大学英语四级写作高分技巧

写作高分技巧,内容提要,1.四级写作题型简介2.写作高分技巧高分作文标志词汇和语法高分技巧结构高分技巧3.考场意外应急策略4.母语干涉对中国大学生写作的影响,1.大学英语四级考试写作部分题型简介,大学英语四级考试历经了2005年末、2006年初的大规模改革，但写作整体上说没有大的变动，或者说沿用了传统的出题模式，稳中求进。在题型设置上，仍然沿用了解释现象型、利弊分析型、解决问题型、校园应用文四种体裁，考查学生对这四种体裁的掌握。在阅卷方式上，仍然采用的是“一次性印象分+离散标准分”阅卷法，一次性印象分是指阅卷教师根据卷面整洁度、字体美观度在允许的范围内综合给出某些印象分，作为总分的一部分；离散标准分是根据作文单词、语法、结构、论点、论据等5个离散标准分别给分，以保证公正、公平、细致、合理。,改革后，写作部分占总分数的15%（105分），要求字数在120-180间，太多或太少均扣分。在单词（词汇）上，要求学生尽可能的使用大学词汇和短语来表达思想，遣词造句；在语法上，要求学生熟练运用虚拟语气、倒装句式、定语从句、分词作状语等中等难度以上的语法来表达思想；在结构上，要求段落分布合理，能有力的辅助考生表达思想；在论点上，要求考生观点分明，不能模棱两可或含含蓄蓄；在论据的使用上，要求有理、有据、有节。,2.写作高分技巧,2.1高分作文标志,1：是否长短句交叉；2、是否会使用插入语；3、用词是否多样，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；5、句型使用是否准确、地道。,下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：1.适当用被动替换主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we/I(比如写结尾时不用weshouldpayattentionto而用Attentionshouldbepaidto.)举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：Itis,therefore,hightimethatsomeapplicableapproacheswereimplementedbytheserviceindustrylikethat.Bydoingso，itscompetitiveedgewillbesharpenedeffectively.,2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。如however/therefore/forexample/Ibelieve做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。比如说：Otherindividuals,however,taketheattitudethat,3.一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的替换太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good,bad,many,thing,think,people,opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable替换proper,approaches替换ways,implement替换carryout,sharpenonescompetitiveedge替换enhanceonescompetitiveness(提高某物竞争力),ComputerandIBySimmy,Ineverforgettheexceedinglythrillingdaywhenmymotherboughtmeacomputerasbirthdaypresent,whichexertedatremendousfascinationonmesothatIindulgedmyselfingooglinganarmyofusefulinformationIhadexpected,andenjoyaseaofmelodiousclassicmusic.ThatnightIwassleepless,feelingthatthewholeworldbelongedtome.,exceedingly替换verythrilling替换excitingsth.exertatremendousfascinationonsb替换sb.beinterestedinsth.google替换searchforanarmyof替换alotof,Sample2,Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessedtheincreasingpopularityofcomputers.Coincidentwiththeadvancementofscienceandtechnology,computerspouringintothecurrentsocietyasafashionareappealingtogrowingindividuals.Itisnoexaggerationtosaywehavebeensubmergedbythem,inalargenumber!,Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；Increasingpopularity替换moreandmorepopularCoincidentwith非常地道的句型，表达“与一致”的意思，替换WithAdvancement替换developmentPourinto(floodinto/swarminto)替换enterintocurrently替换nowAppealtosb.替换sb.beinterestedinsth.Growingindividuals替换moreandmorepeopleItisnoexaggerationtosay经典句型说某事是毫不夸张的,1.individuals,characters,folks替换(people,persons)2:positive,favorable，promising(有希望的)，perfect,pleasurable,excellent,outstanding,superior替换good3:dreadful,unfavorable,poor,adverse,ill(有害的)替换bad；如果bad做表语，可以有belessimpressive替换e.g.Anarmyofcollegestudentsindulgethemselvesinplayinggames,enjoyingromancewithgirls/boysorkillingtimepassivelyintheirdorms.Whenitapproachestograduation,asaresult,theyfindtheiracademicrecordsarelessimpressive.,以下是30个最经典的替换词,4.