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1、第一篇顾家北(389522376) 2182075顾家北(389522376)task response顾家北(389522376)coherence and cohe顾家北(389522376)lexical resour顾家北(389522376)19:04:3019:05:5819:08:1119:12:1019:13:57顾家北(389522376)contradiction顾家北(389522376)technology顾家北(389522376)technique顾家北(389522376)children顾家北(389522376)kids顾家北(389522376)young

2、children顾家北(389522376)older children顾家北(389522376)adolescents顾家北(389522376)youth顾家北(389522376)young adults顾家北(389522376) GRA顾家北(389522376)A report indicated19:14:0119:14:0519:14:1019:14:1919:14:2019:15:1919:15:2219:15:4619:15:4719:15:5019:16:1719:23:38t many children betn 7 and 11 spend too much tim

3、ewatchingeviand/or playgames. How does the problem affectthe children, their fami control it? 教育顾家北(389522376) 19:25:33s and society? What measures can be taken to看电视， 学习不专心，影响成绩顾家北(389522376) 19:26:56why has this happened?顾家北(389522376) 19:27:54A 父母忙 B 没有时间陪小孩 C 小孩看电视顾家北(389522376) 19:32:04看电视， 学习不

4、专心，影响成绩看电视，忽视社会活动，和父母交流， 影响语言能力父母控制屏幕时间，多参与小孩的生活，小孩可以培养其他顾家北(389522376) 19:34:19023 小牙齿 09208/15/20147:33:58 PMNowadays, watchingmore and evimore children betn 7 and 11 spend too much timeand this phenomenon has some influence in children, society.their famis and顾家北(389522376) 19:35:32042oliiva0920

5、8/15/2014 7:33:37 PMhe modern times, a great number of children, espelly the young one,prefer to devote much of their time to watch TV program and play online games. The problem will be more serious to themselves, their parents and even the whole community.顾家北(389522376) 19:38:04a great number of ch

6、ildren today devote much of their time to watchingTV and playinggames, although these hobbies can have an adverseimpact on them and also on their family. This problem should be tackled. (T)顾家北(389522376) 19:43:58看电视， 学习不专心，影响成绩顾家北(389522376) 19:44:16A 看电视 B 学习不专心 C 影响成绩顾家北(389522376)AC 背景化 BC顾家北(389

7、522376)AC 中心句19:46:0019:46:06顾家北(389522376)If children spend19:47:45a lot of time on these entertaents, their academicperformance will be affected. (A+C)顾家北(389522376)They are not able顾家北(389522376)19:49:14to concentrate on their hoemwork. (B) 19:52:34They lack self-discipline and (背景化)顾家北(389522376

8、) 19:53:08siblye addicted to these pastimes.If children spend a lot of time on these entertaents, their academicperformance sibly concentratewill be affected. (A+C) They lack self-discipline ande addicted to these pastimes. (背景化)They are not able to on their hoemwork. (B)顾家北(389522376) 19:55:20This

9、can cause educationa顾家北(389522376) 19:55:43derachievement (C)This can shake their confidence (结果拓展)顾家北(389522376) 19:56:04If children spend a lot of time on these entertaents, their academicperformance sibly concentratewill be affected. (A+C) They lack self-discipline ande addicted to these pastimes

10、. (背景化)They are not able to on their hoemwork. (B)This can cause educationalunderachievement (C) This can shake their confidence (结果拓展)顾家北(389522376) 19:59:04This problem can be serious for those children who can hardly gain supportfrom parentsheir education. (特定化)顾家北(389522376) 19:59:56 ACBC顾家北(389

11、522376) 20:00:19AC 背景化 BC 结果的拓展 特定化顾家北(389522376) 20:01:36If children spend a lot of time on these entertaents, their academicperformance will be affected. (A+C) They lack self-discipline andsiblye addicted to these pastimes. (背景化) as a consequence,they are not able to concentrate on their hoemwork顾

12、家北(389522376) 20:01:53This can cause educationa (结果拓展)顾家北(389522376) 20:02:00derachievement and shake their confidenceThis problem can be serious for those children who can hardly gain supportfrom parentsheir education. (特定化)顾家北(389522376) 20:02:42If children spend a lot of time on these entertaents

13、, theiracademic sibly not ableperformance will be affected. They lack self-discipline and e addicted to these pastimes. as a consequence, they areto concentrate on their. This can cause educationalunderachievement and shake their confidence. This problem can be seriousfor those children who can hard

14、ly gain support from parents education. (T)顾家北(389522376) 20:05:42看电视，忽视社会活动，和父母交流， 影响语言能力顾家北(389522376) 20:06:01A 看电视 B 忽视社会活动，和父母交流， C 影响语言能力heir顾家北(389522376) ACBC顾家北(389522376)ACBC+拓展顾家北(389522376)20:08:0020:09:5920:10:38ACBC+拓展 增加一个观点顾家北(389522376)A+C顾家北(389522376) 047 白白 09/068/15/2014 8:13:55

15、20:12:3220:14:02PMFor children who spend more time on watchin develop strong language skills.顾家北(389522376) 20:14:07022carrie1025 8/15/2014 8:14:02 PM, it would hinder them fromchildren devote more time on tv program and then can language abilities .顾家北(389522376) 20:15:32if children devote more tim

16、eto tv program, it can language abilities . (T)顾家北(389522376) 20:16:41e a threat to theire a threat to theirAnothroblem ist the long screentime can affect their soldevelopment.顾家北(389522376) 20:18:21A 看电视 B 忽视社会活动，和父母交流， C影响语言能力顾家北(389522376) BC顾家北(389522376)20:18:2820:18:44sol activities顾家北(3895223

17、76)20:18:59eraction with parents顾家北(389522376)language skills 顾家北(389522376) 8.20顾家北(389522376)20:19:0520:19:1220:20:52Anothroblem ist the long screentime can affect their soldevelopment. （A+C）顾家北(389522376) 20:21:19008larry09208/15/2014 8:20:58 PMAnothoist the ignorance ogf sol activities mead to t

18、he l skillslack of iterractionwith parents and cause the shortage of so顾家北(389522376)001 屎呆啦待定8/15/2014 8:20:5920:21:26PMNeglecting of children have consequently,thesocietal events and familyeractions means theseless opportunities to speak with other individuals and it impairs their language skills.

