How to polish your composition.ppt

1、How to polish your composition,东厦中学 魏喆瑜,话题24 新闻报道Making the news,have a nose for 对敏感 keep up with 跟上 work experience 工作经验 take a photograph 拍照 be eager to do 渴望做 make interviews 做采访 tell the truth 说出真相,editor (n.)编辑 journalist/ reporter (n.) 记者 accurate (adj.)精确的 fundamental (adj.)基本的 publish (v.)出版

2、 occupation (n.) 工作 interview (n./ v.) 面试/采访,editor (n.)编辑 journalist/ reporter (n.) 记者 accurate (adj.)精确的 fundamental (adj.)基本的 publish (v.)出版 occupation (n.) 工作 interview (n./ v.) 面试/采访 have a nose for 对敏感 keep up with 跟上 work experience 工作经验 take a photograph 拍照 be eager to do 渴望做 make interviews

3、 做采访 tell the truth 说出真相,editor,reporter,accurate (adj.)精确的 work experience 工作经验,interview (n./ v.) 面试/采访 have a nose for 对敏感 keep up with 跟上 work experience 工作经验 make interviews 做采访 tell the truth 说出真相,Editors / Reporters Wanted Our newspaper is looking for 10 student reporters and 8 student editor

4、s to record school life and edit related articles for students. If you are interested, please send an application letter to us.,A Letter of Application 报社编辑/记者,Dear Sir or Madam， Im Li Hua. I have learned that you are looking for student editors and reporters, but I want to apply to this position. O

5、ne of the reasons is that I want to make a contribute to our school. Besides, this position is not only a platform to improve my communication skills, but also a wonderfully chance for me to put something what I have learnt into practice. I am a outgoing and imaginative teenager, so I can get along

6、well with others and have a nose for news. Comparing with other students, I have abundant experience in making interviews, that can help me deal with problems more effective. I believe I can do well. Please write to me as soon as possible. Yours, Li Hua,Task 1 Correction,How to polish your compositi

7、on,Step 1 Correcting,Step 2 Improving,Step3 Polishing,Dear Sir or Madam， Im Li Hua. I have learned that you are looking for student editors and reporters, but I want to apply to this position. One of the reasons is that I want to make a contribute to our school. Besides, this position is not only a

8、platform to improve my communication skills, but also a wonderfully chance for me to put something what I have learnt into practice.,for,contribution,wonderful,Task 1 Correction,此处也可去掉what 或把what改为that,and/so,连词,介词,名词,形容词,从句,I am a outgoing and imaginative teenager, so I can get along well with othe

9、rs and have a nose for news. Comparing with other students, I have abundant experience in making interviews, that can help me deal with problems more effective. I believe I can do well. Please write to me as soon as possible. Yours, Li Hua,an,Compared,Task 1 Correction,which,effectively,it,冠词,非谓语,副词

10、,关系代词,代词,Dear Sir or Madam， Im Li Hua. I have learned that you are looking for student editors and reporters, but I want to apply to this position. One of the reasons is that I want to make a contribute to our school. Besides, this position is not only a platform to improve my communication skills,

11、but also a wonderfully chance for me to put something what I have learnt into practice. I am a outgoing and imaginative teenager, so I can get along well with others and keep up with the latest news. Comparing with other students, I have abundant experience in making interviews, that can help me dea

12、l with problems more effective. I believe I can do well. Please write to me as soon as possible. Yours, Li Hua,Task 1 Correction,for,which,Compared,contribution,and,wonderful,that,an,effectively,it,Requirements,假设你是育才中学的李华，得知英语周报招聘记者和编辑，你有意应聘，请按下列要求给报社写一封申请信。要点包括： 1.自我介绍，并表明你想应聘的职位； 2.陈述应聘的目的； 3.表明自

13、己的优势,希望得到回复。,self-introduction& the position,The reasons,My advantages,Task 1 Correction,Dear Sir or Madam， Im Li Hua. I have learned that you are looking for student editors and reporters, but I want to apply to this position. One of the reasons is that I want to make a contribute to our school. Be

14、sides, this position is not only a platform for me to improve my communication skills, but also a wonderfully chance for me to put something what I have learnt into practice. I am a outgoing and creative teenager, so I can get along well with others and keep up with the latest news. Comparing with o

15、ther students, I have abundant experience in making interviews, that can help me deal with problems more effective. I believe I can do well. Please write to me as soon as possible. Yours, Li Hua,Task 1 Correction,for,which,Compared,contribution,and,wonderful,that,an,effectively,it,Dear Sir or Madam，

16、 Im Li Hua. I have learned that you are looking for student editors and reporters, and I want to apply for this position. One of the reasons is that I want to make a contribution to our school. Besides, this position is not only a platform to improve my communication skills, but also a wonderful cha

17、nce for me to put what I have learnt into practice. I am an outgoing and imaginative teenager, so I can get along well with others and have a nose for news. Compared with other students, I have abundant experience in making interviews, which can help me deal with problems more effectively. I believe

18、 I can do it well. Please write to me as soon as possible. Yours, Li Hua,指代不明,内容与本次应聘职位无关,内容不符,语言不得体，应婉转,I would be grateful if you could give me the chance.,Para.1 自我介绍，并表明你想应聘的职位；,自我介绍不具体：a student from Yu Cai Middle School.,Para.2 陈述应聘的目的；,Para.3 表明自己的优势,希望得到回复。,How to polish your composition,Ste