(anarmyof;anoceanof;aseaof;amultitudeof;ahostof;manyifnotmost)替换many.E.g.:Inthisatmosphere,manyifnotmostGermanscametobelievethatWorldWarIwasasortofnaturalcatastrophe,withnohumanauthors.在这种气氛下，不仅是大部分德国人，很多人都认为一战是某种没有人为因素的自然灾害。5:asliceof,quietafew,several替换some6:harbortheideathat,holdtheviewthat,itiswidelysharedthat,itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat,deem,assume,consider,reckon,)替think,7:affair,business,matter替换thing8:shared,mutual,代common9.reaphugefruits,yieldgoodresult替换getmanybenefits)10:formypart,frommyownperspective,personally,asfarasImconcerned替换inmyopinion11:Increasing(ly),growing,more替换moreandmore(注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副increasingly.Eg.sthhasgainedgrowingpopularity.Sthisincreasinglypopularwiththeadvancementofsth.thereisangrowingnumberofpeople,20.beindicativeof,besuggestiveof,befearfulof,indicate代,suggest,fearE.g.:Fevermaybeindicativeofaninfection.发烧可能表明受了感染。21.giveriseto,leadto,resultin,trigger替换cause.22.Thereareseveralreasonsbehindsth替换.reasonsforsth.23.desire,yearnfor,longfor,diefor,crave替换want.24.bear/keepinmindthat替换remember,25.enjoy,possess,own,hold,替换have(注意process是过程的意思)26.interact,替换communicate27.frownonsth.,beagainst,替换,disagreewithsth30.nextto/virtuallyimpossible,nearly/almostimpossible,替换impossible,2.2词汇和语法高分技巧,大学英语四级考试的考试对象是在校大学生，不是高中生和初中生。所以离散标准分的第一方面就是词汇的使用，即大学生是否用到了大学学到的词汇，而不是重复运用初高中学到的词汇和短语来表达思想。熟记一些与大学外语四级考试写作息息相关的词汇和短语，是非常必要的。同时，用一些虚拟语气、倒装句式、定语从句、分词作状语等中等难度以上的语法表达也会使文章锦上添花。,2.2.1解释现象型/现象分析的作文需要用到的大学词汇和语法这种体裁一般让考生陈述一个事情或一个现象，并解释其原因，还要说明自己的看法。就以2010年6月四级原题为例，“英语学习中不重视拼写”现象分析，（1）如今不少学生在英语学习中不重视拼写；（2）分析这种情况的原因；（3）为了改变这种状况，我认为,在完成第一部分时，要着重描述现象的普遍性，即不少学生在英语学习中不重视拼写，以下是一些英语翻译。ManystudentsdonotpayattentiontothespellingisverypopularinEnglishstudying.()ThatmanystudentsdonotpayattentiontothespellingisverypopularinEnglishstudying.()ItisverypopularthatmanystudentsneglecttheimportanceofspellinginEnglishstudying.()ThephenomenonthatmanystudentsneglecttheimportanceofspellinginEnglishstudyingisofgreatpopularityinmoderntimes.(),在分析这种情况的危害时，可以用到negativeeffect,notavailable等大学词汇和典型的虚拟语气来辅助你表达思想。Theneglectofcorrectspelling,moreoftenthannot(=usually/commonly),hasanegativeeffectontheEnglishstudyinmoderntimes.()Iftheproblemcouldnotgetthecorrectsolution,asmoothEnglishstudyingwouldnotbeavailablefortheEnglishlearners.(),第二部分要论述导致“学生不重视拼写”这种现象的原因。表示原因的大学词汇和语法有以下几种：Thereareseveralreasonsforthephenomenon.()Thecauses(=reasons),givingrisetotheabovephenomenon,areasthefollowing.()Thecauses,however,arevarious.()Thefactors(=reasons),causingagreatlossinEnglishstudying,liesinthefollowing.()Thefactors,causingagreatlossinEnglishstudying,consistinthefollowing.(),插入语是使考生语法地道、富有原汁原味的技巧之一。把定语从句、时间状语、地点状语变成插入语成分放在主语和谓语之间，是一个高分的小窍门。Theassociationwhichhassavedalotofpatientsoflungcancer,isawardedthe“GovernmentPrize”in1994.Theassociation,havingsavedalotofpatientsoflungcancer,isawardedthe“GovernmentPrize”in1994.Theprivatecollegesispopularinmoderntimes,hasgottheapprovalfromboththestudentsandtheirparents.Theprivatecolleges,popularinmoderntimes,hasgottheapprovalfromboththestudentsandtheirparents.,Thefactors,causingagreatlossinEnglishstudying,resultfromthefollowing.