2011凌云级高三十月阶段考.ppt

高考英语写作定位,1熟悉的话题2100-140个词3不止一个段落,高考写作,1避免随心所欲2取悦评判教师3关注谴词造句,写作,1输入2模仿3再生,假如你是Lily,请根据下列提示和要求给你的外国笔友Peter写一封信。如何度过了高三学习的第一个月？想在明年高考考那所大学？为什么要考这所大学？为了实现你的目标，今后要做哪些方面的努力？注意：1.词数：120左右2.信的开头和结尾已写好，不计入总词数。DearPeter,Howarethingswithyou?Areyoustillworkingonyourpaper?_Bestwishes,评分原则,词语句子准确内容要点齐全篇章结构分段词数100-140结束句添加书写工整按档次给分：五档：20、21、22分四档（上）：18、19分四档（下）：16、17分(附中学生的书面表达至少要有17分）三档（上）：13、14、15三档（下）：11、12凡套题、跑题的书面表达得分为5-8分。凡书写较差的视为三档下的作文。,一、注意1.多套用句型,句式多样性；避免汉式英语(不写没把握的句子和词组)2.注意连贯，条理清楚；正确使用连接词。3.要检查主谓一致、习惯用法、单词拼写等方面的错误。4.写作前先理清思路，注意要点，以免遗漏；可以先将重要词组、句型列出，再开始写作。5.要根据自己的实际情况或虚构情节完成写作，要有话可说，要符合半开放作文的写作要求。6.书写工整,二、存在问题：1.审题不清：1)“如何度过了”看成“将如何度过”2)是叙述自己的情况，不是要对方叙述情况3）没有写出想上的大学的名称，太写实，不懂得虚构。2.中式英语表达较多，不会套用句型，短句偏多-出现较低级错误。3.部分同学拼写错误严重-基本功差。,二、存在问题：4.答题前没列提纲，结构混乱，思维混乱5.部分同学出现套题现象（套用上一篇）。6.有些作文收尾不自然，很唐突。7.答题时间不足，建议书面表达答题时间为25-30分钟。8.部分学生无话可说，字数不够。9.部分同学书写较差，卷面不整洁，思维混乱，涂改较多（严禁在考试中使用涂改液、带、纸等）-屡教不改会吃亏的。,优点,部分同学开始使用讲评过的范文的句型和短语。悟性高如：sparenoefforttodoTheresnodenyingthatattachimportancetosth.beadmittedtoauniversityfeelstressedoutmakegooduseofIwouldappreciateitifyoudidbeadmittedtoauniversity,优点,取悦评卷教师：聪明IwanttoenterFujianNormalUniversityIdreamofbeingateacherWithouttheteachershelp,Iwouldnot今后的努力：devotemyselftolearningEnglishattachmoreimportancetoEnglishjointheEnglishclub,常见错误,?theXiamen/Beijing/FudanUniversity?cometruemydream?tomakemydreamrealizeschool和university不分everyday和everyday的区别？Itsnodoubtthat?appreciatemyteachers?preparetheexam?Iquitefeltasenseofstressout.?stressful?Everyminutescount.?Withthetimewentby,优秀习作及点评：22分Imwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmylifeandstudy.(开门见山，与前面过度自然）Asyouknow,Impreparingforthecomingexams.Withtimegoingby,Ihavebeentryingmybesttoenhancemyability.(toimprovemyabilities)Everythinggoeswell.Whenitcomestomydream,beingadmittedbyPeckingUniversity(BeijingUniversity)ismydream.（好句）PeckingUniversityisfamousforitseducation(foritsacademicatmosphere).IwanttomajorinEnglish,whichisthemostimportantfactorindecidingyourfuture.(取悦评卷教师，不错）Besides,IalsowanttominorinMath(辅修数学，很好）（还可以用takeacourseinMath)mainlyduetothefactthatmathismyfavouritesubject.(thatIlikemathaswell).,Tocometruemydream,(高分考生不该犯的错。cometrue是不及物动词短语，不跟宾语，应改为Tomakemydreamcometrue;Toreach/realize/achievemydream;Toturnmydreamintoreality)Ioughttodevotemyselftostudy(tomystudies).ThemostsignificantthingIhavetotakeintoconsiderationistomakeupmymindtostudyharderandharder.Itisalsoofgreatimportancetopaycloseattentiontomyphysicalhealth.Doingsportsis,toalargedegree,veryusefulforme.Icanreaplotsofbenefitsfromit.