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2019届首考阅卷反馈 於晨北师大台州附属高级中学 一点心情 怎么改卷的 到底怎么改卷的 给一分有理 扣一分有据 It sareallygoodideatovisitcollegesbeforeyouapplybecausetheirwebsitescanallstarttolookandsoundthesame Nothingwillgiveyouthesenseofwhatitwillactuallybeliketoliveonacollegecampus 校园 likevisitingandseeingforyourselfthedorms classroomsandathleticequipmentand ofcourse thestudents Itseemsalittlecrazyoncesenioryearhitstofindthetimetovisitcollegecampuses anditcanalsobepriceyiftheschoolsyouareapplyingtohappentobemorethanacarrideaway Butkeepinmindthatyouaremakingadecisionaboutthenextfouryearsofyourlife anddoalltheresearchyoucantomakesureyouaremakingtherightone There snoexcusenottovisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea Infact alotofcollegeapplicationsevenaskifyouhavevisitedcampus andobviously ifyouliveacrossthecountrythatwon tbeasmuchofapossibility butifyoulivenearby gocheckitout Ifcampusvisitsaren tgoingtohappenbeforeyouapply attheveryleastyoushouldfindsometimebetweenapplyingandgettingyouracceptanceletterstovisittheschoolsyou dliketoattend Itcansaveyoualotofheartacheifyouruleoutnowthethingsthatyoudon tlikeaboutcertaincampuses thingsthatyouwouldn tknowunlessyouactuallyvisit Now iftimeandmoneyaremakingitimpossible thencheckouttheonlinecollegefairsatCollegeWeekLive It sachancetochatonlinewithadmissionsofficers students andcollegecounselors 倾问 anditwon tcostyouapenny Y Whilevisitinganonlinecollegefaircan ttaketheplaceofanactualcampusvisit itcanbeaveryusefultoolthatalongwithallyourotherresearchwillhelpyoumakeaninformeddecisionaboutwhichcollegesoruniversitiesyou dliketoattend 语篇回顾与分析 It sareallygoodideatovisitcollegesbeforeyouapplybecausetheirwebsitescanallstarttolookandsoundthesame Nothingwillgiveyouthesenseofwhatitwillactuallybeliketoliveonacollegecampus 校园 likevisitingandseeingforyourselfthedorms classroomsandathleticequipmentand ofcourse thestudents Itseemsalittlecrazyoncesenioryearhitstofindthetimetovisitcollegecampuses anditcanalsobepriceyiftheschoolsyouareapplyingtohappentobemorethanacarrideaway Butkeepinmindthatyouaremakingadecisionaboutthenextfouryearsofyourlife anddoalltheresearchyoucantomakesureyouaremakingtherightone There snoexcusenottovisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea Infact alotofcollegeapplicationsevenaskifyouhavevisitedcampus andobviously ifyouliveacrossthecountrythatwon tbeasmuchofapossibility butifyoulivenearby gocheckitout Ifcampusvisitsaren tgoingtohappenbeforeyouapply attheveryleastyoushouldfindsometimebetweenapplyingandgettingyouracceptanceletterstovisittheschoolsyou dliketoattend Itcansaveyoualotofheartacheifyouruleoutnowthethingsthatyoudon tlikeaboutcertaincampuses thingsthatyouwouldn tknowunlessyouactuallyvisit Now iftimeandmoneyaremakingitimpossible thencheckouttheonlinecollegefairsatCollegeWeekLive It sachancetochatonlinewithadmissionsofficers students andcollegecounselors 倾问 anditwon tcostyouapenny Y Whilevisitinganonlinecollegefaircan ttaketheplaceofanactualcampusvisit itcanbeaveryusefultoolthatalongwithallyourotherresearchwillhelpyoumakeaninformeddecisionaboutwhichcollegesoruniversitiesyou dliketoattend makeaninformeddecision makingadecision makingtherightone What How Why 主旨 keepinmindthatyouare gocheckitout Itcansaveyoualotofheartache itwon tcostyouapenny Persuasiveintone OnePossibleVersion 第一句包含要点1 2 提倡一句多点 同时体现了主旨句 要点1与2的衔接非常好 Applyingtocollegesisanimportantdecisioninyourlife soyoushouldvisitthecollegesyouwanttoattendinadvance especiallywhentheyarenearwhereyoulive 要点1 2 Ifyoucan tmakeitbeforeapplication youshoulddoitbeforetheacceptancelettersarrive 要点3 Finally ifyoudohavenotimeormoneyforit visitingtheonlinecollegefairscanalsohelpyoumaketherightdecision 