19、顾家北(389522376) 20:25:29They may pay less attention to sol activities and theeraction withparents. This meanst these children few opportunities to develop theirlanguage skills. (B+C)顾家北(389522376) 20:27:05They may pay less attention to sol activities and theeraction withparents. This meanst these chi

20、ldren have few opportunities to developtheir language skills. (B+C)顾家北(389522376) 20:27:21ACBC+拓展 增加一个观点顾家北(389522376)20:28:26workeams顾家北(389522376) 8.29顾家北(389522376) 016Jean10188/15/2014 8:30:2020:28:4120:31:03PMand this could have a negative impact on theirabilities of working inthe team and comm

21、unicating with oth顾家北(389522376) 20:31:11006David920 8/15/2014 8:30:19 PMeople.The lack of language ability causes poor teamwork顾家北(389522376) 20:33:14This problem can present a challenge to their and make it difficult for them to work顾家北(389522376) 20:34:09This problem can present a challenge to th

22、eir and make it difficult for them to work workplace. (拓展)ersonal relationship inersonal relationships eams. (拓展)ersonal relationshipseams at school orhe顾家北(389522376)增加一个观点顾家北(389522376)emotional bonds顾家北(389522376)ties顾家北(389522376)027Alfred1018 8/15/2014 8:36:0920:34:3020:35:2320:35:2820:36:31PMA

23、nd their emotional bonds will be affected by those activites. 009Alexander 10.118/15/2014 8:36:10PMit also truettheir emotional may be affected 20:38:05t their emotional ties with family members may be顾家北(389522376)it is also trueweakened. (另外一个观点)顾家北(389522376) 20:38:17Anothroblem ist the long scre

24、en time can affect their soldevelopment. （A+C）顾家北(389522376) 20:38:23They may pay less attention to sol activities and theeraction withparents. This meanst these children have few opportunities to developtheir language skills. (B+C)顾家北(389522376) 20:38:31This problem can present a challenge to their

25、 and make it difficult for them to work workplace. (拓展)顾家北(389522376) 20:38:35ersonal relationshipseams at school orheit is also truet their emotional ties with family members may beweakened. (另外一个观点)顾家北(389522376) 20:47:09父母控制屏幕时间，多参与小孩的生活，小孩可以培养其他顾家北(389522376) 21:02:50A 父母控制屏幕时间 B 多参与小孩的生活 C 小孩可以

26、培养其他顾家北(389522376) ACBC顾家北(389522376) AC顾家北(389522376) B顾家北(389522376)21:03:1621:03:2421:03:2821:05:52a 父母控制屏幕时间，多参与小孩的生活，b 小孩可以培养其他视和不大c 不看电顾家北(389522376) 21:10:12Parents can reduce the screem time.顾家北(389522376)they should pay a顾家北(389522376)21:13:17biggart in childrens daily lives.21:14:12childre

27、n can dedicate more time to healthy hobbies and to their studies. (B)顾家北(389522376) 21:14:48They can thus break the habits of spending hours in front of the screen. (C)顾家北(389522376) 21:15:49for exle, they may play sport and do outdoor activities with their peersor parents. (举例)顾家北(389522376) 21:17:

28、22Parents can help their children understand the problems of watchin and playing games. (背景化)顾家北(389522376) 21:18:20To deal with this problem, Parents can im screem time. (A+C)顾家北(389522376) 21:18:44e restrictions on childrensParents can help their children understand the problems of watchin and pla

29、ying games. (背景化)顾家北(389522376) 21:19:23To deal with this problem, Parents can ime restrictions on childrensscreem time and help their children understand the problems of watching TV and playing games. (A+C+背景化)顾家北(389522376) 21:19:49children can dedicate more time to healthy hobbies and to their st

30、udies. (B)顾家北(389522376) 21:19:57for exle, they may play sport and do outdoor activities with their peersor parents. (举例)顾家北(389522376) 21:20:02They can thus break the habits of spending hours in front of the screen. (C)顾家北(389522376) 21:22:02To deal with this problem, Parents can ime restrictions o

31、n childrensscreem time and help their children understand the problems of watching TV and playing games. Children can dedicate more time to healthy hobbies and to their studies. For ex le, they may play sport and do outdoor activities with their peers or parents. They can thus break the habitsof spe

32、nding hours顾家北(389522376)045Agnes1018 8/15/2014 9:25:44in front of the screen. 21:25:59PMAbove all, either watchingevitoo much or playinggames doharm to children who are betn 7 to 11 years old. Parents should takecare of their children, and make their lives muore abundant and healthier.顾家北(389522376

33、)21:30:17sive screen time can do harm to children and alsoIn, exthreaten their sol relationships. Parents shouldervene to reducechildrens reliance on these entertaents.顾家北(389522376) 21:32:15Environmental problems are too big for individual countries andindividuals to address. In other words, we hav

34、e reached the stagewhere the only way to protect the environment is at anernational level.To what extent do顾家北(389522376)008larry0920 8/15/2014 9:38:16you agree or disagree with this opinion? 环境21:38:32PM第二篇Environmental problems has been recognized as one of the main challengest we have toehe 21st century. The radeterioration ofenvironmental problems is beved to