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打造高考英语高分满分作文 华师一附中 冯珍妮 从2009年搭配2014年，我的作文教学基本形成自己的模式，在历次大考中，本人所教学的两个班级，作文成绩都名列前茅。2009级和2012级都有学生高考后返校时告诉我他们作文是满分。 2009届，武汉市二月和四月调考的满分作文武昌区全区一篇，均来自华师一附中我所教的班级。在2012界届武汉市9月调考，二月调考和四月调考中，武昌区近万份试卷中，10篇高分作文，华师一附中占8篇， 其中5到6到篇来自冯珍妮老师所教的9班和12班。我 2012级在2012年到2014年中，我所教班级的作文在大考的电脑阅卷中，成绩都比较突出，作文均分在年级名列前茅。2014年9月调考，武昌区8千多份试卷，5篇高分作文，三篇华师一，两篇是我的学生。高三（4）班王奕闻，29分，高三（1）孙梦诺29分，孙梦诺算半个我的学生，因为高一在我班上，我就开始了冯氏作文训练。 2014年9月调考，华师一高分班与平行班作文平均分：22.24分，武昌另一正在追赶华师一的名校作文均分：21.35分，我所教的国际部两个班（录取分数比华师一平行班要低），作文均分：23.89分。 本人教学的两个班的口语能力在平均水平上，尤其是应变能力和应急表达能力在华师一所有班级中也是名列前茅。我的学生在处理突发性口语场景的能力在华师一比较突出。我的两大教学特长即作文和口语能力得益于我的近几年看美国的MOOCs课程和听TED世界著名演讲。我同时也阅读这些东西的文本。一、 我从2010年开始在网上看哈佛与耶鲁等大学的MOOCs课程，对自我的英文素养与其它学科都有一定的了解，虽然仍然是外行，但毕竟思想境界得到很大程度的提升。 二、 训练学生写好作文，主要取决于教师本人的写作素养。我本人比较热爱阅读和写作，大量的阅给自己积累了语言素养和写作素材。阅读原文听BBC， CNN，VOA电台原声节目的同时，阅读这些文本，对自己提高语言素养是必不可少个过程。语感的培养不是一天两天能够速成的，必须常年累月坚持听。看国外大学Moocs 或TED对我的语言文化的提高起着重要作用。 二、在训练学生作文时，必须训练他们的书写，训练学生的书写，自己首先要训练英文书法。 三、本人时常亲笔创作的作文范文 ：第2节 ：短文写作 （共一题；满分30 分） 1 就以下的内容展开，写一篇关于如何度过大学生活的短文。 It wont take long before I graduate from high school ，which will be a merciful relief serving as a new chapter of my life . . 参考范文：It wont take long before I graduate from high school ，which will be a merciful relief serving as a new chapter of my life . Although high school education has prepared enough for my future education , I cant wait to change my way of college life. First of all , college education deserves all my commitment and devotion. Working hard will be my permanent choice , but just waiting for explanations from teachers will surely make for a loser. Limiting my reading to what teachers provide will simply make me an idiot. To keep away from computer games continues to be my warning . Spending four years in dating with girls or boys is doomed to shadow my future marriage . Libraries will maintain their lasting appeal to me . Secondly , colourful entertainment will serve as a substitute when I am tired of professors abstract lectures. Art clubs , concerts and gyms will witness my impressive performances and excited shouts from boys and girls. More attention should be paid to my clothes , but I never go too far. Thirdly ,a driving license will be a necessity . Travelling around is expected to bring me a lot of fun, of which adventure is the essential part. My friends will frequently say hello to me from France , Norway and even a small island in Pacific. Few minutes later , everything changes. The world around me will take on a completely new atmosphere. 2 写一个调查报告。我们一组5人做了一个社区调查 收集关于上大学对找工作到底是有利还是不起作用。60% 的人认为有用，30的人认为用没有无所谓，10的人认为划不来。 参考范文： A survey was made by our group of five activists last week , the data from which may arouse people to put themselves into the situation and profound the issue . The random interviewees , most of whom cooperated surprisingly , held different attitudes to the question whether the college certificates played a vital role in the future job finding . The questionnaires collected and classified carefully by one of us showed that people understood the situation in three ways .60% of the people filling in the questionnaire thought highly of the college certificates . They wrote that those who occupied them were surely more secure about and more equal to the the job than those who hadnt been trained in the subject . They continued to reason that if they were bosses , they would always give the preference to those who were better educated, adding that it was equally ridiculous for an individual without college education to be sure working with the ones who had been educated in college . Whether to get a college certificates seemed not to have bothered 30% of all that questioned . They augured that they frequently found others who were not educated sharing the same office . Especially in China , It was not hard to be defeated by disqualified people .10% of the questioned people argued against the college education mainly because of the high tuition and the risk of losing jobs afterwards . Facing the fierce job market , they worried that the sad consequences when most or all the finance were invested in vain . They witnessed some cases where children stayed at home after graduation from college, which was even worse for those who chose to work with a sum of pay after graduating from middle school .What can we learn from the survey analysis ? Deep causes behind the phenomenon remains to be considered by both the government and the public . 