广东省揭阳市2014高考英语一轮 短文改错、书面表达训练（4）

1 揭阳市揭阳市 20142014 高考英语短文改错 书面表达一轮训练 高考英语短文改错 书面表达一轮训练 4 4 附参考范文 附参考范文 201 内江 广安模拟 Last Saturday we had a party at home Dad s friends come 1 along with their families Since Mom was not at home Dad 2 and I had to prepare everything so it turned out such a miracle 3 that they did make it Everything went perfectly fine 4 A lot of kids who came that day I had the most wonderful time 5 with Steven It was just amazed to find someone so much 6 like me We had a lot of things by common The time seemed 7 short to me and I wished we could have had some more time 8 to continue the conversation Hopeful we re going on 9 a trip together next summer and also summer after next 10 答案与解析 1 come came 整篇文章为一般过去时 应把 come 改为 came 2 3 so but 前后语境为转折关系 应把 so 改为 but 4 they we 根据上文可知作者使用了第一人称 此处指作者和父亲俩人 因此应 把 they 改为 we 5 去掉 who 本句为简单句 去掉 who 6 amazed amazing 主语为 it 应用 amazing 作表语 表示 令人惊异的 7 by in 固定短语 have in common 表示 有 相同之处 8 去掉 had wish 后的宾语从句用虚拟语气 谓语应用情态动词 动词原形 因此 2 把 had 去掉 9 Hopeful Hopefully 副词 hopefully 放在句首 表示 希望 副词作状语修饰 整个句子 10 在 also 后加 the next summer 指明年夏天 the summer after next 指后年夏 天 结束 高考英语书面表达讲义 高考英语书面表达讲义 议论文写作议论文写作 重点诠释重点诠释 1 议论文是以议论为主要表达方式的一种文体 它通过摆事实 讲道理的方式来辩明 是非曲折 从而表达出作者的观点 它常由论点 论据和论证三部分构成 2 在近几年的高考书面表达中 其主要命题形式是以表格式和提纲式来呈现写作材料 的 3 它要求语言必须简练 准确 要尽可能避免使用口语 多用书面语 可适当使用名 言警句 以议论为主 辅之以叙述 说明和描写等手法 4 写作时要围绕中心论点展开议论 即论据和论证要围绕论点展开 根据题目要求 有时需要从正反两面来论述 可增强论证的力度 最后 可得出结论 照应开头 形成一个 有机的整体 5 写作时常以三段式的形式展开议论 写作典例写作典例 暑假即将来临 你班同学就假期计划进行讨论 提出了不同看法 请根据提示写一篇英 语短文 并谈谈你的看法 优点缺点 呆在家中花费少 舒适方便不能亲自了解外界 外出旅游增长知识 开阔眼界花费多 旅途不便 注意 1 词数 120 左右 不含已写好部分 2 短文必须包括表中所列要点 可根据内容分段表述 3 3 可适当增加细节以使行文连贯 4 参考词汇 眼界 horizon view 案例分析案例分析 这是一篇典型的议论文体的写作 它以表格的形式提出了论点 呆在家中的优点和缺点 以及外出旅游的优点和缺点 和论据 还以文字提示形式提出了话题 假期计划 及需要考 生自由发挥的部分 你的看法 自己的看法可选择上述中的任何一种 并就此发表个人的 见解 本文的重点是表格中两种方式的优 缺点 根据题目的特点 以三段式的形式来写作 比较好 根据内容 尽管讨论已经发生 但它是就一般的暑假假期计划而进行的讨论 没有特定 的时间界定 因而考生应以一般现在时和一般将来时为主 相当一部分考生用一般过去时进 行论述 这会失掉较多的分数 从题目所给的开头可知应用第一人称来写 范文 The summer holiday is coming Our class have a discussion about what to do during the holiday Some are in favor of staying at home They think it s both convenient and comfortable What s more they can save money for other purposes But they will lose the chance of getting to know the outside world However others prefer to go out for traveling since it can increase their knowledge and broaden their horizons But they will spend more money and meet some difficulties while traveling In my opinion it would be much better to stay at home for I can do what I like such as reading books watching TV and helping my parents with the housework 针对练习针对练习 1 1 2002 年普通高等学校招生全国英语统一考试书面表达试题 最近 你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一场讨论 讨论的主题是 公园要不要收门票 请你根据下表提供的信息 给报社写一封信 客观地介绍讨论情况 4 60 的同学认为40 的同学认为 1 不应收门票 2 公园是公众休闲的地方 3 如收票 需建大门 围墙 会影响城 市形象 1 应收门票 但票价不宜高 2 支付园林工人工资 3 购新花木 注意 1 信的开头已为你写好 2 词数 100 左右 3 参考词汇 门票 entrance fee One possible version Dear Editor I m writing to tell you about the discussion we ve had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks Opinions are divided on the question 60 of the students are against the idea of entrance fees They believed a public park should be free of charge People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away What is more it will become necessary to build gates and walls which will do harm to the appearance of a city On the other hand 40 