新托福备考真题音频作文高分秘诀

1、本篇献给有一定英语基础，却新托福中写作得不了高分的同学。2015 年 5 月 16 日的托福只有 24 分（我原来那纯正的作文得了满分，总分 113 分，阅读满分，29，其中口语是中，弱项，口音都哪儿去了？）大家对作文成绩应该是最感的，献丑说几句。正式开始之前，先跟大家简单介绍一下新托福吧，英文名 TOEFL(the Test of English as a Foreign Language)。满分 120 分，共分阅读、口语和写作四项，每项满分 30 分，机考。作文有两篇：综合作文和独立作文。我平时有用英语记还有阅读英文小说的，因此积累起来的词汇比较多一些。说这一些都是扯淡，因为，大家的备考

2、时间都这么紧张，现在再去看小说或者写什么的有个卵用？！所以，我要教给大家的作文秘诀就是：模板。大家千万不要怀疑这种套路似的模板，不止我得了满分，我给了其他人后，他们的托福作文最低现在是 27，满分的比比皆是。1.废话不多说，我先以综合作文为例，就是文章与材料结合起来写的那篇。大家一定要注意，写这篇的时候，听懂材料是第一步，在此之前，读懂那篇 passage 更为关键。大家都知道，中的内容百分之百是和 passage 中的观点对立的，读懂了后者，有时候你甚至能猜出授会说什么。中的教写的时候，一定要重点突出教授的观点，也就是描述材料的句子要多，描述 passage 材料的就一带而过。整片文章的字数

3、是越多越好（前提是你得保证在规定时间里你能够写完）。我来给大家简单写个框架，以 5 月 16 日当天的题目为例，passage 大体讲的是新产品的推出对公司发展很有帮助，材料里argue，新产品对公司发展没有卵用，甚至还会阻碍公司发展。第一步，起个题目，一般我都是所有字母都用大写，就算凑字数吧题目是：WHETHER THE NEW PRODUCT ISBENEFIL FOR THE DEFELOPMENT OF A COMPANY文章开头（第一段）我一般都用这一句：Onthe basis of what I have heard from the listening material and

4、read from thepassage, I can clearlyltl 什么呢？这个l 是分辨的意思，就是我能分辨出 the speaker is mainlydiscussingt+的内容。接下来非常非常关键，也是我觉得我作文得高分的最主要原因。就是我在这里就把Speaker 的论据简单列出来了。以 16 日的题目为例，这句话是这样的On the basis of what I have heard from thelistening material and read from the passage, I can clearlyltthespeaker is mainly disc

5、ussing the infeasibility of the ways mentionedhepassage to push forward a sucsfulcompany to grow continuouslyin consideration of the bad feelings of the old customers brought by the newverof a product, thesibilityt a company spelizing in a product may screw up the wholeion caused by cooperating with

6、thing once changing her business line and the bad repuother companies.t strongly challenges the poof views held by thenarrator. Followed are the three aspectswhere the two materials diverge fromeach other.这是文章的第一段，翻译一下就是：依据我从材料中所听到的，已章中读到的，我能清晰地分辨出教授主要谈论是考虑到一种产品的新版本对老顾客带来的不良体验，改变生产领域会搞砸一切还有与其他公司合作所的

7、名声变糟等问题，会使这些方法变得极为不可行。（加粗部分就是材料的简单论点，不用展开说，否则第一段就成了整片文章了。）这对 narrato（r passage 的作者，主语要时常变换，比如可以用 reading passage, writer还有 reading material 或者 passage）所持有的观点是极力的。以下就是这两篇材料难以达成一致的地方。注意：我用句子喜欢用比较复杂的，大家可用些简单句，表达出意思来就好。然后就把论据都展开说了第一个论据（第二段）：以材料中的为主，To begin with, it is argued by the professort这里不展开写了，第一

8、个论据是一种产品的新版本对老顾客带来的不良体验，比如老顾客看到新版本会觉得自己过时了，然后就会对新版本持有偏见（这里我用了一个词组hold prejudice against）最后连老版本都不买了。顾客都不买东西了，赚个毛线钱啊？如果中提到了例子，把例子也写出来。好了，材料说的差不多了，话锋一转，要用体现出转折的词组如 on the contrary, in contrast 还有 on the other hand,不建议用 however 或 but,因为不显眼，也不利于凑字数。话锋一转，开始说文章中的观点，一句话带过，不用举列子。第二个论据（第三段）：Second of all, the

9、 professor makes内容就可以了。话锋一转，一笔带过passage 中的观点。t pot后面还是和第一个论据一致，换换2.再说独立作文题目：when people spend a lot of time watching sports onevior following their favorite team,is negative effects on their lives? Do you agree or disagreet? Please这个更好写了，这种 agree 或 disagree，一定要选一个照死了写，要么全盘同意，要么全盘否定，别想着用 主义哲学辩证唯物论一分为