4、 引导学生用比较高端的句型训练写作 ： 5、 部分考场作文： （ 考场满分作文文30 分） 考场29分作文： 2014年高三（4）班王奕闻九月调考29分作文： 高三（5）班 王汝程 2014年武昌9月调唯一一篇满分30分作文 （ 高中三年教师： 黄秀丽， 我只是她新高一夏令营的短期老师） 六 、带有本人注解的高端美文： 高三 （ 9） 徐瑞珩 It should have been a common day when cars frequently came and went through streets , and children chased after each other . Cats fell asleep in the the corner of the sofa and boys were busy editing short messages to win girls heart . Everything went on the right track. Nobody was aware of what would happen in the next second . An powerful bomb was set off in front of the bank . In a blink , two lives were taken away while many other passers-by were injured without knowing what had happened . Flames were seen by flying birds, smoke was melt by dogs from the village miles away , and thrilling screams were heard by sleeping babies in kinder-gardens ten blocks away. Tears and blames let the world know a vicious name -Wang Haijian , Who killed the civilians without mercy with cold-blooded hands. Thats why attention has been focused on the process of chasing the criminal who put two families into the icy ocean simply because of the motivation of robbing money from the cash escort truck . And thats why we all cheered up when the thief was sentenced by justice on December 16th . Thanks to the efforts devoted by police force , Wang was trapped in a hospital and two careful nurses reported to the police . No matter what excuse a criminal can find , law is the justice . When asked about the attitude to the incident , 99% of the citizens were satisfied about the outcome and said Wangs action remind the society of the loss of humans nuclear value and compassion remains to be restored in peoples heart . 高三（ 9 ） 梅卿 When accelerating the pace of life and the prosperity of the society , we are supposed to have a doubt whether we are drifting in the universe riding a planet in a wrong direction to self- destruction and losing the most important part of our journey . Now Wang Haijians explosion has given us a definite warning : The conscience of humans are being ignored because of the pursuit of material life . The fact that Wang Haijian set off a bomb near the Cash truck is simply to rob money at the cost of two innocent civilians life and many others arms and legs. Terrifying atmosphere hovered around people living in or travelling to Wuhan . Generally speaking ,the police are expected to take the responsibility to maintain the security of the people . In my interview , people chose not to hide their worries about or faith in the society .55% of the interviewees are convinced that the police deserve to be praised . 32% of the people are firmly of the opinion that the capacity of precautions remains to be promoted . But 18 % of them strongly believe that the police totally failed to live up to the peoples expectation . Personally , government and media are expected to arouse the awareness of the public . The instinct response and essential conscience are called to compensate for the drawbacks of our character for the sake of humans common needs . Job as a guide in the museum 高三（13）陈旺喆 Every day ,I step into the cradle of human history , walking through thousands of years full of amazing events . My face is brightened by a moon from Qin Dynasty , and my hair is exposed to a strong ancient wind which I cant define which dynasty it comes from . I am a guide working in Great China Museum , Over time , a river of art works and history treasures have flowed into China , some of which were presented as gifts by European pirates . My dear tourists, Do you fancy to use Alexanders sword to cut an apple from Newtons tree ? Just help yourself and be careful with your fingers . Using one of the most greatest kings sword to cut the most wise fruit sounds a lot of fun . Look at the delicate container . It is said to have accompanied LiBai for many years . We wont mind you having a drink if the stain doesnt bother you . Maybe you will become a poet after drinking such a sweet bottle of history . Just tell me your schedule . My professional guidance will build up your sweet future memory . 