()Therehavebeenfoundavarietyoffactors,asillustratedbymanyscholars,givingrisetotheabovephenomenon.()Therehavebeenfoundvariousfactors,asareillustratedbymanyscholars,givingrisetotheabovephenomenon.(),第三部分，涉及到自己的观点。关键性的表达有以下几处：表示自己的想法:AsfarasIknow()AsfarasIamconcerned()Providedwiththeopportunitiestoillustratemyopinion,Ithink(believe)()Astome,Iholdsuchpointsofviewasthefollowing()Inordertoshiftthesituation,themeasures,asfarasIknow,areasthefollowing,表示自己提出的某种建议很重要：Itisofgreat(fatal)importancetoentitlethestudentstopracticespellingatcampus.()Itisofgreat(fatal)significancetoencouragethestudentsinpractisingspellingatcampus.(),表示建议：Itisrequiredthatastudentputthewordsintothepracticeofsentencemakingindailylife.Itisagoodideathatateacheremphasizetheimportanceofwordspellingintheroutineclassteachingatcampus.Itisstronglyrecommendedthatastudentputthewordsintothepracticeofsentencemakingindailylife.,2.2.2利弊分析型的作文需要用到的大学词汇和语法利弊分析型作文通常给出一种现象，让考生陈述其利弊两个方面，并阐释自己的看法。这种作文往往要陈述好处，再陈述坏处，最后阐释自己的观点。这三个步骤都需要体现大学的词汇和语法。以2008年6月的四级作文题为例，（1）娱乐的多样性；（2）娱乐的好处及危害；（3）自己的切身感受。,直接表示娱乐既有好处又有害处：Theamusementbothhasgoodnessandharm.()Theamusementbothhasthepositiveaspectsandnegativeaspects.()Theexistenceofvariousamusement,asitis,bothhasthepositiveandnegativeinfluence.()Theexistenceofvarietyofamusement,beingpopularinthesociety,showsbothpositivefactorsandnegativeones.(),在表示完诸多好处之后，前后承接，好处承接坏处时：Beneficialasitis,theamusement,however,isveryharmfulinmorecases.()Beneficialasitis,theamusement,nevertheless,isveryharmfulundermorecircumstances.()Helpfulasitis,theamusement,otherwise,showsitsnegativefactorsundermorecircumstances.()Inadditiontotheuniquecontributiontothepeopleslife,meanwhile,itcausessomeinconveniencetothecitizen.(),表示好处：Theamusement,asisknowntoall,benefitsthecitizeninmanyfieldsinmoderntimes.()Toeveryonessatisfaction/gratification,theamusementashasbeenprovedtobebeneficialandavailablefordecades.()Theamusementistothecitizenwhatthenutritionistothepeople.()Theamusementistothecitizenwhatthenutritionistothepeople,which(as)isofgreatimportanceinmoderntimes.(),表示坏处：Thenegativeaspectsoftheamusement,moreoftenthannot,overlapthepositiveones.()Thenegativeinfluenceofamusement,however,isexcessivelyunfoldedtoall.()Thenegativeinfluenceofamusement,tinyasitis,cannotbeneglectedbypeople.(),AresearchdoneinBeijingUniversityin1999illustratesthattheamusement,ifdoneaftertensionedwork,willbenefitthepeopleforashorttime.(表示证据)Theamusementistothecitizenwhattheairistothepeople.(表类比)Onlybythis,caneveryone.（提出方法，倒装句式）Itisbeneficialbothtotheindividualsandtothesociety,whichcannotbeneglected.(定语从句表观点),2.3四级写作结构高分技巧：,2.3.1解释现象/现象分析型作文文本分析一般来说，解释现象型的作文全文分三个自然段，学生不用添加自然段。第一自然段是描述现象（记叙说明），第二自然段是讨论原因（议论文），最后自然段是阐释自己的观点。第一自然段既然是记叙说明，那么要求考生按提示展开描写。我们通常采用“描述+引用”或“描述+案例”的模式。,描述部分从名词入手，可以直接翻译提示句，也可以改变几个词语，用上大学的生僻词汇。