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2014江苏高考任务型作文教案 Teaching aims :let students master how to write a good composition.Teaching difficulties : some general mistakes and how to polish them up.阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。 It was 7:30 in the morning. As usual I was on the subway to schoolIt was so crowded withpeople that it felt like the air conditioner wasnt working. I was standing there looking around.Then, I saw an old lady get on the train with a 7-year-old child who seemed to be her grandson. A warm-hearted gentleman generously offered his seat to the old lady. Instead of sittingdown herself, however, the old lady called her grandson over and told him to sit. Sooner or later, children mature and step into the complicated world. Love is necessary inthe early development of children, yet, to the disappointment of many, too much love definitelyprevents children from learning the rules of the real world. Teaching the child about the rules ofsociety within the family helps the child to achieve success later. By giving up seats to theirchildren, grandparents may destroy kids best chance for character development.【写作内容1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。2.以约120个词谈谈你对长辈溺爱孩子的看法，内容包括： （1)描述长辈溺爱孩子的表现。 （2）溺爱孩子的后果 （3)你对长辈溺爱孩子的看法。Step 1. 审题指导Pagraph 1 概括（30字左右）This passage mainly talks about the importance of character development of children by giving an example of an old lady who gives up the seat offered by a gentleman to her grandchild.Pagraph 2 溺爱孩子的表现： 1）对孩子有求必应，百依百顺，满足孩子的要求。 2）孩子犯了错误，不批评，未能以恰当的方式教育。 3）为孩子包办一切，帮他们铺平成功的道路。1. Parents often deny nothing to their children and meet/ satisfy/ suit their demands. 2. When children make a mistake / do something wrong, parents do not criticize / scold them and fail to educate them in a proper way.3. Parents do everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for their success. As a consequence, children become so dependent on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas.Pagraph 3 溺爱孩子的后果： 1）自私，不顾别人的感受。 2）不尊重他人，甚至犯罪。 3）独立生活能力差。When these spoiled children grow up, many of them may greatly disappoint their parents. Some of them even commit crimes.Pagraph 4 看法： 1）不应该溺爱孩子。 2）让他们经历困难，学会独立。Such a situation is of great concern. In my opinion, overprotection and too much is bad for childrens development. Instead of doing everything for them , parents should encourage children to overcome difficulties and inspire them to development by themselves. Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful. 学生错误呈现1. Parents deny nothing about them and meet their children everything._2. Parents spoil their children must cause bad effects._3. Children will lose their dependent of life and became selfish._4. It may cause them lose the ability to do things on their own._5. These phenomenon can lead to a lot of consequences._6. Children may do whatever they do regardless of others feelings and cant accustomed to this society._7. They wont blame their children on their mistakes._8. Furthermore, children regardless of others feelings. Whats more, they are easy to commit crime._9. They allow their children do what they want to and their bad behavious led to selfish._10. This will makes children are lacking independence._Step 3 翻译句子长辈买名牌衣服鞋子来满足孩子的需求，不管有多贵。（状语从句）一位老太太把别人让给她的座位让给了她的孙子。（非谓语）他们对孩子百依百顺，给他们想要的一切，不求回报。孩子依赖父母，以致于缺乏独立思考及创造性思维的能力。家长不应该包办一切，他们应该鼓励孩子克服困难，发展自我。Step 4 当堂练习阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。Children in kindergarten are learning social skills. For this reason, its important to tell the children what will make them become good citizens when they grow up. Its up to parents, teachers and all others involved with a kid to teach these skills.Teaching kids to pick up things by themselves is a good way to teach them not to throw things on the ground. For example, if a class has to make paper cutouts (剪下的图样), after cutting, have the children pick up the wastepaper and place it in the wastebasket.The golden rule of good citizenship should be taught at this age. The rule is “One should treat others as one would like others to treat oneself”. Teachers should ask their students how they want to be treated. There are many answers, such as not being treated in bad manners. The teacher should explain that others dont like to be scared, so you should not scare (使惊恐) others either.Following the laws is good citizenship(公民义务). Proper games can be played in the classroom. Games have rules, and all students in the class should follow the rules of the games. If a child doesnt want to follow, it is up to the teacher to explain them to the child. Teaching children about f ollowing rules should help them understand the need t o obey the law when they become adults. 【写作内容】1 以约30个词概括这篇短文的内容要点；2 不少城市在创建文明城市。请以约120个词谈我们如何成为文明市民。内容包括：（1） 你认为文明市民 (a civilized citizen) 应具备什么素质，列举两三种文明行为；（2） 作为中学生，谈谈你应如何从小事做起，为创建文明城市作贡献。key：The writer illustrates that it is important to teach children some skills of becoming good citizens. Therefore, he suggests teaching children to pick up things by themselves, to respect others and follow the laws.As far as I am concerned, a civilized citizen is supposed to respect others. In public places, such as restaurants, stations or hospitals, a civilized citizen would not speak or talk loudly. Besides, a civilized citizen ought to be always ready to reach out their helping hands. Last but not the least, a civilized citizen should be aware of the significance of obeying the law.As a senior high school student, I will do what I can to become a civilized citizen in m