湖南高考评卷-精讲版课件

1、2012湖南高考英语书面表达评分标准及对教学的启示Section C (25 marks)2012湖南高考 Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 在生活中, 你自已或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历, 其间有烦恼、有惊喜、有感慨请就此写一篇英语短文.主要内容包括:1) 丢失的物品;2) 物品失而复得的经过;3) 你的感想。注意:词数不少于120个;不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。评分要点:给分标准：一、内容（13分）1) 丢失的物品;2) 物品

2、失而复得的经过;3) 你的感想。二、 表达（10分）1）词汇、语法（5分）2）衔接、连贯（5分）三、整体印象（2分）补充说明：一 语法、拼写、标点错误不影响意义表达的，可以不扣分，此项扣分不超过5分。二 合理使用高级表达（如强调、排比、虚拟、倒装、复杂句、非谓语结构、格言、谚语等），而且词汇表达丰富，语言地道的文章加2-3分或取本档最高分。三 抄袭试卷中的成段文字， 或者生硬套用文字，与主题无关的，归为第一档。我的想法：一 用欣赏的眼光评卷 （师评自评互评） 三美： 书写美 结构美 语言美二 用欣赏的态度处理教材 启发学生发现课文美，大声朗读，师生 齐读，背诵并模仿 例如：(M5U3)Scie

3、ntists have announced that they have cloned the first human embryo. This has caused much debate around the world. On the one hand.On the other hand. Imitate: Our school has annouced that students are forbidden to bring their cellphones to school, which has caused . (M6U2)What is happiness? To some,

4、happiness is being surrounded by family and friends. To others, happiness means achieving success in something, such as meeting a goal. To those who have been injured or struggle with a physical disability, happiness can simply mean a day without suffering, or just being alive. (主题句排比） Imitate: What

5、 is success.(M10U1) There is a saying that goes,Give a man a fish, and you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, and you feed . 三 欣赏，朗读并背诵优美文章，格 言，谚语，和句子2012湖南高考英语书面表达评分标准第五档(很好，2125分)完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖所有知识要点；应用了较多语法结构和词汇；语法结构和词汇有些许错误，但为尽力使用复杂结构和高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑；完全达到了预期的写作目的

6、。第四档(好，1620分)较全面地完成了试题规定的任务。虽漏掉一、两个次重点，但覆盖了所有的主要内容；应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求；语法结构和词汇方面应用基本准确、些许错误主要是因尝试使用复杂语法结构和高级词汇所致；应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑；达到了预期写作目的。第三档(适当，1115分)基本完成了试题规定的任务。虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖了所有主要内容；应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求；有一些语法和词汇方面的错误，但不影响整体理解。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯；整体而言，达到了预期的写作目的。第二档(较差，610分)未恰当完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未描述清

7、楚一些主要内容；写了一些无关的内容；语法结构单调，词汇项目有限；有一些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了读者对写作内容的理解；较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性；信息未能清楚地传达得给读者。第一档(差，15分)未完成试题规定的任务。明显遗漏了主要内容；写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未了解试题的要求；语法结构单调，词汇项目有限；较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了读者对写作内容的理解；缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯；信息未能传达给读者。0分未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。评分标准对教学的启示我有幸参加了2012年湖南高考英语书面表达的

8、阅卷工作，根据评分标准以及在实际阅卷过程中所出现的情况，我进行了如下的反思：一，取得高分的窍门要想取得高分，也就是能在第五档给分，我们必须仔细琢磨，深入理解“评分标准”里的这几条标准：1.如何理解“应用了较多的词汇”。这里所说的“词汇”可以从“高级词汇的使用”，“同义词的使用”，“短语的使用”三个方面去理解。我以2012满分作文为例来说明 Three years ago, just before my departure with my good friend Tommy, he got me a wonderful watch as my birthday gift, which I had

9、 ever since been treasuring all the time before unfortunately I got it lost. I used to go everywhere with company of my watch pet but the other day I could go nowhere for its sign. I was so upset and depressed that I lost any desire for doing things and I could not even recall where and how I lost i

10、t. What happened next on this morning, however, almost sent my spirits flying higher than sky. Guess what? It found its way back to my dormitory, lying on my bed with a note beside it saying: Im sure its yours, so I brought it back from the library assistant. Jack. Ah, my dormmate Jack found it in t

11、he library. Can you imagine how excited I was at that moment? I must offer my thankfulness to Jack for his kindness. And I also need to reflect on my carelessness. 该文170字左右，运用了很多高级词汇，短语，等等，充分体现了作者很强的语言运用能力，语言变化多姿，充满魅力2.如何理解“应用了较多、较复杂的语法结构”？固定句式，如感叹句，复合结构，强调句，倒装句，三大从句，非谓语动词等都属于较复杂的“语法结构”。这些结构的正确使用，可以

12、使文章的语言充满层次感，从而姣好地反映作者的语言运用能力。 One day I received an invitation from another school to give a speech on how to learn English well, I was extremely happy and accepted it. I got ready for the speech , put the notes in my bag and went there by bus. While on the bus I discovered the notes and my ID card

13、were missing. I was very worried, but I knew the bus wouldnt stop for me to look for the lost things at the moment. On seeing the documents at the bus station, a cleaner picked them up and found my phone number inside. She thought I must have been worried about it. So she called me, hurried to take

14、a taxi, and sent them to me as soon as possible. Happy and surprised, I regained the lost items. Thanks to the cleaners kindness, my speech was so successful that everyone cheered for me. I was very grateful to the cleaner. From the experience, I have learned that honesty is the best policy. Only in

15、 this way will our society be more harmonious and hopeful.该文运用了“状语从句的省略”， 介词短语， 情态动词表推测，形容词表伴随状态，倒装句，并列句以及复合句的运用也得心应手，游刃有余。充分展示了作者深厚的语言功底。3.如何理解“上下文的连贯性”？评分标准指出：书面表达应该注意“上下文的连贯性”并能“有效地使用语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑”。这里说的连贯性，就是通过连接词，非谓语动词短语，介词短语等等，使两个或多个意义相互关联的事情或观点在同一句子得以表达，从而使整个段落或者篇章浑然一体，连贯流畅。 Getting back wh

16、at you have lost would be an unforgettable experience. Last Monday, I lost my expensive cellphone, on which my name was inscribed. Fortunately, it was returned. That morning, I rushed out of my house and jumped into a taxi, for I would be late for the final examination. On arriving at school, I head

17、ed to my classroom quickly, not noticing that I had left my cellphone on the back seat. When the exam ended, to my great surprise, I found the driver waiting at the school gate. He handed the phone over to me, wearing a smile on his face. So touched was I that tears rolled down my cheeks. From this

18、story, I am firmly convinced of the significance of honesty, which will contribute to building a warm and harmonious society.“开门见山法”很自然地过渡到自己或他人也有类似的经历。 清晰表达出了记叙文 “When, Who, What”三大基本要素。 “时间顺序记叙法”描述物品失而复得的经过。 自然过渡到第三段的感想。 二，如何嵌入18分定律？得高分不易，但平淡的文章如何能进入阅卷老师的法眼，让他们有“赏心悦目”之感而“高抬贵手”，最终判出一个比较满意的分数呢？近年盛传的“18分定律”是否真有其事？根据今年的阅卷工作，我发现其实得18分很容易，只要老师们在平时让学生养成良好的写作习惯，即使语言运用能力差一些也不会影响学生的得分。1.字迹规范，工整。2.分段明晰。2012作文吻合典型的“三段式作文法” 3.中间段尽量体现“猪肚”的魅力。也就是中间段尽量填充字数，让文章看起来内容丰满4.审题严