专四便条写作-NoteWriting.ppt

,EnglishWritingIVLectureThreeNoteWriting便条写作,SECTIONBNOTE-WRITING10MINWriteonANSWERSHEETTWOanoteofabout50-60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation:Yourclassmate.Jimmy,isheadoftheuniversitysswimmingclub.Hehasinvitedyoutojointheclub,butyoulikesomeothersport.Writehimanote,declininghisinvitationandexplainingwhy.Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriateness.,SectionB,Note-Writing,Note-Writing,便条写作:满分为10分。评分标准主要参照该文是否格式完整,结构合理,内容表达清楚,行文连贯,能否实现应用文的交际功能等方面。LayoutofNotes:日期(Date)称谓(salutation)，内容(Body)署名(Complimentaryclose),BasicRequirements,1、Correctinform：-Correctarrangementororganizationofrelevantinformation；Date；Salutation；Details；Thecomplimentaryclose；Signature；punctuation；Observethemodelnotes2、Completeincontent：-Understandingtheinstructions；Understandingthesituation；Coveringthegist/mainpoints；Dictationofsomemodelnotes；3、Appropriateinlanguage：-Isthenotequiteformal,informalorcolloquialinlanguage?-Usedifferentstylesondifferentoccasionsanddisplayyourabilitytouselanguageappropriately;-Avoidgrammaticalerrors;-Ensurethatnodifficultyisexperiencedbythereader.,I.格式,1.日期:正确的写法:June24th,2003/June10,2003/June24th/June24,6/24/2003,24/6/2003,位置在右上角.2.称呼:正确的写法:DearJack,/DearJack:/Jack,/Jack:位置在日期下面一行左侧.3.结尾:正确的写法:Yourssincerely,/Yourstruly,/yours,/sincerely(Truly)yours,/Sincerely,Sally(注意此处不能用汉语拼音或打叉XXX)位置在便条结尾的右下方.如果上述各项都按左对齐,不扣分.如:DearJack,IhaveSincerelyYours,sally,II.内容,按便条具体内容的各项功能给分.以2002年的便条要求为例:Youhaveheardthatyourfriend,Jack,wishestosellhiswalkman.Writehimanoteexpressingyourinterestinit,askinghimaboutitsconditionandofferingapriceforit.本便条内容必须包括以下三项:1.Expressingyourinterestinit.2.AskingJackaboutitscondition.3.Offeringapriceforit.缺内容扣分;语言表达较差扣0.51.5;拼写及语法错误超过3个的扣一分.,Notes-writing评分标准：1格式不对扣1分2超字数或字数达不到扣1分3语法、拼写错误3个扣1分。主要内容是否交待清楚占最大比重。造成错误的原因1不写日期或日期格式不对，很多学生习惯将它写在右下方。2署名后不应该有任何标点符号，而很多学生习惯点上句号。3结束语与署名写在一行。4Yours写成Your语言不得体，比如，对于很随便的情景，使用很正式的词。,Back,注意:,1、便条的时间；2、写便条者与收便条者之间的关系；3、情景的正式程度。根据情景确定适当的称呼和署名，确定所用语言的语体。4、仔细检查格式是否正确，内容表达是否清楚，用词是否准确得体，句子结构是否符合语法。,Back,TypesofNotes1.DeclininganInvitation2.PassingInformation3.AskingforInformation4.TakingLeave5.AskingforHelp6.AskingforPermission7.ExpressingRegrets8.ExpressingCongratulation9.ExpressingGoodWishes10.MakingComplaints11.Othertypes,Back,CommonTypesofNotes,1.DeclininganInvitationTask:YoureceivedanotefromyoursisterdormroominvitingallyourroommatestoseeafilmnextWednesdayafternooninYouhaoCinema.Butyoucantgo.Writeanoteofabout50-60wordstellingthemyoucantgoandexplainingthereason.KeyNote:(1)Thanks;(2)Reasons;(3)ApologySample,Sample:Apr.6DearEveryone,Wecantthankyouenoughfortheinvitationtoseethefilm.However,nextWednesdayisnotagoodtimeforusbecausewearegoingtotakepartinourschoolsdramacontest.Couldwemakeitsomeothertime?Wearereallysorryfornotbeingabletogo.Yours,WangLingling(Onbehalfofall)要点分析:1.这是写给同龄人的,语气和文体都不必太正式.2.内容包括:(1)感谢邀请,(2)陈述不能去的理由,(3)表示抱歉.3.不必提出另一次约会的时间,因为写作任务里并没有要求.