2015届二模作文_感谢信.ppt

1、2020/9/21,2015届高三英语二模,应用文讲评,2020/9/21,你刚刚从美国游学归来，请你给美国朋友Chris写一封信，内容包括： 1. 告知旅途顺利，你安全到家； 2. 感谢他们一家对你寄宿期间的悉心照顾; 3. 邀请他今年暑假来北京游览，你提供食宿。,第一节 （15分）,一、评分原则 1本题总分15分，按4个档次给分。 2评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以档次的要求来衡量，确定或降低档次，最后给分。 3评分时应考虑：内容是否完整，条理是否清楚，交际是否得体，语言是否准确。 4拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均

2、可以接受。 5词数少于50，从总分中减去1分。,二、内容要点 1. 告知旅途顺利，你安全到家； 2. 感谢他们一家对你寄宿期间的悉心照顾; 3. 邀请他今年暑假来北京游览，你提供食宿。,三、语言 (今天讲评的重点) 通过审题确定语言风格： 你刚刚从美国游学归来，请你给美国朋友Chris 写一封信，内容包括： 写信的对象-你的朋友Chris 语言风格-informal (非正式信件) -感谢信,2020/9/21,好的书信，语言有什么特点呢？,官方范文（14分）,I had a pleasant journey back from America and I just arrived home

3、safe. I want to thank you and your family for taking such good care of me during my time in America. I would like to return the favour and invite you to come sightseeing in Beijing this summer. You would also be welcome to stay at my home during the visit. I hope to hear from you soon.,2020/9/21,一起欣

4、赏我们的一类文吧 学习好的语言,2020/9/21,1. 简洁明了；不罗嗦 2. 交际得体；表达委婉,14.5 分,2020/9/21,101词,2020/9/21,13.5 分,3. 表达准确、灵活转换 怎么表达“提供食宿”呢？,2020/9/21,语言积累素材,1. 回家的旅途非常顺利，我已安全到家。 -I have already got back home safe and sound. Everything was fine during the flight. -My trip back home was all fine and Im now at home. -The jour

5、ney back home was alright and I have returned home safely.,2020/9/21,2020/9/21,-Im writing to inform you that I have arrived home safely after a pleasant journey 语言挺好的，但是作为这篇作文的开头是否很适合呢？ 改成这样的开头是否更合适? I have arrived home safely after a pleasant journey. Im writing this letter to say thank you for yo

6、ur tender care.,2020/9/21,2. 感谢你们一家对我寄宿期间的悉心照顾; - I want to thank you and your family again for letting me stay and taking care of me. -Looking back on the past few weeks we spent together, I really want to convey my deep gratitude for your tender care through this letter to you and your family.,202

7、0/9/21,3. 今年暑假来北京游览吧，我来提供食宿。 -Id like to invite you to come to Beijing this summer vacation. Id like to provide you meals and place to rest. 怎样表达更通俗呢？ -If you are free this summer vacation, Id like to invite you to come to Beijing. You can stay with my family. -Id like to invite you to come to Beiji

8、ng this summer vacation, and this time we will be your host family. -I know that you are interested in Chinese cultures, so would you like to visit Beijng this summer vacation? You can stay at my place, and my mum cooks the best dishes. I bet youll love it.,2020/9/21,阅卷中发现的问题和正确的表达： 1.功能句： I have to

9、 thank you. I invite you guys staying in my home. I cant refuse to appreciate you. To pay you back, I invite you. 2.旅途愉快，安全到家 I had a peaceful/successful trip and arrived at home safely. 正：I had a pleasant trip and arrived home safe and sound. 3. 感激 I appreciate you. (appreciate表示欣赏+sb；表示感激+sth.) 正确

10、：I will appreciate it if you I appreciate your help. Im grateful for the tender care and your generous hospitality. extend/convey/express my profound/hearty/sincere gratitude/thanks,2020/9/21,4.邀请你到中国旅行 I invite you to go/do sightseeing in China. I sincerely invite you to pay a visit/take a trip to China. Visit v./n. 尽量不用visitin