2013年海淀一模英语各档作文.doc

2013海淀一模各档次作文作文情景作文Saturday, April 2 Fine This morning, my foreign teacher Tim and I planned to go to the Peoples Park to enjoy ourselves. We took a taxi and it wasnt long before we arrived at the gate of the park. On seeing the green trees and blooming flowers, Tim couldnt wait to take pictures. It was at that moment that we found his camera was gone. He searched all over his backpack but just couldnt find it. Suddenly it occurred to me that he might have left it in the taxi. With anxiety and hope, we found out the invoice of the taxi, on which a phone number was printed, so I immediately got in touch with the taxi company. About half an hour later, the driver returned with the camera and you could imagine the wide smile spreading across Tims face. Both of us were grateful to the driver, and Tim, in particular, insisted on taking a photo with him. Tim and I enjoyed ourselves during the rest of the day, but it was that taxi driver who made our day. （范文）This morning, I went to Renmin Park with my foreign teacher Tim, serving as his guide and we came across a really interesting incident along the way.We first met at the school gate where it would be easier to take a taxi, and Tim even brought with him a camera, saying he was capture all the wonderful moments we would experience! Soon we got on a taxi whose driver was extremely friendly and set out for our journey.Upon our arrival at Remin Park , I stretched my body, ready to tour when suddenly Tim burst out a cry : ”oh my god, my camera is missing!” I immediately got the idea that he must have left it on the seat of the taxi as he was taking pictures all the way. Comforting him not to worry, I took out the invoice that I had asked the driver for as usual before we got out of the taxi and dialed the number on it without delay, feeling as well as a little proud of my good practice of taking the invoice before leaving while Tim waited anxiously. It was not long before we got in touch with the kind-hearted driver, who had also discovered the camera lying on the back seat and drove back to the park to return it to Tim. Having recovered his precious camera, Tim couldnt thank the driver more and he even hugged the driver for his kindness! No day could be valuable than today and the happy face of Tim still flash in my mind 第一档 优秀（建议分数：18 分）： 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 覆盖了所有内容要点；运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇； 体现了较强的语言运用能力； 有效地使用语句间的连接成分，内容连贯、结构紧凑。This morning I went to the park with my foreign teacher Jim. Spring indeed came, I could feel the breeze softly kissing my skin. Equipped with full passion, we started our journey with everything we needed in hands. We called for a taxi and then headed to our destination. After arriving at the gate of the park. Jim suggested taking some pictures but only to find his camera missing. Sweat streaming down Jims cheeks, he searched in his backpack for more than three times. Suddenly, the answer occurred to me. Have we left it on the taxi? After being confirmed by Jim I called the taxi company according toe the phone number on the invoice. I told the receptionist when and where we took the taxi and the series number of the taxi. The receptionist then helped us contact the taxi driver and told us to wait at the gate of the park. Waiting for about half an hour, we saw the taxi driver waving to us as he was driving near., He took out the camera and gave it to Jim. He then told us to be more careful and take care of our personal possession.Although we had this small incident, we really enjoyed ourselves and had a relaxing afternoon,. What a Saturday ! Spring is beautiful!完全完成了试题规定的任务。17分 覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。 This morning, I successfully dealt with and emergency situation which Tim and I encountered on our trip to Renmin Park. I always believe in the fact that helping others renders more satisfaction than being helped. And this experience confirmed such a belief.It was early in the morning that we set out. With high spirit, we took a taxi to go to the park. Since it was the first time my foreign teacher Jim had been to that park, he took along a camera with him, hoping to take some beautiful pictures. Unfortunately, after getting out of the taxi, Jim found his camera lost. Anxiety swelled in his heart and sweat came out on his forehead. I, however, kept calm and thought of the taxi immediately. It was highly probable that Jim left his camera in the taxi. Luckily, the invoice from the taxi still remained. I dialed the phone number printed on it, while Jim, waiting beside me, filled with both nervousness and hope. Finally, that taxi driver drove back to the park and returned us the camera. We were filled with gratitude and happiness.This experience will be a treasure for me that will never fade away, for it not only tells me the importance of being calm and severe situation, but also renders me the satisfaction of helping others.完全完成了试题规定的任务。 17分 覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。 卷面不够整洁，语言有个别错误，逻辑稍有问题This morning, I accompanied with my English tutor Tom to take a one-day tour in Beijing to appreciate Chinese culture. What happens that day truely evoked the sense of responsibility deep in my heart. Early in the morning, our rememberable day began with us grabbing a taxi. Before getting on the car, I made it clear with the driver about where to go. The incredibly friendly smile on the drivers face shine bright like a sun in this cold day. After that, the taxi drove us all the way to our destination- Renmin Park. Getting off the car, we wasted no time waiting but eagerly started viewing the fascinating scenery. The park was indeed a glorification of the natures masterpieces and by the time Tom wanted to record all these unforgettable spots, he just realized that his camera was nowhere to be found. He carefully went through his backpack but came up with nothing but disappointed. On the moment something hit me and I remembered it was the taxi where the camera left. With Tim worrying about his experience camera and had no idea how to get it back. I took the responsibility of finding the camera. I called the number on the bill and explained everything. The next thing we did was waiting anxious. Not before long, the taxi driver showed up and gave back the camera perfectly in Tims heads. I then expressed our gratitude before we left.After this incident, I know exactly that minor good deeds leads to the admirable society and Im dedicated to make this world a better place.