多写还可能出没必要的错.,Back,2.PassingInformationTask:YoureceivedatelephonemessagefromanassistantworkingatthecomputercenteraskingyourroommateBob/Janetoclaimhis/herlostelectronicdictionarytomorrow.Writeanotepassingtheinformation.KeyNote:(1)sourceoftheinformation,(2)ContentSample,Sample:Feb.19DearJane,Itookatelephonemessageforyoujustnowwhileyouwereatthelibrary.PeterJames,theassistantatthecomputercenter,saidthatsomeonehadturnedinyourelectronicdictionaryandtoldyoutopickituptomorrowat10:30inRoom303.RemembertotakeyourIDcardwithyou.Yours,Marilyn要点分析:1.这是给同学的便条,语气和格式不必正式.2.内容应包括:(1)如何知道该消息的,(2)要你转告什么,(3)在何处,什么时间,找谁以及还需要带什么证件去取.3.写清如何去取是重点.,Back,3.AskingforInformation:Task:YouhearthattheStudentunionwantssomevolunteerstoworkduringthesummervacation.WritetoBonnieInsulwhoisinchargeofitaskingforfurtherinformation.KeyNote:(1)Theme(thetopicsentenceinthetask);(2)informationwanttoknow;(3)yourwayofcontact;(4)Thanks.sample,Sample:May28thDearMs.Insul,IknowthatthestudentUnionwantssomevolunteerstoworkduringthesummervacation.Wouldyoupleasetellmesomedetailedinformation(suchasthekindofjob,thelengthofthework,thestartingdate,andanyspecificrequirementsofthework,etc.)sothatIcandecidewhetherIshouldapplyforitornot?PleasedropanoteinMailbox2365.Thankyouverymuchforthehelp.SincerelyYours,LiuXiaoming要点分析:1.收条人是你不认识的人,所以语气和格式都要正式.2.内容应包括:(1)主题(第一句话);(2)需要了解的工作的细节,如什么样的工作,干多长时间,等等;(3)你的联系方式;(4)致谢3.此类寻求信息的便条内容越具体越好.,Back,4.TakingLeave:Task:YouhavetosendyourroommatePeter/Janewhoisrunningahighfeverthismorningtothehospital,soyoucanthavethismorningsreadingclass.Writeanoteofabout60wordstoyourteacherMr.Chenexplainingthereasonforyourabsenceoftheclass.KeyNote:(1)Askforaleave;(2)Reasons;(3)Apologysample,Sample:Jan.6DearProfessorChen,IamsorrythatIcantattendthismorningsreadingclassbecauseIhavetotakeJanetothehospital.Sheisrunningahighfeverandcantpossiblygobyherself.Iwilltrytomakeuptodayslessonbyconsultingtheotherstudentsnoteswhenwecomeback.Yourssincerely,LinJing要点分析:1.这是学生写给老师的请假条,语气和格式都应正式.2.内容应包括:(1)你要请假;(2)原因;(3)致歉3.补上课的内容为附加内容,有了更好.,Back,5.AskingforHelpTask:Upongraduation,youaredeterminedtogoabroadforfurtherstudy.Whenyougottheapplicationformsfromthechosenuniversities,youneedsomerecommendationletters.WriteanotetoaskProfessorYangforit.KeyNote:(1)Yoursituation/difficulty;(2)Askforhelp;(3)Thankssample,Sample:May8,2003DearProfessorYang,Ivebeenluckytobeoneofyourstudentsduringmyfourthyear.Bothyourlecturesandpersonalityhaveinpressedmegreatly.IdecidedtogotoAmericatoworkforamasterdegree.Sinceyouenjoyreputationbothathomeandabroad,Illbeobligedifyouwouldsparesometimetowritemearecommendationletter.Illbemoreconfidentthaneverwithyourkindnessandencouragement.Verysincerelyyours,WuYu要点分析:1.这是写给老师的便条,所以语气要客气委婉,格式要正式.2.内容应包括:(1)背景介绍“我是谁”,我出国求学的原因,我对收件人的仰慕“恰倒好处;(2)提出要求;(3)表明盼望的心情和谢意.3.为了促成事情的圆满解决,适度地强化内容也是必要的.