19、p 1 Correcting,Step 2 Improving,Step3 Polishing,advanced words/ phrases 高级词汇/短语 useful sentence patterns 有用的句型,advanced words/ phrases 高级词汇/短语 useful sentence patterns 有用的句型,Dear Sir or Madam， Im Li Hua. I have learned that you are looking for student reporters, and I want to apply for this position

20、. One of the reasons is that I want to enrich my knowledge. Besides, this position is not only a platform for me to improve my communication skills, but also a wonderful chance for me to put what I have learnt into practice.,Corrected Version,Group work- underline some useful expressions,申请,其中一个原因是,

21、不仅,而且,学以致用,I have advantages to be a member of you. I am an outgoing teenager, so that I can get along well with others and have a nose for news. Compared with other students, I have abundant experience in making interviews, which can help me deal with problems more effectively. I believe I can do i

22、t well. I would be grateful if you could give me the chance. Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Lihua,Group work- find out some useful expressions,与相处得好,与相比,处理,对敏感,丰富的经验,如果你能给我这个机会，我将不胜感激。,apply for 申请 apply to 运用 improve my communication skills 提高交际技巧 enrich my knowledge 丰富知识 put what I have lea

23、rnt into practice 学以致用 outgoing 外向的 independent 独立的 get along well with 与相处得好 abundant experience 丰富的经验 deal with 处理 not only but also. 不仅而且 Compared with ， 与相比 One of the reasons is that 其中一个原因是.,Useful expressions,One of the reasons is that 其中一个原因是Para2 2. Not only . but also. 不仅. 而且 Para2&Para3 3

24、. （主句），which （定语从句） Para2&Para3 4. Compared with, （主句） 与. 相比， Para3,Useful expressions,+ 表从,Compared with other students, I have abundant experience in doing voluntary work, which can help me deal with problems more effectively.,Not only 放句首，前倒后不倒,but also后面加完整句子,This position is not only a platform

25、 for me to improve my communication skills, but also a wonderful chance for me to put what I have learnt into practice.,Not only is the position,it is,Requirements,假设你是育才中学的李华，得知英语周报招聘记者和编辑，你有意应聘，请按下列要求给报社写一封申请信。要点包括： 1.自我介绍，并表明你想应聘的职位； 2.陈述应聘的目的； 3.表明自己的优势,希望得到回复。,self-introduction& the position,Th

26、e reasons,My advantages,Task 2 Improvement,Reasons,improve my ability （writing/communication/social,broaden my horizon,Being is my dream,gain some social experience,interesting /funny/ helpful,enrich my knowledge,enrich my life,make some friends,Task 2 Improvement,Advantages,outgoing communicate wit

27、h others,have a good command of English and writing,the sense of responsibility,have a good nose for,abundant experience deal with problems,honest & independent,cautious /serious,team spirit cooperate with others,Task 2 Improvement,Make some sentences by using the following phrases.,How to polish yo

28、ur composition,advanced words/ phrases useful sentence patterns,Step 1 Correcting,Step 2 Improving,Step3 Polishing,conjunction 连词 useful sentence structure 主题句&结构,Task 3 Group Work Paraphrasing & Polishing the Sentences,Conjunction 表条件：if, as long as, unless 表目的；in order that，in order to do 常用句型：As

29、we all know；What is known to all is that There is no doubt that.；There is no denying that. ； 非谓语做状语，主句,Step 1. Polish the sentences,e.g. A）I have learnt that you are looking for student reporters. B）I want to apply for this position., Step One 合并句子，用非谓语做状语,I have learnt that you are looking for stud

30、ent reporters，I want to apply for this position.,Task 3 Group Work Paraphrasing & Polishing the Sentences, Step Two 用高级短语词汇替换,Having learnt the news,Having learnt the news that you are looking for student reporters，I want to apply for this position.,cant wait to,学生佳句赏析：Knowing the new that you are l

31、ooking for student reporters, I am so interested in it that I cant wait to apply for this position.,Group 1-4 I can broaden my horizon. I can improve my English by communicating with others.,Task 3 Group WorkParaphrasing & Polishing the sentences,Group 5-8 I have some related experience. I can stand

32、 out among others.,Group 9-12 A) I will spare no effort to do it well. B) I hope you can give me the chance.,学生习作提升,Task 3 Group WorkParaphrasing & Polishing the sentences,Step 2. Polish the passage,the second one,Topic sentences 表明申请意图的主题句： I am writing to apply for. 引出原因段落的主题句： The reason why . ar

33、e as follows. I do for the following reasons. 引出优势介绍的主题句： Please allow me to introduce myself. I have my own advantages to be a member of. 表达希望获准的主题: I would appreciate it if you could give me the chance. I hope I am lucky enough to be a member of ,Task 3 Group WorkParaphrasing & Polishing the sente

34、nces,Step 2. Polish the passage,Dear Sir or Madam， Im Li Hua, a student from Yu Cai Middle School. Having learned that you are looking for student reporters, I cant wait to apply for this position. One of the reasons is that I want to enrich my life. Besides, not only is this position a platform to

35、improve my communication skills, but also a wonderful chance for me to put what I have learnt into practice. I have my advantages to be a member of your team. I am an outgoing teenager, so I can get along well with others and have a nose for news. Compared with others, I have abundant experience in making interviews, which can help me deal with problems more effectively. I believe I can do it well. I would be grateful if yo