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雅思作文第一次课,吴宏化 Apollo,考试时间,周六/ 周四 上午9点开始,雅思笔试考试流程,听力 30分钟+10分钟 誊写答案 阅读60分钟 写作60分钟,雅思作文考试形式,Task 1 图标作文 20分钟 150字 Task2 议论文 40分钟 250字 共计：60 分钟 400字,曲线图,饼图,表格图,柱形图,流程图,地图图,大作文常见题型类别,1Some people think that teenagers use of the Internet should be limited. Others feel that the Internet is an academic resource that they should have free access to, in order to do things such as homework and projects. Discuss both views and give your opinion,organization,第一段Introduction 第二段 internet should be limited 第三段 internet should not be limited 第四段conclusion,2 Some parents believe that extra private lessons outside school hours, where students work alone with a teacher, can help them do better at school. Others disagree. What are the advantages and disadvantages of private tuition?,organization,第一段Introduction 第二段Advantages of private tuition （ ad1, 2, 3) 第三段Disadvantages of private tuition (disadv 1,2,3) 第四段Conclusion,3 In many countries, workers over 60 can still be found in the workplace. However, some people think it may cause some social problems and they should get retired. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,organization,Introduction The explanation of why people retire at 60 The explanation of why people should not retire at 60 Conclusion,5 Traffic congestion seems to be increasing. What do you think are the causes of traffic congestion and what, if anything, can be done to reduce the problems?,作文评分,Examiner Task 1 and 2 : 0 - 9 Writing Band T1 * 1 / 3 + T2 * 2 / 3 Overall Band,中国大陆考区作文平均成绩,07年 5.12 08年 5.23 09年 5.11,2010中国大陆雅思平均成绩,total: 5.6 Listening 5.7 Reading 5.9 Writing 5.2 Speaking 5.3 40个国家里面倒数第四,评分标准,TR/TA task response/achievement CC coherence and cohesion LR lexical resource GRA grammatical range and accuracy,Task response 任务回应,1 underlength 2 off-topic 3 response to the question,BAND7,address all parts of the task presents a clear position throughout the response Presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or support ideas that may lack focus.,Band 6,Address all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others Presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive Presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear,剑8 test 1,Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.,剑8 test 2,Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what way has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?,剑8 test 3,Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?,剑8 test 4,In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?,Coherence and cohesion 连贯与衔接,逻辑上 论据 论点 结构上 关联词,学生习作,To begin with, modern science and technology provide people many advantages. Modern telecommunication shortens the distance between people and makes communication much easier. Internet is widely used now not only for collection of abundant information but also for correspondence. Email, the most effective communication device now, is becoming very popular. Besides, telephone and mobile phone make contact more convenient than before.,考官范文,Employees get job satisfaction in a number of ways. Firstly, a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable work, so positive feedback from superiors is very important in this respect. A sense of fulfillment is also encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole. Secondly, when someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training opportunities, for example, then there is a sense of progression and purpose that rewards a worker. The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also contributes to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives. Satisfaction is also increased by sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team.,Lexical resource 词汇,How large VS how well 词汇量多大才算大 10000？ 8000？ 6000？ 4000？ 3000？,词汇量大不等于作文分高,Proliferation of airlines Be detrimental to,英语作文基于表达而非翻译,人山人海 我的脚麻了 美如天仙,Crowded Extremely crowed I cant feel my leg. Very attractive,How well 的含义,1 正式 不正式的词最好少出现 如过多的get, do, have, make, let AWL academic word list 共570，按频率高低分为10组,抽烟会导致疾病。 看电视太长时间会影响孩子的视力。 有经验的学生更容易找到工作。,Contribute to Be linked to Be responsible for Human diseases are closely linked to heavy smoking.,剑八7分作文例句,An increase in the number of operating flight globally has also increased, giving rise to falling air-fare prices.,Expose Intense exposure to TV Intense exposure to TV is harmful to childrens vision.,剑6 test B,The player is usually the hero of the game and too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centered and insensitive to others.,思考题,上网太长时间会对小孩子影响不好。,Access Have access to Have an easier access to Experienced students have an easier access to the jobs.,正式词汇出现频率,2-8,用学术词汇来替代下列句子中的斜体词,It is important to use complex sentence to get a better score in Writing.,Essential,More and more numbers of women are going out to work.,An increasing number of A growing number of The number of _ is on the rise There is a tendency for sb to do sth A Higher proportion of people,What they emphasize is that formal examinations are harmful to students creativity.,Be damaging to Have a negative effect on Pose a threat Impair/ weaken,This book is so good that it is better than all the others.,Exceptional,His explanation is not enough to support his late for class.,Sufficient Adequate,The supermarket can provide a lot of foods to choose from.,A large proportion of / a large number of Various/ a variety of/ a wide range of An amount of /a huge sum of,People argue over and over again that violence on television is harmful,Repeatedly Continuously,2 准确 搭配 What is English writing? Right words in right place,Imagination 激发想象力/超越想象力 Economy 推动经济发展,Inspire/ unlock imagination Be beyond ones imagination Boost/spur/fuel economy Stimulate economy,提高写作技巧 Improve writing skill? 