要点4 70 Tomakeagood rightdecision Doingresearchasyoucanbefore 第二句要点3 关注了信息的恰当转述 第三句包含要点4 同时回应了全文主旨 总体评价 1 4要点呈现非常清晰 衔接自然 主旨 Persuasiveintone 是否能找出要点 体现考生阅读理解能力 所以强调要点 是否能体现要点 体现学生语言表达能力 同时强调语言 要点可以找到 但语言表达不易 初一学生也可以找到几个与要点相关的词 但很难准确连贯地表达 要点没有肯定不行 要点全找到了不一定高分 4 主旨句体现学生总览阅读能力 更高层次 评判标准与解析 一句多点 四个点的融合与层次性 父子 7 人称的一致性 切换一次扣一分 作者说 文章关于 不扣分 8 对原文依赖性的判断 第一档次0 5分 有连接4 9 分段扣一分 不需加题目与中文 内容 语言 212118221917151815151214765247342478 04 2302 1 33121 Visitingcollegesinpersoncouldhelpstudentshaveabetterknowledgeofthemandmakeanappropriatedecisionaboutattendingcolleges It snecessarytovisitthelocalcolleges Andifstudentsdidn tdoitbeforeapply it sadvisabletodoitbeforetheygottheiracceptanceletters Butiftimeandmoneynotpermitting collegefairsatcollegeWeeklifeisagoodchoice Acollegecampustourisadvisabletosenseeverythingthereinpersonandchoosetherightonetoapplyfor Partlyowingtothequestionsinapplications it samustforpupilstovisitlocalcampuses Andavisitsquashedbetweenapplyingandacceptanceisrequirediftimelimited Soastoprepareyourselfinadvance Plus onlinecollegefairscanserveasafreeandhelpfulaccesstochatwithothersandmakeproperchoiceevenifanactualtourisimpossible 63 83 公认美文 第一眼美文 阅卷试评 语言 2 Youshouldlookforeveryschoolattractyoueyesexceptlocalschools 3 Thereisexcusetovisittheschoolswhichinyourlocalarea 4 Ithelpsyoutomakeadecisiontochoosecampusevenyoulivenearby 5 Youshouldtofindsometimetovisittheschoolyou dliketoattend 6 Ifnot you dbetterlendalettertotheschoolwhichyouwanttoattend 7 Atleast youshouldgetyouracceptancelettertoschoolswhichyoulike 8 Iftimeandmoneypermitting whynotasksomestudents 9 Theactualcampusvisitbetterthanvisitingcampusonline whenyouselectingtheuniversitiesandmakingthebestdecision 问题归纳与反思 1 Beforeyoumakingthedecisiontochoiseyourcollege visitingitisagoodidea Youshouldfindsometimeapplying gettingacceptanceletters It sofgreat tovisitthecollegesbeforemakingadecision 1 谓语动词的形式 动词意义搭配 情态动词的结构问题 2 人称代词的正确形式及各种词性使用问题 3 句型理解及连词的意义理解问题 4 复杂语法结构意义理解不正确及表述不精练问题 It shighly tovisittheonlinecollegefairs You visitthenearbycolleges importance necessity must after before recommended advised Moreguidedapproachesproducegoodresults Agappedsummarytocomplete 内容 1 Manythingsincollegeyouwouldn tknowunlessyouactuallyvisitit 2 Knowingwhatyoudon tlikecansaveyourheartache 1 Bytheway ifyoudon tmakesomepreparations youwon tknowmore 2 Hopefully youcanchooseagoodcollege 3 It sconvincingtochoosecollegesnearby 4 Tryyourbesttovisittheschoolyou dliketoattendsothatyoumaynotregret 5 Onlywhenyouvisitinpersoncanyouhavelessheadacheorlearnmore 1 细节误当要点 2 加入其他观点 1 Riceiscereal 2 Differentcountrieseatriceintheirowndifferentways 3 Thepotatoisavegetable 4 Potatoesaregoodforyou 5 Drinkingtoomuchcoffeeisbadforyourhealth 6 Coffeeismadefromcoffeebean 1 IhaveadognamedJupiter 2 Givingadvicecanbeverydangerous 3 Iwalkedtothetopofthehillandstopped 4 Maintainingahometodayrequiresalotoftime moneyandenergy 5 Migrantworkersareverypoorlypaid 6 Writingagoodparagraphrequiresfourdistinctprocesses theonlinecollegefairs Tomaketherightdecisionaboutwhichcollegetoapply Factoropinion Thesisordetails It sofgreathelptovisitcollegesbeforeapplicationbecauseitwillgiveyouthesenseofcollegelife thoughitsoundscrazyandcanbepricey Besides you dbettervisittheschoolsinyourlocalarea Moreover ifvisitsdon thappenbeforeyouapply you dbetterfindsometimetovisityouridealschoolstosaveyoualotofheartache Finally ifyouhavenotimeormoneytovisit youcancheckoutinformationonline Tomaketherightdecisionaboutwhichcollegetoapply Moreguidedapproachesproducegoodresults Aninaccutatesummarytocorrect theonlinecollegefairs 结构 It snecessaryforyoutovisitcollegesbeforeyouapply Firstly it