浅谈中考总复习写作训练.ppt

浅谈中考总复习写作训练,化大附中 周振霞 2010.3.,2010中考说明对写的要求,1.能正确使用大小写字母和标点符号。 2.能运用所学词汇、语法和句型，按照题目要求写出一篇不少于60词的文段。能简单描述人物、场所、活动或事件。 3.能根据所给图示或表格写出简单的段落或操作说明。 4.能就常见话题表述事实，表达观点、情感和态度等。 5.能正确使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑关系。,提示词语：every family, lots of housework, learn to do, help, parents, be/feel proud of,2009中考 根据中文大意和英文提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于60词的短文。所给英文提示词语供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。 80.某英文报纸就家务劳动(Housework)话题文，请你投稿。 每个家庭都有许多家务，人人都应该学做一些。谈谈你经常帮父母做哪些家务，有什么体会，并打算在暑假为家里做什么。,近3年北京市中考写作试题,2008年中考 根据中文大意和英文提示词，不少于60字。汶川地震（ Wenchuan Earthquake ）发 生后，9岁学生林浩（Lin Hao ）救了两名同 学，然后步行7个小时到达安全地点。 请你就林浩同学的事迹，以“ Learn from the Hero ”为题给你小英语专刊投稿。内容包括 林浩同学事迹简介，你对这件事的感受，以及 你要向他学习什么。 提示词语：a student,nine years old, happen, save, walk, to safety,be deeply moved, brave, give up,2007年（大纲卷） 根据中文提示和英文书信内容，写一封意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于50词的回信。假如你叫李玲，是英国中学生露茜的笔友，你收到了她的电子邮件。请根据她来信的内容写一封回信。针对她的困惑，谈谈你的看法，同时提出一些建议，告诉她应该做什么，不应该做什么。,Hi Lucy, Nice to hear from you. _ Yours, Li Ling,2007年（课标） 你校美籍学生Tom和Mary刚来北京。他 们在校园网论坛上各发了一个帖子。Tom想 了解北京的基本情况；Mary感到很孤单。假 如你是李华，看到他们的帖子，想写一个回 帖。首先做自我介绍，然后提出建议，并说 一说你将如何帮助他或她。 (请从下面表格A, B中任选一个题目）,不管试题题目如何变化，本质上都是围绕学生的学习或日常生活，结合重大社会事件写人、写事、写看法、感受、提建议。,一、培养学生良好的写作习惯。 二、积累词句，为写作做准备。 三、及时批改、有效讲评。 四、集中进行典型话题写作训练。,一、培养学生良好的写作习惯。,（1）仔细审题，明确要点 （2）围绕要点，联想表达。,建议：,You should eat more vegetables and fruit Youd better do more sports Why not talk with your parents,(3）抓住线索，组织文章。,(4) 仔细检查，认真修改,看法： I think/ In my opinion,your parents are right. its bad for you to eat junk food. you shouldnt ask for pocket money from your grandparents.,2007年中考(大纲卷) 根据中文提示和英文书信内容，写 一封意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于50 词的回信。假如你叫李玲，是英国中学 生露茜的笔友，你收到了她的电子邮 件。请根据她来信的内容写一封回信。 针对她的困惑，谈谈你的看法，同时提 出一些建议，告诉她应该做什么，不应 该做什么。,Dear Li Ling, These days Tom Cruise, the film star, always comes into my mind. I think of him night and day. I just sit in my room and watch videos of his films again and again. Ive written hundreds of letters to him and sent e-mails to his fan club, but all I get back are only photos with his names on them. I dream that some day Ill meet him and that hell feel the same way about me. I dont want to learn my lessons any more, and Ill have final exams next month. Im thinking of running away to Hollywood（好莱坞）to meet him. Can you help me with the problem? Yours, Lucy,Hi Lucy, Nice to hear from you. Everyone has his favorite stars and theres nothing wrong with that. I understand you. But I dont think what you do is right since you are a student. Youd better read more interesting books and have more sports in your free time. Stop writing to him and watching his films. You may also tell your problem to your parents and teachers. Im sure theyll help you. Running away to Hollywood is a wrong idea. Work hard on your lessons and get ready for the exams. Your future is in your hands. Yours, Li Ling,提供范文,Practice,同学们在进入九年级（初三）之后，感觉到了学 习的压力和时间的紧迫。王磊同学因不知如何处理学习 和体育运动的关系，在校园网上发贴，请求帮助。请你 以李华的明义给他回帖，告诉他体育运动的重要性，介 绍自己何时从事自己喜欢的运动，并对如何安排好学习 和体育活动提出合理建议。 注意事项： 1）必须包括三个方面的内容；2）提示词汇供选用； 3）词数不少于60。4）请不要写出真实校名和姓名。 提示词语：important, be busy, do well in , do ones best,二、积累词句，为写作做准备。,1.听写能力（词、句、文） 2.遣词造句能力 （重点词、词组、基本句型） （5种基本句型；80个中考 必备句型） 3. 树立句型意识。,三、及时批改、有效讲评。,学生习作中经常出现的错误主要有： (1)句子结构错误。不遵循英语句式要求,按汉语思维或习惯拼凑中国式英语,或主要句子成份不全。 (2)时态、语态错误。写作时经常出现前后时态不一致的问题；动作发生的时间不同,不知道运用合适的时态、语态。 (3)词形变化错误。表现在“主谓一致,名词单复数,动词形式,单词拼写及大小写等方面”。经常出现动词第三人称单数问题，写着写着就忘了要主、谓一致。,(4)用词错误。对一些常用词语的区别、使用场合、习惯用法、搭配等不熟悉。 (5)审题不准。谋篇布局失误。词、句子或段落之间缺少必要的联系,东一榔头、西一棒槌，文章显得支离破碎，让人摸不着头脑;往往出现有头无尾,要点不全,或不紧扣主题,随意发挥;还有就是格式不规范、书写潦草,卷面不整洁等问题。,集中讲评“典型”作文，个别学生的作文面批。