这则便条的最后一句就起到了事半功倍的作用.,Back,6.AskingforPermissionTask:Youhavetoborrowyourroommateslunchboxbecauseyourformerclassmatehascometovisityouandyouaregoingtohavelunchtogether.AsXinrongisoutshoppingandwontbebackforlunch,youjusttakehers/his.Leaveanotetellingher/himaboutit.KeyNote:(1)Whatyouwanttodo;(2)Askforpermission;(3)Thankssample,Sample:22/10/2003DearXinrong,IhavetouseyourlunchboxthisnoonbecauseIhaveavisitor.SinceyouwontbebackforlunchIllsimplytakeyours.IwillreturnittoyouassoonasIfinisheating.Ifthiscausesanyinconveniencetoyou,Ifeelterriblysorry.Yours,WuPeng要点分析:1.便条是写给同学的,所以不必刻意讲究.2.内容应包括:(1)你要做什么,(2)请求允许和原谅,(3)致谢3.在物品的主人不在时,需要使用他的东西应急是我们时常遇到的情况,留个便条说明一下显得礼貌,所以最后一句的语气应该正式一点.,Back,7.ExpressingRegretsTask:YourmiddleschoolclassmatewhoisinanotheruniversityinthesamecitycametovisityoulastSaturday,butyouwerenotin.writeanoteofabout60wordsexpressingyourregretsonhavingmissedseeinghim/herandgivecertainreason.KeyNote:(1)Explainreasons;(2)expressregrets;(3)yourwayofmakingupforit.Sample,Sample:Jan.21,2004DearXiaoMing,ItwasverykindofyoutocometoseemelastSaturday.IthappenedthattheEnglishDepartmentheldalectureonhowtoimproveoralEnglishandalltheEnglishmajorswererequiredtoattend.WhatapitythatIdidntseeyou!ShallwemeetnextSunday?Idliketovisityouandyouruniversity.IllcallyoubeforeIgo.Yours,Lily要点分析:1.这是一个写给朋友的便条.要求中没有给出姓名的情况下,必须加上姓名.2.内容必须包括:表示感谢,解释原因,表示遗憾以及补救方式.3.尽管朋友间的便条使用非正式语气,但应注意要真诚地表示遗憾.,Back,8.ExpressingCongratulationYouwatchedthebasketballgamebetweenthesophomoresandthejuniors.ThesophomoresteamwhereyourfriendJimisinwonthegame.Writeanotetocongratulatehim.KeyNote:(1)sourceofthenews;(2)yourreactionandcongratulationsample,Sample:Apr.4,2003DearJim,Congratulationstoyouandyourteam!Iwatchedthegameyesterdayandwasgladtoseethatyouhelpedyourteambeatthejuniorsbadly.YoubehavedextremelywellandIthoughtyoucouldwintheBestAthleteifthereweresuchareward.Iwillsupportyouandyourteamasever.Yours,George要点分析:1.这是一个写给朋友的便条,所以使用非正式语言表现朋友之间的亲密关系.2.内容应包括:得知消息的途径,写便条人的反映以及表示祝贺.,Back,9.ExpressingGoodWishesTask:Yourforeignteacherisleavingforhishomecountryafterteachinginyouruniversityforoneyear.Writeanoteexpressingyourgoodwishestohim/her.KeyNote:(1)aboutthenews;(2)expressyourgoodwishesSample,Sample:Dec.20,2003DearProf.Smith,IveheardthatyouveleavingforUSthedayaftertomorrow.IvelearnedagreatdealfromyouoverthepastyearandIfeelsorryfornothavinghadthechancetoattendyourclasslonger.Pleaseacceptmybestwishes.IwishyouapleasanttripandamerryChristmas.Yourssincerely,Cathy要点分析:1.这是一个写给老师的便条,所以语气和用词应显示尊敬.2.内容必须包括:得知离开的消息,依依不舍的感情及美好的祝愿.3.语气和格式有点正式,但又不失亲近,表示祝愿要真诚.,Back,10.MakingComplaintsTask:Astudent,sally,whoislivingnextdooroftenplaysrecordssoloudlydeepintothenight.Writeanoteconveyingyourcomplaints.KeyNote:(1)problemandcomplaint;(2)yoursuggestion/hopeinsolvingtheproblem;(3)Thankssample,Sample:Jan.2,2004DearSally,Thefinalexaminationarecomingandeveryoneisstudyinglateatnight.ButfortunatelyIvefoundithardtositdowntoworkrecently,becauseIhavebeendisturbedbytheloudnoisemadebyyourstereo.Willyouturnitdownsothatitwillnotdisturbothers?Thankyou.Yours,Jane要点分析:1.这是一个非正式的便条.两人是关系比较密切的同学,所以语言简洁直接.2.内容必须包括:导入抱怨的话题,提出不满,希望如何解决问题,作后表示感谢.3.