think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardeners and other workers and to buy plants and young trees They suggest however fees should be charged low Yours truly Li Hua 2 2 当前不少文学作品被改编成电影 有人选择看电影 有人则喜欢读原著 请你以 Film or book which do you prefer 为题 按照下列要点写一篇英语短文 1 看电影 省时 有趣 易懂 2 读原著 细节更多 语言优美 3 我的看法及理由 注意 1 词数 100 120 文章题目和开头已给出 不计入词数 2 参考词汇 original work 或 book in the original 原著 5 Film or book which do you prefer Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original 参考范文 One possible Version Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story Besides the film is usually more interesting and it is easier to follow Some others have just the opposite opinion They think that they can get more detailed information from the original Meanwhile the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful Personally I agree with the second view Actually I have more reasons for it I think I can stay at home reading quietly in a situation of my own and what s more I am able to better understand the author s ideas In a word to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it 结束 passage There are advantage for students to work while 1 Studying at school One of them was that 2 they can earn money For the most part 3 students working to earn money for their own 4 use Earning their own money allow them 5 to spend on anything as if they please 6 they would have to ask their parents for 7 money or for permission to do things by 8 the money Some students may also to save 9 up for our college or future use 10 6 参考答案 KEY 4 There are advantage for students to work while advantages Studying at school One of them was that is they can earn money For the most part students working to earn money for their own work use Earning their own money allow them allows to spend on anything as if they please if they would have to ask their parents for not money or for permission to do things by with the money Some students may also to save to up for our college or future use their 结束 结束 一 高考英语书面表达基本策略 仔细审题 如果是看图写文 看懂每幅图之间的联系至关重要 写要点 据每幅图写出一至两句话 因为每年高考书面表达一般控制在 10 句话 120 个 词左右 连句成文 每句话写好后 用适当的连词连接起来 使之上下连贯 呼应 通顺 简洁 查错漏 完稿后 检查一下有没有时态 语态 拼写错误并逐一加以改正 7 卷面整洁 卷面整洁干净甚至比准确 通顺 简介更重要 因为整洁干净给阅卷人精神 上带来愉悦 相对而言 分数自然要给得高一些 为了帮助同学们在平时写作练习的时候时刻牢记这些写作的基本要领 特编顺口溜如下 细审题 巧构思 列要点 防遗漏 写日记 同汉语 书信 通知格式要牢记 看清图表细 梳理 写人记事按顺序 完稿后查遗漏 整洁干净莫忘记 二 高考英语书面表达高分策略 从遣词 造句 谋篇三个方面分析 遣词的原则 使用高等级词汇及短语 如果仅仅记住几个简单基础的词汇 而且一味的 重复低水平的英语知识点 还远远没有达到大学的入学要求 这就要求考生在平时的训练和 考试当中 有意识的强化 复杂 高级 这两个概念 使自己的作文能力区别于普通学生的 作文 使自己一下子就站在一个比别人高的位置上 充分显示自己的实力 平时学习过程中注意总结各种各样的词汇 以描述人物的词汇为例 表达人物爱憎感情 like love be interested in be fond of hate dislike be tired of lose interest in happy excited pleased satisfied angry sad worried disappointed terrified mad frightened 介绍人物的影响及人们对人的评价 He became famous for his new theory The people had come to love him as an inspiring leader We regard Li Fei as our model Lei Feng has been praised for his communist spirit People spoke highly of him and all respected him 常见描述人物性格 外貌和身体状况等的词语 good looking funny looking strong looking ugly looking dirty looking ordinary looking blue eyed white eyed warm hearted light hearted kind hearted absent minded tall short beautiful pretty lovely naughty be 8 blind lame in be in good or poor condition healthy fine well strong tempered bad tempered near sighted far sighted foolish stupid silly clever smart wise bright diligent intelligent lazy hard working etc 