江西省奉化市高考英语二轮复习 书面表达选编（3）.doc

浙江奉化市2016高考英语书面表达选编（3）2016书面表达训练请以“the benefits of failure”为题，结合自己的经历，写一篇短文发表到校英语报上。要点如下：1列举实例； 2.认识变化； 3.态度转变。注意：1.词数120 字左右;2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.参考词汇：激励 motivate【参考范文】the benefits of failure although nobody wants to experience failure, failure plays an important role on the way to success. sometimes, failure can benefit us a lot. when i failed my english exam last term, i felt upset at first, but then i made up my mind to study even harder .it was that failure that motivated me to put more time and energy into learning this subject. whats more, i found it was my small vocabulary and poor grammar that led to my failure. so i changed my learning methods. finally i made greater progress in english than before. most importantly, now i have a correct attitude towards failure. all in all, failure is the mother of success. it really helped me to get closer to success.【思路点拨】范文开篇点题使用了短语“play an important role, on the way to ”。紧接着，按照写作要求，结合自己亲身经历举例证明失败的好处。在举例时对时态的把握准确，对过去事情的描述用一般过去时。使用了一系列衔接词“at first ,but then whats more, finally ,most importantly”，句与句之间衔接自然顺畅。最后，用名人名言“失败乃成功之母”点明文章主题。范文句式多变。when引导的时间状语从句, 强调句型it was that failure that motivated me to put more time and energy into learning this subject。书面表达【2014江西省南昌市高三二模】ipad已成为中学生的新宠，它不仅可以听音乐，阅读电子书，而且还可以玩电子游戏。假如你是南昌某高中学生李华，请你用英语给英语报社写一封信，谈谈你对自己周围学生使用ipad的情况的看法。信的内容必须包括以下几点：1使用ipad对学习的好处；2对课堂纪律和学习可能产生的负面影响；3提出自己的建议。注意：词数120左右，开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。dear editor，im a senior high school student in nanchang，named li hua.now many students have ipads and think its a fashion to use them._yours sincerely，li hua【参考范文】dear editor，im a senior high school student in nanchang，named li hua.now many students have ipads and think its a fashion to use them.using an ipad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen.apparently，it is helpful to our study，especially to our english listening.some students，however，bring their ipads to classrooms and listen to music with earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed.whats worse，some of them even waste precious time in class playing video games.in my opinion，as a student，we should make good use of ipads.the classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore，concentration is badly needed for us to learn our lessons.furthermore，the school should make a rule to guide the students to use ipads in a proper way.yours sincerely，li hua2016书面表达训练假设你是某外国语学校的学生会主席。最近，为了弘扬雷锋精神，你校决定开展多项志愿服务活动。请用英语写一篇倡议书，发表在校英语报上，号召同学们加入本校的志愿者俱乐部。内容包括：1.陈述当志愿者的好处；2.向同学们发出几点倡议。注意：1.词数120左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头已给出，但不计入总词数。dear fellow students,volunteering has a positive effect on our community. _. students union【参考范文】dear fellow students,volunteering has a positive effect on our community. it can benefit us in several ways. first of all, volunteering can help us learn more about society and gain valuable experience. secondly, by volunteering provides us with a good opportunity to put what we have learned to good use.i hope more and more students will join the voluntary club of our school. lets express concern for the old and disabled people around us and offer a helping hand. lets clean the parks near our home. lets go to nursing homes to bring love to those in need.remember, we can make a difference to society if we are willing to lend a helping hand, so lets take action. students union【天津市蓟县二中2014高考英语模拟试题】写作（满分30分）michael是一名美国中学生，在学校里选修汉语。他利用暑假到中国进修，希望进一步了解中国文化。有一天，他看到下面有关成语的漫画，不大明白其中的意思。请你用英语把漫画所表达的故事和寓意写成一篇短文，向他解释。注意：1、词数：801202、参考词汇：撞上bump into;锄头 hoe 【参考范文】写作（满分30分）one possible version:once upon a time there was a farmer who worked hard in the fields every day.one day, while he was ploughing the fields, he heard a bumping sound. he saw a rabbit lying by the trunk. he picked it up and found that it was a fat rabbit. he thought to himself,since it is so easy to get a rabbit like that, why should i work so hard all daylong?! he threw his hoe away and lay by the tree every day, dreaming for more rabbits to come. when he finally realized his foolishness and returned to his fields, he found that all his crops were dead. the story tells us that we should not wait for unexpected gains by trusting chance and luck. or, we should not hope to get rewards without hard work.一、评分原则1本题总分为30分，按5个档次给分。2评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3词数少于120和多于150的，从总分中减去2分。4评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。5拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。二、内容要点观点正确，态度积极向上，文体不限。三、各档次的给分范围和要求第一档：（2125分）很好地完成了试题规定的任务。对题中所提供的信息进行了恰当的描述，清楚地表达了自己的观点并进行了充分合理的论证。语法结构和词汇选用恰当、丰富。语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。第二档：（1620分）较好地完成了试题规定的任务。对题中所提供的信息进行了描述，表达了自己的观点并进行了论证。应用的语法结构和词汇能基本满足任务的要求。语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。第三档：（1115分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。能描述题目中的信息，表达了自己的观点并尝试进行论证。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第四档；（610分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务。能涉及到题目所提供的信息，体