尽管双方地位平等且关系密切,还应注意礼貌地表达不满,这样才容易被对方接受.,Back,OtherTypesofNotes,（1）appointment：关键：定好约会的时间、地点Example:Feb.11thHelen,.CouldwemeetonFridayafternoonat3oclockattheschoolgate?Jane,（2）Apology：关键：遵循以下步骤：道歉解释原因-（再一次道歉）。注意道歉的表达方式。July3rdLily,ImterriblysorryIfailedtomeetyouattheschoolgateyesterdayafternoon.Ihadoneofthebiketirespuncturedonmyway,andbythetimeIhadthepuncturemendedandgottoschool,youmusthavegivenuphopeandleft.Dopleaseforgiveme.GeorgeUsefulexpressions:1.Imsorrythat2.Imso/terribly/awfully/extremely/reallysorrythat3.Iwouldliketoexpressmyapologiesfor4.Iapologizefor5.Forgivemeing6.Pleaseacceptmyapologiesfor,（3）SendingInvitation：关键：写明时间、地点及活动内容Example:July12thMr.&Mrs.Johnson,Weshouldbeverygladifyoucouldcometodinnerwithusatourapartmentatabout7p.m.onWednesday,Sep.21st.welookforwardtoseeingyou.Lin&Wang,（4）Inquiry：关键：注意请求的方式及语言要客气。Example:Aug.1stDan,Pleaseletmeknowassoonaspossiblewhatarrangementsyouhavemade.Thankyou.TongUsefulexpressions:1.CouldI2.,Please/Please3.Will/Would/Couldyouplease4.Iwouldliketo5.Iwouldbegratefulif6.Wewouldappreciateing7.Iwonderif,（5）ExpressThanks：关键：表达谢意的句型。Example:May5thDearMr.Shen,ImwritingtotellyouhowgratefulIamforyourwarmhospitalityduringmystayinyourcity.Ienjoyeditgreatly.FengUsefulExpression:1.Thankyouvery)so)muchfor/Manythanksfor2.Imwritingtothankyoufor3.Imwritingtoexpressmyappreciationof4.Itwasmostkindofyouto,Back,历年试题,(TEM4/97)YouarePeter/Mary.YouhadapartyatyourhomerecentlybutunintentionallyneglectedtoinviteaclosefriendofyoursVictoria.Writeheranoteapologizingforthisandexplaininghowthemistakecameabout.(TEM4/98)YouareMarkorsally.Youhavegotatickettoacomputerfair,butyounowfindthatyouareunabletogo.Writeanotetoyourfriend,George,explainingwhyyouaresendingtheenclosedtickettohimandtellinghimbrieflyhowtogetthere.,历年试题,(TEM4/99)YouvelearnedthatyourfriendJimmyisillthesedays.Writehimanoteexpressingyourconcern,askingafterhishealthandgivingyourbestwishes.(TEM4/2000)Youvereadonthenoticeboardthattheuniversitylibraryislookingforapart-timelibraryassistantwhocanworkatweekends.Youthinkthatyourclassmate,George,isasuitablepersonforthisvacancy.Writehimanote,tellinghimwhatyouknowaboutthevacancyandtryingtopersuadehimtogoforaninterview.,历年试题,(TEM4/2001)Yesterdayyoufailedtoturnupfortheappointmentwithyourteacher,ProfessorWang.Writehimanoteofapologyandmakearequestforanothermeeting.Youshouldalsosuggestthetimefortherequestedmeeting.(TEM4/2002)Youhaveheardthatyourfriend,Jack,wishestosellhiswalkman.Writehimanoteexpressingyourinterestinit,askinghimaboutitsconditionandofferingapriceforit.,历年试题,(TEM4/2003)Yourfriend,Jane,hasfailedinthefinalexam,andisfeelingveryunhappyaboutit.Writeanotetocomfortherandgivehersomeencouragement.(TEM4/2004)Yourfriend,Jane,hasfailedinthefinalexam,andisfeelingveryunhappyaboutit.Writeanotetocomfortherandgivehersomeencouragement.,Back,Exercise,Writeanoteofabout50-60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation:Youhavereceivedabirthdaygiftfromafriendofyours.Writeanotetoacknowledgethegiftandexpressyo