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安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作（二十七）ABC公司准备招聘程序设计员。条件是：外语好、有创造能力和协作精神。请以“李明”为名，写一封自荐信。学生习作外教批改Dear Sir/Madam,1I am writing to apply for the position of programmer in your ABC company asadvertised inyesterdays newspaper.2My name is Li Ming.3 I will graduate from university in two months.My major iscomputerscience.I am very good at English，especially spoken and written4 English and writing.Incollege，I often come up with new ideas or imagination.5 and am known for my activeimagination，always I am eager to create new things.Anyone who works with me will findme a nice man because I am6 easygoing and friendly，able to work independently or aspart of a team.7I am interested in your company simply8 because your company enjoys a high of its goodreputation for quality products and good excellent aftersalesservice aftersales service.Thecompany offers a good prospect for me if I can work there.9I am ready to work hard and achieve more success for the company.I would welcome anopportunity to discuss this application at interview. I am looking10 Look forward tohearingfrom you soon.Sincerely yours11Yours faithfully，Li Ming旁批1如果不知道收信人的名字，要这样写。别忘了看信的人可能是位女士。2这样写很好。作者一开始就说明了写信的目的。3从信尾署名中很明显会看到名字，不要在信里写。4词性要和spoken一样，所以应该用written。5用词不当。come up with指“想出(主意)”，后面的宾语不能用imagination。6这和工作要求无关。7你应该写能让你得到这份工作的个人才能。8用simply意味着这是你对该职位感兴趣的唯一原因。如果是这样，你很可能得不到这个工作。9这是指公司给你带来什么好处，而要得到这个工作，你要说明你能为公司带来什么好处。10在正式信件中最好用look forward to，并且要另起一行。11你不知道收信人的名字，所以末尾要用Yours faithfully。这是一篇较差的作文。作者在开头就清楚地说明了写信的原因。但是，第二段末的内容与主题无关。作者没有写他/她能为公司做什么或为什么认为自己是最适合这个工作的人。因此，作者不大可能得到面试机会。写求职信的关键不在于篇幅大小，而在于你能否成功地推销自己。高分作文秘诀之二：使用正确的语态。例如：Instead of (不要说：)This room is measured 30 feet long and 25 feet wide.Use (要说：)This room measures 30 feet long and 25 feet wide.Instead of (不要说：)The apartment is consisted of two rooms and a kitchen.Use (要说：)The apartment consists of two rooms and a kitchen.Instead of (不要说：)This city has rapidly been developed into an industrial center.Use (要说：)This city has rapidly developed into an industrial center.Instead of (不要说：)A big fire was broken out in the factory last night.Use (要说：)A big fire broke out in the factory last night.假设你叫王彬。得知2020年上海世博会招募志愿者的消息，你决定在2020年的暑假当志愿者。现在你需要写一封英语自荐信。内容包括：1你个人的情况介绍；2你当志愿者的目的。注意：1词数120左右；2信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。参考词汇：世博会the World ExpoDear Sir or Madam，I am a student in Senior Three._I am looking forward to receiving your early reply.Yours，Wang Bin参考范文：Dear Sir or Madam，I am a student in Senior Three.I read in the newspaper that you are looking for somevolunteers to serve the 2020 World Expo to be held in Shanghai.Since I will be freeduring thesummer holidays，I would like to be a volunteer.Now let me introduce myself.Among all my subjects，I like English and history best.I speak fluent English and I wonthefirst prize in an English Speech Contest in our school last year.As a monitor，I am able tocommunicate with my classmates and teachers efficiently.I hope to learn more aboutsocietyand improve my communication skills by being a volunteer.Meanwhile I can help visi