初三书面表达课件用.ppt

1、作文指导,Guide in writing,玉蝉中学李玉婷,Teaching aims(教学目标）,1、找出引起你作文不能取得高分的原因。,2、学会一些提高作文成绩的方法。,3、不再那么害怕写作。,中考作文15分， 你能拿多少分？,直击中考,中考英语书面表达的评分标准 A档（1315): 能很好地完成了规定的写作任务。包含所有内容要点，结构完整，语句流畅，意思清楚、连贯。使用较为丰富的语法结构和词汇，语法和词汇错误极少，格式正确，书写规范。 B 档（10 12）：较好地完成了规定的写作任务。基本包含所有内容要点，结构较为完整，语句完整，意思清楚。语法和词汇错误较少，格式基本正确，书写较为规范。

2、 C 档 ( 79 ):基本上完成了规定的写作任务。包含主要内容要点，结构欠完整，少数语句不通顺，意思基本清楚。语法和词汇错误较多，格式基本正确，书写基本规范。 D 档（ 46 ）：未能完按要求完成规定的写作任务。只包含少数内容要点，结构不完整，多数语句不通顺，意思不够清楚。语法结构和词汇错误较多，影响理解，格式不够正确，书写欠规范。 E 档（ 03）：未能完按要求完成规定的写作任务。只写出个别要点，结构不完整，多数语句完整或意思不明，语法结构和词汇错误很多，书写不规范。,一篇作文由句子组成,一个句子由单词组成,词,句子,作文,Is writing so hard?,词、句与篇的关系,Comp

3、osition,C,paragraph,sentences1sentences2,Words1 words 2words3,句子训练,走进作文大门,二、抓住要点,确定主要行为,并 列 出 提 纲,三、扩展成句,把要点变成完整的句子。,避免中国式英语。,以写正确、通顺为最基本要求。,重短轻长, 就易避难。,此路不通，绕道迂回,四、连句成文,过渡自然, 表达流畅。,递进: first, then, next, at last, 转折: but, however, after all 总结: finally, at last, in a word, 其他连接句子的词 suddenly, as we

4、all know等。,注意使用连词,使文章紧凑连贯,五、成文之后，查错改错,主谓一致吗？,时态正确吗？,语态正确吗？,人称正确吗？,要点有无遗漏?,单词拼写有无错误?,非谓语动词作主语/宾语是否用了动名词？,有无汉语式英语?,名词的可数不可数用对了吗？,六、誊写,卷面整洁不一定加分， 卷面潦草一定要扣分！,书写规范, 卷面整洁。,Which is better？,the best!,例文解析,2013年中考作文,假如你是李明，4月8日是你的生日，你在家里举行生日晚会，邀请一些朋友来参加，请根据表格中的信息提示，写一篇英语日记。,注意: 1、日记必须包含表格中所提供的所有信息,并适当发挥； 2、

5、80词左右(开头已给出，不计入总词数)； 3、文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名和地名。,Saturday, April 8th I had a birthday party at home today.,分组讨论并找出要点,when(时间):,where(地点):,who(人物):,what(事件):,why(原因):,activities and gifts:,Tense(时态)：,at 7 April 8th,at home,LiMing and his,had a birthday party,to celebrate（庆祝) ,至少三项,过去时,Feeling(感受):,happy, ex

6、cited,person(人称)：,第一人称,精彩范文赏析,I had a birthday party at home today. Some of my friends came to my home at 7 in the evening. At the party. I got a lot of presents. Such as cards、shoes、 and some money. My mother bought a big birthday cake for me.,_,地点,_,时态,人称,人员,_,时间,_,_,几件礼物,After singing the song “H

7、appy birthday”, I blew the candles and ate the cakes. Next we we played games, and danced with the music. We had a good time that day.,_,_,_,连词,_,_,几项活动,I had great fun on my birthday. I was happy and excited . Thanks ,my parents and friends.,_,两点感受,_,_,实战演练,秀出我自己,at the Old Peoples Home,参观敬老院,Visit

8、 the Old Peoples Home,浓情三月，你校组织志愿者去郴州敬老院开展“学雷锋，送温暖”活动。假如你是学生张华，请你将活动情况介绍给美国朋友Ben。,要求：1短文应包括表中所有要点，可适当发挥； 2文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息； 3文章不低于80词。开头、结尾已给出。,Dear Ben, Thank you for your last e-mail. Let me tell you what we did in our school. _ If you have the chance in China, I hope you can join us. Yours, Zh

9、ang Hua,浓情三月，你校组织部分学生去郴州敬老院开展“学雷锋，送温暖”活动。假如你是学生张华，请你将活动情况介绍给美国朋友Ben。,要求：1短文应包括表中所有要点，可适当发挥； 2文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息； 3文章不低于80词。开头、结尾已给出。,Who writes best ?,老师的范文,Dear Ben, Thank you for your last e-mail. Let me tell you what we did in our school. On March 5th, 2014, some students in our school got to th

10、e Old Peoples Home, we brought some flowers and fruits to the old people. We cleaned the windows and swept the floor for them. Then we sang and danced. How happy we were!,After that, we chatted with them and gave our best wishes to them. The old people were very excited. It was our duty to care for the old people If