加强文化了解 带来利益,Sharpen writing skill International travel can bridge culture divide. Generate profits,练习,Have a control_ sth adapt_ society,Extinct Play computers They live a big house,学习知识 经历巨大变化 深受欢迎,Acquire knowledge Undergo dramatic changes Gain its popularity,英文作文极端讨厌重复,3 多变 剑桥七5分作文考官评语： The high level of repetition( knowledge and skills is repeated nine times) also indicates limitations in the range of vocabulary,Air tickets are cheaper than before Less expensive Affordable Price drops down Accept,强调 Give priority to Stress Highly value,推荐网站,T,词汇三点注意,正式 准确 多变,Grammatical range and accuracy 句型,语法基本知识：什么是主谓宾？ I am a student,I watch television,议论文的显著风格,客观,如何体现客观,人称代词少用 We , you, he, she,学生习作,Towards the same issue, for those immigrants who have no such ambitious, they can still remain some of their core value of their own culture. Just like most of the oversea Chinese for example, they celebrate their mid-autumn festival and spring festival every year and certain amount of them still keep the traditional Confucian value. In the democratic western countries, they can still enjoy their life but they will never participate into the mainstream of the society.,奥斯卡颁奖,Best actor award goes to Andy Lau.,雅思所需句子主语,It There Ing. Passive voice Wh- sentence,越来越多的人都觉着保护环境很重要,There is a growing awareness that it is important to protect environment,有的人觉得保护环境很重要,It is argued/believed/suggested/claimed that,所有人都觉得保护环境很重要,It is widely/generally/universally acknowledged that,什么是状语,I watch television every day I watch television in my house I watch television because I want to know the latest information on Japans earthquake.,原因状语 目的状语 让步状语,状语的power,Government decided to ban smoking in public places.,In order to protect health of citizens, especially children and pregnant women, government decided to ban smoking in public places.,In order to protect health of citizens, especially children and pregnant women, government decided to ban smoking in public places, although smoking is one of the main sources of revenue.,The earthquake rocked Japan. About nine months ago, an earthquake rocked Japan, leading to the death of thousands of citizens.,高分作文句型举例,剑7 test1 This extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher is or how frequently a child practices. 剑8 testB Some educationalist think it is more effective to educate boys and girls in single-sex schools because they believe this environment reduces distractions and encourages pupils to concentrate on their studies.,英语句型结构种类,Simple sentence Complex sentence Compound sentence Compound and complex sentence,I love you. I love you even if you are as ugly as Feng jie. I love you but you dont love me. I love you but you dont love me although I am rich.,7分作文标准 A variety of complex structures 6分作文标准 A mix of simple and complex sentences,高分作文典范一,On the other hand, there are various aspects against these arguments. Moreover, it is peoples choice to make a decision to buy goods. Advertising may be not a cause of customers buying habits. Individuals have their own spending habits. If they have got enough disposable income, then the right to make a decision is given to them.,On the other hand, there are various aspects against these arguments,Moreover, it is peoples choice to make a decision to buy goods.,Advertising may be not a cause of customers buying habits,Individuals have their own spending habits,If they have got enough disposable income, then the right to make a decision is given to them.,On the other hand, there are various aspects against these arguments. Moreover, it is peoples choice to make a decision to buy goods. Advertising may be not a cause of customers buying habits. Individuals have their own spending habits. If they have got enough disposable income, then the right to make a decision is given to them.,高分作文典范二,On the other hand, houses have their own attraction for its inhabitants. Gardens lovers usually prefer houses as they can have their own garden. It is also easy to keep a pet, especially a dog in a house because dog can play around the garden. If someone is interested in maintaining cars himself, it can only be possible in houses where one can have his own garage.,高分作文三,Also, on the television screen, a product may look gorgeous and good quality. As a result of it, people often buy goods without enough consideration. Consumers may not actually need it but they buy goods impulsively soon after they watch advertising. Furthermore, as many customers buy a particular product due to its advertising campaign, the other people may be affected by the trend, even if the product is not of the real needs of the society.,考官范文,Research, relating to identical twins, has highlighted how significant inherited characteristics can be for an individuals life. But whether these characteristics are able to develop with the personality of an individual surely depends on whether the circumstances allow such a development. It seems that experiences we have in life are so unpredictable and so powerful that they can boost or over-ride other influences, and there seems to be plenty of search findings to confirm this.,学生作文,To begin with, modern science and technology provide people many advantages. Modern telecommunication shortens the distance between people and makes communication much easier. Internet is widely used now not only for collection of abundant information but also for correspondence. Email, the most effective communication device now, is becoming very popular. Besides, telephone and mobile phone make contact more convenient than before.,8分作文段落,Shopping is very popular among the majority of the population, despite their age or social standards. This is due to the fact that most people find shopping as an experience which makes a difference in their day to day life. some people find themselves in a different world, surrounded by various material things which they may or may not be able to purchase. Even if they are not able to financ