二档文： 建议分数 14分 覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误 使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。 达到了预期的写作目的。 语言的通顺性稍欠，用词不够准确This morning, I companied my foreign teacher Tim to visit the Peoples Park. With the purposes to enjoy the great scenery in the park and relax ourselves, we set off in high spirits. Tim also took a cemera so that he could took some photos to memorize the beauty of nature and people. After a long journey in taxi, we arrived at the park. But after we got down the taxi, Tim suddenly found that his camera was gone! I immediately realized that he must left it in the taxi. Then I came up with an idea. I took out my cell phone and dialed the number on the invoice we got without delay. Tim was anxious when I talked on the phone.Lucky enough, not after a long time, the taxi driver drove back to return the camera. Tim and I were really happy and thanked the driver a lot. After that, we entered the park. Tim took lots of photos, of course.In spite of the little accident, it was a great day.建议分数 13分I went to the park with Tim. It was the first time I have the chance to go out with our foreign teacher. I was so excited. On arriving at the park by taxi, I asked the driver for the invoice in case we need it. Then we moved on, expecting a wonderful day taking photos and have fun. We were about to get in when Tim let out a cry and told me his camera was missing. I told him to calm down and ask if he get it out of the taxi. Worring if the driver could notice it, Tim made up his mind to try to find the driver. But, how could he? It was at last that I remembered the invoice. I quickly made a phone call while Tim standing beside me, anxious to know if someone took it away. Luckily the driver said it was still in his car. Whats more, he was on his way to the park to give it back to us. Tim was so grateful to speak any more than “Thanks” when the driver hand him the camera. I was happy, too. Since the invoice made a good useIt was an amazing day, didnt it? (12分)This morning, my teacher and me went to the Ren Min Park by taxi. But my teacher couldnt find his camera when we were getting into the park. So I guessed the camera maybe lost in the taxi.After that, I took the taxi invoice. Whats more, phone the number which on the paper. My teacher was very anxiously. I told him “Dont worry! I can solve it.” And then I told the taxi company the taxis borad number and asked them to say quickly. We waited a minute, the taxi driver sent the camera to us. My teacher was very happy. Finally, we said Thanks to the taxi driver. After that, we got entered the park. We have a wonderful tour. (7分) 第四档： 6-11分 7分 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容；所用句式和词汇有限；语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。未能清楚地传达信息。 开放作文1. 要从不同角度看问题； 2. 尊重他人观点; 3. 相信自己，不要人云亦云； 4. 做事之前要确定标准； Jim, look at this interesting picture. I think it tries to convey that we need to look at things from different angles. As we can see, the two kids are looking at the same number in the opposite direction and having an argument about whether the number is 6 or 9. They feel confused why the obvious truth seems invisible to the other. Similar arguments happen in our daily life when we observe things from our own points of view, just like the two kids in the picture. However, if we can exchange their angles, we may find the others “ridiculous” opinions also make sense. Therefore, lets learn to handle problems from different perspectives and appreciate others points. Do you agree, Jim?（范文）Jim，I strongly recommend you to have a look at this interesting yet thought-provoking picture. I think its underlining the simple fact that we should identify things and people from different angles.My understanding comes from the very way the two children look at a number printed on the ground. Obviously, from the girls perspective, that number is six, while from the boys perspective, its nine. I find two children are both puzzled at what theyve seen, and perhaps a distupe have already arised between them. Actually should they change their angle and look at this number from the others perspective, they would easily achieve a mutual understandingthat its both six and nine.Whats true of this picture is true of ourselves, dont you think so, Jim? As is often the case, we tend to stick on one perspective when we look at things or other people, failing to change our angles and look from other peoples angles, which will usually result in disagreements. Its looking differently that will enhance mutual understanding and harmonious interpersonal relationships.Thats my understanding about this picture. Would you like to voice your opinion, Jim? (14分) 一档文 建议分数 14分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 内容充实，体现了活跃的思维和清晰的逻辑； 交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际对象的需求； 体现出较强的语言运用能力。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 Lets have a look at this picture, Jim. Dont you think it is trying to tell us a vivid message? We can see in the picture two children standing on the opposite sides of a number. In the girls view, it resembles the figure “6”, while as the boy sees it, it is no doubt a “9”. Because of this difference, both of them seem unhappy.Its trying to convey the message that everyone views the world from different angles. Therefore, we should accept the difference and make the best of it. The reason why the children in the picture have different understandings is that they are not standing on the same side. If they swap positions, theyll find themselves reading another number. This phenomenon can be applied to daily life. The world is a wonder to everyone. We understand it according to our family background, religion and personal experience, etc. This is what leads to completely differently opinions on the same matter. But differences dont necessarily mean an undissolvable well, but many indicate the possibility of unity and creativity. As long as we make good use of it, we can create numerous opportunities.By and large, dont waste the difference. Accept it, and use it.Am I right, Jim? 二档 （9-12分）Jim, lets look the picture. There are two kids pointing at a number on the floor. Neither of them looked happy. It would obviously lead a quarrel between them. If they insist on their opinions and dont want stand on the other ones side. The drawing, directly conveys that we should stand on oth