stheplaceyouwillstayforfouryears sodoingitmayhelpyoutochoosearightone Besides toknowtheschool scertaindirection Finally itisimportantforyoutounderstandyourmind Nowadays thereisawebsitecalled CollegeWeeklive canhelpyoutodothedecision 语法衔接 照应 替代 省略 词汇衔接 原词复现 同义词 近义词复现 上下义词复现 反义词复现 逻辑连接 列举 增补 总结 解释 结果 举例 替代 对照 让步 原因 1 缺乏恰当衔接 2 语篇缺乏连贯性 常用衔接词 besides moreover what smore what sworse worsestill though yet however nevertheless instead meanwhile therefore hence thus likewise 描绘性副词 surprisingly luckily unfortunately obviously stangely importantly amazingly suddenly 主位推进 Applyingtocollegesisanimportantdecisioninyourlife soyoushouldvisitthecollegesyouwanttoattendinadvance especiallywhentheyarenearwhereyoulive 要点1 2 Ifyoucan tmakeitbeforeapplication youshoulddoitbeforetheacceptancelettersarrive 要点3 Finally ifyoudohavenotimeormoneyforit visitingtheonlinecollegefairscanalsohelpyoumaketherightdecision 要点4 1 要点不足 尤其缺乏主旨2 衔接无效 篇章缺乏连贯性 一点思考 What How Why 2017上海 概要写作 要求 Readthefollowingpassage Summarizethemainideaandthemainpointsofthepassageinnomorethan60words Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible Summaryinvolvesalargedegreeofinterpretationinadditiontochoosingwhattoincludeandwhattoleaveout Summaryisavaluablestrategytofocusonbecauseitinvolvesclosereading criticalthinkingandwriting 内容部分 A 5分 能准确 全面地概括文章主旨大意 并涵盖主要信息 语言部分 A 5分 能用自己的语言连贯 正确地表述 Studentversionone Collegevisitsarealwaysagoodideabecausetheirwebsitestendtolookthesameafterawhile Visitingcollegecampusescanalsogiveyouabettersenseofthecampus individualfacilities Moneyandtimemaybeobstacles butthereisnoexcusenottovisitalocalcampustogiveyouanideaofwhatyouwant Iftimeandmoneyprovetobescarce youcanvisitCollegeWeekLiveforafreelookintothecollegelifeyouwillbestarting Althoughvisitinganonlinecampusisn tasreal combinedwithyourresearchyouwillfindtherightforyou byMilana becauseyoucanfigureoutwhatyoulikeanddislikeaboutacampus Moneyandtimemaybe youcangotoCollegeWeekLiveanditwillgiveyouanonlinelookintothecollegelifethatyouwillbestarting 一点对比 区分细节与主旨的能力 Studentversionthree Itishighlyrecommendedthatstudentsapplyingforcollegevisitcampusesbeforemakingtheirfinaldecisionbecausesometimesyouwillfindoutacriticalpieceofinformationaboutaschoolfromvisitingitscampusthatyouwouldn tfromitsonlinewebsite Ifyoudon thavetimeorenoughmoneytovisitcampuses atleasttrytogettothecollegesinyourarea or ifthat salsoimpossible youcangetabettersenseofacollegebylookingatonlinecollegefairswhereyoucantalktostudents teachers andadmissionofficers byHelen 概括主旨精确表达 Studentversiontwo It sreallyimportanttovisitcollegecampusesbeforeyouapplytocollege Whenyouvisitacollegecampus youcanseewhatthecampusislikeandhowcomfortableyoufeelthere It ssomethingyoushoulddobeforesenioryear sothatyouhaveenoughtime Ifyoudon thavetimebeforeyouapply youshouldvisitbeforeyouhavetochooseacollegesothatyoumakethebestchoice Ifyoucan tvisitacollegeinpersonthenyoucanlookatonlinecollegefairs byLeo 句意推进连贯 Studentversionfive Thispassageencourageshigh schoolstudentstothoroughlyresearchthecollegestowhichtheywillapply Itespeciallyhighlightsvisitingcampusesinordertomakeadecision Realizingthatnotallstudentshavethisopportunity theauthorpointsoutstudentscanvisitschoolsintheirimmediatearea visitafterapplying orparticipateinonlinecollegefairs Centraltoallofthisistheideathatstudentsexperiencingfirst handthecollegestowhichtheywillapplyisoneofthemostimportantfactorsinmakingadecision byEvan 主题回应突出 Studentversionfour Accordingtothearticle visitingacollegecampuscanbeaninfluentialpartoftheapplicationprocess CollegeapplicationsintheUnitedStateswillevenaskyouwhetherornotyouhavevisitedtheschoolinthepast 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