（全都是好句）,Besideswhatismentionedabove,itisstillnecessarytothinkofmymentalhealth,Thewaytorelaxmyselfislisteningtolightmusic.(由于字数的限制，为了更简练，可以改为：.Besides,Irelaxmyselfbylisteningtolightmusicinmysparetime.)OnlyinthiswaycanIgetridoftoomuchpressure.Howaboutyou?Ithinkitagreatpleasuretowritetoyou.Donthesitatetowritetomewheneveryouneedhelp.Bestwishes.,优秀习作及点评：22分Howtimeflies!The(This)Septemberhasquicklypassed(passedbeforeweknewit).Justasyouhad(不用had)pointedout,thelifeofSenior3isfilledwithbothchallengesanddifficulties.Ididfeelstressful(此处不该错stressedout/undermuchstress)forsometimeduetothehugeamountofhomework,butfortunatelyImanagedtocalmmymind(calmmyself)andfound(find)amoreeffectivewaytolearn.Totellyouthetruth,IreallydreamofbeingadmittedtoPekingUniversitynextyear.ItsfascinatinghistoryandimpressivelearningatmospherehavebeenattractingmesinceIwasyoung.Also,Ithinkitwillgivememorechancestodevelopmyabilities.,However,theroadtosuccessissuretobetough.Inordertorealizemydream,Imustmakebetteruseoftimeandstudymoreeffectively.Whatsmore,Ihavetobecalmenoughtocopewithallthetroubles,alwaysadoptingapositiveattitudetothedetailsImaycomeacrosswhilestudying.Lastbutnottheleast,Iwillworksteadilyformygoal,not(without)beingtoostressful(nervous,stressful多跟life,job等连用)allthetime.要有一两个结束句。,高三11班纪晓芊：HavingstudiedfornearlyamonthinSenior3,Ifeelstressed.Therearevariouscoursesforustostudy.Weareburdenedwithmuchhomeworknearlyeveryday.Inaddition,therearevarietiesofactivitiesofactivitiesforustotakepartin.IwillsparenoefforttorealizemydreamofbeingadmittedtoXiamenUniversity,forthereisafantasticplace.Iamdeeplyimpressedbythebeautyoftheuniversity.Apartfromthescene,theeducationlevelhereisquitegood.Inordertomakemydreamcometrue,IwillputalotofeffortintothepreparationsfortheCollege,EntranceExam.Foronething,Ithinkitnecessaryformetogothroughthethingswehavelearnedcarefully.Foranther,IneedtoconcentratemyattentiononimprovingEnglish.Besides,Ishallraisetheawarenessofcommunicatingwithteachers.Aboveall,Iwillattachimportancetolearning,forfutureisinmyhand.Iwouldappreciateitifyoucouldwritemesoon.全文流畅，恰如其分地运用学过的句型、短语。值得同学们模仿。,Onepossibleversion:DearPeter,Howarethingswithyou?Areyoustillworkingonyourpaper?Lastmonthmostofmytimewasdividedbetweenattendingclasses,doinghomeworkandgoingoverlessons.ThatisperhapsalifeeverySenior3studenthastolive.IhavehadthedreamofgoingtoBeijingUniversitysinceIwenttoseniorhighschool.NextyearIwillcompeteforoneplacetherebecauseitisaworldclassuniversity,whereIwillgetbettertrainedandmypursuitofknowledgewillgofurtherwiththehelpOfexcellentteachersthere.,Tobe