（以2007年12月份试题为例WhatElectivestoChoose）描述策略1Asisknowntoall,theelectiveclassesplayamoreandmoreimportantroleintheeducationalsystemandmanyuniversitiesoffervariouselectivesfortheundergraduates.,描述策略2：Theelectiveclass,asitis,becomesmoreandmorepopulartouniversitystudents.Therefore,manyuniversitiesoffervariouselectivestotheundergraduates.,描述策略3：Withthedevelopmentofscienceandeducation,theelectiveclassesbecomesanecessaryelementintheeducationalsystem.,“引用”既可以增加文章的可信性和生动性，又可以增加单词。引用某人的话证明现象存在，是四级高分的一大策略。引用时注意要说明人物的职位，他的职位一定要与文章有关联。还以“选修课”为例引用策略1“Electivescanenrichstudentsknowledge,andcanarisestudentscuriositytostudy”,saidChenZhili,theministerofEducationDepartmentofChina,1995.,“案例”与名人引用相互照应，使文章的第一段更加充实。案例策略1Forinstance,amongthe144institutionsinChina,132ofthemoffertheelectivesfortheundergraduates,whichentitlesmorechancesforthestudentstodevelopthemselves.,案例策略2：As(So)farasnow,suchfamousuniversitiesasPeakingUniversity,ChangchunInstitutionofTechnologyandEngineer,andNankaiUniversity,offerelectivesforthestudents,which,toalargeextent,enrichesstudentsknowledge.,第二自然段：论述原因论述原因时，要从第一段话题入手，先阐释原因的多样性和可变性，然后具体涉入一两个原因。阐述原因不要过多，简洁明了，与第一段字数相当即可，因为阐释原因型的作文要求三段平均分配文字，不能写成中间多两边少的菱形结构。,论述案例1：（以2007年12月份试题为例）Theuniversitystudents,outofdifferentreasons,choosetostudytheelectives.Somewanttostudysomeknowledgewithlessrelationtotheirmajors,somewanttoenrichtheirknowledgebeyondthetextbook,othersjustpursuethefashion.,论述案例2：Thecollegestudents,outofdifferentmotivations,choosetheelectives.Somewanttostudysomeknowledgewithlessrelationtotheirmajors,somewanttoenrichtheirknowledgebeyondthetextbook,otherswanttogetthemastersdegreeontheelectivemajors.,第三自然段：自我的观点这一段要求写出自身的观点，比如，自己为什么选择选修课。最好自己的观点与上文给出的原因能匹配的上，不仅突出了原因的准确性，而且把某一原因扩展开来，省时省力。Astome/Asforme/Takemeforinstance,Takemeforinstance.IamamajorinChineselanguageandmyelectiveclassisforeigncultures.Ononehand,withtheaidofforeignculturesIcanstudyChineselanguagebetter,ontheotherhand,Chineselanguageenablesmetolearnforeignculturesbetter,whichismypointofviewindailylife.,解释现象型作文：全文模式Atpresenttime,withthefiercecompetitioninscienceandtechnology,alluniversities,outofdifferentreasons,providevarietiesofelectiveclassestotheirundergraduates,whichisverypopularinChinesehighereducationsystem.As(So)farasnow,suchfamousuniversitiesasPeakingUniversity,ChangchunInstitutionofTechnologyandEngineer,andNankaiUniversity,offerelectivesforthestudents,which,toalargeextent,enrichesstudentsknowledge.Theuniversitystudents,outofdifferentreasons,choosetostudytheelectives.Somewanttostudysomeknowledgewithlessrelationtotheirmajors,somewanttoenrichtheirknowledgebeyondthetextbook,othersjustpursuethefashion.Takemeforinstance.IamamajorinChineselanguageandmyelectiveclassisforeigncultures.Ononehand,withtheaidofforeignculturesIcanstudyChineselanguagebetter,ontheotherhand,Chineselanguageenablesmetolearnforeignculturesbetter,whichismypointofviewindailylife.(162words),结构小练习：以OntheLosingofTraditionalCulture为例，1）现在许多传统文化正在消失2）传统文化消失的原因3）我的看法,2.3.2利弊分析型文本分析利弊分析型作文表面上看，试题中给出3个提示，所以在现实考试中，我们需要按3个自然段来写。第一自然段就现象的普遍性进行阐释，但不要谈意义。因此第一自然段只是说明和描述，不是论述；第二自然段写一部分人的观点和另一部分人的观点，最后一个自然段写考生自己的观点。,这类作文由于涉及了三方面的观点，所以关联词的选择和段落衔接显得非常重要。