书面表达之围绕要点扩充细节2.ppt

Welcometoourschool 高州一中梁琼凤 书面表达 围绕要点 补充细节 教学目标 1 了解书面表达的重要性 中考取胜之关键 继续学习之所需 2 领会书面表达的步骤 教学重点 难点 掌握书面表达发散思维的方法 议一议 假如今年暑假你在乡下度过了一个有意义的假期 请根据以下要点写一篇短文 介绍你的暑假生活 1 帮助祖父母干农活 2 有时去村西的小河游泳 3 帮助邻里的孩子补习英语 词数100左右 可适当补充细节以使行文连贯 作品1 Ihadanunforgettableholidaythissummer First Ihelpedmygrandparentswithworkinthefield Itleftadeepimpressiononme Atthesametime Irealizedthatthefarmersarehard Sometimes wewentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillage andwecaughtalotoffish Suddenly thedarkcloudsgatheredanditrainedheavily Wehurriedlyranuptoourhouse Althoughwewerewetthrough westillenjoyedourselves Then Ialsohelpedneighbors childrenwithEnglish Ibelievethisisthebestholidayofmine Ihadanunforgettableholidaythissummer First Ihelpedmygrandparentswithworkinthefield Itleftadeepimpressiononme Atthesametime Irealizedthatthefarmersarehard Sometimes wewentswimmingintherivertothewestofthevillage andwecaughtalotoffish Suddenly thedarkcloudsgatheredanditrainedheavily Wehurriedlyranuptoourhouse Althoughwewerewetthrough westillenjoyedourselves Then Ialsohelpedneighbors childrenwithEnglish Ibelievethisisthebestholidayofmine 要点齐全 语言基本正确 105字 但偏离要点 作品2 Thissummerholiday Ihelpedmygrandparentstodofarmwork Sometimes Iwentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillage Ialsospentsometimehelpingneighbors childrenlearnEnglish 要点齐全 语言正确 但过于简单 只有35个字 书面表达六步法 1 认真审题 看好提示 2 抓内容要点 3 连词成句 4 适当发散思维 5 连接成文 6 抄写 增加时间增加地点增加细节 想一想 文章开头 开门见山 直奔主题1 介绍我的家庭 就可以这样开头 Ihaveaveryhappyfamily 或Ihaveaveryspecialfamily 2 以健康为主题 我们就可能这样开头 Healthisveryimportanttoallofus或Everyonehopestohaveahealthybody等3 e mail的回信 可礼貌地写一句 I mverygladtoreceiveyoure mail 或Happytogetthee mailfromyou 学一学 如何发散思维 1 围绕要点 增加时间e g 外出购物I mgoingoutshopping I mgoingoutshopping andwon tbebackuntilabout5 00pm 2 围绕要点 增加地点e g 替小米还书IhavetakenthebooksXiaomiaskedmetoreturn IhavetakenmethebooksXiaomiaskedmetoreturntotheCityLibrary 3 围绕要点 增加细节 Ilikesportsverymuch A 我喜欢体育运动 suchasbasketballandfootball B 青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球 Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth Forexample wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags refusetousesingle useproducts plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy 列举具体的实例来补充说明 总结方法一 A 有时去村西的小河游泳 拓展 河水非常清澈 背景渲染 Iwentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillagenowandthen Thewaterintheriverwasveryclear Ifoundsomebadbehavior B 我看到了一些不良行为 Ifeltsad Ifoundsomebadbehavior 心理 添加与所给信息有关的动作 心理描写及背景渲染等内容 方法二 A Tracy来电话留言 咖啡屋 BoltonCoffee 见面取消 拓展 因为她有重要的事情处理 原因 asshehassomethingimportanttodowith B 帮助邻里的孩子补习英语 拓展 孩子们进步很快 我也受到他们父母的称赞 结果 Tomyjoy theymaderapidprogressandtheirparentsthoughthighlyofme Tracycalled sayingthatshecouldn tmeetyouatBoltonCoffee IalsohelpedchildrenintheneighborhoodwiththeirEnglishlessons 方法三 添加与所给信息有关的原因 结果 条件 让步 手段 目的等内容 AlthoughIwasverytiredthissummerholiday IfeltveryhappyforwhatIdid Asastudent it sourdutytoprotectourschoolenvironmentandmakeitclean Ithinksuchactivitiesarenecessaryandmeaningful Inaword ifshewouldliketolearnChinese Ihopeshewilldoitwell 结尾发挥 写你的感受 评价 愿望 倡议等 链接中考 假定你是李华 希望通过外籍教师Peter找一个英语笔友 请写一封短信 描述一下你理想中笔友的条件 并说明为什么选这样的笔友 具体条件包括 1 年龄 2 性别 3 爱好 旅游 运动 宠物等 练一练 Task1爱好运动Task2爱好旅游Task3喜欢养宠物 Pleaseimproveit Improveit 爱好运动 IamahealthyboyfullofenergysoIlikesportsverymuch especiallyoutdooractivities WheneverIhavetime I llgohikingormountainclimbingwithmyclassmates SoIhopemypenfriendlikesportstoo Improveit Iliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravellingjustlikeme Ifpossible wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiencesinoure mails Iwilltellhersomethinginterestingabouttheplacesthatshewantstotravel 爱好旅游 Improveit Ihaveanotherhobbythatiskeepingpets IhavekeptalovelydognamedBeibeifor3years Ioftenplaywithher Iloveherverymuch IhopeIcansharethehappinesswithmypenfriend 喜欢养宠物 参考范文DearPeter I mwritingtoaskwhetheryoucandomeafavour Iwanttohaveagirlpenfriendabout15yearsold Iwillbehappierifshehasthesameinterestsasmine Iliketravelingverymuch SoIhopesheisinterestedintraveling too Ifpossible wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiencesinoure mails Iwilltellhersomethinginterestingabouttheplacesthatshewantstotravelto IbelieveIwillimprovemyEnglishbymakingsuchagoodpenfriend Ilookforwardtohearingfromyousoon Yours LiHua 2013年中考 假设你是TonyLi 在英国一所中学就读已大约一年 需要找一位家庭教师 条件要求如下表所示 请你向你的老师Mr RogerFike写一封邮件 请他帮忙 品一品 25 能力提升 请适当增加细节YesterdayI