惠安第一中学 何芳2612,2008.ppt

高三英语书面表达复习指导(一)howtocomposeagoodwrittenpassage?,惠安第一中学何芳26/12,2008,stepone,readloudlyandrecite.,warm-up:,task1readloudlyandrecite.,agoodbeginningmakesagoodending.,dontputofftilltomorrowwhatshallbedonetoday.,attitudemakeseverything;practicemakesperfect.,recitationisagoodwaytoimproveyourwriting!,agoodbeginningmakesagoodending.,dontputofftilltomorrowwhatshallbedonetoday.,attitudemakeseverything;practicemakesperfect.,steptwo,enjoyagoodpassage.,enjoyreading,whetherornotshouldsenior3studentsgospringouting?wehavehadaheateddiscussion.opinionsaredividedonthequestion.moststudents,about65%,arefortheideathatsenior3studentsshouldgospringouting.theythinkitgoodfortheirhealthtobeclosetonatureandbreathesomefreshairandwhatsmore,theycanrelaxthemselvesforawhileandresttheirbrainssothattheywillbemoreenergetic.theythinkitwilldogoodtotheirstudents.ontheotherhand,about35%studentsareagainsttheidea.theysaythatwithcollegeentranceexaminationdrawingnear,theydontfeellikegoinganywhere.besides,theythinkgoingspringoutingwilltakeatleastadayoff.theycantaffordthetime.theythinktheyshouldfixtheirattentionontheirstudies.,task2enjoyagoodpassage.(sheet1),hadaheateddiscussion;forawhile;dogoodto;affordthetime;fixtheirattentionon,whatsmore;ontheonehand,ontheotherhand;besides;sothat,theideathatsenior3studentsshouldgospringouting;withcollegeentranceexaminationdrawingnear;theythinkitgoodfortheirhealthtobeclosetonatureandbreathesomefreshair.goingspringoutingwilltakeatleastadayoff.,stepthree,howtocomposeagoodpassage?,focuson,followthefivebasicsteps：认真审题，把握主题；抓准要点，勾勒大纲；3紧扣要点，扩写成文；4添加过渡，确保连贯；5.查错补漏，修饰文章。,examinethewritingrequirements；ensurenottodigressfromthemainsubject)grabthemainpoints;figureouttheoutlineexpandpointsintosentences;linkthesentencestobuildupapassage;checkandcorrecttheerrors;makethepassageperfect.,howtocomposeagoodpassage?,第二节：书面表达（满分25分）某网站最近在网上征集“全民节约”活动的建议。你班学生对此进行讨论。以下是讨论结果。请以李华的名义给网站写一封信。信的开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数（词数：120左右）。参考词汇：一次性的throw-away回收站：recyclestationdearsirormadam,iamwritingtoyoutosharetheideasofnationalthriftaction。.,lookcloselyattherequirements.,task3writing(sssheet2):,审-认真审题，把握主题,体裁,人称,时态,题材,说明文,浪费现象及建议,一般现在时,第一人称,letsfollowthesecondstep:,抓-抓准要点，勾勒大纲,outline1ofthewriting:,introductionparagraph:,conclusionparagraph:,conclusionparagraph:,introductionparagraph:,outline2ofthewriting:,groupdiscussion(1min),outline1oroutline2?,letsfollowthethirdstep:,扩-紧扣要点，扩写成句,expandthepointsintosentences:,wastingelectricityiscommoneverywhere,therestaurantshouldntofferthrow-awaychopstickstopeople.,governmentsshouldalsosetupmorerecyclestationsatthepublicplaces.,oneshallturnonlesslightandturnair-conditioneronemoredegreeupinsummeranddowninwinter.,manyrestaurantsusethrow-awaychopsticksandplasticbags.,morecarsrunontheroad,butthegasolineisinshortsupply.,everyyearmuchpaperisthrownaway.,isuggestgoingtoschoolorworkbybike.,一、写作中句型灵活转换,避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式:,morecarsrunontheroad,andtheycausetheshortageofoil.,withmorecarsrunningontheroad,thegasolineisinshortsupply.,a.用with+宾语+宾补结构合并为简单句,tipsforexpandingthepointsintosentences:,b.