第一段不需太长，只是用平淡的语言展示现象的存在或普遍性就可以了。以下以2006年12月的四级考题为例。春节联欢晚会是否应该被取消第一段例文1TheSpringFestivalGalaperformedinCCTVhaslastedforabout25years.ItoncewasanecessaryelementinNewYearsEve.ButthefamousSpringFestivalGalahasrecentlyputsomepeopleintoahotdebate.(现象的普遍性进行阐释，不谈意义),第一段例文2WiththedevelopmentofthemovieandTVindustry,thepointofviewthattheSpringFestivalGalaisanecessarypartofNewYearCelebrationisnotasstableasbefore.Somepeoplesinghighpraiseforit,however,othersholdthecontraryopinion.Therefore,herecomesahotdebate.(现象的普遍性进行阐释，不谈意义),第二和第三自然段论述一些人喜欢春节联欢晚会而其他人不喜欢。这一部分切忌干干巴巴的说理，要注重用案例和引用。案例和引用不仅是英美最具有说服力的论证方法，也是使文章充实，字数足够的手段之一。这里的引用，不仅指引用人们的话语，也指权威机构的调查。,SomepeoplethinkhighlyoftheGala.Theysaidover20yearstheyandtheirrelativesspentnearlyalltheEvenightbeforetheTVset,enjoyingtheperformanceintheGala.(“Ithink,itisabrilliantfeast”,saidMr.LiuXiaofei,ateacherinBeijingNumber4Middleschool.)However,alotofpeopleholdthecontraryopinion.Theysaidthatononehand,thequalityoftheGalaisdescendingyearbyyearand,ontheotherhand,peoplehavefoundsomeotherwaytocelebratetheNewYearsDayadditiontotheGala.(AninvestigationbyGalopCorporationinMarch,2007illustratedthatonly61%ofthepeoplegavetheirapprovalto2006SpringFestivalGala.),第三自然段表述自己的观点，字数不要太少。表明自己的观点时，asfarasIknow,asfarasIamconcerned,asforme,这样的话比takemeforexample,inmypointofview,inmyopinion的含金量要高得多，希望大家踊跃使用。同时，千万不要写模棱两可的观点。AsfarasIknow,theGalaisbothapopularoneandadisgustedone这样的话一旦出现，作为即得0-5分。,全文模式：TheSpringFestivalGalaperformedinCCTVhaslastedforabout25years.ItoncewasanecessaryelementinNewYearsEve.ButthefamousSpringFestivalGalahasrecentlyputsomepeopleintoahotdebate.,SomepeoplethinkhighlyoftheGala.Theysaidover20yearstheyandtheirrelativesspentnearlyalltheEvenightsbeforetheTVset,enjoyingtheperformanceintheGala.However,alotofpeopleholdthecontraryopinion.Theysaidthatononehand,thequalityoftheGalaisdescendingyearbyyearand,ontheotherhand,peoplehavefoundsomeotherwaytocelebratetheNewYearsDayadditiontotheGala.(AninvestigationbyGalopCorporationinMarch,2007illustratedthatonly61%ofthepeoplegavetheirapprovalto2006SpringFestivalGala).,AsfarasIamconcerned,IprefertokeeptheGalabecauseitservesnotonlyasentertainmentbutanoccasionforthefamiliestogather,chatandlaugh.Moreoftenthannot,itisanecessityintheEve.Nomatterwhatitwillbelikeinthefuture,theexistenceoftheGalaisbetterthantobecanceled.,结构小练习：以OpenCourses为例，1）现在网络公开课很盛行2）网络公开课有不少好吹，也存在一些问题3）提我对此建议或看法,2.3.3解决问题型文本分析这类作文有时有两个提示点，有时有三个提示点，所以一般行文时，按照三个自然段。,以2001年1月份考试题为例，Howtosucceedinajobinterview第一自然段，写jobInterview的作用例文1Nowadays,thejobinterviewisverypopularinthejobhuntingandisofgreatimportancebothtotheinterviewersandtotheinterviewees.Firstly,itenablestheintervieweestogiveadeepandunforgettableimpressiontotheinterviewers,andsecondly,theemployercaninspectapersonsabilitiesfromalltheaspects.,第一段例文2TherehasbeenahotdiscussiononthejobInterviewinourdailylife,especiallyoncampus.Andundoubtedlythejobinterviewisofgreatsignificanceinthejobhunting.AresearchbyBeijingUniversityemploymentinstitutionillustratesthat70.98%ofthejobhuntingisdonebythejobinterview.,第二自然段最难写，也最好写。