高三（12） 班 姜晨曦 Memory , which has been lost in the mist of time , is not memory any longer . History still shines in this museum . Hello , dear tourists , I am your guide . Both of the museum and I invite you to have a history meditation in this museum . We have a faith that history can purify humans soul and promote our wisdom .On my left hand , cultural relics lie in the windows , which have witnessed human race step by step moving towards prosperity . The priceless treasures are the fruits of humans wisdom , which are expected to perpetuate your blood boiling . Stay close to me , and walk around . History is carried by words , without which , we will fall into eternal darkness . Here are precious literature . Of course , you are supposed not to touch them , for your slightest touch may destroy a period of history . It will survive your carefulness and our future generation will appreciate the graceful writing and the wisdom revealed between the lines . Having surfed between the waves of history ocean , we have to say good bye . Wish you could have a more wonderful body and soul trip tomorrow . 3 Welcome to this museum 高三12 班 孙仕达 If there were a word existing that could express my feeling now , the following writing could be more fabulous .It is meant to be great honor to work here , showing my visitors around the museum . Let me accompany you the next three hours . This museum is tittled as the best one with the richest collection in our country . Here you will be given a grand feast of vision to your eyes . To begin with , there are two major sections in this museum ., ancient and modern . Both of them are next to none . In this part , we have collected many exhibits , the oldest of which dates back to 8000 years ago . The archaeologists have dug out many stone tolls used by primitive men . They are displayed on your lest . Look ahead , there is a china vase measured to be produced in Tang Dynasty . The surface is as delicate as a babys skin . Even if it goes back to 1000 years ago , it still shines attractively as it did 1000 year ago . Western culture is also displayed here .Apart from Picassos famous painting , we still have many other European master pieces in the form of their manuscripts ( In the modern section , you will be allowed to turn on Watts Steam engine and listen to the music from Edisons first recorder. You will even type a letter to the one you love from Steve Jobs first computer . Ladies are also allowed to spay a little perfume to promote your body smell from MOnroes Chanel No. 5. I know it is hard for you to leave the museum and your impressive guide , but trust me , you are welcome back anytime when you are tired of something . ) 括号内为冯珍妮老师 添加 介绍一款新式手机 高三 （ 12） 班 龚轩 Convincing evidence has accumulated , showing apparent link has been discovered between high quality of life and high-tech products . Our company has just developed a new type cell-phone equipped with advanced technology. The former one produced by our company was well received the instant it hit the market . The latest one contains more applications which makes it possible to satisfy those are particular about cell-phones . When holding it in your elegant hand , you must be attracted by its splendid outside design . You can surf the Internet at will as if you were flying in the sky . As it is next to none in the market , the supreme function of it holds true . Enjoying watching KungFu Panda 3 and Foxs 24 hours following -up will surely remove your worries from your mind . Why are you still waiting ? Come on ! Just get what you want ! ( 电影名为冯珍妮老师添加） 胡玉舟 高三 （12 ）班You cant own the whole world , but you can own the Starry Sky .The best phone has a noble