2016 TEM-4 Writing

2016TEM-4WritingAnalysis,ByZhanGaoshengandLiuXiang,PARTVIWRITING45MIN,Readcarefullythefollowingexcerptonterm-timeholidayargumentsintheUK,andthenwriteyourresponseinNOLESSTHAN200words,inwhichyoushould:summarizethemainmessageoftheexcerpt,andthencommentonwhetherparentsshouldtakechildrenoutofschoolforholidayduringtermtimeinordertosavemoney.Youshouldsupportyourselfwithinformationfromtheexcerpt.Markswillbeawardedforcontentrelevance,contentsufficiency,organizationandlanguagequality.Failuretofollowtheaboveinstructionsmayresultinalossofmarks.,Information,Term-timeholidayswillbebannedParentsaretobebannedbyMichaelGove,UKsEducationSecretary,fromtakingchildrenoutofschooltosavemoneyonholidays.Heistoabolishtherightofheadteachersto“authorizeabsence”fromtheclassroom,whichhasbeenusedtoletfamiliestaketerm-timebreaks,andwillwarnthemtheyfacefinesfortheirchildrennotbeingatschool.“Anytimeoutofschoolhasthepotentialtodamageachildseducation”aseniorsourceattheDepartmentforEducationsaidthisweekend.“Thatiswhythegovernmentwillendthedistinctionbetweenauthorizedandunauthorizedabsence.”,“Thisispartofthegovernmentswidercommitmenttobringdowntruancylevelsinourschools.Therewillalsobestricterpenaltiesforparentsandschools.”ThetoughmeasuresontruancyarepartofawiderattemptbyMr.Govetomakeeducationmoreacademicallyrigorousandtotackleacultureintheeducationalestablishmentwhichhebelieveshasaccepted“excusesforfailure”.RussellHobby,thegeneralsecretaryoftheNationalAssociationofHeadTeachers,saidthemeasurewoulddiscourageparentsfromtryingtoputpressureonheadstosanctiontermtimeholidays“Thehighcostofholidaysoutsideoftermtimeisstillanissuebutultimatelyachildseducationismoreimportantthanaholiday,”hesaid.,ModelEssay,Whenitcomestowhetherparentsshouldtaketheirchildrentospendholidaysduringterm-time,viewsontheissuevaryfrompersontoperson.Parentsclaimthatbydoingso,theycansavealotofmoneybornofbusyschoolholidays.Educationalofficialsstronglyopposethistendencyonthegroundthatitencouragestruancy,whichinturndamagesachildseducation.Frommyperspective,themeritsofbanningterm-timeholidaysoutweighitsdemerits.,Tobeginwith,takingtoughmeasuresonthiskindoftruancyisconducivetothenormalteachingprocess,oneofthekeyelementstoguaranteekidsacademicperformance.Asweknow,currently,teachershavethediscretiontoapproveacertaintimeofabsencefromschoolforeachchild,whichissupposedtobeforillnessandisnotsupposedtobegrantedforholidays.Bydefinitelyabolishingtherightofheadteachersto“authorizeabsence”fromtheclassroom,thoseteacherscanrarelybepesteredbyparentswhowanttotakechildrentogoonaholidayjusttosavemoney,whichseverelydisruptsteachingprocess.Whatsmore,withoutstrictpenaltiesimposedontheparentswholeadtotheirkidsplayingtruant,thoseparentscangraduallyviewaskingforholidayleaveasaright.Oncethisculturalexpectationisformed,theleveloftruancywilldramaticallyincrease.,Accordingly,thegrowingtrendofterm-timeholidaysshouldbebannedwithnodelay.Inthisway,teacherscanimpartknowledgewithoutdisturbanceandparentswillbedeterredfromsavingmoneyattheexpenseofsacrificingtheirkidseducation.,Summarization,Theperspectiveofwhetherparentsshouldtaketheirchildrentospendholidaysduringterm-timeisdiverse.ParentsholdsthatitwillhelptosavealotofmoneywhiletheEducationalofficialsareopposite.Theauthorbelievesthatadvantagesoutweighsdisadvantages.Tostartwithheclaimsthatbanningitcanbesupportivetonormalteachingprocess.Beforethebanning,teachershaverighttoapprove,afterthat,theauthorconsidersparentswillnolongerpesterteachers.Iftheydonotthattheleveloftruancywillincrease.,Summarization,Intheend,hethinksthatonlybydoingsocantheteachingprocessbeontherailsandparentsbehinderedfromsavingmoneyattheexpenseofsacrificingtheirkidseducation.,StructureandConjunctions,Paragraph1:Gostraighttothetopic(Whenitcomesto)Summarizesparentsandexpertsopinionsonthetopic.Giveyourownperspective(Frommyperspective),StructureandConjunctions,Paragraph2:GivereasonstosupportyourperspectiveTheadvantagesthattakingthiskindofmeasure.(Tobeginwith)Willbeconducivetoteachingprocess.Guaranteechildrensacademicperformance.Thedisadvantagesthatwedonttakethiskindofmeasure(Whatsmore)Parentscangraduallyviewaskingforholidayleaveasaright.Leadtotheincreaseoftruancy.,StructureandConjunctions,Paragraph3:ConclusionpartTerm-timeholidaysshouldbebanned(Accordingly)Teachercanteachingknowledgewithoutdisturbance.Parentswillbedeterredfromsavingmoneybysacrificingtheirchildrenseducation,Sentencepatternsandwordexpressions,1.whenitcomestoEg:whenitcomestothistopic,memoriesfloodintomymind.2.varyfromEg:Pricesvaryfromoneshoptoanother.3.bornofEg:Loveisbornofheart,notmind.,Sentencepatternsandwordexpressions,4.fromonesperspectiveEg:Frommyperspective,Iwillacceptthisjob.5.outweighEg:Theadvantagesofthisdeallargelyoutweighthedisadvantages.6.tobeginwithEg:Itwasgreattobeginwithbutnowitsdifficult.,Sentencepatternsandwordexpressions,7.beconducivetoEg:Exerciseisconducivetogoodhealth.8.discretionEg:Illleaveituptoyoutouseyourdiscretion.9.pesterEg:Hetoldhernottopesterhimwithtrifles.,Sentencepatternsandwordexpressions,10.disruptsEg:Thewarseemedlikelytodisruptthestate.11.whatsmoreEg:Whatsmore,itisessentialforustokeepexercise.1