正话正说+正话反说+个人经历是高分策略。Inordertoperformaperfectjobinterview,itisimportantthattheemployees(interviewees)(should）havetheproperappearanceandoutstandingabilities.Aproperappearancecangivetheintervieweragoodimpression,viceversa,adirtyandcasualappearancecanariseinterviewersdisgust.Ifapersonwantstotakeapositionheorsheshouldbeequippedwiththecorrespondingknowledge,otherwise,heorsheisnotvaluableatall.CaiWenjun,theCEOofBOFUNCo.Ltd;,saidthathewontemployanyonewhoisinragsorwhoisincapable.,全文模式：Nowadays,thejobinterviewisverypopularinthejobhuntingandisofgreatimportancebothtotheinterviewersandtotheinterviewees.Firstly,itenablestheintervieweestogiveadeepandunforgettableimpressiontotheinterviewers,andsecondly,theemployercaninspectapersonsabilitiesfromalltheaspects.Inordertoperformaperfectjobinterview,itisimportantthattheemployees(interviewees)(should）havetheproperappearanceandoutstandingabilities.Aproperappearancecangivetheintervieweragoodimpression,viceversa,adirtyandcasualappearancecanariseinterviewersdisgust.Ifapersonwantstotakeapositionheorsheshouldbeequippedwiththecorrespondingknowledge,otherwise,heorsheisnotvaluableatall.CaiWenjun,theCEOofBOFUNCo.Ltd;，saidthathewontemployanyonewhoisinragsorwhoisincapable.,Soinconclusion,asfarasImconcerned,theappearanceandtheabilitiesarethekeytoasuccessfuljobinterview,whichcannotbeneglected.（170words）,第三段做一个小总结，Inconclusion+重复主题+非限定性定语从句=第三段结构。Soinconclusion,asfarasImconcerned,theappearanceandtheabilitiesarethekeytoasuccessfuljobinterview,whichshouldnotneverbeneglected.,2.3.4校园应用文文本分析,2007年6月份：1）本社团的主要活动内容2）参加本社团的好处3）如何加入本社团,由于校园应用文体裁多样，可能是邀请函，可能是拒绝函，可能是竞聘稿，也可能是感谢信，所以我们没有固定的模式可以提供。校园应用文，只要言之有物，表达清楚，内容完整就可以得到相对高的分数。,以第一段为例：Hello!Pleaseallowmetoexpressthemostheartfulwelcometoallofthefreshmeninouruniversity!OurclubCheerkeyDramaClub,foundedin1997,islookingforwardtoyourjoining.Opportunitiestorealizeyourdreamsofbeingafamousactorwillbeavailabletoyouafteryourjoiningit.Webelievethatyouwillnotfeeldisappointedifyoutakepartinourclub.,要点：1）说清楚你的社团是什么2）日常活动内容是什么3）既然是海报，要有煽动力和感召力。,第二段：TheparticipationinCheerkeyDramaClubtakesagreatnumberbenefitstoyou.First,youwillgettheopportunitiestoperforminsuchfamousdramasasHamlet,orDetective007,whichareveryhelpfultoimproveyouractingability.Second,yourperformanceisnotmoneyfree,whichwillsolvesomeproblemonthelackofmoney.,要点：1）简单些两个要点就行2）每一点有层次，first,second要用上，每点之后可以用非限定性定语从句表达结果。这样既使文章字数足够，又使文章语法上专业得多。,第三段：Ifyouthinkitisagoodchance,ifyouthinkitisverybeneficial,ifyouwanttobeafamousactororactressintheuniversity,pleasejoinourclubwithoutanyhesitation.ContactusaorgotoRoom225,secondteachingbuildingtocompletetheapplication.Ourwebsite:http:/www.C,最后一段，要求写清楚如何加入社团，要尽可能写清楚所有可以加入社团的方式。语言要有煽动性。,全文：Hello!Pleaseallowmetoexpressthemostheartfulwelcometoallofthefreshmeninouruniversity!OurclubCheerkeyDramaClub,foundedin1997,islookingforwardtoyourjoining.Opportunitiestorealizeyourdreamsofbeingafamousactorwillbeavailabletoyouafteryourjoiningit.Webelievethatyouwillnotfeeldisappointedifyoutakepartinourclub.TheparticipationinCheerkeyDramaClubtakesagreatnumberbenef