南京市高三英语一模书面表达讲评课件.ppt

analysisofwriting nanjingno 1middleschool step1identifywhatisagoodwritingstep2enjoygoodwritingsstep3makeaconclusiononhowtowriteagoodcompositionstep4practice homework 假设你是李华 你的美国朋友john热心公益活动艳情了解南京志愿者活动情况 请根据下表提供的信息给他回信 南京市志愿者协会 nanjingvolunteersassociation 简称njva 20多年历史 由志愿从事公益事业的人土组成的 非营利性社会组织 可网上注册会资格 网址 你所参加过的活动去公园植树 打扫街道 捐款捐物给贫困家庭的子女等 你参加志愿者活动的感受内容自定 请至少写两点 注意 1对所给要点 不要简单翻译 要有适当发挥 2词数150 信中的开头和结尾部分已为你写好 不计入词数 3参考诩汇 非营利性 non profit dearjohn i mverygladtoreceiveyourletterandknowingthatyouareverymuchinterestedinwhatvolunteersdoinnanjing asamemberofthenanjingvolunteersassociation icantellyoualot couldyoupleasetellmewhatyoudoasvolunteersintheus hopetohearfromyousoon bestwishes yours itismadeupofpeoplewhoarevolunteeredtocontributethemselvestothesociety youcanapplyforamembershipontheinternet ifeelitquitebeneficialwhenidevotemyselfdoingso ihavealsodonatedthingsthatcanbenecessaryin step1identifywhatisagoodwriting volunteer membership to goodpoints necessities devote dedicate weakpoints passagea 1 relatedmistakesnanjingvolunteersassociation whichtheshortformisnjva wasfounded20yearsago of whose 2 relatedmistakesnanjingvolunteersassociationwasbuilt20yearsago setup established startedetc nanjingvolunteersassociation shortformisnjva wasfounded20yearsago passageb 3 relatedmistakesnjvahas20moreyearshistory itwas20yearsagosincenjvawasfounded njvahasbeenfoundedsince ithasbeen20yearssince 20yearsago njvawasfounded 4 relatedmistakesyoucanattendnjvaonline ihaveattendedin joinmanyactivitiessinceibecame ahistoryofmorethan20years that join joinedin taken anactive partin participatedin beeninvolvedinetc 5 relatedmistakesifeelthevoluntaryworkisworthtodo doing tobedone ofbeingdone ifeelthevoluntaryworkisworthy step2learnfromgoodwritings hereisoneversionofferedbyteachers njvaisanon profitsocialorganizationsetupabout20yearsago itismadeupofpeoplewhoarewillingtodothingsbeneficialtosocietyandforthoseingreatneedofhelp a asstudentvolunteers wehelpedcleanthestreetsintheholidays andplantedtreesinlocalparkslastyear alloureffortshavepaidoffwhenthecityistakingonanewlook wealsodonatedmoney booksandclothestochildrenfrompoorfamilies imyselfhavelearntalotintheseactivities wegaveawaymoneyandclothesandtriedtoincreasepeople sawarenessofhelpingthepoor 孙革 givesomesugartoothers you llfeelsweetinyourheart 张超 njvaaimstohelpothers allofthemembersarevolunteerswhoarewillingtohelpotherswithnothinginreturn 戴秋旻 first helpingothersisdelightful fromwhichwecanbenefitalot second weshouldcallonmoreandmorepeopletojoinusinthattherearesomanypeoplewhoneedhelp 孙祯彬 wheniseethesmilesonpeople sfaces ifeelhappy 恭庆 franklyspeaking asavolunteer itakeprideinwhatido 蔡翔 throughtheseactivities notonlycanwemakeourcityabetterplacetolive butalsowecanlearnlotsofthingswecan tgetfromclasses 郑诚 consideringmanyvolunteersarestudents wedonatesomebookstothechildrenwhocomefromthepoorfamilies 喻登辉 iamproudofmyselfinthaticandomybitforthesociety 周紫雁 inthelongterm ourbehaviorwillattractmorepeople sattentiontocareaboutthosewhoneedhelp 王青 ithinkkindnessandenthusiasmisamustforuseverycitizen 郭玥雯 lastsunday werepresentedallofthemembersinnjvatoraisemoneyforthepoorchildren 姚欣雅 whatyougivemaybelittletoyourself butgreattothosewhoreceiveit everyoneshouldreachouttheirhandsandhelpformaworldoflove 严楚靓 wegaveawaymoneyandgoodstothepoorfamily whichithinkcangivehopetothoseintrouble 范志成 weshouldsparenoefforttobeautifyourcity asanoldsayinggoes it sbettertogivethantoreceive themorepeoplejoin thebetterworlditwillbe itisthevoluntaryworkthatmakesmerealizethathelpingotherscangivemeasenseofachievement tiredasimaybe ifeelhappywheniseethesmileonpeople sfaces onlywheneveryoneisinvolvedcanwemakeourcityabetterplacetolivein it shightimethatwejoinedtheassociationanddedicatedourselvestohelpingothers iamhappythaticanhelpothersintrouble besides ialwaysbelievethatshowingkindnessandloveisoneofthegreatestqualitiesofhumanbeings step3conclusion whetheryoucompletethetaskinasettimewhetherithasaclearstructurewhetheryoucoverallthekeypointswhetheryousuccessfullyavoidgrammaticalmistakes punctuation spelling tenses voices etc whetheryouusevarietiesofwordsandsentencepatterns verbphrases differentclauses inversionetc whetheryouuselinkingwordsproperly whatmakesagoodcomposition itmainlydependson checkyourwritingaccordingtotherulesabove step4exercise 请你给 中国日报 写一篇稿件 谈谈农村儿童失学的主要原因及你的看法 原因 1 家庭贫穷 供不起儿童上学 他们不得不在家赚钱养家 2 部分家长认为女孩上学无用 不愿让她们上学 3 部分儿童对功课不感兴