10、二的 问题，要是你 ，没有重点，那么你的分数也就一分为二了。这种题目没有观点对错，你能说出道理支持你的观点，那就是好的。文章开头（第一段）he contemporary society, there is a theory arguingt +把题目换一种说法写出来，别照抄，那样显得很没料。然后写，this idea has triggered public concerns and the debate over is been heating up.这句纯属凑字数的。有没有引起激烈谁知道啊？After serious consideration（其实没有经过认真考虑，感觉哪个好写就写哪个）

11、, I totally/absoluy vote for the poof view.然后关键又来了，on account of the lacking of rest due to staying up to watch sports, the bad mood someone may get involved in and the deteriorating relationship betn people and their family members.由于熬夜看比赛导致缺觉，可能陷入不良情绪中以及人们与家人之间关系的，我完全赞成这一观点。像综合作文一样，的论据在第一段中简单一列，下面

12、展开的时候围绕着写就行了。第一段最后再来一句 Next I will be listing thereasons in support of my arguments.第一个论据（第二段）： heplace, there is no denyingt watching sports leads to the reduction of the time people spend on rest or sleep. As a result, they will feel extremely distracted, sleepy and absent-minded next第三个论据（第四段）：Fu

13、rthermore（这个词不错）后面参照上面两段，话锋一转，一笔带过文章中的观点。结尾（第五段）：To summarize 或 In summary(用这个，summarize 比较容易拼错)最后一段也很简单，我一般写 The poof views mentionedhe reading material are jeopardized(这个词要用到) by the professor while the speaker is compley oped of what is beved by the writer. be compley oped of 是完全的意思。总结一下综合作文的写法：分

14、 5 段，第一段开头（论据要简单列出哦）第二段展开写第一个论据，第三段展开写第二个论据，第四段展开写第三个论据。最后一段总结。以材料为主，通篇文章我大约写到 450 至 470 字之间。day when they go to work. Whats worse ist some huge mistakes may be made.前面这几句是观点，后面一点要举出列子（例子可以随便编，相信我，ETS 改作文的不会闲得去查这些例子的真实性，出分都弄得他们焦头烂额，再去查这个，非累死这帮孙子）It reminds me of an exlet matches my idea to the fulle

15、st extent.我举得例子是有些在其他国家举办的奥运会、或者欧洲杯由于时差原因，都是的半夜踢，人们得熬夜看球，本来用来睡觉的时间却强打着精神看球去了，第二天有精神才怪。我一个叫 Jack（随便编个名字）的朋友就因为熬夜看球第二天把财务的帐给算错了，直接让公司了。这不就是看体育比赛给人们生活带来的影响吗？第二个论据（第三段）：Secondly, as we all know, people are easilyexed to the effect of their mood, under somecircumstance with which the performanof the team

16、 they support are closely linked.众所周知，人类是情绪动物，在某些情况下，他们所支持的球队的表现和情绪关。接下来还是例子，大家别总用 for exle,去网上搜一些举例子的英文说法。To illustrate my po, a football gamehe ChiLeague can be cited as an exle.我举的例子的甲 A 联赛，这个不是我编的，是真事，有一年，申花被国安灌了个 9 比 1，一个的球迷看完球直接把电视机从自家楼上扔下去了（这是真事）但是，后面的就是我编的了，电视机了，导致两人被烧伤（我太邪恶了，总得强调出事态的严重性才更有说

17、服力吧）我也是灵光一现想出了这个例子，大家可以自由发挥，编一个也行，比方说英国的足球在球队输球后闹事儿或者有些人在心爱的球队输球后 奔，抢什么的，越生动越好。第三个论据（第四段）：In addition, watching sports worsens the relationship betn people and their familymembers. The thing is espelly true for husband and wife.体育比赛了人们与家庭成员之间的关系，尤其是夫妻之间。比如，丈夫要看球，妻子要看甄嬛传，为了抢电视，俩人对骂，女的指责男的，你无情，无理取闹，男的

18、就问我哪儿无情，哪儿，哪儿无理取闹？（这句加不加随便，你要是觉得能翻译的信达雅就加上，老外还不笑疯了给你满分？）最后俩人搓起来了，夫妻关系了。结尾（第五段）：Based on whas been discussed above,we may reach a safet +你的观点。Although 有些人还是认为看比赛或支持球队能让自己放松，怎么怎么样（这个小让步绝对不能少，切记）后面加一句反驳他的，we must admitt watching sports or supporting the favorite team does more harmn good topeople. We a

