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1、湘潭市一中高三 组 周炜On Writing湖南高考卷近年来书面表达一览表年 度体 裁题 材命题形式2006记叙文：记人对老师的赞扬诗歌提示2007应用文：毕业留言描述对某人的印象并表示对其祝愿文字提示2008议论文：夹述夹议选择名人作介绍、陈述理由、谈启示文字提示2009应用文:书信讲述课堂上印象深刻的事情，处理方式及感想提纲式文字提示2010样卷应用文：书信对将要建的活动中心就其功能给校长提建议开放性作文Understanding( 开放性写作 )( 控制性写作 )1.Controlled writing2.Open-ended writingDescriptionStructureFee

2、lings Opinions Reasons Suggestions 开放作文的写作要领：认真审题:审情景，人称，时态，抓关键词大脑风暴：发散思维，尽可能想出多的思路,选出自己熟悉的，容易发挥的，新颖的素材紧扣主题，符合要求，首尾呼应注意写作对象和语言风格，要有读者意识要进行细节描写要力求内容新颖，逻辑合理要做到思想健康，积极向上注意语言表达的准确性Dear Sir or Madam, Please listen to my hope. Im a senior middle school student. I want to be a exchange student in England .

3、 I think it could improve my language. England has many relics and churches.I want to live with the host family, I can know more English culture. I can make some blue eyes and golden hair friends . It can open my eyesight area. Thats my heart words. Please consider it.15 分 Yours faithfully, Li Hua 阅

4、卷老师点评：基本交代清楚了来信目的； 没有运用过渡的连接词； 表达方式单一，语句欠丰富，基本上没有高 级词汇和句型；字数不够；有几处语法错误，且结尾处汉式英语较严重。 因此最后得分为15分。一篇15分左右和20多分的作文到底差在哪里？15分的作文中规中矩，该对的都对，包括语法与词形的正确，但都是很简单的句子的一个堆砌，没有任何的亮点。而20多分的作文在句型，词汇方面就做了很好的包装，它的句子穿的衣服已经不是校服，而是李宁、耐克，或者是阿迪。HOW TO MAKE YOUR WRITING SHINE?How to enrich your vocabulary1.我们可以得到社会及工作经验。We

5、 can get some working and social experience. 2. 洗澡间和厨房都很好。The bathroom and the kitchen are good.3. 大部分学生认为应当学好英语。Most of the students think it is necessary to study EnglishWe can obtain some working as well as social experience.The bathroom and the kitchen are well-equipped.The majority of the stude

6、nts hold the view that it is necessary to master English.How to enrich your sentences1My brother is a college student, and he is glad to help others.2. We should try our best to help him My brother ，who is a college student， is glad to help others. （使用定语从句） My brother, a college student, is glad to

7、help others. （使用同位语） We should spare no effort to help him We should help him as far as we can. We should do whatever we can to help him.1. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）2. Im weak, but Ill make the effort. (用状语从句)3. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚

8、拟语气）What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.Although/though I am weak, Ill make the effort.Lets have a try! I couldnt have passed the physics exam without your help. 4. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分词)5. They sang and laughed as they went bac

9、k to school.( 使用V-ing形式)6.I wont believe what he says. （使用状语从句） Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab.Singing and laughing, they went back to school.No matter what he says, I wont believe it. 7.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （用并列句）8. England is an old country. It has

10、 many relics and castles. （ 使用with的复合结构）England is an ancient country with many cultural relics and fascinating castles. Study hard and youll make rapid progress.Try to use transitional words 1表递进：and; then ; besides; whats more; in addition ; besides ；furthermore; moreover ; to make matters worse,

11、whats worse;2表转折：but; however; though; or else; otherwise ; on the contrary; while; after all3表总结：finally; at last; in brief; in a word; generally speaking; in general, in short; in conclusion;on the whole;as has been stated4. 表推理：as a result; therefore; thus; on account of; for the reason that;5. 表

12、强调：indeed; certainly; surely; above all6. 表对比：in the same way; similarly; just as; on the one hand , instead7. 时间顺序: first; second; then; finally; at last; soon; immediately;eventually;8.过渡性插入语: I think, Im afraid, you know, As we all know 9. 表解释说明 : that is to say, for example , such as, believe it

13、 or not, to tell you the truth. according to, for this reason, in fact, in other words10.表让步：although, though,even if/though, in spite of the fact that11.表条件:if, unless, as long as, on condition that12.表列举：for example/instance, as follows1. Listen to the teacher carefully in class, _ youll be punish

14、ed.2. Mary cant drive yet, _ she wants a car of her own.3. Li Ming pretended to be asleep _ I came in.4. Youd better not scold him. _, he is only 3 years old.5. I was lost in the forest. _, it was getting dark.6. _, Taiwan is part of China. or butwhenLets have a try! After allWhat was worse As we al

15、l know 你的英国朋友正在做一个课题:世界各地的生日庆祝方式。请你写一篇短文介绍中国学生过生日的通常方式和你认为更有意义的庆祝方式和理由 。*词数不少于120个。 ( 1) Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. (2) Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party.（用where定语从句）(3) They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes.

16、（和并句子）(4) Sometimes, people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular （用which定语从句）. (5) But (替换） I think （替换） that its better to help other people.(6) We know that its important to learn to help others. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. (7) People will help you in return an

17、d youll be happy （用For one thing, For another 替换）.Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways.Usually, a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fun.They usually buy a small gift with which to express their best wishes.Sometimes, peopl

18、e send short messages too, which is becoming very popular .However, as far as Im concerned, its better to do something for others.As is known to all, its of importance to help others. Helping others on ones birthday can be not only meaningful but also do you a lot of good.For one thing people will h

19、elp you in return; for another, youll get happiness out of that. Appreciation Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways. Usually, a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fun. They usually buy a small gift with which to express thei

20、r best wishes. Sometimes, people send short messages too, which is becoming very popular . However, as far as Im concerned, its better to do something for others. As is known to all, its of importance to help others. Helping others on ones birthday can be not only meaningful but also do you a lot of

21、 good. For one thing people will help you in return; for another, youll get happiness out of that. In short, the best way to celebrate our birthdays is to help others.Homework:请你就“地球一小时”全球节能倡议活动（即每年三月份最后一个星期六的晚上20：30 21：30，家庭及企业关灯一小时），为中学生英语报写一篇有关“Earth Hour”的短文，谈谈你对此活动的认识。词数不少于120个。 参考词汇：企业 enterprise；Thanks for your attention!Goodbye! Earth Hour is an annual event created by World Wide Fund for Nature. Its a worldwide activity aimed at energy saving，for which families and enterprises are encouraged to turn off lights and elec