合并为复合句,alotoftreesarecutdowntoproducepaper,butmuchpaperisthrownawayeveryyear.,everyyearmuchpaperisthrownaway,whichmakesmoretreescutdowntoproducepaper.,一、写作中句型灵活转换,避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式:,tipsforexpandingthepointsintosentences:,wecangotoschoolorgotoworkbybikesothatwecanhelptoreduceoil.,goingtoschoolorworkbybike,wecanhelptosavegasoline.,c.用分词短语作状语：,一、写作中句型灵活转换,避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式:,tipsforexpandingthepointsintosentences:,二、要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、套用句型和高级词汇等来增加文采.,notonlyisalargeamountofpaperthrownaway,butalsoelectricityiswastedeverywhere.,inaword,itshightimewestartedthingsaboutconservingresourcesratherthanwastingthem.,itisthewastingphenomenathatmaketheenvironmentworseandworse.,tipsforexpandingthepointsintosentences:,groupwork(5mins),expandthepointsintosentences:,letsfollowthefourthstep:,连-添加过渡，确保连贯,四、用过渡句连接段落,三、用连词衔接,一、把作目的状语的不定式置于句首,二、把作状语的分词短语放在句首,tipsforlinking:,五、开好头，结好尾,tosolvethisproblem,wesuggestthatrestaurantsshouldnotusethemagain.,一、把作目的状语的不定式置于句首,tipsforlinking:,二、把作状语的分词短语放在句首,tosaveelectricity,oneshallturnonlesslightandturnair-conditioneronemoredegreeupinsummeranddowninwinter.,goingtoschoolorworkbybike,wecanhelptosavegasoline.,三、用连词衔接,tipsforlinking:,asfarasimconcerned,asweallcansee,whatsmore,whatsworse,ontheonehand,butontheotherhand,infact,besides,which,that,who,etc.notonlybutalso,四、用过渡句连接段落,sohowcanwesettletheseproblems?,五、开好头,wecanseemanythrow-awaychopsticksandbagsintherestaurant.,asweallcansee,therearesomanythrow-awaychopsticksandplasticbagsusedeveryday.,wenoticethatalmostallrestaurantsusethrow-awaychopsticksandplasticbags.,tipsforlinking:,hopemysuggestionswillbeofhelp.,inaword,itshightimewestartedthingsaboutconservingresourcesratherthanwastingthem.,五、结好尾,groupwork(5mins),linkthesentencestobuildupapassage:,stepfour,presentationandassessment,checkandcorrecttheerrors;makethepassageperfect.,bynicky,xiamenforeignlanguageschool,presentation,letsfollowthefifthstep:,查-查错补漏，修饰文章,语言地道，无汉语式英语,时态语态,单复数,词性,冠词,主谓动宾搭配,readingmakesafullman;conferenceareadyman;andwritinganexactman.-francisbacon阅读使人充实，交谈使人机智，写作使人精确。-培根,stepfive,assignment,completeyourhalf-finishedpassages!,thankyou,1.thereismanyrestaurantsusethrow-awaychopstick.,2.moreandmorecarsranontheroads,whichcauseshortsupplyofoil.,checkandcorrecttheerrors;makethepassageperfect.,1.therearemanyrestaurantsusingthrow-awaychopsticks.,1.therearethrow-awaychopsticksusedintherestaurants.,2.moreandmorecarsarerunningontheroads,whichcausestheshortsupplyofoil.,4.everyyearmanypaperisthrowaway.,5.electriciswastingeverywhere.,3.thepriceofoilaregettingmoreandmoreexpensive.,checkandcorrecttheerrors;makethepassageperfect.,3.thepriceofoilisgettinghigherandhigher.,3.theoilisgettingmoreandmoreexpensive.,4.everyyearmuchpaperisthrownaway.,5.electricityiswastedeverywhere.,ok,workhasbeenwelldone!letsenjoy!,dearsirormadam,iamwritingtoyoutosharetheideasofnationalthriftaction.asweallcansee,therearesomanythrow-awaychopsticksandplasticbagsusedeveryday.whatsworse,therearemoreandmorecarsrunningontheroads,whichcausestheshortageofoilandmakesthepriceoftheoilgoupfast.ontheonehand,theforestsarebecomingfewerandfewer.butontheotherhand,muchpaperisthrownawayeveryyear,whichmakesalotoftreescutdowntoproducepaperagain.whatsmore,wastinge