ThemeRelationshiprepair，Empathy&UnderstandingStoryMountainStagePlotLineEmotionLine(Feelings)BeginningMywifeandIhosted1.____________________

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door第五步构思佳句润色语言1.我一门心思只想维持聚会秩序，却没考虑到在这样艰难的时期，托比对哥哥来说有多重要。(so...that；undercontrol)_____________________________________________________________IfailedtoconsiderhowimportantTobywastomybrotherduringthisdifficulttime.2.一天晚上，我拿起电话给他留了条语音消息，为自己之前的行为道歉，并询问我们能否见一面。(现在分词短语作状语；apologize)Oneevening，Ipickedupthephoneandlefthimavoicemessage，____________________________________________________________.Ihadbeensofocusedonkeepingthegatheringundercontrolthatapologizingformypreviousbehaviorandaskingifwecouldmeetup3.他开门时露出了惊讶的笑容，有那么一瞬间，我们俩都没说话。_____________________________________，andforamoment，neitherofusspoke.4.我们坐在门廊上，托比依偎在旁边，我把饼干盒递给了他。(with复合结构；rest)__________________________________________，andIhandedhimtheboxofbiscuits.HeopenedthedoorwithasurprisedsmileWesatontheporchwithTobyrestingbesideus5.我们聊了好几个小时，时而大笑，时而回忆往昔，慢慢修复着这段曾经出现裂痕的关系。(现在分词短语作状语)Wetalkedforhours，______________________________________________________________________.6.看着托比轻轻把头靠在哥哥腿上，我知道，我们终于踏上了和解的道路。AsIwatchedTobygentlyresthisheadonmybrother’sleg，Iknew_________________________________.laughing，rememberingoldtimes，andslowlyrebuildingwhathadbeenlostwewerefinallyonthepathtohealing7.从那以后，哥哥和托比成了我们家的常客，我们一家人一起度过了许多欢乐时光。Fromthenon，mybrotherandTobybecamefrequentguestsatourhome，and_____________________________________________.wespentmanyhappymomentstogetherasafamilyIrealizeditwasmewhowasatfault.IhadbeensofocusedonkeepingthegatheringundercontrolthatIfailedtoconsiderhowimportantTobywastomybrotherduringthisdifficulttime.Mypridehadkeptmefromreachingout，andthenmonthshadpassedwithoutaproperconversation.Oneevening，Ipickedupthephoneandlefthimavoicemessage，apologizingformypreviousbehaviorandaskingifwecouldmeetup.Tomyrelief，hecalledbackthenextday，andweagreedtogettogethersoon.典例展示范文赏读Withthebiscuitsmywifehadmade，Iarrivedatmybrother’sdoor.Heopeneditwithasurprisedsmile，andforamoment，neitherofusspoke.Thenwehugged—somethingwehadn’tdonesincebeforehiswifepassedaway.WesatontheporchwithTobyrestingbesideus，andIhandedhimtheboxofbiscuits.“Thankyou，”hesaidquietly.Wetalkedforhours，laughing，rememberingoldtimes，andslowlyrebuildingwhathadbeenlost.AsIwatchedTobygentlyresthisheadonmybrother’sleg，Iknewwewerefinallyonthepathtohealing.Fromthenon，mybrotherandTobybecamefrequentguestsatourhome，andwespentmanyhappymomentstogetherasafamily.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。TheRefrigeratorBoxesItcouldn’thavebeeneasyformymom—asinglemotherwiththreeenergetickidsagedtentosixteen，whoworkedlonghourstoprovideuswithclothingandfood.Somehowshedidit，keepingusbusyandoutoftrouble.Sometimesshehadtobereallycreative.实战演练OneChristmas，Momcamehomefromworkwiththreeboxes...threerefrigeratorboxes.Seriously.Refrigeratorboxes.Thatweekend，shesentusouttothegaragewiththoseboxesandseveralcansofpaint.Ouronlyinstructionsweretopaintthemhoweverwewanted.WehadnoideawhatthoseboxeswouldbeusedforandIpaintedmineinmyfavoritecolor：brightpurple.Afterourdayofpainting，mysiblingsandIputthoseboxesoutofourmindsandbegantolookforwardtoChristmasDay.WeknewMomdidn’thavealotofextramoney；weshoppedatthethriftstoreforschoolclothes，gatheredsuppliesatPic’N’Save，andboughtday-oldbreadatalocalbakery.Butthatcertainlydidn’tkeepmefromwantingsomethingveryspecialthatyear.Iknew，though，itwasunlikely.ChristmasEvecame.Wetalkedaboutwhatwehopedwouldbeunderthetree.Mysixteen-year-oldsisterdesiredabeanbagchair，mybrothermentionedhisdrumset；I，astheyoungestchild，wantedanall-for-mebicycle!Ikepttellingmyselfthatitwasn’tgoingtohappen.Iwouldbehappywithwhatevermymomgaveme.Weheadedforhomeandopenedourstockings.Asalways，theywerefullofcandy，smalltoys，andapairofsocks.Wedrankhotcocoaandsangafewmorecarols