19、re suped to 合理安排看比赛的时间，不要痴迷其中，才不会对的生活带来影响。总结：独立作文也分 5 段，和综合作文一样。但是注意，例子绝对不能省，可以编，都无所谓，第一段要简单列一些论据，最后一段要有个小让步。3.选的是 TPO 1 中的作文，大家可以自己去 TPO 1 中看一文题目。范文如下，大家可以比对是不是按照我总结的模板所写：综合作文：WHETHER WORKING FOUR DAYS AK ISITIVE?On the basis of what I have heard from the listening material and read from the passag

20、e, I have a clear ideatthe professor in her lecture is mainly discussing the negative effectsed by working four days ak on acompanyerms of the extra investment a company has to puto some equipment and the human resourcecost, the harm to other employees and the reduce of thesibility to get promoted.t

21、 strongly challenges thepos of views held by the narrator and thinks of them as unconvincing. Followed are the three aspects where thetwo materials diverge from each other.heplace, the speaker says in a sement in her lecturet a four-dayk will ime miscellaneouscosts on a company and as a result, the

22、company will not be able to profit from the operation. She cites someexpenses as an exle to illustrate ho. A company has no alternative but to spend more moneyrainingand benefits for the new staff is hired for the four-dayk job and whats worse ist more offipace willbe taken up and more computers wil

23、l be purchased. On the contrary, the passage bevest a company canbenefit from this mhuge mistakes.of work since the staff will have a good rest ande vigilant about someSecond of all, it is argued by the professorhe listening materialt the risehe cost puts hiring new staffworking four days aMeanwhile

24、, the workk out of the question, which enhanthe unemployment rate instead of reducing it.t cannot beplished by those staff who only work four days ak will have tobe handed out to the full-time employees. There is no doubtt the latter will put themselves under the obligationto work overtime over and

25、over again sot they can make up for the unfinished part of the work.t hurtsothers morale and activityhe end. In contrast, the narrator suggestst with the help of the employeesworking four days ak, the burden of the full-time staff can be reved.写的东西了，但是不要担心，我在备考托福都会用到的 TPO 中选了两篇自己平时练习的文章，供大家参考。本次只写这些

26、大家可能会看的云里雾里，因为总归要有个范文嘛，但是因为时间久远，我已经没法回忆起当天自己Furthermore, the professor expressest the four-day workk will not only block the wayt the peoples lifequality gets improved but also prevent them from getting promoted. As is often the case, an employer has apreference for considering the people who work f

27、ive days ak when it comes to promotion rathern thefour-day workmen. As a result, the negative impresleft on thes makes it imsible for them to outweighothers not to mention to boost the quality of their lives. On the other hand, it is heldt the extra time squeezed byworking four days can be spent tog

28、ether with family members sot the quality of life is improved.In summary, the writers pos of views are jeopardized by the speaker while the professor is compley opedof what ipported by the narrator. Both fail to agree on this ie.独立作文：In contemporary society, there is a very popular theory singt the

29、universities are suped to attachequal importance to the sports and sol activities and put equal finance ast they have invested in classesand libraries. This poof view has triggered public concerns and the debate over whether it makes sense or nothas been heating up. At the sight of the view, I thoug

30、ht twice about it and now I may rest aredt I vote for it tothe fullest extent on account of the important role sports or sol activities playhe formation of themental world and view of value of the students, the solid foundation they will lay for the development students afterthey stnto society and t

31、he need for fostering an omnipotent graduate. Followed I will be listing the reasonsin support of my arguments.To begin with, it is undeniablet sports and sol activities are extremely conducive to the civilization of thespirit of teamwork, improvement of a students mental world and establishment of

32、the correct view of value. Havingwritten down these, I can recall my mind a very good exlet matches my argument very well. When I was inmy college, I used to stay focused on my study at the beginning and was ignorant of the importance of dealing withothers. I did my best to avoid any sports meeting

33、or sol activitiest could provide me win opportunity torub my shoulders with others. By degrees, I became more and more isolated and unwilling to talk with others.Then I came to realize I had made a huge mistake and I would ruyself ift sus continued. I began to dosports and participate in some sol ac

34、tivities held by my department, during the pros of which, I knew a largenumber of new friends,learned how to manage something by cooperating with others and realized the importanceof teamwork.nks tot, I did noteoof.Secondly, there is no doubtt as a university student, a lack of experience espellyt r

35、elated to society is anunavoidable problem to be addressed.t may get the student exed to thesibility of offending others dueto being not sophisticated. Sports lessons or activities theming society may be the best way to solvet. Throughthe activities, the students can learn a lot about how to deal an

36、d work with others. The experience gained fromtcan be used for the job after graduating from university. To illustrate my po, Iend to cite Mike, my best friend,as an exfasterle. Mike became accustomed to his new role as a new stafter being employed once graduatingn other graduates and he was accepted by every colleaguehe company. When asked the reason,he always attributes the reason to the participation of some soactivities.l activities