专四作文结构.ppt

1、Sample article,If I Rest, I Rust Author: Orison Marden (1850-1924) Prolific（多产的） author of success and motivation books a successful hotel owner Founder of Success Magazine Pushing to the Front伟大的励志书 Great Personality 伟大的个性,If I Rest, I Rust,The significant inscription(提字，铭文） found on an old key “If

2、 I rest, I rust” would be an excellent motto for those who are afflicted with（为苦恼） the slightest taint（迹象） of idleness. Even the most industrious might adopt it with advantage to serve as a reminder that, if one allows his faculties to rest, like the iron in the unused key, they will soon show signs

3、 of rust, and , ultimately, cannot do the work required of them.,Orison Marden,Sample appreciation,thesis statement,V pattern: hook + thesis statement,Those who would attain the heights reached and kept by great men must keep their faculties polished by constant use, so that they may unlock the door

4、s of knowledge, the gates that guard the entrances to the professions, to science, art, literature, agriculture, - every department of human endeavor.,Sample appreciation,development,Industry keeps bright the key that opens the treasury of achievement. If Hugh Miller, after toiling all day in a quar

5、ry, had devoted his evenings to rest and recreation, he would never have become a famous geologist. The celebrated mathematician, Edmund Store, would never have published a mathematical dictionary if he had given his spare moments to idleness. Had the little Scotch lad, Ferguson, allowed the busy br

6、ain to go to sleep while he tended sheep on the hillside, instead of calculating the position of the stars by a string of beads, he would never have become a famous astronomer.,Sample appreciation,Topic sentence,illustration,A pattern: thesis statement + so what,Labor vanquishes all not inconstant,

7、spasmodic(时断时续的）, or ill-directed labor; but faithful, unremitting（不停止的，不放松的）, daily effort toward a well-directed purpose. Just as truly as eternal vigilance（时刻保持警惕） is the price of liberty, so is eternal industry the price of noble and enduring success.,Sample appreciation,thesis statement,Well-st

8、ructured,1. Introduction hook thesis statement 2. Main body argument 1 (development) argument 2 (illustration) 3. Conclusion thesis re-statement so what,V pattern,A pattern,Refinement of language,Vividness Variety Conciseness,Vividness,1)Rhetorical devices Quotation Simile/metaphor Parallelism 2) Dy

9、namic verbs 生锈： 为苦恼，遭受： 征服, 战胜（对手等 )： 长时间或辛苦工作:,rust,be afflicted with,vanquish,toil,Variety,Subjunctive mood (various sentence patterns) had devoted his evenings to rest and recreation had given his spare moments to idleness Hadallowed the busy brain to go to sleep,Conciseness,Suppose that there is

10、 a girl who wants to be an interpreter after her graduation from university. She might choose to major in interpretation so that her university study will be helpful to her. lengthy Improved: A girl who wants to be an interpreter may choose interpreting as her major.,1) Words with suffixes or prefix

11、es reminder: 这次事故即时提醒人们登山运动会有多么危险 The incident served as a timely reminder of just how dangerous mountaineering can be. idleness unused unlock inconstant Unremitting 2)compound words ill-directed well-directed,Framework框架,Part 1: V pattern: hook + thesis statement Part 2: main body: (topic sentence,

12、 development, illustration, wrap-up, coherence) Part 3: A pattern: thesis statement+ so-what,The Importance of Maintaining a Good Mood,When youre happy, the world appears colorful to you; when you feel down, the world seems to turn dull. Mood is not something you can grab with fingers, but it does m

13、ake a difference in your life, hence the importance of keeping a good mood.,V pattern: hook + thesis statement,A good mood helps you stay healthy, both mentally and physically. You may not believe in the power of mind, but you may believe in science. Statistics show that a positive mood helps patien

14、ts recovery and a pessimistic mood contributes to depression, which could cause severe mental disease. Besides, a nice mood also turns you into a more efficient person. Experienced teachers and bosses must have found out that a cheerful person tends to make a better student or employee than a gloomy

15、 one. Last but not least, being in a sweet mood could also make you more popular. Let me use a not-so-appropriate metaphor. A good mood is a contagious flu; it passes on from one to another and puts everyone that it touches in a better mood. Sharing happiness is how friends come.,A good mood helps y

16、ou stay healthy, both mentally,Besides,Last but not least,A wonderful mood is good for your health, it helps you with your study or career, and it earns you more friends. Everyone has what it takes in a good mood willingness to strive, so why not give it a shot?,A pattern: thesis statement + so what

17、,what it takes: 成功要素 give it a shot：试一试吧,每写必问,Can you find a main idea in each paragraph? Are you wordy/vague? Is there any repetition in your paragraph? Have you cited any examples? Have you used any diamond words? Which sentences do you feel proud of?,To be a boss in a company is admirable and a s

18、ymbol of success, but can you imagine the boss is a student? It is fashionable and a tendency for a student to run a company. Then whats your idea about having a company before graduation? Write a composition of about 200 words on the following topic: Having a Company before Graduation You are to write in three parts. In the first part, state specifically what your view is. In the second part, support your view with one or two reasons. In the last part, bring what you have written to a nat