高中英语作文教案一.ppt

,书面表达,行文,语言,内容,homework,新旧评分标准的不同:,旧标准只对要点作出要求，而新标准除要求内容要点外，还涉及到对次重点和无关内容的评定。考生要获得高分，除要覆盖所有要点外，还要尽量覆盖次重点，并且要少写或不写无关内容。,内容方面,语言方面 旧标准只用语言中错误的多少来衡量语 言的好坏； 新标准对语言的要求则较为具体： 应用语法结构应多样，力避单调。 应用的词汇应丰富，忌重复用词。 语言错误方面，对“尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”的“些许错误”可以原谅。这比旧评分标准对语言错误的一棒子打死更能鼓励考生发挥自己的水平，更能鼓励考生发挥自己的潜能。,语言方面,旧标准只用语言中错误的多少来衡量 语言的好坏；,新标准对语言的要求则较为具体： 应用语法结构应多样，力避单调。 应用的词汇应丰富，忌重复用词。,语言错误方面，对“尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”的“些许错误”可以原谅。这比旧评分标准对语言错误的一棒子打死更能鼓励考生发挥自己的水平，更能鼓励考生发挥自己的潜能。,在行文方面 旧标准仅以“行文是否连贯，表达是否清 楚“为标准来衡量，比较笼统； 新标准不但对内容的连贯性做出了要求， 而且还对“语句间的连接成分”做出 了明确要求。,要想得高分，首先要注意内容要点和语言准确性，还必须在较复杂的句子结构或较高级的词汇上有所体现。,一、态度不老实，有欺骗行为是影响得分的一个道德因素。,普遍存在的几个问题,1、用汉语拼音代替不会写的词、短语 和 句子，有的甚至通篇都是汉语。,2、有意漏掉某些不会写的词、短语或句子。,3、从其它书面表达内容尤其是从阅读理 解的语篇中抄袭，企图蒙骗得分。,二、语言表达有错误，单词拼写不规范,1. There were two persons stood there.,3. 常见的单词拼写错误 suddently heared saterday luckly falled rided teached writed ,There were two persons standing there.,2. Our hometown has taken place great change.,Great changes have taken place in our hometown.,三、要点有所遗漏,对策： 彻底理解题意，看准答题要求,四、词句少；太少（无法评判）； 离题句太多 对策：紧扣主题，要点全面下进行适当发挥,内容要点列成提纲,检查，确定，动笔,五、没能掌握“扬长避短”的技巧,六、 一逗到底，书写较差,卷面的整洁是“第一印象”，有“先入为主”的感觉。,具体做法：,一、树立信心，加强写的意识，养成写的良好习惯。,有写就有可能得分，没写一定是零分！,二、尝试写较复杂的句子的做法：,1. 改变句子的开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最多再多加一个状语（地点状语或时间状语），我们可以把状语置于句首，或用分词作状语。这样，能使句子读起来有点跌宕起伏，增加书面表达的表现力。,原文：The young man couldnt help crying when he heard the bad news.,修正：Hearing the bad news , the young man couldnt help crying,2. 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句子，要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等。,原文The head of farm showed us around .The crops and vegetable grew very well.,修正The head of farm showed us around .How glad we were to see the crops and vegetable growing so well.,3.通过分句和合句，增强句子的连贯性和表现力。,原文We had a short rest . Then we began to play happily . We sang and danced . Some told stories. Some played chess.,修正After a short rest ,we had great fun singing and dancing ,telling jokes and playing chess.,表起始的过渡语有first of all，to begin with，in my our opinion，according to，so far，as far as等。,表时间的过渡语有at first，then，later， firstly, secondly, meanwhile，in the end，finally，after that等。,表空间的过渡语有on the right left/on one side ofon the other side of，at the foot 等,表因果的过渡语有because of，thanks to，due to, owing to, in this way, One reason is that，thus，so，therefore，as a result（of）等。,表转折的过渡语有but，yet，however，on the contrary，except for，in spite of，otherwise，after all，in fact等。,表列举的过渡语有for example instance，takeas an example，such as，that is， like，as follows，in other words，and so on等。,表推进的过渡语有whats more，whats worse, in addition to，as well，等。,表总结的过渡语有in short，in brief， in a word，on the whole，to sum up等。,三、对于“较高级的词汇“，可以从以下几个方面突破：,注意使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。 原文A new railway is being built in my hometown.,修正A new railway is under construction in my hometown.,尽量避免过多地重复使用某一单词，必要时选择使用其它恰当的同义词和词组来代替。,原文I like reading while my brother likes watching TV.,修正I like reading while my brother enjoys watching TV.,有可能的话,使用一些地道的,充满洋腔洋调,有“洋味”的单词。,That is a challenge.,(difficult job),So far we havent figured out any schedules.,Thank you for sharing the time with us. The way he views the world is very practical.,( plans ),如能用上一些惯用表达式或精彩格言、谚语，也会使文章生色不小。,Well begun is half done.,Where there is a will ,there is a way .,No pains, no gains!,Failure is the mother of success.,根据下面六幅图画的提示，写一篇短文,Comment on the Former Composition:,One day after school, LiMing turned on a tap splashing water everywhere. At this moment, Lili hapened to pass by. LiMing splashed him with water and made him all wet. Li Ming ran away without turning off the tap. When Lili saw this, he went over and turned off the water. He angry because he thinks water shouldnt be wasted. Then he went home and wrote a notice. He put it up on the wall near the tap. After some time, Li Ming went back and looked the notice. He felt very sorry for what he had done.,Attention:,1单词拼写要正确,2句子结构要完整,3时态语态要准确,4短文要点要完整,5词语运用要无误,1. happened,2 加was,3 thought,4 which read “Save water”.,5 saw,Homework For Today Write a passage about what you have learned today,05年高考书面表达 评分说明：,能够运用给出的词语，写出正确的句子，逻辑合理；若有拼写错误，可酌情扣13分,05年高考书面表达 评分原则：,第三点：词数少于80的，从内容中减去2分，,评分说明： 第二点：若写出来的文字超过120词，但是有条理，没有表达错误，不应扣分,05年高考书面表达 评分原则：,第六点：如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次（5分）,第二档“较差”（6-10分）： 未恰当完成试题规定的任务 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性 信息未能清楚地传达给读者,第二档“较差”（6-10分）： 未恰当完成试题规定的任