造句的原则 句式多变 语法活用 句子是表达一个完整意思的最小当位 所以造句能 力在英文写作中是非常重要的 好的英语句子能够生动 形象 准确的表达内容 所以要想 写出漂亮的书面表达 必须从写好句子开始 英语基本句型及造句 主语 谓语 状语 介词 名词短语或从句 The sun rises up in the east and sets in the west We get up early every morning The meeting lasted 2 hours 主语 不及物动词 副词 This kind of wine drinks well and sells well The suit wears well Glass breaks easily 主语 谓语 介词 宾语 We all agreed on the terms He hates to argue with his wife about such small matters All these things are to be answered for 主语 系动词 形容词 Good medicine tastes bitter to the mouth He was so tired that he fell asleep the moment he went to bed Your explanation sounds reasonable 主语 谓语 直接宾语 I want your promise 9 Have your fixed my watch This factory produces 1000 cars a week 主语 谓语 间接宾语 直接宾语 He paid me a visit yesterday He owed me 50 yuan He wrote his family a letter yesterday 主语 谓语 宾语 宾补 to do I will get someone to repair the recorder for you I didn t mean to hurt you He invited me to teach at a well known university 主语 谓语 宾语 宾补 do I often hear her sing the song The boss made workers work 15 hours a day Don t forget to have him come 主语 谓语 现在分词 I heard her singing in the next room We could feel our heats beating fast Did you observe the birds flying around the trees 主语 谓语 过去分词 I must have my watch repaired We must get he task finished on time Speak louder to make yourself understood by everybody 主语 谓语 宾语 动名词 I suggested putting off the meeting They all avoided mentioning the matter We can t help laughing at the news 10 主语 谓语 宾语 不定式 I can t afford to buy such a large house Don t pretend to know what you don t He feared to speak in her presence 主语 谓语 宾语 名词 代词 介词 宾语 Nothing can prevent us from going forward Thank you for your help He demanded an answer from me 练习 写好句子的方法一 合并句子 It was early in the morning Mr Smith was in his garden He was watering flowers Early in the morning Mr Smith was watering flowers in his garden A girl was crossing a road The girl was pretty The road was wide A pretty girl was crossing a wide road 写好句子的方法二 改写句子 1 Mr Green is a tall man who wears a pair of thick glasses 改成介词短语做伴 随状语 1 The book cost me 300 yuan Mr Green is a tall man with a pair of thick glasses 2 The ice on the lake is too thin for us to skate on 使用 so that 结构改写句 子 The ice on the lake is so thin that we can t skate on it 练习方法三 一句多译 这本书花了我 300 元 I spent 300 yuan on the book 11 I paid 300 yuan for the book The price of the book is 300 yuan It cost me 300 yuan to buy the book 我不懂什么英语 李明也不懂 I don t know any English nor does Li Ming I hardly know any English nor does Li Ming I hardly know any English neither does Li Ming I hardly know any English no more does Li Ming I hardly know any English so it is with Li Ming I know no more English than Li Ming does I know as little English as Li Ming does 一到家 我就把所见到的一切都记了下来 On Upon arriving home I wrote down everything I had seen As soon as I arrived home I wrote down everything I had seen The moment I arrived home I wrote down everything I had seen The instant I arrived home I wrote down everything I had seen No sooner had I arrived home than I wrote down everything I had seen 昨天下午他才来 He came here yesterday afternoon He didn t come here until yesterday afternoon Not until yesterday afternoon did he come here It was yesterday afternoon that he arrived here It was not until yesterday afternoon that he came here 高考英语 写作综合训练集 请你根据右面表格中的内容写一篇英语短文 介绍 2010 年上海世博会的情况 注意 12 1 短