,例：09-10第一学期期末作文,根据中文大意和英文提示词语，写出意思 连贯，符合逻辑，不少于60词的短文，所给提 示词语供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。 某英文报纸就“学生在家庭中如何节约能 源”这一话题进行征文活动,请你投稿。 保护环境对每个人来说都很重要。作为一名 生，谈谈你平时在家中节约能源的具体做法， 有何感受，并且今后打算做什么。 提示词语：important, protect the environment, save energy, turn off, recycle, feel proud of,习作一,As a middle school student. I think its important for us to protect the environment. So I often turn off the lights when I leave my home. And I never throw bottles away because its(应为theyre) wasteful. I always sell them together so that I can not only save money but also make them to (删掉to) be reusable. I feel proud of saving energy. It is very important for everyone. I will keep doing these things which can save energy such as turning off the lights and saving bottles.,讲评： 审题清晰；信息点齐全，完全符合题目要求；文段结构合理；句式多样；行文表达流畅。可以把第一段最后的内容稍加改动，放到第二段。,第一段I never改为At home I always collect empty bottles because they are very useful.是否更好,习作二,Its very important for us to protect the environment. We can do a lot of things to protect it. As a student, we should save energy at home. I always write words on both sides of paper to help save trees as many as possible. I turn off the lights when I go out of the room. After washing the clothes, I use the water to wash the toilet. I never use the paper cups at home. I feel proud of myself because I can help our earth save energy. This can make it more and more beautiful. Im save that I will keep saving energy and ask my friends to do it with me.,讲评: 审题清晰；信息点全，完全符合题目要求；文段结构合理,段落分明；句式多样；行文表达流畅。 第一段缺少合适的连词，把几件事如何有效的联系起来或者重新理思路；有些词汇（save energy）复现率高;,修改后的第一段 Its more and more important for us to protect the environment. We need to protect and save energy. Especially as a middle school student, I always try my best to save energy at home. I turn off lights when I dont need them. I always write words on both sides of paper to help save trees as many as possible. And I dont throw it away because its better to recycle. I use the water to wash the toilet after washing the clothes. Whats more I never use the paper cups at home.,Its very important for us to protect the environment. As a middle school student. I save energy not only at home but also in my school. I often turn off the lights when we have P.E. lessons. And I use paper on both sides in my school, I use the lunch box for my dinner all the time. I feel very happy to do these and I am going to do these.,以10初三第一学期末习作为例 习作三,此文段跑题了，句子不是很丰富，虎头蛇尾。,Its very important for everyone to protect the environment. As a student I also save energy at home. To turn off the TV and lights when I leave. I am proud of save (改为saving) energy. Im glad to protect the environment. From now on, I will keep doing those everywhere . Because It is good for our Earth. I will take part in a recycle programs in winter holiday.,以10初三第一学期末习作为例 习作四,四、集中进行典型话题写作训练。,u描述人物、场景、活动或事件 个人情况 、家庭 、学校 朋友 、社会 u 表达看法、情感、态度，提建议 （10个方面） （根据中考说明主要话题项目表）,描述人物、场景、活动或事件,个人情况 Self-introduction (appearance/ personality); My hobby; My travel experience ; 家庭 My family; My parents; Family rules; Weekend activities; Winter/ Summer holiday plan;,学校 My school; My school day ; My school life; My Favorite subject; School activities; (school trip/ school sports meeting/ after school groups ); School rules; 朋友 My mother; My father; My best friend My teacher My classmate,社会、文化 How to protect the environment; Important social events; (e.g. 2008 Olympic Games; Earthquake) Introduce a city or a place of interest; Festival customs Good manners,表达看法、情感、态度，提建议,1)About school rules (e.g. wearing school uniforms / not allowed to use mobile phones at school / eating at school) 2) About sports (e.g. have to study, no time to do sports / dont like doing sports) 3)About keeping healt